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# PG SLUGLINE
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EXT ROCKY TERRAIN DAY
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EXT NEW YORK APARTMENT BUILDING NIGHT
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INT L.A. BUSINESS LUNCH RESTAURANT - MIDDAY
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INT OFFICE DAY
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EXT SWAMP MORNING
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INT ROMANTIC RESTAURANT EVENING
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EXT JANES SCENIC DRIVE MORNING
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EXT JANES SCENIC DRIVE MORNING
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EXT BIG SPANISH-STYLE HOUSE DAY
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EXT SWAMP - LATE MORNING
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INT BARNES AND NOBLE DAY
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EXT COURTHOUSE DAY
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EXT FIELD MORNING
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EXT HOTEL PARKING LOT MORNING
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INT CAR DAY
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INT BOY'S BEDROOM (1972) NIGHT
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INT VAN DAY
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INT THERAPIST'S OFFICE DAY
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EXT SWAMP DAY
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INT EMPTY BEDROOM NIGHT
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INT LARGE EMPTY LIVING ROOM NIGHT
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EXT CONSTRUCTION SITE DAY
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INT EMPTY BEDROOM NIGHT
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INT AGENT'S OFFICE DAY
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EXT SWAMP DAY
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INT PARTY HOUSE NIGHT
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INT ORLEAN'S APARTMENT EVENING
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INT AIRPLANE MORNING
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INT MIAMI AIRPORT CAR RENTAL BOOTH DAY
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INT TRUCK DAY
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INT HOTEL ROOM NIGHT
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INT VAN DAY
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EXT EMPTY BEACH DAY
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INT LIMO NIGHT
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INT EMPTY BEDROOM NIGHT
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INT CAR DAY
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INT EMPTY BEDROOM NIGHT
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INT EMPTY BEDROOM MORNING
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EXT SWAMP DAY
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INT EMPTY BEDROOM NIGHT
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INT EMPTY BEDROOM NIGHT
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EXT SWAMP DAY
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EXT SWAMP MORNING
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EXT SWAMP LATER
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INT HOTEL ROOM MORNING
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EXT SWAMP DAY
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INT AUDITORIUM LATER
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INT AUDITORIUM LATER
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INT AUDITORIUM MORNING
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EXT SWAMP DAY
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INT HOTEL ROOM NIGHT
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INT HOTEL ROOM MORNING
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INT NEW YORK OFFICE BUILDING DAY
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EXT MIAMI INTERNATIONAL AIRPORT DAY
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INT HOUSE CONTINUOUS
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INT RENTAL CAR - BEFORE DAWN
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INT LAROCHE'S LIVING ROOM NIGHT
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EXT JANES SCENIC DRIVE - A LITTLE WHILE LATER
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INT CAR CONTINUOUS
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INT CALIFORNIA PIZZA KITCHEN DAY
INT EXT INT/EXT hover for full slug
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# PG SLUGLINE
1 2
EXT ROCKY TERRAIN DAY
EXT. ROCKY TERRAIN - DAY
EXT. ROCKY TERRAIN - DAY Endless barren landscape. No sign of life. The atmosphere is hazy, toxic-looking. Volcanoes erupt. Meteors bombard. Lightning strikes, concussing murky pools of water. Silence. INT. LARGE EMPTY LIVING ROOM - MORNING
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EXT NEW YORK APARTMENT BUILDING NIGHT
EXT. NEW YORK APARTMENT BUILDING - NIGHT
EXT. NEW YORK APARTMENT BUILDING - NIGHT SUBTITLE: NEW YORK, TWO YEARS LATER Late night street. The click-click of typing. We move slowly up the building to the only glowing window. ORLEAN (O.S.)
3 4
INT L.A. BUSINESS LUNCH RESTAURANT - MIDDAY
INT. L.A. BUSINESS LUNCH RESTAURANT - MIDDAY
INT. L.A. BUSINESS LUNCH RESTAURANT - MIDDAY Kaufman, wearing his purple sweater sans tags, sits with Valerie, an attractive woman in wire-rim glasses. They pick at salads. Kaufman steals glances at her lips, her hair, her breasts. She looks up at him. He blanches, looks away.
