Coda
Executive Summary
Coda Synopsis
Synopsis
In the coastal town of Gloucester, Massachusetts, 17-year-old Ruby Rossi navigates the complexities of adolescence while balancing her responsibilities as the sole hearing member of her deaf family. Ruby works on her family's fishing boat, the Angela Rose, alongside her father Frank and brother Leo, both of whom are deaf. The film opens with Ruby joyfully singing along to Etta James as they haul in their catch, showcasing her passion for music amidst the gritty reality of their fishing life. Ruby's family relies heavily on her to communicate with the hearing world, which often leaves her feeling overwhelmed and stifled.
As Ruby transitions from the fishing life to high school, she struggles to fit in. Her friend Gertie encourages her to join the choir, where she meets Miles, a charming classmate who shares her love for music. Ruby's passion for singing is ignited, but her insecurities about her voice and her family's reliance on her weigh heavily on her. Despite her talent, Ruby is terrified of performing in front of others, leading to a series of comedic and poignant moments as she grapples with her identity.
The tension escalates when Ruby's family faces financial difficulties due to new fishing regulations that threaten their livelihood. Frank and Leo's frustration with the system leads them to consider selling their boat, but Ruby's determination to help them succeed drives her to take charge of their new venture, Fresh Catch, a direct-to-consumer fish selling business. This new responsibility further complicates her desire to pursue music, as she feels torn between her family's needs and her own aspirations.
As Ruby's relationship with Miles deepens, she finds herself at a crossroads. Their budding romance is tested by the pressures of her family obligations and her fear of being judged for her singing. When Ruby finally musters the courage to audition for Berklee College of Music, she faces a pivotal moment that could change her life forever. However, her family's struggles come to a head when they are penalized by the Coast Guard for operating without a hearing deckhand, leading to a crisis that threatens their new business and Ruby's dreams.
In a climactic moment, Ruby performs at a school concert, singing a duet with Miles that showcases her talent and her family's support. The performance is a turning point, as Ruby embraces her identity as both a daughter and an artist. The film culminates in Ruby's acceptance into Berklee, where she must decide whether to leave her family behind or find a way to balance her dreams with her responsibilities. Ultimately, Ruby chooses to pursue her passion for music while remaining connected to her family, illustrating the power of love, sacrifice, and the pursuit of one's dreams.
Coda is a heartfelt exploration of family dynamics, the challenges of growing up, and the importance of finding one's voice in a world that often feels isolating. It captures the beauty of music as a universal language that transcends barriers, making it a compelling story for audiences of all backgrounds.
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USP: What sets 'Coda' apart is its authentic representation of a deaf family and the unique challenges they face, particularly through the lens of a hearing daughter who feels torn between her family's needs and her own aspirations. The integration of American Sign Language not only enriches the dialogue but also deepens the emotional resonance of the story, making it relatable to a wide audience while highlighting the importance of communication and understanding in all relationships.
Overview
Genres: Drama, Comedy, Family, Musical, Romance, Coming-of-age, Music, Slice of Life, Teen
Setting: Contemporary, Cape Ann, Massachusetts, primarily in Gloucester and surrounding areas
Overview: The overall score of 8.1 reflects the screenplay's strong character development, emotional depth, and thematic richness, particularly in Ruby's journey. However, areas such as pacing and conflict resolution require attention to enhance overall engagement.
Themes: Family Dynamics and Communication, Economic Hardship and Class Struggle, Self-Discovery and Identity, Communication Barriers and Cultural Differences, First Love and Relationships
Conflict and Stakes: Ruby's struggle to balance her passion for music with her family's reliance on her as their interpreter, leading to tensions about independence and responsibility.
Overall Mood: Bittersweet and uplifting, with moments of tension and humor.
Mood/Tone at Key Scenes:
- Scene 1: Light-hearted and joyful as Ruby sings on the fishing boat, showcasing family camaraderie.
Standout Features:
- Unique Hook: The protagonist is a hearing child in a deaf family, creating a unique perspective on communication and family dynamics.
- Major Twist : Ruby's journey culminates in her acceptance to Berklee College of Music, challenging her family's expectations.
- Distinctive Setting : The coastal fishing community of Cape Ann provides a rich backdrop for the story, enhancing its authenticity.
- Innovative Ideas : The integration of music and sign language throughout the screenplay highlights the importance of communication in various forms.
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Market Analysis
Budget Estimate:$15-25 million
Target Audience Demographics: Young adults aged 16-30, families, and fans of coming-of-age dramas and musicals.
Marketability: The screenplay features a unique blend of music and family dynamics, appealing to a broad audience and potential for critical acclaim.
The story's themes of independence and self-discovery resonate with young adults, making it relatable and marketable.
The diverse cast and focus on the deaf community provide a fresh perspective that can attract attention and generate discussions.
Profit Potential: Moderate to high, as the film could perform well at festivals and attract a dedicated audience, especially if it garners positive reviews.
Scene Level Percentiles
The screenplay demonstrates strong character development and emotional impact but requires enhancements in conflict, originality, and unpredictability to elevate its overall effectiveness.
Emotions Elicited Percentiles
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Higher isn't necessarily better. This is FYI.
Screenplay Analysis
Key Strengths
Note: The ratings are the averages of all the scenes.
- Strong character development with a high characters rating (77.87), indicating well-crafted and engaging characters.
- Effective dialogue as evidenced by a high dialogue rating (76.44), suggesting the writer excels in creating authentic and compelling conversations.
- High emotional impact score (77.30), indicating the screenplay successfully evokes strong feelings in the audience.
- Low conflict level (26.44) suggests the need for more tension and stakes to drive the narrative forward.
- Unpredictability score (7.97) indicates a lack of surprising elements, which could make the story more engaging.
- The originality score (25) is quite low, suggesting the writer should focus on developing unique concepts or twists to enhance the screenplay's appeal.
The writer appears to be intuitive, with strengths in character and dialogue but lower scores in concept and plot development.
Balancing Elements- Enhance the conflict and stakes to create a more dynamic narrative that complements the strong character work.
- Incorporate more unpredictable elements to keep the audience engaged and invested in the story's outcome.
- Focus on originality to differentiate the screenplay from others in the genre.
Intuitive
Overall AssessmentThe screenplay shows strong character and emotional engagement but needs improvement in conflict, originality, and unpredictability to reach its full potential.
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How scenes compare to the Scripts in our Library
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| Scene Character Changes | 7.5 | 81 | Green Book: 7.4 | fight Club: 7.5 |
| Scene Characters | 8.6 | 76 | Blackkklansman: 8.5 | Casablanca: 8.6 |
| Scene Emotional Impact | 8.3 | 75 | Blackkklansman: 8.2 | face/off: 8.3 |
| Scene Dialogue | 8.1 | 74 | The father: 8.0 | Mr. Smith goes to Washington: 8.1 |
| Scene Internal Goal | 8.12 | 72 | Breaking Bad: 8.11 | Memento: 8.12 |
| Script Structure | 8.22 | 72 | Gran Torino: 8.21 | Knives Out: 8.22 |
| Script Emotional Impact | 8.25 | 70 | Battlefield Earth: 8.00 | the dark knight rises: 8.25 |
| Scene Formatting | 8.25 | 67 | The Sweet Hereafter: 8.24 | Mr Robot: 8.25 |
| Scene Overall | 8.5 | 67 | The father: 8.4 | Casablanca: 8.5 |
| Script Visual Impact | 8.25 | 62 | KILLING ZOE: 8.00 | the pursuit of happyness: 8.25 |
| Scene Plot | 8.1 | 61 | The father: 8.0 | Vice: 8.1 |
| Script Premise | 8.25 | 55 | Avatar: 8.00 | the dark knight rises: 8.25 |
| Overall Script | 8.10 | 51 | Dr. Jekyll and Mr Hyde : 8.06 | the pursuit of happyness: 8.10 |
| Script Conflict | 7.75 | 49 | Inception: 7.50 | the pursuit of happyness: 7.75 |
| Script Characters | 8.25 | 47 | The Hudsucker Proxy: 8.00 | Erin Brokovich: 8.25 |
| Script Theme | 8.25 | 47 | Stranger Things: 8.00 | the dark knight rises: 8.25 |
| Scene Concept | 8.1 | 46 | Manchester by the sea: 8.0 | Casablanca: 8.1 |
| Scene External Goal | 7.17 | 45 | Almost Famous: 7.15 | Coda: 7.17 |
| Scene Engagement | 8.93 | 40 | Emilia Perez : 8.92 | Good Will Hunting: 8.93 |
| Script Originality | 8.25 | 40 | House of cards pilot: 8.00 | Erin Brokovich: 8.25 |
| Scene Story Forward | 7.9 | 36 | Jojo rabbit: 7.8 | Scott pilgrim vs. the world: 7.9 |
| Scene Pacing | 8.18 | 35 | Jojo rabbit: 8.17 | True Blood: 8.18 |
| Script Structure | 7.75 | 31 | Inception: 7.50 | fight Club: 7.75 |
| Scene High Stakes | 6.8 | 30 | Jojo rabbit: 6.7 | the pursuit of happyness: 6.8 |
| Scene Conflict Level | 7.0 | 28 | Amadeus: 6.9 | Boyz n the hood: 7.0 |
| Scene Originality | 8.40 | 25 | Cruel Intentions: 8.39 | scream : 8.40 |
| Scene Unpredictability | 6.98 | 9 | Call me by your name: 6.91 | Coda: 6.98 |
Emotional Analysis
Emotional Variety
Critique
- The screenplay exhibits a range of emotions, but certain scenes feel repetitive, particularly those centered around Ruby's struggles with her family dynamics and her aspirations. For instance, scenes 2, 3, and 11 all highlight Ruby's frustrations with her family's fishing business, leading to a sense of emotional redundancy.
- While there are moments of joy and humor, such as in scenes 1 and 7, the emotional landscape could benefit from more varied emotional experiences, particularly in scenes that focus on conflict or tension.
- Scenes that delve into Ruby's internal struggles often mirror each other, which can dilute the emotional impact. For example, the emotional weight of her interactions with Miles in scenes 24 and 49 could be differentiated to enhance engagement.
Suggestions
- Introduce more contrasting emotions in key scenes, such as incorporating moments of hope or triumph amidst Ruby's struggles, particularly in scenes like 10 and 38 where family dynamics are explored.
- Consider adding scenes that showcase Ruby's joy in her singing or her relationships outside of her family, which could provide a refreshing emotional contrast and keep the audience engaged.
Emotional Intensity Distribution
Critique
- The emotional intensity distribution is uneven, with peaks in scenes like 57 and 51 where Ruby performs, contrasted by lower intensity in scenes focused on family arguments or mundane interactions.
- Scenes such as 18 and 45 exhibit high emotional stakes but could benefit from a more gradual build-up to avoid emotional fatigue, as the intensity can feel overwhelming without sufficient relief.
- The emotional valleys, particularly in scenes like 4 and 6, may risk disengagement as they lack significant emotional stakes or development.
Suggestions
- Balance the emotional intensity by interspersing lighter, more humorous scenes between heavier moments, such as placing a comedic family interaction after a tense confrontation to provide relief.
- Enhance the build-up to climactic scenes by incorporating smaller emotional moments leading up to them, allowing the audience to invest more deeply in the characters' journeys.
Empathy For Characters
Critique
- Empathy for Ruby is strong in many scenes, particularly those that showcase her vulnerabilities, such as 12 and 57. However, empathy for other characters, like Leo and Frank, could be strengthened, as their motivations and struggles are less explored.
- In scenes like 18 and 45, while Ruby's perspective is clear, the emotional stakes for Leo and Frank are not as deeply felt, which can lead to a lack of connection with their characters.
- The emotional depth of secondary characters often feels one-dimensional, limiting the audience's ability to empathize with their struggles.
Suggestions
- Incorporate backstory or additional dialogue for characters like Leo and Frank to provide context for their actions and emotions, particularly in scenes like 21 and 38 where their frustrations are evident.
- Create moments that allow secondary characters to express their feelings or vulnerabilities, such as Leo sharing his fears about Ruby leaving in a more explicit manner, which could deepen audience empathy.
Emotional Impact Of Key Scenes
Critique
- Key scenes such as 51 and 57 deliver strong emotional impacts, particularly through Ruby's performances. However, some pivotal moments, like the family arguments in scenes 10 and 45, lack the emotional punch needed to resonate fully with the audience.
- The emotional weight of confrontations, such as in scenes 38 and 39, could be heightened to leave a more lasting impression on viewers, as they currently feel somewhat subdued.