4 7
INT OFFICE DAY
INT. OFFICE - DAY
INT. OFFICE - DAY SUBTITLE: HOLLYWOOD, CALIFORNIA, THREE WEEKS EARLIER The office is decorated with potted flowers, Audobon posters, lots of books. Kaufman, nervous and sweaty, watches Margaret, a soulful development executive, unpack boxes.
5 8
EXT SWAMP MORNING
EXT. SWAMP - MORNING
EXT. SWAMP - MORNING Hot, dirty, miserable. Laroche leads the Indians through waist-high black water. He points out a turtle on a rock. (CONTINUED)
6 10
INT ROMANTIC RESTAURANT EVENING
INT. ROMANTIC RESTAURANT - EVENING
INT. ROMANTIC RESTAURANT - EVENING Kaufman eats with Margaret. Margaret raises a glass. MARGARET To a fucking awesome assignment, man. Kaufman, pleased, clicks glasses. He takes a breath.
7 12
EXT JANES SCENIC DRIVE MORNING
EXT. JANES SCENIC DRIVE - MORNING
EXT. JANES SCENIC DRIVE - MORNING Tony waits, sweaty and mosquito bitten. The radio crackles. RADIO VOICE How's that Injun round-up going, Tony? TONY
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EXT JANES SCENIC DRIVE MORNING
EXT. JANES SCENIC DRIVE - MORNING
EXT. JANES SCENIC DRIVE - MORNING Tony steps out of his truck. Laroche smiles warmly. TONY Morning. May I ask what you gentlemen have in those pillowcases?
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EXT BIG SPANISH-STYLE HOUSE DAY
EXT. BIG SPANISH-STYLE HOUSE - DAY
EXT. BIG SPANISH-STYLE HOUSE - DAY Kaufman gets out of his car with his books. Two teenage girls walk by. Kaufman watches as one whispers to the other. He thinks he hears the word "Fatso." The girls giggle. INT. EMPTY HOUSE - A COUPLE OF MINUTES LATER
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EXT SWAMP - LATE MORNING
EXT. SWAMP - LATE MORNING
EXT. SWAMP - LATE MORNING Ranger, sheriff, and state police cars are parked near the van and Ford. Lots of sweating, uniformed people. The pillowcases have been emptied, the plants lie on black plastic sheets. A guy sprinkles water on them. Laroche
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INT BARNES AND NOBLE DAY
INT. BARNES AND NOBLE - DAY
INT. BARNES AND NOBLE - DAY As she rings up his books, Kaufman admires the cashier's flower tattoo. She catches him and smiles with red, wet, pierced lips. She unbuttons her blouse and shows him a breast with a heart tattoo. A sweet heartbeat turns to knocking.
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EXT COURTHOUSE DAY
EXT. COURTHOUSE - DAY
EXT. COURTHOUSE - DAY Orlean exits the courthouse and watches Laroche in a huddle with Lerner, Vinson, and Buster Baxley, vice-president of the tribe's business operations. They're all smoking intently. LAROCHE
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EXT FIELD MORNING
EXT. FIELD - MORNING
EXT. FIELD - MORNING MUSIC: lush, profound orchestral piece. A glorious orange, large-petalled orchid blooms in dramatic time-lapse. We slowly, lovingly circle the flower. SENSUOUS FEMALE NARRATOR
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EXT HOTEL PARKING LOT MORNING
EXT. HOTEL PARKING LOT - MORNING
EXT. HOTEL PARKING LOT - MORNING Orlean leans against a car and smokes. A tiny, lost figure. There's a honk. Orlean snaps out of her reverie to see Laroche screeching to a stop in his banged-up van. (CONTINUED)
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INT CAR DAY
INT. CAR - DAY
INT. CAR - DAY Kaufman drives slowly past Barnes and Noble, squints in the window, sees the tattooed cashier. He passes Burger King, sees a pretty employee, the same at Starbucks. Glassed-in women on display, different types, different attitudes.