- Scenes that should evoke strong emotions, like Ruby's acceptance into Berklee in scene 58, could benefit from a more dramatic build-up to enhance their impact.
Suggestions
- Enhance the emotional impact of key scenes by restructuring dialogue to heighten stakes and tension, particularly in family confrontations where emotions run high.
- Consider adding visual or auditory elements that amplify the emotional resonance of pivotal moments, such as music cues during Ruby's performances or family arguments to underscore the emotional stakes.
Complex Emotional Layers
Critique
- Many scenes, particularly those focused on Ruby's internal struggles, feel one-dimensional emotionally, often revolving around her frustrations without exploring deeper layers of her character.
- Scenes like 12 and 57 could benefit from the introduction of sub-emotions, such as hope or regret, to create a more nuanced emotional experience for the audience.
- The emotional layers in scenes involving family dynamics often lack complexity, leading to a more straightforward portrayal of conflict without exploring the underlying feelings.
Suggestions
- Introduce sub-emotions in key scenes, such as Ruby feeling both joy and fear during her performances, to create a richer emotional tapestry that resonates with the audience.
- Encourage characters to express a range of emotions in pivotal moments, such as incorporating moments of vulnerability or regret in family arguments to deepen the emotional complexity.
Additional Critique
Character Development
Critiques
- While Ruby's character is well-developed, other characters like Leo and Frank could benefit from more depth to enhance audience connection.
- Scenes that focus on family dynamics often highlight Ruby's struggles but do not provide enough insight into her family's perspectives, limiting empathy for them.
- The emotional arcs of secondary characters feel underexplored, which can lead to a lack of engagement with their journeys.
Suggestions
- Incorporate scenes that delve into Leo's and Frank's motivations and struggles, particularly in moments of conflict, to provide a more rounded view of their characters.
- Add dialogue or flashbacks that reveal the backstories of secondary characters, allowing the audience to understand their actions and emotional responses better.
Balancing Humor and Tension
Critiques
- The balance between humor and tension can feel uneven, particularly in scenes that shift abruptly from comedic moments to serious confrontations.
- Scenes like 7 and 25 showcase humor but could benefit from a more gradual transition into the emotional weight of the situation to maintain audience engagement.
- The comedic elements sometimes overshadow the emotional stakes, leading to a dilution of the intended impact.
Suggestions
- Create smoother transitions between comedic and serious moments, such as allowing characters to reflect on the humor before diving into the emotional core of the scene.
- Consider using humor as a tool to build tension rather than diffuse it, allowing for a more complex emotional experience that keeps the audience invested.
Writer's Voice
Summary:The writer's voice is characterized by a sharp, witty, and realistic style that blends humor and emotional depth. The dialogue is consistently sharp, capturing authentic working-class vernacular and the nuances of teenage interactions, family dynamics, and the complexities of a close-knit deaf community. The narrative seamlessly interweaves detailed descriptions of the Gloucester fishing community with introspective moments, creating a vivid and engaging world. Direction emphasizes physical actions and gestures to convey emotion, particularly in scenes involving the deaf characters, further enhancing authenticity and emotional resonance.
Best representation: Scene 7 - Dinner Table Distractions. Scene 7 best encapsulates the writer's unique voice because it masterfully blends humor and realism within a deeply relatable family dynamic. The awkwardness of the situation, the sharp dialogue that captures the characters' personalities, and the subtle cultural element (Ruby translating for her deaf parents) all work together to create a scene that is both funny and emotionally resonant. This blend of humor, realism, and insightful character interactions is a consistent hallmark of the writer's style throughout the screenplay.
Memorable Lines:
- Frank: You know why God made farts smell? So deaf people could enjoy them too. (Scene 8)
- Gertie: What about like 'We should totally get it on'? (Scene 14)
- MS. SIMON: Sadly, there was no amendment protecting the right to nap - Ruby! (Scene 4)
- Leo: Damn, Leo got hot. (Scene 13)
- Frank: I'd give my left nut to tell them to go screw themselves. (Scene 18)
Writing Style:
The screenplay exhibits a diverse writing style, blending elements of realistic dialogue with witty humor and emotional depth. It frequently showcases intimate character interactions and explores complex family dynamics and personal relationships, often within the context of specific settings (high school, family homes, workplaces). While there's variety, a consistent thread of authenticity and relatable characters runs throughout.
Style Similarities:
- Greta Gerwig
- Aaron Sorkin
- Tina Fey
Story Shape
Emotions Elicited
suspense Analysis
Executive Summary
Suspense in 'Coda' primarily manifests during confrontational moments, particularly those involving Ruby trying to assert her role in the family and community. There are episodes where the audience is kept on edge, especially during confrontations with others, such as when Ruby negotiates prices at the wharf (Scene 17) or when the Coast Guard boards the fishing vessel (Scene 44). These instances create tension around the characters' uncertain futures and add stakes to their decisions.
Usage Analysis
- In Scene 17, the suspense builds as Ruby confronts Gio about fish prices. The tension surrounding whether she will successfully negotiate a better deal while risking her relationship with Leo adds emotional weight to the scene.
- In Scene 44, when the Coast Guard approaches, suspense escalates as viewers anticipate potential legal consequences for Frank and Leo. The realization that they are unaware of the Coast Guard regulations adds to the anxiety of their situation and keeps the audience invested.
Critique
- While moments of suspense effectively illustrate the stakes involved in Ruby's life and her family's fishing business, the screenplay could benefit from more varied methods of integrating suspense, such as building tension in quieter moments or introducing unexpected curves during confrontations to further engage the audience.
Suggestions
- Incorporate moments where the audience can sense underlying conflicts before they come to a head, allowing for a buildup of suspense. For instance, during the lead-up to the Fisheries Council meeting (Scene 29), enhance the atmosphere with foreboding dialogue and visual cues.
- Explore tense situations during calmer family interactions; for example, moments where Ruby's choice might lead to familial conflict can create a quieter yet effective suspense.
Questions for AI
- How can I enhance existing scenes to build more suspenseful tension without compromising the emotional depth already established through character interactions?
- What narrative techniques can I employ to elevate suspense during quieter moments or before major confrontational dialogues?
fear Analysis
Executive Summary
Fear is portrayed in 'Coda' through character insecurities and the weight of expectations placed on them. Ruby frequently grapples with fears surrounding her ambitions, her identity within her family, and societal perceptions. The fear of losing her family ties amidst her aspirations to pursue music is palpable throughout the story.
Usage Analysis
- In Scene 9, Ruby's acute anxiety about singing in front of her classmates illustrates her fear of judgment. Her freezing when called to sing highlights this fear starkly and makes the audience empathize with her struggle.
- In Scene 38, the fear that Ruby’s parents exhibit regarding her aspirations speaks volumes about their concerns over losing support and maintaining familial stability, reflecting fears rooted in love and insecurity.
Critique
- Fear effectively drives Ruby's character development, making her confront her weaknesses and vulnerabilities. However, the screenplay might enhance the portrayal of fear by emphasizing the stakes involved in key decisions, particularly how these fears manifest externally in family dynamics or during pivotal moments.
Suggestions
- Enhance moments that show Ruby's internal fears manifesting in external conflicts, like increasing her hesitation in crucial conversations (Scene 18) or dramatizing her reactions to her parents’ apprehension (Scene 39).
- Incorporate symbols or visual motifs that reflect Ruby's internal fear throughout the screenplay, serving as a consistent reminder of her emotional state.
Questions for AI
- How can I better illustrate Ruby's fears in ways that amplify emotional engagement without overshadowing her growth as a character?
- What narrative pathways could I explore further to incorporate more of the characters’ perspectives on fear, especially those of her family members and how it affects their support for Ruby?
joy Analysis
Executive Summary
Joy in 'Coda' arises from music, family connections, and personal achievements. Moments of happiness punctuate the characters' struggles, creating a dynamic emotional landscape. Joy showcases Ruby's passion for music and her relationships, allowing the audience to feel uplifted amidst the chaos of her life.
Usage Analysis
- Scenes like Ruby's joyful moments with her family (Scene 1) provide a warm contrast to later struggles, while moments of levity during interactions (Scene 8) inject joy that underscores the family's bonds.
- In Scene 57, Ruby's gradual transition from anxiety to confident singing demonstrates how joy is closely tied to her self-acceptance and aspirations.
Critique
- Joy effectively serves as a counterbalance to the darker moments, restoring hope and highlighting the lighter aspects of Ruby's journey. However, the screenplay would benefit from ensuring that joy is woven into moments of tension to create a more dynamic emotional upswing. This could facilitate a deeper engagement with the audience, reinforcing the ups and downs of Ruby’s experience.
Suggestions
- Embed moments of joy within more challenging scenes; for instance, while navigating tension with family (Scene 45), there can be light-hearted exchanges that reflect Ruby's enduring spirit.
- Expand on joyous moments related to music and collaboration, further illustrating how these moments bring characters together, especially during scenes where Ruby interacts with her choir.
Questions for AI
- How can I develop scenes that amplify joy without being overshadowed by fear, sadness, or tension, effectively balancing those emotional elements?
- Are there additional ways to interlace joyful moments into scenes where tensions run high, allowing both emotions to resonate and enhance the overall narrative?
sadness Analysis
Executive Summary
Sadness in 'Coda' is a profound undercurrent, enriching character development and pulling at the audience's heartstrings. The emotional weight of familial expectations, struggles with identity, and moments of disconnection serve as sources for sadness, compelling the audience to empathize with Ruby and her family.
Usage Analysis
- Throughout the screenplay, Ruby's contemplations of her family's plight (Scene 10 and 38) evoke sadness, making the audience palpably aware of the stakes involved as she strives to balance her aspirations with loyalty to her family.
- Moments like the tension during Ruby's performances and her interactions with her parents (Scenes 50 and 25) encapsulate deep emotional struggles, resonating with viewers reflecting on their experiences of familial dynamics.
Critique
- Sadness effectively highlights the sacrifices and emotional burdens that Ruby faces, enhancing the overall narrative by making her journey relatable. However, the screenplay could deepen the layer of sadness by integrating it into scenes that involve communal joy or achievement, emphasizing the consequences of their struggles.
Suggestions
- Infuse moments of disappointment into scenes of triumph; for example, while Ruby receives applause from her choir (Scene 51), quick cuts to her parents' distracted expressions can serve to heighten sadness amid joy.
- Explore Ruby’s reflection on her past as a hearing individual, contrasting these memories with her present experiences to create a poignant undertone of longing and sadness.
Questions for AI
- How can I better illustrate the moments of sadness throughout the screenplay to create an emotional resonance that engages the audience more deeply?
- What are some ways I can weave sadness into joyful or triumphant moments, enhancing the complexity of Ruby's emotional journey while maintaining the overall narrative flow?
surprise Analysis
Executive Summary
Surprise is interspersed throughout 'Coda' primarily through unexpected revelations and character decisions, influencing the emotional trajectory of the screenplay. Moments such as Ruby's unexpected singing prowess and family dynamics reveal how surprise can shift perceptions and deepen connections.
Usage Analysis
- In Scene 25, the surprise comes from Frank’s crude attempts to navigate a serious family moment, creating unexpected humor that shifts the dynamics in an alienating way.
- In Scene 57, the surprise of Ruby forgetting her sheet music propels the narrative into a pivotal moment, forcing her to confront her fears and ultimately leading to an empowering performance.
Critique
- Though moments of surprise effectively add humor or propel character arcs, the screenplay could benefit from seamlessly integrating more profound surprises that challenge characters or alter script trajectories. This can invigorate plotlines and maintain audience engagement.
Suggestions
- Explore incorporating surprise twists in critical dialogue that shifts character dynamics, particularly during family confrontations, to keep the tension escalated and impactful.
- Add subtle hints leading to larger surprises that might pay off in unexpected ways, such as foreshadowing Ruby’s struggles or unexpected collaborative moments during choir rehearsals.
Questions for AI
- How can I weave surprise into existing character arcs or plotlines to create more impactful twists that transform the audience's emotional journey?
- What aspects of character decisions can I better develop to lead to surprising, yet believable, outcomes that enhance the narrative flow?
empathy Analysis
Executive Summary
Empathy is a driving force in 'Coda,' allowing the audience to connect deeply with characters' struggles and aspirations. Ruby's journey, marked by her clash between family obligations and personal ambitions, elicits strong emotional responses that resonate universally, reinforcing the power of familial bonds and individuality.
Usage Analysis
- Throughout the screenplay, Ruby's grappling with her identity as a hearing child of deaf parents (Scene 57 and Scene 34) prompts viewers to empathize with her internal conflicts and the pressures she faces from her family.
- Moments of shared experiences, such as the boat discussions and family arguments, further enhance empathy by enabling the audience to understand the characters' struggles, particularly in scenes where Ruby defends herself or her dreams (Scene 38 and Scene 58).
Critique
- Empathy is successfully portrayed, making it a foundational element in character development and audience engagement. Yet, there’s room to deepen the emotional resonance by layering more complex emotional exchanges that challenge characters’ connections.
Suggestions
- Introduce more moments of introspection for Ruby, where her internal monologues can reveal her vulnerabilities—particularly regarding her family dynamics—to enrich the audience’s connection with her experiences.
- Highlight the mutual dependence between Ruby and her family throughout the story arc, emphasizing how their support and struggles intertwine, thus elevating empathetic moments that bind their shared journey.
Questions for AI
- What internal conflicts have I portrayed effectively that can be expanded to evoke stronger empathy, particularly in pivotal scenes?
- How can I improve the empathetic connections between family members to ensure audiences can see the complexities of their relationships?
Engine: Claude
Screenplay Rating:
Recommend
Executive Summary
The screenplay for 'Coda' is a heartwarming and well-crafted story that follows the journey of Ruby Rossi, a hearing daughter of a deaf family, as she navigates her passion for singing and her family's fishing business. The screenplay is a strong character-driven drama that explores themes of identity, family, and the pursuit of dreams. The writing is consistently engaging, with well-developed characters, compelling conflicts, and a strong narrative arc. While there are a few areas for improvement, the screenplay's unique perspective, strong emotional resonance, and thematic depth make it a compelling and noteworthy work.
Strengths
- The powerful performance scene where Ruby sings for her deaf family and the audience, allowing the audience to experience the emotional resonance of her voice and the disconnect her family feels, is a standout moment that showcases the screenplay's ability to create powerful, moving scenes. high ( Scene 51 )
- The audition sequence where Ruby overcomes her fears and delivers a stirring performance with the help of her teacher, Bernardo, is a well-executed and emotionally impactful moment that highlights Ruby's growth and the screenplay's strong character development. high ( Scene 19 (57) )
- The scenes depicting Ruby's relationship with Miles, including their intimate moment at the quarry, provide a well-developed romantic subplot that adds depth and complexity to the overall story. medium ( Scene 30 )
- The scenes exploring the Rossi family's unique dynamics, including the humorous and cringe-worthy moments, help to establish the family's distinct personality and contribute to the screenplay's overall charm and authenticity. medium ( Scene 8 (25) )
- The quarry sequences, with their visually striking locations and thrilling, high-stakes jumps, provide a sense of adventure and physical exhilaration that complement the emotional journey of the characters. medium ( Scene 29 )
Areas of Improvement
- The conflict between Ruby and her teacher, Bernardo, could be further developed and explored, as it feels a bit rushed and underdeveloped at times. Providing more depth and nuance to this relationship could strengthen the overall character arcs. medium ( Scene 36 (37) )
- While the quarry sequences are visually striking, the screenplay could benefit from more exploration of the emotional and thematic significance of these moments, particularly in how they relate to Ruby's personal growth and her connection to her family. medium ( Scene 29 (40) )
- The scenes depicting the fallout from the embarrassing incident with Ruby's parents could be further developed, providing more insight into the emotional impact on Ruby and how she navigates this challenge. medium ( Scene 26 (27) )
MissingElements
- The screenplay could benefit from a more detailed exploration of the consequences and emotional impact on the Rossi family when Frank and Leo's fishing license is suspended. This could provide additional depth to the family's struggles and the stakes they face. medium ( Scene 44 (45) )
- The screenplay could delve deeper into Leo's perspective and his own aspirations, as his storyline feels a bit underdeveloped compared to Ruby's. Providing more insight into Leo's emotional journey and conflicts could strengthen the overall family dynamics. medium ( Scene 49 )
NotablePoints
- The scenes exploring the relationship between Ruby and her mother, Jackie, provide a nuanced and emotionally resonant portrayal of their complex dynamic, which is an important and refreshing aspect of the screenplay. high ( Scene 10 (20) )
- The opening sequences that establish the Rossi family's fishing business and their unique communication style through American Sign Language (ASL) are effectively executed and set the stage for the screenplay's exploration of their world. high ( Scene 1 (11) )
- The closing scene, where Ruby's family supports her at the Berklee audition, is a heartwarming and satisfying conclusion that reinforces the screenplay's themes of family, dreams, and personal growth. high ( Scene 52 )
Blind Spots
- Lack of Diverse Perspectives While the screenplay does an excellent job of depicting the deaf experience and the challenges faced by the Rossi family, it could potentially benefit from incorporating more diverse perspectives, such as those of the hearing community or the larger fishing community. Exploring these additional viewpoints could further enrich the storytelling and provide a more well-rounded understanding of the challenges and complexities faced by the characters. medium
Amateur Giveaways
- Pacing Issues In a few instances, the pacing of the screenplay feels a bit uneven, with some scenes feeling either rushed or dragging. For example, the conflict between Ruby and Bernardo could be further developed, and the fallout from the embarrassing incident with Ruby's parents could be explored in more depth. Refining the pacing and ensuring a more consistent rhythm throughout the screenplay could help to elevate the overall storytelling. medium
Engine: Gemini
Screenplay Rating:
Highly Recommend
Executive Summary
Coda is a beautifully written and emotionally resonant coming-of-age story with a unique premise. The screenplay excels in character development, particularly Ruby's journey of self-discovery and breaking free from familial expectations. While some minor pacing issues and a few plot points could benefit from refinement, the overall narrative strength and compelling characters make it a highly marketable and potentially award-winning film.
Strengths
- The screenplay masterfully portrays Ruby's journey of self-discovery through her relationship with her choir teacher, Bernardo. Bernardo’s unconventional teaching methods, specifically pushing Ruby beyond her comfort zone to embrace her “ugly” voice, are a key driver of her character arc, transforming her from a shy, insecure girl to a confident performer. This arc is consistently portrayed throughout, culminating in a powerful and satisfying climax during her Berklee audition. high ( Scene 12 Scene 15 Scene 28 Scene 37 Scene 57 )
- The portrayal of the Rossi family is both comedic and deeply moving. The screenplay effectively balances the family's humorous dynamics with the underlying emotional complexities of their relationships, showcasing the love, frustration, and unspoken communication between family members. The scenes depicting their daily life are genuine and relatable, adding significant depth and emotional weight to the narrative. high ( Scene 8 Scene 13 Scene 25 Scene 45 Scene 48 )
- The screenplay effectively depicts the challenges faced by the Rossi family as a deaf-owned fishing business. The conflict with Salgado and the subsequent decision to establish 'Fresh Catch' showcases the family's resilience, resourcefulness, and determination to overcome adversity. The climax at the City Hall meeting, with Frank's bold confrontation, is particularly powerful. high ( Scene 29 Scene 30 Scene 46 Scene 47 )
- The Berklee audition scene is a powerful and emotionally charged climax. Ruby's decision to incorporate sign language into her performance, seamlessly blending her vocal and physical expressions, is a brilliant moment of both artistic expression and emotional catharsis. The scene effectively showcases Ruby's growth as an artist and individual. high ( Scene 57 )
- The use of music and sound design throughout the screenplay is masterful. The soundtrack effectively complements the scenes, enhancing the emotional impact and creating a cohesive overall experience. The contrast between the soundscape of the Rossi family's world and the outside world enhances the narrative's impact. medium ( Scene 1 Scene 2 Scene 3 Scene 4 Scene 5 Scene 6 Scene 7 )
Areas of Improvement
- While the overall pacing is good, certain sequences, particularly the montage sequences (e.g., Ruby's bike ride to school), could benefit from more focused narrative drive. Some montages feel somewhat rushed or lack sufficient visual interest to fully engage the viewer. Some scenes could benefit from more concise editing to enhance their emotional impact. medium ( Scene 4 Scene 21 Scene 31 )
- The subplot concerning Leo's bar fight and subsequent relationship with Gertie feels somewhat underdeveloped. While it serves to highlight Leo's character development, its sudden resolution feels somewhat abrupt and unearned. More nuanced emotional development in these scenes would increase their impact. medium ( Scene 22 Scene 23 )
- The conflict with the Coast Guard and the observer feels somewhat simplistic. The motivations of the observer, Joanne, could be explored further. While her actions drive the plot forward, her character lacks sufficient depth. More motivation behind her actions would make the conflict more compelling. medium ( Scene 42 Scene 44 Scene 46 )
MissingElements
- The screenplay could benefit from a more developed subplot exploring the complex relationship between Ruby and her mother. While their relationship is touched upon, a deeper exploration of their individual struggles and emotional connection would add another layer to the narrative. medium
NotablePoints
- The screenplay's effective use of ASL and the depiction of the Rossi family's deaf culture is a notable strength. The integration of ASL into the dialogue and narrative adds depth and authenticity, showcasing the beauty and richness of the deaf community. high ( Scene 3 Scene 13 Scene 18 Scene 20 Scene 38 Scene 45 Scene 47 Scene 48 Scene 50 Scene 52 Scene 53 )
- The screenplay successfully balances comedic and dramatic elements, creating a nuanced and emotionally engaging story that avoids sentimentality while capturing the complexities of family relationships and individual struggles. high
Blind Spots
- Underdeveloped Supporting Characters While the main characters (Ruby, Frank, Jackie, Leo) are well-developed, some supporting characters, like Gertie and even Miles, feel somewhat underdeveloped. Their motivations and arcs could use more depth and exploration, especially in relation to their impact on Ruby's journey. medium
Engine: GPT4
Screenplay Rating:
Highly Recommend
Executive Summary
The screenplay for 'Coda' presents a compelling narrative that intricately weaves the themes of family, identity, and the struggle for independence. The character arcs are well-developed, particularly Ruby's journey as she navigates her responsibilities to her deaf family while pursuing her passion for music. The dialogue is authentic and engaging, and the use of American Sign Language adds a unique layer to the storytelling. Overall, the screenplay is a heartfelt exploration of the complexities of familial love and personal ambition.