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INT BOY'S BEDROOM (1972) NIGHT
INT. BOY'S BEDROOM (1972) - NIGHT
INT. BOY'S BEDROOM (1972) - NIGHT There are now many turtles in aquariums. Many turtle books and posters. The boy, in a turtle T-shirt, looks out the window into the darkness. His eyes are troubled.
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INT VAN DAY
INT. VAN - DAY
INT. VAN - DAY Laroche drives, solemnly nodding his head. Orlean studies him for a moment, her sad eyes wet and glistening. (CONTINUED)
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INT THERAPIST'S OFFICE DAY
INT. THERAPIST'S OFFICE - DAY
INT. THERAPIST'S OFFICE - DAY Kaufman sits in silence across from his female therapist. THERAPIST So -- KAUFMAN
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EXT SWAMP DAY
EXT. SWAMP - DAY
EXT. SWAMP - DAY Teenaged Laroche and his mother tromp through the swamp. He carries a camera on a tripod. They spot a beautiful flower. Laroche is in awe. TEENAGED LAROCHE
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INT EMPTY BEDROOM NIGHT
INT. EMPTY BEDROOM - NIGHT
INT. EMPTY BEDROOM - NIGHT A depressed Kaufman fishes on his floor through an ever increasing pile of books: books about turtles, mirror resilvering, tropical fish, Hegel, etc. He picks up The Portable Darwin. The cover features a daguerreotype of
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INT LARGE EMPTY LIVING ROOM NIGHT
INT. LARGE EMPTY LIVING ROOM - NIGHT
INT. LARGE EMPTY LIVING ROOM - NIGHT Kaufman types furiously. He's a sweaty mess. KAUFMAN (V.O.) ... then, after the entire history of life on the planet, in the last seconds
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EXT CONSTRUCTION SITE DAY
EXT. CONSTRUCTION SITE - DAY
EXT. CONSTRUCTION SITE - DAY SUBTITLE: NORTH MIAMI, TEN YEARS EARLIER A younger Laroche, in a hard hat, walks atop a half-built house. He spots a flower in a backyard across the street. LAROCHE
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INT EMPTY BEDROOM NIGHT
INT. EMPTY BEDROOM - NIGHT
INT. EMPTY BEDROOM - NIGHT Kaufman types tentatively. Off-screen we hear Donald's enthusiastic typing and giggling. KAUFMAN (V.O.) Movie opens with Susan Orlean typing.
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INT AGENT'S OFFICE DAY
INT. AGENT'S OFFICE - DAY
INT. AGENT'S OFFICE - DAY Kaufman sits with his agent Jerry in a glass-walled office. KAUFMAN I don't know how to adapt this. I should've just stuck with my own stuff.
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EXT SWAMP DAY
EXT. SWAMP - DAY
EXT. SWAMP - DAY Black and white. It's dark, tangled with foliage, and foreboding. Two pioneers slog waist-high through the water. Alligators regard them menacingly. ORLEAN (V.O.)
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INT PARTY HOUSE NIGHT
INT. PARTY HOUSE - NIGHT
INT. PARTY HOUSE - NIGHT Kaufman, beer in hand, stands off in the corner of a room crowded with young Hollywood types. He talks nervously to a pretty young woman KAUFMAN
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INT ORLEAN'S APARTMENT EVENING
INT. ORLEAN'S APARTMENT - EVENING
INT. ORLEAN'S APARTMENT - EVENING Orlean looks at a book called The Native Orchids of Florida. She comes to a photo of the ghost orchid glowing white on the page. Orlean's husband walks by with a cup of coffee, caresses her shoulder. She tenses slightly, smiles up at him
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INT AIRPLANE MORNING
INT. AIRPLANE - MORNING
INT. AIRPLANE - MORNING Orlean sits in her seat and addresses the camera. ORLEAN You would have to want something very badly...