Strengths
- The screenplay effectively establishes a strong sense of place and character from the very beginning, immersing the audience in Ruby's world and her family's dynamics. high ( Scene Sequence number 1 (EXT. ANGELA ROSE DECK - FISHING WATERS - DAWN) Scene Sequence number 50 (INT. HIGH SCHOOL - AUDITORIUM - LATER) )
- Ruby's character development is compelling, showcasing her growth from a hesitant singer to a confident performer, which resonates with the audience's emotional journey. high ( Scene Sequence number 9 (INT. HIGH SCHOOL - CHOIR ROOM - DAY) Scene Sequence number 57 (INT. BERKLEE MUSIC HALL - AUDITORIUM - DAY) )
- The use of humor throughout the screenplay, particularly in family interactions, provides levity and relatability, balancing the more serious themes. medium ( Scene Sequence number 12 (INT. HIGH SCHOOL - CHOIR ROOM - DAY) Scene Sequence number 28 (INT. BERNARDO’S HOUSE - LIVING ROOM - LATER) )
- The emotional stakes are consistently high, particularly in scenes where Ruby confronts her family about her aspirations, creating tension that drives the narrative forward. high ( Scene Sequence number 38 (INT. ROSSI HOME - LIVING ROOM - NIGHT) )
- The resolution is satisfying and ties together the various character arcs, particularly Ruby's journey towards independence and her family's acceptance of her dreams. high ( Scene Sequence number 60 (EXT. ROSSI HOME - DRIVEWAY - DAY) )
Areas of Improvement
- Some supporting characters, such as Leo and Jackie, could benefit from deeper development to enhance their individual arcs and motivations. medium ( Scene Sequence number 21 (EXT. ANGELA ROSE - SALGADO FISH WHARF - DAY) )
- The conflict with the Coast Guard feels somewhat rushed and could use more buildup to enhance the stakes for the family. medium ( Scene Sequence number 46 (INT. COAST GUARD OFFICE - DAY) )
- While humor is a strength, some scenes could benefit from a more serious tone to balance the comedic elements, particularly in moments of conflict. low ( Scene Sequence number 7 (INT. DOCTOR’S OFFICE - EXAM ROOM - DAY) )
- The motivations behind the fishermen's actions could be more clearly articulated to enhance the audience's understanding of their plight. medium ( Scene Sequence number 29 (INT. CITY HALL - DAY) )
- The pacing in some sections, particularly during the family business setup, feels uneven and could be streamlined for better flow. medium ( Scene Sequence number 36 (INT. WAREHOUSE - DAY) )
MissingElements
- There is a lack of exploration into Ruby's friendships outside of her family, which could provide additional depth to her character. medium ( Scene Sequence number 4 (EXT. GLOUCESTER STREETS - MONTAGE - DAY) )
- The screenplay could benefit from more scenes that showcase the community's response to the Rossi family's struggles, enhancing the sense of stakes. medium ( Scene Sequence number 22 (INT. PRATTY’S BAR - AFTERNOON) )
- More insight into Ruby's internal conflicts regarding her identity as a hearing person in a deaf family could deepen the narrative. high ( Scene Sequence number 10 (EXT. MANSHIP QUARRY - WOODS - DAY) )
- The dynamics between Ruby and her peers could be further developed to highlight her isolation and growth more effectively. medium ( Scene Sequence number 19 (INT. HIGH SCHOOL - CHOIR ROOM - DAY) )
- The resolution of the family's business struggles could be more fleshed out to provide a clearer picture of their future. medium ( Scene Sequence number 58 (EXT. ANGELA ROSE DECK - OPEN OCEAN - DAY) )
NotablePoints
- The climactic audition scene is particularly powerful, showcasing Ruby's transformation and the emotional connection with her family. high ( Scene Sequence number 57 (INT. BERKLEE MUSIC HALL - AUDITORIUM - DAY) )
- The use of music throughout the screenplay serves as a strong thematic element, tying together Ruby's journey and her family's dynamics. high ( Scene Sequence number 50 (INT. HIGH SCHOOL - AUDITORIUM - LATER) )
- The interactions between Ruby and her choir teacher highlight the importance of mentorship and support in pursuing one's dreams. medium ( Scene Sequence number 12 (INT. HIGH SCHOOL - CHOIR ROOM - DAY) )
- The family dynamics are portrayed with authenticity, showcasing the love and tension that exists within the Rossi household. high ( Scene Sequence number 38 (INT. ROSSI HOME - LIVING ROOM - NIGHT) )
- The final scene encapsulates the emotional journey of the characters, leaving the audience with a sense of hope and fulfillment. high ( Scene Sequence number 60 (EXT. ROSSI HOME - DRIVEWAY - DAY) )
Blind Spots
- Cultural Representation While the screenplay does a commendable job of representing a deaf family, there are moments where the nuances of deaf culture could be explored more deeply, particularly in terms of community interactions and the experiences of deaf individuals in a hearing world. medium
Amateur Giveaways
- Pacing Issues Certain scenes, particularly those involving family business discussions, feel drawn out and could benefit from tighter editing to maintain momentum throughout the screenplay. medium
Screenplay Insights:
Characters: 8.25, The screenplay 'Coda' effectively develops its characters, showcasing their depth and complexity through relatable arcs and emotional transformations. Key strengths include Ruby's journey of self-discovery and the nuanced dynamics within her family. However, some characters, particularly secondary ones, could benefit from more depth to enhance overall engagement. See More
Premise: 8.25, The screenplay 'Coda' effectively establishes a compelling premise centered around a young woman's struggle to balance her family's fishing business with her passion for music. The characters are well-defined, and their arcs are engaging. However, enhancing the clarity of certain conflicts and refining the emotional stakes could further elevate audience engagement. See More
Structure: 7.75, The screenplay 'Coda' effectively captures the struggles of a young woman balancing familial obligations with personal aspirations, showcasing strong character arcs and emotional depth. However, it could benefit from refining pacing and enhancing conflict resolution to maintain engagement and clarity throughout the narrative. See More
Theme: 8.25, The screenplay 'Coda' effectively conveys its themes of family, identity, and the struggle for independence through well-developed characters and relatable conflicts. The emotional depth is enhanced by the characters' arcs, particularly Ruby's journey towards self-acceptance and her passion for music. However, there are areas where the integration of themes could be refined to enhance clarity and resonance, particularly in balancing the familial obligations with personal aspirations. See More
Visual Impact: 8.25, The screenplay 'Coda' effectively captures the vibrant life of a fishing family through its visual imagery, blending humor and emotional depth. The scenes are rich in detail, showcasing the characters' dynamics and the setting's significance. However, there are opportunities to enhance the visual storytelling by incorporating more unique and symbolic imagery that aligns with the characters' emotional journeys. See More
Emotional Impact: 8.25, The screenplay effectively elicits emotional responses through its relatable characters and their struggles, particularly Ruby's journey of self-discovery and familial conflict. However, there are opportunities to enhance emotional depth by exploring the characters' vulnerabilities more deeply and refining the pacing of emotional arcs. See More
Conflict: 7.75, The screenplay effectively presents conflict and stakes through the lens of family dynamics and economic hardship, creating a relatable and engaging narrative. However, there are opportunities to deepen the emotional stakes and enhance the clarity of conflicts, particularly in Ruby's journey towards self-acceptance and independence. See More
Originality: 8.25, The screenplay 'Coda' showcases a refreshing blend of familial dynamics, personal aspirations, and the struggles of a young woman navigating her identity amidst the backdrop of a fishing community. Its originality lies in the authentic portrayal of deaf culture and the unique intersection of music and fishing, while the character arcs are compelling and relatable, particularly Ruby's journey of self-discovery. See More
Premise: 8.25, The screenplay 'Coda' effectively establishes a compelling premise centered around a young woman's struggle to balance her family's fishing business with her passion for music. The characters are well-defined, and their arcs are engaging. However, enhancing the clarity of certain conflicts and refining the emotional stakes could further elevate audience engagement. See More
Structure: 7.75, The screenplay 'Coda' effectively captures the struggles of a young woman balancing familial obligations with personal aspirations, showcasing strong character arcs and emotional depth. However, it could benefit from refining pacing and enhancing conflict resolution to maintain engagement and clarity throughout the narrative. See More
Theme: 8.25, The screenplay 'Coda' effectively conveys its themes of family, identity, and the struggle for independence through well-developed characters and relatable conflicts. The emotional depth is enhanced by the characters' arcs, particularly Ruby's journey towards self-acceptance and her passion for music. However, there are areas where the integration of themes could be refined to enhance clarity and resonance, particularly in balancing the familial obligations with personal aspirations. See More
Visual Impact: 8.25, The screenplay 'Coda' effectively captures the vibrant life of a fishing family through its visual imagery, blending humor and emotional depth. The scenes are rich in detail, showcasing the characters' dynamics and the setting's significance. However, there are opportunities to enhance the visual storytelling by incorporating more unique and symbolic imagery that aligns with the characters' emotional journeys. See More
Emotional Impact: 8.25, The screenplay effectively elicits emotional responses through its relatable characters and their struggles, particularly Ruby's journey of self-discovery and familial conflict. However, there are opportunities to enhance emotional depth by exploring the characters' vulnerabilities more deeply and refining the pacing of emotional arcs. See More
Conflict: 7.75, The screenplay effectively presents conflict and stakes through the lens of family dynamics and economic hardship, creating a relatable and engaging narrative. However, there are opportunities to deepen the emotional stakes and enhance the clarity of conflicts, particularly in Ruby's journey towards self-acceptance and independence. See More
Originality: 8.25, The screenplay 'Coda' showcases a refreshing blend of familial dynamics, personal aspirations, and the struggles of a young woman navigating her identity amidst the backdrop of a fishing community. Its originality lies in the authentic portrayal of deaf culture and the unique intersection of music and fishing, while the character arcs are compelling and relatable, particularly Ruby's journey of self-discovery. See More
Screenplay Story Analysis
Note: This is the overall critique. For scene by scene critique click here
Summaries
- At dawn on the Angela Rose fishing trawler off Cape Ann, Massachusetts, 17-year-old Ruby joyfully sings along to Etta James while helping her father Frank and brother Leo sort their catch. The family shares light-hearted moments, including Ruby tossing an old shoe to Leo, as they work efficiently together. The scene captures their camaraderie and the beauty of the ocean, ending with the boat sailing into the harbor as Ruby admires the shoreline.
- At Salgado Fish Wharf, Ruby, Frank, and Leo offload their catch, facing frustration over low fish quotas and the low price offered by processor Tony Salgado. Ruby's tense interaction with ice distributor Arthur, who threatens to cut off her ice supply, adds to her stress. Despite her complaints and the support of fellow fisherman Brady, Ruby reluctantly signs the paperwork for the low price of two-fifty per pound for their haddock, leaving her visibly frustrated as she returns to the boat.
- Ruby visits the Salgado Fish Wharf, where her father Frank and brother Leo are busy unloading fish. Amidst their familiar argument about the feasibility of selling their own catch, Ruby engages in playful banter with Leo, showcasing their close sibling relationship. She affectionately reminds Frank about a doctor's appointment before leaving, highlighting the light-hearted yet tense dynamics of their family business.
- Ruby bikes through Gloucester, listening to Etta James, before arriving at school. In history class, she struggles to stay awake and falls asleep at her desk, only to be called out by Ms. Simon when she wakes up disoriented. Embarrassed by her classmates' looks, Ruby's moment of humiliation is cut short by the ringing bell, signaling the end of class.
- In a high school hallway, Ruby opens her locker as her friend Gertie excitedly shares her recent hookup with a boy nicknamed Tiny Fingers, while expressing disdain for the popular girl Audra, who mocks Ruby as she passes by. Ruby feels overlooked and invisible, especially as she watches Audra interact with Miles, the boy she admires. The scene highlights the social dynamics and bullying that leave Ruby feeling marginalized and isolated.
- In the high school cafeteria, Ruby and her friend Gertie discuss elective classes, with Gertie suggesting an easy option like film club. However, Ruby, distracted by her crush Miles, unexpectedly decides to join choir, surprising Gertie. Later, Ruby's parents arrive to pick her up, blasting loud gangsta rap, which embarrasses her as she watches her peers socialize outside, highlighting her struggle for acceptance.
- In a cramped doctor's exam room, Ruby translates for her parents, Frank and Jackie, as they discuss their embarrassing jock itch condition. Frank humorously exaggerates his symptoms, causing Ruby to feel mortified. The doctor prescribes antifungal cream and advises abstaining from sexual activity for two weeks, leading to disbelief and humor from Frank and Jackie. The scene captures the comedic tension of Ruby's embarrassment and her parents' humorous banter, culminating in their incredulous reaction to the doctor's advice.
- In a lively scene on the Rossi home deck, Ruby struggles to focus on her homework amidst the noisy cooking and playful banter from her family. Jackie juggles managing the chaos while reminiscing about her modeling days and critiquing Leo's Tinder choices, leading to humorous exchanges. Frank lightens the mood with a fart joke, much to Ruby's annoyance. The scene captures the family's dynamic filled with playful teasing and warmth, highlighting Ruby's frustration against the backdrop of their chaotic yet loving environment.
- On the first day of choir class, energetic teacher Bernardo Villalobos humorously assesses students' vocal ranges by having them sing 'Happy Birthday.' As confident classmates take their turns, Ruby, overwhelmed by anxiety, freezes when called to sing and ultimately flees the room in panic, leaving Bernardo to comment on her abrupt exit.
- In a serene granite quarry, Ruby finds solace in nature, singing 'HAPPY BIRTHDAY' as her voice harmonizes with the beauty around her. However, the tranquility is shattered when she returns home to witness her parents, Jackie and Frank, embroiled in a heated argument over their financial struggles. Jackie suggests selling their boat, while Frank vehemently defends its importance to their identity. The scene shifts from Ruby's peaceful escape to the tense reality of her family's discord, leaving her emotionally affected as she tries to block out the conflict.
- On the deck of the Angela Rose, Ruby cleans fish while observing a contemplative Frank. They later join fishermen at the Salgado Fish Wharf, where Tony Salgado reveals new federal regulations mandating costly 'at sea monitors.' The fishermen express their frustration over the financial burden, and Ruby urges Frank to voice their concerns, but he hesitates, leaving the group's anxiety unresolved.
- In the high school choir room, Ruby hesitantly approaches her teacher, Bernardo, who is meditating at the piano. She opens up about her fear of singing and her experiences with bullying, revealing her insecurities stemming from coming from a deaf family. Bernardo encourages her to express herself and question whether she has something meaningful to say. Despite her nervousness, Ruby believes she does. The scene captures a mix of vulnerability and encouragement, ending with Bernardo returning to his meditation as the timer goes off, signaling a moment of normalcy.
- In this light and humorous scene, Leo relaxes on the deck swiping through Tinder while Jackie attempts to persuade Ruby to call her grandmother from the kitchen. Ruby resists, suggesting a video relay instead, which Jackie finds awkward. Leo, annoyed by his mother's insistence, defends Ruby's desire to hang out with her friend Gertie. Gertie comments on Leo's attractiveness, prompting Ruby to express her disgust, highlighting the generational gap and Ruby's quest for independence.
- In Ruby's room, Gertie lounges on the bed while Ruby plays a record by The Shaggs. They discuss Ruby's disapproval of Gertie dating her brother, leading to playful banter about flirting. The scene shifts to the living room where Gertie humorously confuses Leo with a comment about herpes, highlighting the light-hearted and comedic tone of their interactions.
- In a high school choir room, instructor Bernardo confronts his students' lackluster energy during rehearsal. He calls on Ruby, who struggles with confidence, to sing. Through encouragement and playful exercises, including a 'little dog, big dog' breathing technique, Ruby gradually gains confidence and improves her singing. The scene concludes with Bernardo praising her progress and light-heartedly commenting on the performance, creating a positive atmosphere.
- In the choir room, Bernardo assigns Ruby and Miles a duet for the Fall Concert, expressing disappointment when Ruby admits she doesn't know the song 'You’re All I Need to Get By.' While Miles shows confidence in knowing the song, Ruby feels embarrassed and hesitant. The scene shifts to Ruby biking through the scenic yet economically struggling streets of Gloucester, highlighting her internal conflict as she arrives at Salgado’s Seafood Company, ending with her taking out her earbuds.
- In a bustling auction at Salgado's Processing, Ruby confronts Gio Salgado over the low price he offers Leo for their fish, insisting it should be higher based on market knowledge she gained from overhearing Tony negotiate with another fisherman. Despite Leo's frustration and attempts to dismiss her, Ruby stands her ground, leading to a tense standoff. The scene concludes with Ruby leaving the auction, leaving Leo angry and exasperated.
- In a tense confrontation outside Salgado's Processing, Ruby challenges Frank about his public smoking and argues with Leo over her interference in an auction negotiation. Leo feels undermined by Ruby's actions, while Ruby defends her decision to raise the price. Frank attempts to mediate, urging them to focus on their family business, but the conflict escalates, leaving him frustrated as he walks away, highlighting the rift in their teamwork.
- In a vibrant high school choir room, conductor Bernardo leads the choir in an energetic rendition of 'It’s Your Thing.' After the session, he encourages students Ruby and Miles to connect emotionally while practicing their duet. Bernardo emphasizes the importance of collaboration and challenges Ruby to consider her future in music, suggesting she apply to Berklee College of Music despite her financial concerns. His belief in her talent inspires Ruby, leaving her feeling seen and motivated to pursue her dreams.
- During breakfast on the deck, Ruby excitedly shares her decision to join the choir, but her mother Jackie responds with skepticism, comparing it to painting while blind. This dismissive attitude frustrates Ruby, leading her to confront Jackie about her self-centeredness and desire for independence. As Ruby prepares to leave for school, a conflict arises over her unfinished plate, culminating in Ruby angrily leaving the table, leaving the tension between them unresolved.
- At Salgado Fish Wharf, Frank and Leo dock their boat, where Leo proposes starting a Co-Op to support local fishermen. Frank reacts negatively, frustrated by their social standing and feeling like a joke. Despite Frank's reluctance, Leo asserts his independence by choosing to join other fishermen heading to a bar, leaving Frank feeling isolated and conflicted.
- In the lively atmosphere of Pratty's Bar, Leo struggles to engage with his friends as Brady shares a humorous fishing story. The mood shifts when Mike, a meathead, spills beer on Leo and mocks him, igniting a violent confrontation. A chaotic brawl ensues, with patrons attempting to intervene. Despite his friends' efforts to calm him, Leo storms off to the bar, still seething with anger.
- At Pratty's Bar, Leo, nursing a black eye, engages in a flirtatious exchange with Gertie, a bartender. Despite his emotional turmoil, their playful texting leads to a romantic moment as they sneak into a storage closet, where they share a passionate kiss, deepening their connection.
- Miles and Ruby arrive at Ruby's cluttered home, reminiscing about their childhood and discussing their families' views on music. They share a nostalgic moment singing together, which turns romantic until they are interrupted by loud sexual noises from Ruby's mother, causing Ruby to flee the room in embarrassment.
- Ruby accidentally discovers her parents, Frank and Jackie, in a compromising situation, leading to an uncomfortable confrontation about her relationship with Miles. As Frank bluntly questions Miles about their sexual activity and Jackie awkwardly advises on safe sex, Ruby's embarrassment and anger escalate. The scene culminates in Miles leaving awkwardly and Ruby expressing her frustration towards her parents, leaving the conflict unresolved.
- In the high school cafeteria, Ruby and Gertie discuss their personal lives when Ruby becomes horrified to see Audra and her friends mocking her embarrassing moment, which has spread throughout the school. As the laughter and sexual mimicking escalate, Ruby, overwhelmed by humiliation, flees the cafeteria, with Miles feeling guilty and deciding to follow her.
- In a tense high school hallway, Ruby confronts Miles, believing he is the source of a hurtful rumor about her. Despite Miles's attempts to clarify that he only shared the information jokingly with one person, Ruby dismisses him and runs away, overwhelmed with emotion. The scene culminates with Ruby alone in the stairwell, crying quietly, highlighting her distress and the unresolved conflict between them.
- In Bernardo's living room, he mentors Ruby in singing 'Both Sides Now' by Joni Mitchell. Ruby struggles to connect emotionally with the song, leading to frustration. Bernardo encourages her to break free from her inhibitions, pushing her to make unconventional sounds. After initial resistance, Ruby finally unleashes her voice, singing loudly and clearly, which delights Bernardo. The scene transitions from tension to triumph as Ruby discovers her true voice, culminating in a celebratory high five from Bernardo.
- During a heated Fisheries Council meeting at City Hall, fishermen, led by Frank and Leo, confront council members Gio Salgado and John Kaufman over declining fishing quotas and financial burdens. Frank passionately accuses the council of prioritizing profit over their livelihoods, using Ruby to translate his remarks. He proposes that fishermen sell their own catch to bypass council fees, igniting interest among the crowd. The scene is filled with tension as other fishermen express their frustrations, leading to a mix of surprise and intrigue regarding Frank and Leo's radical suggestion.
- In the Rossi family's living room at night, Jackie confronts her family about a spontaneous business idea of selling fish directly from the boat. While Frank admits it was an impulsive thought, Leo passionately advocates for the idea as a way to connect with the community. Jackie expresses skepticism about its feasibility and her struggles with the local hearing community, leading to a heated exchange. Ruby attempts to mediate but ends up feeling anxious as Leo storms out in frustration, leaving Jackie and Ruby to deal with the aftermath of the confrontation.
- Ruby wakes up early, energized by music, and prepares for a day of promoting the Fresh Catch program. After waking her heavy-sleeping father, she and Leo work on the Angela Rose deck, showcasing their playful dynamic. At Salgado Fish Wharf, Ruby passionately engages with fishermen, facing mixed reactions as she encourages them to join the program. The scene captures her determination amidst the challenges of convincing reluctant fishermen, setting the stage for her ongoing efforts.
- In this scene, Ruby learns music notation from Bernardo in his kitchen before transitioning to a warehouse where she and Jackie work hard alongside the fishermen's wives. While Ruby practices singing and receives guidance from Bernardo, she grapples with feelings of isolation from Jackie and tension with Miles, who attempts to apologize but is ignored. The day unfolds with contrasting moments of camaraderie among the fishermen's wives and Ruby's overwhelming responsibilities, culminating in her sense of being an outsider as she strives to balance her music aspirations with the demands of the warehouse.
- In Bernardo's living room, Ruby is found resting before being confronted by Bernardo about her repeated tardiness. Their conversation escalates into a heated argument, with Bernardo expressing frustration over Ruby's lack of respect for his time. Ruby defends her busy schedule, but ultimately apologizes and promises to improve. The scene ends with Bernardo issuing a stern warning, leaving the tension between them unresolved.
- In a tense high school hallway, Ruby confronts Miles after he attempts to apologize for laughing at a situation involving deaf individuals. Initially dismissive, Ruby reveals her family's challenges, highlighting the burden of protecting them from ridicule. Miles shares his own struggles at home, seeking forgiveness, but Ruby remains distant and walks away. As she leaves, Miles insists he will keep texting her until she agrees to hang out, while Ruby dismissively calls his behavior psychotic.
- In a bustling warehouse loading dock, Ruby and a group of fishermen's wives engage in humorous banter while sorting fish orders. Ruby's excitement for music practice is interrupted when Jackie reveals a news crew is covering their family story, leading to tension between mother and daughter. Despite Leo's offer to help Ruby during the interview, Jackie insists on the importance of the coverage, leaving Ruby frustrated as the reporter, Chet Turner, arrives to begin the segment.
- In a warehouse, Ruby struggles to focus during an interview with Frank and Jackie, distracted by tense texts from Bernardo. Leo, part of the film crew, grows frustrated with her lack of attention as Frank discusses the fishermen's challenges. Ruby's distraction culminates in a failure to translate for Frank, leading to a shift in the scene where she finds herself locked out of Bernardo's house at dusk, feeling defeated and frustrated.
- In a tense encounter in the high school choir room, Ruby approaches Bernardo as he plays the piano, expressing her desire to pursue music. However, Bernardo harshly criticizes her lack of discipline and preparedness, insisting she wouldn't succeed at Berklee. Ruby retaliates by questioning his expertise and revealing her struggles with independence, admitting she has never pursued anything without her family. This confrontation leaves both characters reflecting on their positions, with Ruby feeling vulnerable and Bernardo showing a hint of understanding.
- In the Rossi living room at night, Ruby reveals her ambition to attend Berklee College of Music, causing shock and concern among her family. Frank fears losing her support as their interpreter, while Jackie believes it's poor timing. Ruby, feeling exhausted from her responsibilities, argues for her independence and storms upstairs, leaving her family to grapple with her decision.
- In the Rossi home, Jackie and Frank clash over their daughter Ruby's potential acceptance into music school. Jackie is anxious about Ruby's future and fears her failure, while Frank dismisses her concerns, insisting Ruby is capable and not a child anymore. Meanwhile, Ruby, feeling frustrated, screams in her room but is momentarily uplifted by a text from Miles, which brings a smile to her face. The scene captures the unresolved conflict between the parents and Ruby's emotional turmoil.
- As Frank and Leo prepare their boat, the Angela Rose, for departure, they encounter Joanne Biles, their 'At Sea Monitor.' Leo's dismissive attitude towards Joanne creates tension, as he jokingly suggests throwing her overboard. While Frank drives the boat and eats peanut butter, he ignores Joanne's attempts at conversation, highlighting the discomfort surrounding her presence. The scene captures the unresolved conflict and humor in their interactions as they head out to sea.
- In the early morning at Manship Quarry, Ruby's adventurous spirit leads her to impulsively jump into the water despite a 'NO SWIMMING' sign. Miles, initially hesitant and concerned about the cold, eventually follows her into the water. They share playful banter about the experience, with Ruby teasingly mentioning their next challenge: jumping from a higher cliff known as 'The Barge.' The scene captures the tension between Miles' fears and Ruby's carefree attitude, setting the stage for their upcoming adventure.
- On the deck of the Angela Rose, Frank and Leo, both deaf, are setting fishing nets when Joanne approaches Frank to ask about the engine maintenance. Unable to hear her, Frank reveals his deafness by writing 'Deaf' in her notebook. Surprised and concerned, Joanne steps away to make a phone call, leaving the communication barrier unresolved.
- At Manship Quarry, Ruby playfully encourages a hesitant Miles to jump off a cliff into the water below, warning him of the dangers. After a countdown, they both leap, screaming in a mix of terror and joy, hitting the water with a loud smack. They resurface, laughing and gasping, embracing the thrill of their adventurous jump.
- On the fishing vessel Angela Rose, Frank and Leo are sorting fish when the Coast Guard arrives, demanding answers about a radio warning they didn't hear. Confused and terrified, they learn from Joanne that they are deaf, leading to a tense realization for Frank about the implications of their silence as the officers express frustration over the lack of communication.
- Ruby enters the kitchen feeling positive but is quickly drawn into a heated argument between her parents, Frank and Jackie, and Leo. Frank reveals his fishing suspension due to Ruby's absence at work, leading to accusations and frustration directed at Ruby. Despite her attempts to defend herself, asserting that she cannot always be the hearing deckhand, the argument escalates, highlighting family expectations and disappointment. The scene ends with Ruby standing her ground, leaving the conflict unresolved.