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INT MIAMI AIRPORT CAR RENTAL BOOTH DAY
INT. MIAMI AIRPORT CAR RENTAL BOOTH - DAY
INT. MIAMI AIRPORT CAR RENTAL BOOTH - DAY Kaufman watches the pretty clerk working on the computer. She looks up, he looks down, studies his road map. INT. RENTAL CAR - EARLY MORNING A charmingly bedraggled Orlean drives on a road surrounded by
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INT TRUCK DAY
INT. TRUCK - DAY
INT. TRUCK - DAY Mike Owen drives. Kaufman stares out the window at boring trees. ORLEAN (V.O.) It had been a hard day and I hadn't seen
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INT HOTEL ROOM NIGHT
INT. HOTEL ROOM - NIGHT
INT. HOTEL ROOM - NIGHT Orlean, still dirty from the swamp, holds a phone to her ear and talks to us. She has cute little dirt smudges on her face. ORLEAN
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INT VAN DAY
INT. VAN - DAY
INT. VAN - DAY Laroche, wearing a Cleveland Indians T-shirt, drives crazily thorugh the Hollywood Seminole reservation. Orlean holds on. LAROCHE No shit I'm a fun character.
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EXT EMPTY BEACH DAY
EXT. EMPTY BEACH - DAY
EXT. EMPTY BEACH - DAY Kaufman sits on the bench, looking out at the ocean. An attractive, spandexed couple skate by, chatting in German. He watches the woman, hoping for a look, for something. He doesn't get it. They're gone. A tan older man sits on the
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INT LIMO NIGHT
INT. LIMO - NIGHT
INT. LIMO - NIGHT Kaufman sits in the back seat and stares out the window. The driver looks at him a couple of times in his rearview mirror. KAUFMAN (V.O.) I have failed. I have nothing to say. I
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INT EMPTY BEDROOM NIGHT
INT. EMPTY BEDROOM - NIGHT
INT. EMPTY BEDROOM - NIGHT Kaufman lies half-awake in bed, sweating, his eyes darting back and forth. He looks over at the clock. It's 3:32. KAUFMAN Damn it.
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INT CAR DAY
INT. CAR - DAY
INT. CAR - DAY Orlean drives through swampy landscape. She talks to us. ORLEAN I suppose what I'd been doing in Florida was trying to understand how people found
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INT EMPTY BEDROOM NIGHT
INT. EMPTY BEDROOM - NIGHT
INT. EMPTY BEDROOM - NIGHT Kaufman holds The Orchid Thief open with one hand and types with the other. KAUFMAN (V.O.) Susan Orlean drives. The golden light of
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INT EMPTY BEDROOM MORNING
INT. EMPTY BEDROOM - MORNING
INT. EMPTY BEDROOM - MORNING Kaufman paces with his mini-recorder. Off-screen typing. KAUFMAN ... and in the final sequence Susan as a young girl swings alone in the backyard.
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EXT SWAMP DAY
EXT. SWAMP - DAY
EXT. SWAMP - DAY Black and white shot of Laroche and the Indians slogging through Fakahatchee. The camera swoops down and the scene turns into a mannequin version. ORLEAN (V.O.)
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INT EMPTY BEDROOM NIGHT
INT. EMPTY BEDROOM - NIGHT
INT. EMPTY BEDROOM - NIGHT Kaufman is on the floor typing. His mini-recorder is on. KAUFMAN'S VOICE (ON RECORDER) Kaufman sits across from Valerie, a pretty film executive. He eyes her as
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INT EMPTY BEDROOM NIGHT
INT. EMPTY BEDROOM - NIGHT
INT. EMPTY BEDROOM - NIGHT Kaufman types. KAUFMAN (V.O.) Kaufman jerks off to the book jacket photo of Susan Orlean.
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EXT SWAMP DAY
EXT. SWAMP - DAY
EXT. SWAMP - DAY Orlean walks through alone, panicked. All the vegetation is greener and crazier-looking than we've seen before. Things slither by in the water, brush up against her. (CONTINUED)
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EXT SWAMP MORNING
EXT. SWAMP - MORNING
EXT. SWAMP - MORNING Laroche and Orlean step off the levee into black water. They sink to their knees. The ground is soft; it's a struggle to pull their feet up to walk. Things slither past in the water. Something big runs by in the distance. Bees, and
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EXT SWAMP LATER
EXT. SWAMP - LATER
EXT. SWAMP - LATER The sun is high. Orlean and Laroche sit on dry ground. She stares at him. Laroche won't look at her. He busies himself opening the backpack and pulling out food. Finally, Laroche speaks without looking up.
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INT HOTEL ROOM MORNING
INT. HOTEL ROOM - MORNING
INT. HOTEL ROOM - MORNING Kaufman is sleeping. It looks like it's been a rough night. The phone rings. He reaches for it. KAUFMAN Hello?
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EXT SWAMP DAY
EXT. SWAMP - DAY
EXT. SWAMP - DAY Laroche leads the way. There's a sadness, a sense of defeat and humiliation that he tries to conceal. Orlean is stony. LAROCHE I've done this a million times. Whenever
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INT AUDITORIUM LATER
INT. AUDITORIUM - LATER
INT. AUDITORIUM - LATER McKee scribbles a diagram onto a transparency in an overhead projector. It's some kind of complicated time-line with act- breaks and corresponding page numbers indicated. The audience members take copious notes. Kaufman sweats.
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INT AUDITORIUM LATER
INT. AUDITORIUM - LATER
INT. AUDITORIUM - LATER McKee lectures. Kaufman sits and listens. A copy of Aristotle's Poetics sits on his lap. The book features a bust of Aristotle on the cover. MCKEE
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INT AUDITORIUM MORNING
INT. AUDITORIUM - MORNING
INT. AUDITORIUM - MORNING Kaufman, bleary-eyed, sits in the back. McKee paces. MCKEE Anyone else? Kaufman timidly raises his hand.
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EXT SWAMP DAY
EXT. SWAMP - DAY
EXT. SWAMP - DAY Laroche and Orlean slog through the water with purpose, looking only straight ahead. As they walk the sounds and colors become subdued. Soon there is silence. ORLEAN (V.O.)
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INT HOTEL ROOM NIGHT
INT. HOTEL ROOM - NIGHT
INT. HOTEL ROOM - NIGHT A drunken Kaufman paces, tries to read Story. McKee's Ten Commandments are taped to the wall. As is a photo of Michelle Pfeiffer ripped from a magazine. KAUFMAN (V.O.)
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INT HOTEL ROOM MORNING
INT. HOTEL ROOM - MORNING
INT. HOTEL ROOM - MORNING Donald lies on his back on the floor intently reading the script. Kaufman paces. Donald finishes, is quiet. KAUFMAN So, like, what would you do?
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INT NEW YORK OFFICE BUILDING DAY
INT. NEW YORK OFFICE BUILDING - DAY
INT. NEW YORK OFFICE BUILDING - DAY Donald, dressed like Kaufman, waits by the elevators. Orlean emerges. He's about to talk to her, when she pulls out a cell phone and dials. Donald decides to be a spy and follows her out of the building.