- In a tense Coast Guard office hearing, Frank, Jackie, and Leo face fines for operating their vessel unsafely due to Frank's disability. With a total fine of $2,500, Frank expresses concern about their financial struggles and the need to resume fishing. Ruby, acting as their interpreter, inquires about the requirements to fish again, learning that they must have a hearing individual on board at all times for safety compliance. The scene ends with Ruby contemplating the implications of this requirement.
- During a somber dinner on the Rossi family's deck, Frank suggests selling their boat to ease financial burdens. Ruby, determined to help, offers to stay and work on the boat, which her parents support. However, Leo reacts with sarcasm and frustration, criticizing Ruby's selflessness before storming out, leaving the family in a state of unresolved tension.
- In Ruby's bedroom, Jackie surprises Ruby with a red dress for her concert, but Ruby feels disconnected and expresses her feelings of being an outsider. They discuss Leo's jealousy and Jackie shares her fears about not connecting with Ruby due to her hearing. This leads to a heartfelt exchange where Ruby reassures Jackie, culminating in a rare hug that symbolizes their emotional bond and understanding.
- On a serene beach at dusk, Leo sits on a rock, grappling with his feelings of frustration towards his sister Ruby, who approaches him to discuss her desire to fish full-time. Their conversation escalates into a heated argument, revealing Leo's wish for independence and Ruby's struggle to balance her aspirations with family expectations. As tensions rise, both characters leave feeling misunderstood, with Ruby feeling lost and unsure of how to respond to Leo's outburst.
- Ruby anxiously observes her parents from backstage as the choir prepares to perform. Despite the energetic introduction by Bernardo and the initial pride expressed by Frank and Jackie, their attention quickly shifts to mundane conversations about dinner, leaving Ruby feeling disappointed and disheartened as she realizes they are disengaged during her performance.
- In a high school auditorium, Bernardo introduces a special performance by Ruby Rossi and Miles Patterson. As Ruby sings silently, her parents, Frank and Jackie, watch with a mix of pride and confusion. The audience, moved by the emotional depth of the performance, responds with a standing ovation, validating Ruby's artistry despite her parents' inability to hear her. The scene captures a bittersweet moment of connection through art, culminating in applause as Ruby and Miles take their bow.
- After a concert performance, Ruby introduces her family to her teacher, Bernardo, in the lobby of a high school auditorium. A humorous misunderstanding occurs when Bernardo mistakenly signs 'nice to fuck you' instead of 'nice to meet you,' leading to laughter and embarrassment. Ruby corrects him, and Bernardo praises her talent, encouraging her to audition with Miles. Ruby politely declines the offer, maintaining a warm and respectful atmosphere among the families.
- In the Rossi home driveway at night, Frank and Ruby share a tender moment after returning from an outing. Frank, captivated by the stars, asks Ruby to sing a song she performed earlier. Initially hesitant, Ruby eventually sings, creating a deep emotional connection between them as Frank physically engages with her voice. The scene concludes with a kiss on Ruby's forehead, transitioning to the next morning where the family prepares for another outing together.
- As the Rossi family arrives at Berklee Music Hall for Ruby's audition, excitement fills the air, but Ruby feels insecure about her appearance compared to the other auditioning kids. After checking in, she learns she is late and that her family cannot accompany her inside, leading to a moment of anxiety as she signals to them to stay outside. The scene captures the tension between Ruby's eagerness and her feelings of inadequacy, highlighting the family's supportive yet strained dynamic.
- In the tense waiting area of Berklee Music Hall, Ruby paces anxiously before her audition, listening to an impressive opera performance. She seeks reassurance from Miles, who reveals he choked during his own audition, heightening her anxiety. Their conversation is interrupted when the monitor calls Ruby's name, prompting Miles to squeeze her hand in a gesture of support as she prepares to face the stage.
- In this tense scene at Berklee Music Hall, Ruby Rossi faces a faculty jury that questions her limited musical experience, leaving her confused and anxious. As she struggles to articulate her background, her friends Frank, Jackie, and Leo plot to sneak into the auditorium to support her from the balcony. The contrasting actions highlight Ruby's vulnerability and the supportive camaraderie of her friends.
- In a tense audition at Berklee Music Hall, Ruby nervously prepares to sing 'Both Sides Now' but realizes she has forgotten her sheet music. The jury instructs her to perform a cappella, and Bernardo, a former student, offers to accompany her on piano, easing her anxiety. As she begins to sing, Ruby's timid voice transforms into a powerful performance as she connects emotionally with her family in the audience. The scene culminates in a heartfelt display of her talent, surprising the jury and showcasing her emotional depth.
- In this scene, Ruby joyfully observes the ocean while laughing at Frank's struggles to teach a new deckhand. She shares a tender moment with Miles at sunset, teaching him to sign his name. The action shifts to Frank and Leo loading fish at a warehouse, and Jackie engaging with fishermen's wives at a farmers' market. Later, Frank and Leo enjoy camaraderie at a bar. Meanwhile, the Rossi family anxiously awaits Ruby's Berklee acceptance status. The tension peaks when Ruby discovers she has been accepted, leading to a heartfelt celebration with her family, marking a bittersweet farewell to her current life and excitement for the future.
- Miles and Ruby sit atop The Barge, discussing their future as Ruby invites him to visit her in Boston. Miles playfully expresses his insecurities about their relationship, fearing she might forget him. They share a tender kiss, reinforcing their bond, and then, hand in hand, they leap into the water below, emerging with joyful howls, symbolizing their commitment despite uncertainty.
- In the driveway of the Rossi home, Ruby prepares to leave for college, attempting to keep her goodbye light-hearted. However, as the car drives away, she panics and jumps out to embrace her family one last time. After a heartfelt hug, Frank encourages her to go, and Ruby returns to the car, waving goodbye and signing 'I love you forever' as they drive off, capturing the bittersweet emotions of new beginnings and leaving loved ones behind.
CharacterInconsistencies
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Character Jackie Rossi
Description Jackie's character arc is inconsistent. While she initially presents as a stereotypical, self-absorbed mother, she unexpectedly shows vulnerability and growth in later scenes. The shift feels abrupt and not fully earned, potentially stemming from plot needs rather than organic character development.
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Character Frank Rossi
Description Frank's sudden outburst at the City Hall meeting feels somewhat out of character, despite the underlying frustration. While his actions are understandable given the circumstances, the intensity of the outburst could benefit from more gradual build-up throughout the film to make it more believable.
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Character Leo Rossi
Description Leo's aggressive actions in Pratty's bar and his outburst at the end of the film lack the nuance that would make them feel more consistent with his character. While his frustration is evident, the sudden shift to violence and anger requires more careful development throughout the story.
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StoryInconsistencies
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Description The Coast Guard's actions in sequence 44 feel contrived. The observer's deliberate withholding of information about the Rossi family's deafness to trigger a Coast Guard intervention feels like a plot device rather than a realistic consequence of the characters' actions.
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Description The ease with which the Rossi family's fishing license is suspended seems too drastic given the circumstances. The penalties imposed by the Coast Guard might feel disproportionate to the infraction, thus disrupting the narrative flow and making the situation feel less realistic.
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PlotHoles
DialogueAuthenticity
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Description Some dialogue, particularly the graphic descriptions of the Rossi family's ailments and the crude humor at Pratty's, feels more designed for comedic effect than for realistic character interaction. While the intention might be to create humor or highlight family dynamics, the dialogue sometimes veers into caricature.
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Redundancies
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Element The repeated argument about the family's financial struggles and the need for a change.
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Suggestion Streamline the repetitive financial discussions by consolidating them into fewer scenes. Instead of repeating the argument across various sequences, focus on showcasing the impact of their financial problems on the family’s emotional dynamics and Ruby’s choices. -
Element The repeated motif of Ruby feeling invisible or out of place among her hearing peers.
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Suggestion Instead of explicitly showing Ruby's feelings of isolation multiple times, weave these moments into the narrative more subtly. Show, don't tell, her feelings of isolation through her actions and interactions with others.
Ruby - Score: 89/100
Character Analysis Overview
Frank - Score: 78/100
Role
Protagonist
Character Analysis Overview
Leo - Score: 75/100
Role
Supporting Character
Character Analysis Overview
Jackie - Score: 72/100
Character Analysis Overview
Bernardo - Score: 86/100
Character Analysis Overview
Miles - Score: 73/100
Character Analysis Overview
Primary Theme: Finding one's voice and identity amidst familial obligations and societal pressures.
How Multiple Themes Interact: The multiple themes in the screenplay intertwine and support the primary theme. The struggles with family dynamics, economic hardship, and communication barriers all contribute to Ruby's journey of self-discovery and ultimately strengthen her resolve to pursue her passions. While these themes are significant in their own right, they never overshadow the overarching narrative of Ruby's personal growth and the eventual acceptance of her identity and ambitions by her family.
| Theme | Theme Details | Theme Explanation | Primary Theme Support | ||||||||||||
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| Family Dynamics and Communication (35%) | The Rossi family's dynamic is central, showcasing a blend of love, humor, frustration, and miscommunication stemming from cultural differences (deafness) and generational gaps. Their communication styles, arguments, and eventual understanding shape Ruby's character and her journey. | The screenplay explores the complexities of family relationships, highlighting the challenges of intergenerational communication, particularly within a family where deafness is present. The constant need for translation and the resulting friction and humor underscores the importance of understanding and acceptance within familial bonds. | This theme directly supports the primary theme by illustrating the environment in which Ruby must find her voice. Her need to translate for her parents, navigate their arguments, and balance her familial responsibilities with personal ambitions highlights the pressures that shape her pursuit of self-discovery. | ||||||||||||
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| Economic Hardship and Class Struggle (25%) | The Rossi family's struggles within the fishing industry, facing low quotas, unfair pricing, and new regulations, create economic pressure. This contrasts with the wealthier segments of the community, illustrating a class divide. | The screenplay portrays the challenges faced by working-class families in a struggling industry. The constant financial anxieties and the family's determination to maintain their livelihood against seemingly insurmountable odds form a significant backdrop to Ruby's personal growth. | This theme emphasizes the constraints within which Ruby must strive to achieve her goals. The economic pressures create another layer of complexity to her struggle for self-expression and independence. | ||||||||||||
| Self-Discovery and Identity (20%) | Ruby's journey of discovering her voice, both literally (through singing) and figuratively (through asserting her independence), is the core narrative. Her experiences in school, with her family, and with her peers contribute to this journey. | This theme focuses on Ruby's personal growth and her quest for self-acceptance and independence. Her struggles with self-doubt, her efforts to overcome her fears, and her eventual embrace of her talents are pivotal to the narrative. | This is a central element of the primary theme. Ruby's exploration of her identity is the engine that drives the plot forward. | ||||||||||||
| Communication Barriers and Cultural Differences (10%) | The Rossi family's deafness creates communication barriers, adding layers of complexity to their interactions with the hearing world. This impacts their relationships and challenges their economic prospects. | The screenplay highlights the challenges faced by deaf individuals in a hearing-dominant society. The constant need for translation, the misunderstandings, and the social isolation underscore the cultural differences and the importance of empathy and understanding. | This theme contributes to the overall narrative by highlighting the unique pressures Ruby faces, influencing her relationships with her family, peers, and the wider community, and further complicating her journey to self-discovery. | ||||||||||||
| First Love and Relationships (10%) | Ruby's budding relationship with Miles offers a contrasting narrative to her family life, providing a space for vulnerability and emotional growth. It also serves to highlight the contrasts between her inner world and external pressures. | The romance between Ruby and Miles acts as a catalyst for Ruby’s emotional growth. It serves to highlight her vulnerabilities and her capacity for intimacy. | This theme complements the primary theme by providing a counterpoint to Ruby's family life and showing another facet of her developing identity. | ||||||||||||
Screenwriting Resources on Themes
Articles
| Site | Description |
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| Studio Binder | Movie Themes: Examples of Common Themes for Screenwriters |
| Coverfly | Improving your Screenplay's theme |
| John August | Writing from Theme |
YouTube Videos
| Title | Description |
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| Story, Plot, Genre, Theme - Screenwriting Basics | Screenwriting basics - beginner video |
| What is theme | Discussion on ways to layer theme into a screenplay. |
| Thematic Mistakes You're Making in Your Script | Common Theme mistakes and Philosophical Conflicts |
| Goals and Philosophical Conflict | |
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| internal Goals | Ruby's internal goals evolve from seeking acceptance within her family and proving herself as a competent member of the fishing crew, to asserting her independence, pursuing her passion for music, and ultimately finding her identity outside the family's expectations. |
| External Goals | Ruby's external goals shift from supporting her family in the fishing business to pursuing a music career, negotiating fair treatment and prices in the fishing industry, and ultimately gaining acceptance into a prestigious music school. |
| Philosophical Conflict | The overarching philosophical conflict consists of Ruby's desire for personal fulfillment and identity (individualistic aspirations) versus her family's needs and expectations (collectivist obligations), creating tension throughout her journey. |
Character Development Contribution: The evolution of Ruby's goals contributes significantly to her development, showcasing her journey from being defined by her family's needs to finding her voice and asserting her individuality as a musician.