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EXT MIAMI INTERNATIONAL AIRPORT DAY
EXT. MIAMI INTERNATIONAL AIRPORT - DAY
EXT. MIAMI INTERNATIONAL AIRPORT - DAY Orlean waits with a suitcase outside the terminal. The beat- up white van pulls up. Orlean gets in, the van speeds off. Another car pulls away from the curb and follows it. INT. CAR - A BIT LATER
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INT HOUSE CONTINUOUS
INT. HOUSE - CONTINUOUS
INT. HOUSE - CONTINUOUS Laroche throws Kaufman down into a chair. The chair slides across the floor, tips over. Orlean seems uninterested. She kisses Laroche's leg. LAROCHE
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INT RENTAL CAR - BEFORE DAWN
INT. RENTAL CAR - BEFORE DAWN
INT. RENTAL CAR - BEFORE DAWN Kaufman drives. The headlights shine on Laroche's van ahead. Orlean, no longer stoned, sits next to him, holding a gun. She skims Kaufman's screenplay. KAUFMAN
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INT LAROCHE'S LIVING ROOM NIGHT
INT. LAROCHE'S LIVING ROOM - NIGHT
INT. LAROCHE'S LIVING ROOM - NIGHT Orlean nervously snorts some green powder off the coffee table while Laroche watches. She talks to the camera. ORLEAN The first time I tried it, the split
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EXT JANES SCENIC DRIVE - A LITTLE WHILE LATER
EXT. JANES SCENIC DRIVE - A LITTLE WHILE LATER
EXT. JANES SCENIC DRIVE - A LITTLE WHILE LATER Laroche parks. Kaufman parks behind him. Orlean gestures with her gun for him to get out. As Kaufman comes around the car, he sees Donald on the floor of the back seat. Laroche emerges from his van with a flashlight and a rifle slung over
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INT CAR CONTINUOUS
INT. CAR - CONTINUOUS
INT. CAR - CONTINUOUS Kaufman and Donald speed along the swamp road. KAUFMAN For Christ's sake, why didn't you do something while we were in the car?
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INT CALIFORNIA PIZZA KITCHEN DAY
INT. CALIFORNIA PIZZA KITCHEN - DAY
INT. CALIFORNIA PIZZA KITCHEN - DAY Kaufman sits in a booth, working longhand on a legal pad. He's a little scraped-up, a little tougher. A copy of Story by McKee is among his reference material. Alice, the waitress, walks by and glances at the table.
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Adaptation

Satirical logline: A painfully self-aware screenwriter attempts to adapt the unfilmable, attending hack seminars and suffering Hollywood pressure while the real story—obsession, theft, and grotesque passion—unfolds into a chaotic, tragic comedy about art and authenticity.

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Adaptation revolutionizes cinematic storytelling by making the creative process itself the subject of the narrative, blending multiple layers of reality while exploring profound themes of passion, identity, and artistic integrity. Its unique meta-structure and intellectual depth distinguish it from conventional screenplays while maintaining commercial appeal through compelling characters and unexpected narrative turns.

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Average Score: 9.1
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Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
The script’s core strengths — its singular meta-voice, the swamp/orchid imagery, and the Kaufman/Donald dynamic — are all intact. The primary creative fix is to ground the late escalation so the film’s tonal leap feels earned: strengthen Orlean’s psychological arc (show incremental susceptibility rather than a sudden drug-conversion), make the ‘Passion’ extract and Laroche’s motive for escalation more internally plausible (specifics about the drug, marketplace and why Laroche turns violent), and foreshadow the mythic elements (Swamp Ape/legend) earlier so the climax reads as payoff instead of deus ex machina. Also tighten Act II by compressing long research/exposition stretches and give Charlie clearer, active choices earlier so his transformation is driven as much by agency as by catastrophe. Finally, deepen Seminole characters enough to avoid cultural flattening and make their involvement ethically grounded.
For Executives:
This is a high-value, festival/awards-ready, meta-commercial property: distinctive voice, dual commercial hooks (writer-story + thriller climax), and strong lead opportunities. The key production risk is tonal and credulity drift in Act III — studios/test audiences may reject the sudden genre pivot and implausible character turns. Mitigate risk with a focused rewrite that anchors the third act emotionally and factually (drug mechanics, Laroche’s stakes, foreshadowed mythic elements) and address cultural representation issues. Budget-wise, the swamp/action sequences and greenhouse set pieces are expensive but central to the USP; fund them only after script fixes that reduce audience confusion and maximize the film’s festival/arthouse and awards positioning.
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Story Facts
Genres:
Drama 50% Comedy 40% Romance 20% Thriller 15% Action 10% Fantasy 10%

Setting: Contemporary, with flashbacks to the past, Primarily set in Florida's Fakahatchee Strand and various locations in New York City

Themes: Self-Acceptance and Identity, The Nature of Passion and Obsession, The Search for Authentic Connection and Love, The Absurdity and Chaos of Existence, The Creative Process and the Nature of Storytelling, The Illusion vs. Reality of Nature and Beauty, Evolution and the Drive Towards Perfection (or Entropy)

Conflict & Stakes: Charlie's internal struggle with self-acceptance and creative integrity, alongside the external conflict involving Laroche's illegal activities and Orlean's shifting loyalties.

Mood: Introspective and melancholic, with moments of dark humor and tension.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The screenplay's meta-narrative structure, blending real-life events with fictional elements.
  • Plot Twist: The revelation of Orlean's drug-induced passion for orchids and her shift in priorities.
  • Innovative Ideas: The exploration of body dysmorphic disorder and its impact on creativity.
  • Distinctive Settings: The contrasting environments of the lush Florida swamps and the urban landscape of New York City.
  • Character Depth: Complex characters grappling with their desires and failures, particularly Kaufman's introspective journey.

Comparable Scripts: Adaptation (2002), Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind (2004), Synecdoche, New York (2008), Being John Malkovich (1999), The Orchid Thief (2002), The Science of Sleep (2006), Her (2013), Wild Strawberries (1957), The Master (2012)

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Your current Conflict (Script Level) score: 7.4
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2. Character Development (Script Level)
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Your current Character Development (Script Level) score: 7.9
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3. Theme (Script Level)
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Your current Theme (Script Level) score: 8.0
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Script Level Analysis

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Overall Score: 7.95
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The script's core is rich — a unique premise and a strong, conflicted protagonist in Charlie Kaufman — but it loses emotional traction because John Laroche and Susan Orlean often feel under-cooked. Prioritize deepening Laroche and Orlean: give each clearer, concrete motivations, private moments that reveal contradictions, and scenes that tie their transformations directly to Kaufman's emotional stakes. At the same time, trim exposition-heavy sequences and tighten pacing so character moments can breathe and land. Focus revisions on a handful of scenes (e.g., 5, 12, 32, 38, 44) to make changes surgical and testable before a larger rewrite.
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Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
The script has a strong, original voice and rich thematic material, but it sprawls. Tighten the middle by pruning or compressing secondary threads (e.g., some McKee/seminar, peripheral comic set pieces, and repetitive therapy/Donald beats), reduce reliance on explanatory voice-over, and center the story emotionally on a clearer throughline between Kaufman and Orlean (and how Laroche’s actions concretely affect them). Raise or clarify external stakes (legal, reputational, or mortal consequences of Laroche’s plan) so the film’s introspection has forward motion and the ending resolves a clearer emotional question about passion and self-acceptance.
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Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The character analyses show rich, complementary players but a fuzziness in emotional throughlines. The script will be stronger if you clarify the protagonist’s arc (Charlie/Kaufman) so his internal beats land clearly against Orlean and Laroche’s trajectories. Tighten turning points (what exactly changes him and when), make Orlean’s motives for the radical choices feel earned (show more interior fallout), and give Laroche a sharper humanizing moment or consequence so he reads as more than an eccentric plot engine. Keep the script’s intelligence and metafictional edge, but anchor it with unmistakable, causal emotional shifts for the audience to follow.
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Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
The script's core strengths are its intellectual curiosity and raw emotional honesty (especially Kaufman's vulnerability). But the emotional architecture is uneven: long stretches of introspection collapse into a sudden thriller in the final act, which sacrifices the nuanced character work you build earlier. To fix this, smooth the tonal bridge by planting escalating paranoia and moral stakes earlier, deepen Orlean and Donald's arcs so their choices feel earned, and sprinkle small, believable positive moments for Kaufman (creative breakthroughs, genuine connection) to prevent emotional fatigue. Keep the film's unusual voice but make the emotional transitions more deliberate and earned.