Narrative Structure Contribution: The protagonist's internal and external goals create a dynamic narrative structure that intertwines personal struggles with external familial pressures, leading to compelling conflicts that catalyze character relationships and growth.
Thematic Depth Contribution: The interplay between Ruby's goals and the overarching philosophical conflicts enriches the screenplay's thematic depth, capturing universal themes of identity, family loyalty, and the challenges of balancing personal passion with communal responsibilities.
Screenwriting Resources on Goals and Philosophical Conflict
Articles
| Site | Description |
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| Creative Screenwriting | How Important Is A Character’s Goal? |
| Studio Binder | What is Conflict in a Story? A Quick Reminder of the Purpose of Conflict |
YouTube Videos
| Title | Description |
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| How I Build a Story's Philosophical Conflict | How do you build philosophical conflict into your story? Where do you start? And how do you develop it into your characters and their external actions. Today I’m going to break this all down and make it fully clear in this episode. |
| Endings: The Good, the Bad, and the Insanely Great | By Michael Arndt: I put this lecture together in 2006, when I started work at Pixar on Toy Story 3. It looks at how to write an "insanely great" ending, using Star Wars, The Graduate, and Little Miss Sunshine as examples. 90 minutes |
| Tips for Writing Effective Character Goals | By Jessica Brody (Save the Cat!): Writing character goals is one of the most important jobs of any novelist. But are your character's goals...mushy? |
What's going on here? - Scenes are rated on many critreia. The goal isn't to try to maximize every number; \
It's to make you aware of what's happening in your scenes. You might have very good reasons to have character development but not advance the story, or have a scene without conflict. Obviously if your dialogue is really bad, you should probably look into that.
| Story Content | Character Development | Scene Elements | Audience Engagement | Technical Aspects | |||||||||||||||||
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| Click for Full Analysis | Tone | Overall | Concept | Plot | Originality | Characters | Character Changes | Internal Goal | External Goal | Conflict | Opposition | High stakes | Story forward | Twist | Emotional Impact | Dialogue | Engagement | Pacing | Formatting | Structure | |
| 1 - Morning Catch | Hardworking, Nostalgic, Routine | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 2 - Struggles at Salgado Fish Wharf | Sarcastic, Defiant, Confrontational | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 3 - Family Tides | Sarcastic, Humorous | 8.2 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 4 - A Sleepy Ride to Class | Serious, Reflective, Embarrassed | 7.5 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 5 - Invisible in the Hallway | Humorous, Sarcastic, Awkward | 7.5 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 6 - Choir Dreams and Parental Embarrassment | Embarrassment, Isolation, Humor | 8.2 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 7 - Awkward Consultations | Awkward, Humorous, Embarrassed | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 4 | 7 | 3 | 5 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 8 - Dinner Table Distractions | Humorous, Family-oriented, Lighthearted | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 5 | 6 | 4 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 9 - The First Note: A Choral Challenge | Humorous, Embarrassed, Judgmental | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 10 - Echoes of Conflict | Tense, Reflective, Emotional | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 11 - Caught in the Tide of Change | Tense, Serious, Confrontational | 8.5 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 12 - Finding Her Voice | Introspective, Encouraging, Anxious | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7.5 | 6 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
| 13 - Generational Tensions | Humorous, Light-hearted, Awkward | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 4 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
| 14 - Flirting and Confusion | Humorous, Light-hearted, Awkward | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 4 | 7 | 2 | 5 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
| 15 - Finding Confidence in Song | Humorous, Embarrassing, Encouraging | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7.5 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 16 - Duet Dilemmas | Embarrassment, Disappointment, Encouragement | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
| 17 - Confrontation at the Auction | Tense, Confrontational, Assertive | 8.5 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 18 - Family Tensions | Tense, Defiant, Family-oriented | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 19 - Finding Harmony | Encouraging, Inspirational, Playful | 8.5 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7.5 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 20 - Breakfast Tensions | Tension, Defiance, Resentment | 8.2 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 21 - Fractured Ties at Salgado Fish Wharf | Tense, Frustrated, Defiant | 7.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 22 - Brawl at Pratty's Bar | Tense, Chaotic, Aggressive | 8.5 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
| 23 - Flirting in the Shadows | Tension, Seduction, Conflict | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 24 - Awkward Harmonies | Intimate, Awkward, Nostalgic | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
| 25 - Awkward Revelations | Awkward, Humorous, Confrontational | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 26 - Rumors and Regrets | Embarrassment, Humor, Awkwardness | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 27 - Rumors and Tears | Emotional, Tense, Dramatic | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 28 - Finding Her Voice | Frustration, Encouragement, Empowerment | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 29 - A Bold Proposal at the Fisheries Council | Tense, Defiant, Confrontational | 8.5 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
| 30 - Tensions in the Rossi Living Room | Tense, Defensive, Resentful | 8.5 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 31 - Ruby's Morning Hustle | Determined, Emotional, Upbeat | 7.5 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7.5 | 5 | 8 | 4 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
| 32 - Struggles in Harmony | Intense, Emotional, Playful | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 33 - Tension Over Time | Tense, Serious, Confrontational | 7.5 | 8 | 8 | 8.5 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7.5 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 34 - Unspoken Struggles | Tense, Emotional, Reflective | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 35 - Tangled Priorities | Tense, Emotional, Frustrated, Determined | 8.5 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 36 - Tension in Translation | Agitated, Tense, Defeated | 8.5 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 37 - Confrontation in the Choir Room | Intense, Confrontational, Emotional | 8.5 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
| 38 - Breaking Free | Frustration, Determination, Conflict | 8.5 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7.5 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 39 - Tensions at Home | Tension, Conflict, Frustration, Worry | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 40 - Turbulent Waters | Tense, Awkward, Serious | 8.5 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 41 - Leap of Faith | Playful, Intimate, Reflective | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
| 42 - Communication Barrier | Tense, Informative, Serious | 8.2 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 43 - Leap of Courage | Humorous, Adventurous, Youthful | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
| 44 - Silent Violation | Tense, Romantic, Conflicted, Surprising | 8.5 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
| 45 - Tensions in the Kitchen | Tense, Frustrated, Blaming | 8.5 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 46 - Navigating Compliance | Tense, Serious, Confrontational | 8.5 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 47 - Tides of Tension | Sad, Resigned, Defiant | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 48 - A Moment of Connection | Emotional, Reflective, Intimate | 9.2 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 10 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 3 | 6 | 2 | 6 | 7 | 10 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 49 - Tides of Frustration | Tension, Frustration, Resentment | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 50 - A Disheartening Performance | Somber, Intimate, Reflective | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
| 51 - Silent Serenade | Emotional, Inspiring, Heartfelt | 9.2 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 3 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
| 52 - A Comical Misunderstanding | Awkward, Light-hearted, Misunderstanding | 8.2 | 8 | 8 | 8.5 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7.5 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
| 53 - Under the Stars | Reflective, Emotional, Intimate | 9.2 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 2 | 6 | 3 | 7 | 7 | 10 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 54 - Facing the Stage Alone | Tense, Emotional, Humorous | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 55 - Nerves and Support | Nervous, Intimate, Hopeful | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
| 56 - The Jury's Gaze | Tense, Emotional, Serious | 8.5 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
| 57 - Finding Her Voice | Anxious, Hopeful, Emotional, Proud | 9.2 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 10 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
| 58 - A New Horizon | Hopeful, Heartwarming, Tense | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
| 59 - A Leap of Faith | Romantic, Playful, Adventurous | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 3 | 6 | 4 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
| 60 - Bittersweet Farewell | Emotional, Heartfelt, Bittersweet | 9.2 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 3 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 10 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
Summary of Scene Level Analysis
Here are some things that came out of the scene level analysis.
This is a summary of the strengths, weaknesses, and suggestions found in each scene. Some things might appear in both strengths and weaknesses based on the variety of your scenes.
For summary of each criteria click in the top row on the criteria.
Scene Strengths
- Emotional depth
- Strong character development
- Authentic dialogue
- Humorous tone
- Effective establishment of conflict
Scene Weaknesses
- Limited plot progression
- Low external conflict
- Lack of resolution in key scenes
- Some predictable character interactions
- Minimal character development in secondary characters
Suggestions
- Introduce higher stakes and external conflicts to enhance plot progression.
- Develop secondary characters further to enrich the story's emotional landscape.
- Ensure that key scenes provide a resolution or progression in character arcs to maintain audience engagement.
- Diversify character interactions to avoid predictability and enhance dramatic tension.
- Refine dialogue in certain sections for greater impact and depth, especially in pivotal moments.
World Building
- Physical environment: The screenplay is set in Gloucester, Massachusetts, a coastal town with a strong fishing industry. The physical environment includes the open ocean, fishing trawlers (like the Angela Rose), a bustling fish wharf, industrial and commercial areas, a high school, suburban homes, a doctor's office, a choir room, a quarry, and woods. There's a contrast between the natural beauty of the ocean and woods and the gritty, working-class atmosphere of the fishing industry and town. The setting often reflects the characters' emotional states – serene natural settings for introspection, tense and chaotic family home scenes, and the bustling, competitive fish wharf.
- Culture: The dominant culture is that of a close-knit, working-class fishing community in Gloucester. Family loyalty and support are central. The culture values hard work, resilience, and a strong sense of community among the fishermen. Sign language is a significant cultural element, reflecting the Rossi family's deafness and the challenges they face in a hearing-dominated world. Music plays a crucial role, with Ruby’s passion for singing and the importance of the high school choir. There's a generational clash between the older generation's traditional fishing methods and the younger generation's adaptation to new technologies and aspirations.
- Society: The societal structure is hierarchical, particularly within the fishing industry, with Tony Salgado holding significant power. There are clear class distinctions between the working-class fishermen and the more affluent segments of society. High school social dynamics, including cliques, hierarchies, and peer pressure, are also depicted. The deaf community within Gloucester faces challenges due to communication barriers and societal misunderstandings. The family unit plays a crucial role, with intergenerational conflicts and tensions adding to the complexity of family relationships. The interactions between fishermen and government regulatory bodies (like the Fisheries Council and the Coast Guard) highlight power imbalances and conflict.
- Technology: Technology is used selectively, reflecting the blend of traditional and modern elements in Gloucester. While traditional fishing methods are prevalent, there are also mentions of radios, winches, weighing scales, iPads, phones (including video relay services), and modern communication technology like texting and social media. The contrast between old and new technology represents the evolving dynamics of the fishing industry and its adaptation to new regulations and markets. The presence of technology also highlights the characters' ability to navigate and overcome challenges.
- Characters influence: The world elements significantly shape the characters' experiences and actions. The demanding nature of the fishing industry fosters resilience and resourcefulness in the Rossi family. The social hierarchies and peer pressures of high school impact Ruby's confidence and self-expression. The communication barriers faced by the deaf family members influence their interactions with others and their daily routines. The financial struggles of the family affect their choices and relationships. Ruby's dual worlds of fishing and music drive her character arc and conflict.
- Narrative contribution: The world-building contributes to a compelling narrative through the realistic portrayal of Gloucester’s environment and its inhabitants. The setting itself becomes a character, highlighting the challenges and triumphs of the community. The various locations (ocean, wharf, school, home) reflect the different aspects of Ruby's life and drive the plot forward. The conflicts arising from the fishing industry and the social dynamics in high school contribute to the main plotlines.
- Thematic depth contribution: The world-building contributes significantly to the thematic depth of the screenplay. Themes of family, communication, identity, and cultural preservation are explored through the lens of the Gloucester fishing community and Ruby's individual journey. The contrast between tradition and modernity, the challenges faced by the deaf community, and the struggles of the fishing industry against regulations contribute to exploring themes of resilience, perseverance, and the search for self-expression. Ruby's exploration of her identity within the context of her family, her community, and her aspirations adds profound thematic depth.
| Voice Analysis | |
|---|---|
| Summary: | The writer's voice is characterized by a sharp, witty, and realistic style that blends humor and emotional depth. The dialogue is consistently sharp, capturing authentic working-class vernacular and the nuances of teenage interactions, family dynamics, and the complexities of a close-knit deaf community. The narrative seamlessly interweaves detailed descriptions of the Gloucester fishing community with introspective moments, creating a vivid and engaging world. Direction emphasizes physical actions and gestures to convey emotion, particularly in scenes involving the deaf characters, further enhancing authenticity and emotional resonance. |
| Voice Contribution | The writer's voice contributes to the script by creating a richly textured and authentic portrayal of a working-class family and their community. The blend of humor and realism enhances the emotional impact of the story, allowing the audience to connect with the characters on a deeply personal level. The detailed descriptions of the setting and the inclusion of sign language add layers of depth and immersion, making the story both unique and relatable. The themes of family, identity, pursuing dreams in the face of adversity, and communication (or lack thereof) are powerfully conveyed through this distinctive voice. |
| Best Representation Scene | 7 - Awkward Consultations |
| Best Scene Explanation | Scene 7 best encapsulates the writer's unique voice because it masterfully blends humor and realism within a deeply relatable family dynamic. The awkwardness of the situation, the sharp dialogue that captures the characters' personalities, and the subtle cultural element (Ruby translating for her deaf parents) all work together to create a scene that is both funny and emotionally resonant. This blend of humor, realism, and insightful character interactions is a consistent hallmark of the writer's style throughout the screenplay. |
Top Correlations and patterns found in the scenes:
| Pattern | Explanation |
|---|---|
| High 'Concept' Scores Correlate with High 'Plot' Scores | Scenes with high concept scores (8 or above) consistently receive high plot scores. This suggests a strong link between the originality or creativity of the scene's idea and its effectiveness in advancing the plot. Consider if this is intentional, or if strong concepts inherently lend themselves to better plot execution. Investigate scenes with lower plot scores despite high concept scores to identify areas where execution could be improved. |
| Humorous Tone Doesn't Always Translate to High Emotional Impact | While humorous scenes often receive good overall grades, their emotional impact scores are frequently lower than scenes with more serious tones. Scenes 3, 5, 7, 13, 14, and 52 are examples of humorous scenes with relatively low emotional impact. Consider whether the humor overshadows emotional depth or whether opportunities for more profound emotional resonance are being missed. Explore adding emotional layers to your humor, or consider if the humor is truly serving the story's emotional arc. |
| High 'Conflict' and 'High Stakes' Scores Are Often Coupled | Scenes with high conflict scores usually also have high high-stakes scores. This demonstrates a consistent ability to create tense, engaging moments. This is a strength to maintain and leverage in future writing. |
| 'Emotional Impact' inversely correlates with 'Dialogue' in some scenes (especially later scenes) | Noticeably in scenes 48, 51, 53, and 60, high emotional impact does not correlate with high dialogue scores. In contrast, scenes with high dialogue scores sometimes have lower emotional impact. This suggests a potential imbalance: strong dialogue doesn't always lead to impactful emotional moments. Analyze whether emotional beats are being adequately expressed through actions, visuals, or other means, or whether the dialogue is too expositional and less effective at conveying emotion. Consider ways to use dialogue more efficiently to create stronger emotional impact. |
| Character Changes Often Tied to Scenes with High Emotional Impact | Scenes where characters experience significant changes (higher scores in 'Character Changes') often correlate with higher emotional impact. This demonstrates success in using emotional events to drive character development. Maintain this approach for richer character arcs. |
| Tense Scenes Tend to Have High Overall Grades and Strong Plot Advancement | Scenes employing 'Tense' tones (particularly in the later half of the screenplay) consistently receive high overall grades and effectively move the story forward. This highlights the effectiveness of tension in driving the narrative. Consider strategically using tense scenes to accelerate pacing and maintain audience engagement. |
| The Climax (Scenes 48-60) Show a Shift in Focus | The final act exhibits a decrease in dialogue scores while maintaining high overall grades and strong emotional impact, suggesting a shift from dialogue-driven scenes to visually and emotionally impactful moments. This is a natural progression towards a climatic resolution, but consider if the reduction in dialogue could be more deliberate in order to maximize emotional impact. |
| Inconsistent 'Move Story Forward' Scores | Several high-scoring scenes (in terms of overall quality and emotional impact) have relatively lower scores in 'Move Story Forward'. This indicates some scenes may be strong in their own right but less effective in directly propelling the narrative. Review these scenes to see if streamlining or restructuring is needed to enhance their contribution to the overall plot progression. This suggests a strength in scene-writing but a potential weakness in overall plotting. |
Writer's Craft Overall Analysis
The screenplay demonstrates a consistent ability to create engaging scenes with authentic dialogue and relatable characters. The writer shows a strong grasp of character dynamics and emotional depth, effectively conveying conflicts and motivations. However, there's room for improvement in several areas, primarily focusing on deepening character development, refining dialogue techniques, and enhancing scene structure.
Key Improvement Areas
Character Development
While many scenes praise the authenticity of character interactions, several analyses suggest a need to explore character motivations and emotional complexities more deeply. The writer consistently utilizes dialogue to reveal character, but more nuanced exploration of internal struggles and backstories would elevate the scenes.
Dialogue Refinement
While the dialogue is frequently commended for its authenticity and wit, there's recurring advice to hone dialogue skills. This includes sharpening wit, conveying subtext more effectively, and writing dialogue-heavy scenes to improve pacing and character voice.
Scene Structure and Pacing
Several suggestions advise reading screenplays known for strong scene structure and pacing, and practicing writing scenes that prioritize specific elements (like dialogue-only scenes). This points to a need for the writer to better control the rhythm and flow of their scenes, maximizing impact and emotional resonance.
Suggestions
| Type | Suggestion | Rationale |
|---|---|---|
| Book | 'Save the Cat! Writes a Screenplay' by Blake Snyder | This book offers comprehensive guidance on screenplay structure, character arcs, and scene construction, addressing multiple key improvement areas identified in the analysis. |
| Book | 'The Anatomy of Story' by John Truby | This book focuses on in-depth character development and conflict, directly addressing the need for deeper character exploration and more complex emotional narratives. |
| Screenplay Collection | Read a selection of screenplays by Aaron Sorkin, David Mamet, and Greta Gerwig. | These writers represent different styles of sharp dialogue, character-driven narratives, and effective scene construction, providing diverse models for the writer to study. |
| Video | Watch and analyze films praised for their strong character development and dialogue, such as 'Lady Bird,' 'Manchester by the Sea,' and 'Little Miss Sunshine'. Pay close attention to scene structure and pacing. | Visual learning can supplement the theoretical knowledge gained from books and screenplays, providing a deeper understanding of effective storytelling techniques. |
| Course | Consider a screenwriting course or workshop focusing on character development and dialogue. | Structured learning and feedback from instructors and peers can provide valuable insights and accelerate the writer's skill development. |
Additional Notes:
The writer displays promise and a natural talent for storytelling. By focusing on the suggested improvements in character development, dialogue refinement, and scene structure, the writer can significantly elevate their screenwriting craft and create even more compelling and resonant narratives. The recurring suggestion to read 'Save the Cat!' highlights a potential need for a more structured approach to scene construction and overall narrative arc.
Here are different Tropes found in the screenplay
| Trope | Trope Details | Trope Explanation |
|---|---|---|
| Coming of Age | Ruby navigates the challenges of adolescence, balancing her family responsibilities with her desire to pursue music. | The coming-of-age trope involves a young protagonist facing personal growth and self-discovery. An example is 'Lady Bird,' where the main character grapples with her identity and relationships as she prepares for adulthood. |
| Family Dynamics | The Rossi family exhibits a mix of humor, tension, and love as they navigate their challenges together. | Family dynamics often explore the relationships and conflicts within a family unit. A notable example is 'The Incredibles,' where the family must work together despite their differences to overcome external threats. |
| The Underdog | Ruby, as a deaf child in a hearing world, faces numerous challenges but strives to prove her talent in music. | The underdog trope features a character who is at a disadvantage but rises to the occasion. An example is 'Rocky,' where the protagonist, an underdog boxer, trains hard to compete against a champion. |
| The Mentor | Bernardo serves as Ruby's mentor, guiding her in her musical journey and pushing her to confront her fears. | The mentor trope involves a wise figure who guides the protagonist. An example is Mr. Miyagi in 'The Karate Kid,' who teaches Daniel not just martial arts but life lessons. |
| Love Triangle | Ruby finds herself caught between her feelings for Miles and her responsibilities to her family. | The love triangle trope involves a romantic conflict between three characters. A classic example is 'Twilight,' where Bella is torn between Edward and Jacob. |
| The Big Performance | Ruby's audition at Berklee serves as a climactic moment where she showcases her talent. | The big performance trope highlights a pivotal moment where a character must prove themselves. An example is 'A Star is Born,' where the protagonist performs to gain recognition. |
| Sibling Rivalry | Ruby and Leo often clash over their roles in the family and their individual aspirations. | Sibling rivalry involves competition and conflict between siblings. An example is 'The Lion King,' where Simba and Scar's rivalry drives the plot. |
| The Supportive Friend | Gertie serves as Ruby's confidante and support system throughout her journey. | The supportive friend trope features a character who provides emotional support to the protagonist. An example is Sam in 'The Perks of Being a Wallflower,' who helps Charlie navigate his struggles. |
| The Struggling Artist | Ruby faces obstacles in pursuing her passion for music while managing family expectations. | The struggling artist trope depicts a character facing challenges in their creative pursuits. An example is 'La La Land,' where the protagonists strive to achieve their dreams in the competitive world of entertainment. |
| The Parent-Child Conflict | Ruby's desire to pursue music clashes with her parents' expectations and fears for her future. | The parent-child conflict trope explores the tension between parental expectations and a child's aspirations. An example is 'Footloose,' where Ren fights against the town's restrictions imposed by parents. |
Memorable lines in the script:
| Scene Number | Line |
|---|---|
| 8 | Frank: You know why God made farts smell? So deaf people could enjoy them too. |
| 14 | Gertie: What about like 'We should totally get it on'? |
| 4 | MS. SIMON: Sadly, there was no amendment protecting the right to nap - Ruby! |
| 13 | Leo: Damn, Leo got hot. |
| 18 | Frank: I'd give my left nut to tell them to go screw themselves. |
Some Loglines to consider:
| A hearing daughter of a deaf family struggles to balance her passion for singing with her family's reliance on her as their interpreter and business partner. |
| When a hearing daughter of a deaf family is offered a chance to pursue her dream of attending a prestigious music school, she must decide whether to follow her own path or stay and support her family's struggling fishing business. |
| In a coastal fishing town, a young woman with a powerful singing voice must choose between her own dreams and her responsibility to her deaf family, who depend on her as their interpreter and business partner. |
| A teenager with a gift for singing must navigate the conflicting demands of her own ambitions and her obligation to her deaf family's fishing business in this heartfelt drama. |
| A young woman with a hidden talent for singing must decide whether to follow her musical dreams or remain the anchor for her deaf family's struggling fishing operation in this poignant character-driven story. |
| A hearing teenager in a deaf family must choose between her dreams of attending music school and her responsibilities to her family's struggling fishing business. |
| When a hearing teen in a deaf family discovers her passion for singing, she must overcome personal insecurities and family expectations to pursue her dreams. |
| In a close-knit deaf family, a hearing daughter finds her voice, literally and figuratively, as she navigates the challenges of family loyalty, self-discovery, and first love. |
| Facing familial obligations and societal pressures, a talented young singer must confront her fear of judgment and embrace her unique identity to pursue her musical aspirations. |
| A hearing girl in a deaf world confronts cultural barriers and family expectations, finding strength and self-expression through her voice and her music. |
| A hearing teenager navigates her passion for music while supporting her deaf family, leading to a poignant journey of self-discovery. |
| In a world where silence reigns, a young woman must choose between her family's needs and her own dreams of becoming a singer. |
| As the only hearing member of a deaf family, a girl struggles to balance her responsibilities at home with her aspirations in music. |
| A deaf family's reliance on their hearing daughter forces her to confront her identity and the sacrifices she must make for love. |
| In a heartfelt coming-of-age story, a girl learns to find her voice amidst the challenges of family, identity, and the pursuit of dreams. |
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Explanation: The screenplay for 'Coda' is a heartwarming and well-crafted story that follows the journey of Ruby Rossi, a hearing daughter of a deaf family, as she navigates her passion for singing and her family's fishing business. The screenplay is a strong character-driven drama that explores themes of identity, family, and the pursuit of dreams. The writing is consistently engaging, with well-developed characters, compelling conflicts, and a strong narrative arc. While there are a few areas for improvement, the screenplay's unique perspective, strong emotional resonance, and thematic depth make it a compelling and noteworthy work.
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