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Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
You have a rich, layered meditation on authorship, obsession and self-worth—beautiful material. Right now the script risks feeling diffuse because it oscillates between Kaufman’s neurotic inwardness and a wild, plot-driven swamp thriller. Tighten the throughline: pick a single emotional anchor (Kaufman’s need for self-acceptance or Orlean/Laroche’s corrupting passion) and make every scene serve that arc. Preserve the film’s philosophical authenticity, but simplify structural beats so the audience can experience the ideas without getting lost in tonal whiplash. Trim or rework set pieces that don’t advance the protagonist’s inner transformation and make the climax a clear, earned resolution of the Authenticity vs. Commercialism conflict.
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Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
Lean the script toward its emotional center: Charlie Kaufman’s struggle for self-acceptance must be the through-line that every scene serves. Trim or rework detours (excessive parable-like digressions, diffuse subplots, and overly meta moments) that dilute emotional momentum. Make the mechanical beats of Kaufman’s internal journey visible in external choices — incremental failures and small, believable steps toward acceptance — and ensure the Orlean/Laroche plotlines either reflect or catalyze that inner change rather than compete for screen time. Tighten voice-over use so it clarifies rather than explains, and make the climax and resolution feel earned by aligning stakes, consequences, and character transformation.
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Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
The script's emotional core is muddled by inconsistent characterization and repeated voice-over. Tighten Charlie Kaufman's throughline: decide whether he is a study in paralysis (BDD, self-loathing) or an active, changing protagonist and make every scene reflect that journey. Remove redundant self-loathing monologues and show inner conflict through specific, escalating actions and choices. At the same time, pick a tonal center (literary character study vs. dark thriller) and reconcile major plot beats — Orlean's turn toward Laroche and the introduction of the Swamp Ape/drug-and-murder material need clearer set-ups and motivations so shifts feel earned rather than abrupt.
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Scene Analysis

All of your scenes analyzed individually and compared, so you can zero in on what to improve.

Scene-Level Percentile Chart
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Other Analyses

Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
Your voice — intimate, self-deprecating, intellectually playful and melancholic — is the script's strongest asset. Preserve that tone, but prioritize cinematic clarity: convert some of the heavy internal narration into observable action and sharper dramatic beats so the audience can feel the characters rather than only hear them. Tighten scenes that linger in inward rumination, heighten external stakes and emotional payoffs, and ensure each long, lyrical passage advances character or plot. That will keep the script true to its sensibility while making it more watchable and emotionally immediate.
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Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
You have a distinct, emotionally rich script with memorable characters and a strong thematic core (obsession, passion, self-loathing). To make it work dramatically, tighten the screenplay around a clear throughline: decide whose emotional journey the audience will follow most closely and cut or compress sequences that don't advance that arc or heighten stakes. Refine dialogue to increase subtext (show more, tell less) and make each scene push character change or reveal motivation. Practical next steps: map act breaks, set a target running time, and perform ruthless line/item cuts and focused rewrites to restore narrative urgency while preserving the script’s voice and nuance.
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Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
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Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
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World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
Your world is rich and evocative — the contrast between swamp wildness and urban sterility, the obsessive cultural milieu around orchids, and the self-conscious, meta-textual play all give you a lot to work with. The biggest creative need is focus: choose a single emotional through-line and let the world consistently serve it. Right now the script splits its allegiance between Kaufman's neurotic interior, Orlean’s reportage, and Laroche’s outlaw romance with nature. Decide which of those is the primary journey (or make their interrelation explicit and causal), tighten scenes that don’t move that arc, and use the swamp, orchids, and time-jumps as metaphors that escalate character stakes rather than as episodic texture. That will preserve the script’s intellectual ambition while making it dramatically compelling and emotionally clear.
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Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
Your script's core concept is strong and emotionally rich, but its consistent lean into melancholic, introspective scenes early on weakens plot momentum and makes the later surge of high-stakes conflict feel abrupt. Tighten structure by embedding clear, concrete stakes and forward-driving choices inside the quieter scenes (even small, tangible consequences will do). Make dialogue do double duty — reveal character AND move the plot — and use the comedic beats already working in the script to relieve weight and sharpen pacing. Add subtle foreshadowing for the later escalation so the tone shift feels earned, not sudden.
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Loglines
Presents logline variations based on theme, genre, and hook.
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