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A telemarketer lands a job with a company promising lifelong employment, but discovers disturbing secrets and becomes a viral sensation as he fights against their oppressive practices.
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Story Facts
Genres: Comedy, Drama, Satire, Romance, Sci-Fi, Horror, Political, Action, Science, Fiction
Setting: Present day, Small town in the Midwest
Themes: Capitalism and Exploitation, Identity and Racism, Art and Activism
Conflict & Stakes: John's struggle to clear his name after being falsely accused of a crime, with his family's reputation at stake
Mood: Tense and suspenseful
Standout Features:
- Plot Twist: Unexpected revelation about the true culprit behind the crime
- Unique Characters: Complex and morally ambiguous characters that challenge traditional archetypes
Script Level Analysis
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Executive Summary
- Unique and thought-provoking premise that blends social commentary with dark humor and surrealism. high ( Scene general )
- Sharp and effective satire of capitalism, corporate greed, and labor exploitation. high ( Scene 23 Scene 44 Scene 46 Scene 81 )
- Compelling and well-developed main character, Cassius Green, whose journey explores themes of identity, ambition, and morality. high ( Scene general )
- Strong supporting characters, particularly Detroit, who provide depth and further explore the film's themes. medium ( Scene 2 Scene 27 Scene 51 )
- Creative and imaginative use of magical realism that enhances the storytelling and thematic impact. medium ( Scene 10 Scene 11 Scene 12 )
- The pacing can feel uneven at times, with certain scenes feeling rushed while others drag. medium ( Scene general )
- The introduction of the Equisapiens could be more effectively foreshadowed earlier in the screenplay. medium ( Scene 81 Scene 83 )
- The dream sequence could be more tightly integrated into the narrative and thematic arc. low ( Scene 95 )
- The ending could be more impactful and provide a clearer resolution to the film's central conflicts. medium ( Scene 78 Scene 79 )
- Deeper exploration of the motivations and experiences of the Equisapiens. high ( Scene general )
- More nuanced portrayal of the societal response to the revelation of WorryFree's actions. medium ( Scene general )
- The use of the 'White voice' as a metaphor for code-switching and assimilation is both clever and disturbing. high ( Scene 23 )
- Detroit's art installation and performance piece is a powerful commentary on exploitation and the commodification of art. high ( Scene 51 )
- The depiction of Steve Lift as a narcissistic and sociopathic CEO is both humorous and chilling. high ( Scene 76 )
Claude
Executive Summary
- The opening scenes effectively establish the protagonist, Cassius Green, and his goals and motivations. The character is well-defined and relatable, setting the stage for the narrative to unfold. high ( Scene 1 (INT. MANAGER'S OFFICE- DAY) Scene 2 (INT. CASSIUS'S STUDIO APARTMENT- MORNING) )
- The scenes depicting Cassius's journey as a telemarketer, including his discovery of the 'White Voice' technique, are compelling and drive the story forward in an engaging manner. high ( Scene 7 (INT. TELEMARKETING CUBICLES- DAY) Scene 23 (INT. TELEMARKETING CUBICLES- DAY) )
- The scenes where Cassius is recruited to the 'Power Caller' position and learns about the unethical practices of WorryFree are well-crafted and raise the stakes of the story. high ( Scene 41 (INT. MANAGER'S OFFICE- DAY) Scene 46 (INT. POWER CALLING SUITE- DAY) )
- The scenes depicting the climactic showdown between Cassius and the WorryFree/Regalview establishment are thrilling and emotionally impactful, providing a satisfying resolution to the story. high ( Scene 74 (INT. GALLERY- NIGHT) Scene 117 (EXT. OFFICE BUILDING- DAY) )
- The character development of Cassius and his relationship with Detroit is well-executed, adding emotional depth and complexity to the narrative. medium ( Scene 2 (INT. CASSIUS'S STUDIO APARTMENT- MORNING) Scene 94 (INT. CASSIUS'S CHIC APARTMENT- NIGHT) )
- The 'ISO-Booth' scene, while serving a purpose in the story, could be streamlined or presented in a more engaging manner to avoid feeling like an interruption in the overall pacing. medium ( Scene 55 (INT. ISO-BOOTH- DAY) )
- The party scene at Steve Lift's mansion, while visually interesting, could be tightened to maintain the narrative momentum and avoid feeling too indulgent. medium ( Scene 76 (INT. STEVE LIFT'S MANSION- NIGHT) )
- The 'Washroom' scene, while revealing crucial information, could be streamlined or presented in a more subtle manner to avoid feeling like an abrupt tonal shift. medium ( Scene 83 (INT. WASHROOM- NIGHT) )
- While the meeting room scene provides important context, it could benefit from more character development and exploration of the various telemarketer personalities beyond Cassius. medium ( Scene 12 (INT. MEETING ROOM- DAY) )
- The 'Fancy Elevator' scenes, while visually striking, could be further developed to provide more insight into the Power Caller hierarchy and the overall WorryFree corporate culture. medium ( Scene 24 (INT. FANCY ELEVATOR- MORNING) Scene 43 (INT. FANCY ELEVATOR- DAY) )
- The scene where Cassius is forced to perform a rap at Steve Lift's party is a standout moment, highlighting the protagonist's discomfort and the uncomfortable power dynamics at play. high ( Scene 78 (INT. STEVE LIFT'S MANSION- NIGHT) )
- The revelation of the Equisapiens and Steve Lift's sinister plans is a pivotal moment that propels the story forward and raises the stakes for the protagonist. high ( Scene 83 (INT. WASHROOM- NIGHT) Scene 85 (INT. LIFT'S PRIVATE LOUNGE- NIGHT) )
- The scenes depicting Detroit's activist actions and the public response to the WorryFree revelations add an engaging social commentary layer to the narrative. medium ( Scene 97 (EXT. STREET- NIGHT) Scene 98 (EXT. STREET- MORNING) )
Summary
High-level overview
The movie follows Cassius, a struggling telemarketer who lands a job at WorryFree, a new business model that offers life-long employment. Cassius uses a 'white voice' and excels in his job, but as he climbs the ranks, he uncovers dark and disturbing secrets about WorryFree's newest development, Equisapiens. Cassius contacts the press and becomes a viral sensation, leading to a confrontation with WorryFree's CEO, Steve Lift. Along the way, Cassius navigates complex relationships with his girlfriend Detroit and his friends, who are involved in a strike against WorryFree's oppressive practices. Eventually, Cassius transforms into an Equisapien and confronts Lift in a dramatic and disturbing finale.
Scene by Scene Summaries
Scene by Scene Summaries
- Cassius tries to impress his potential employer with a fake resume and trophies, but ultimately is hired for his initiative and ability to read
- Cassius and Detroit discuss mortality and the meaning of life before being interrupted by a rude street comment. Cassius watches a commercial for a new business model called Worryfree while Detroit asks about his new job.
- Cassius starts his new telemarketing job but faces financial pressure from his overdue rent and landlord. He drives through the city and sees a Worryfree ad. He meets his boss and learns about the Power Callers.
- Cassius struggles to make sales during his new telemarketing job and seeks distraction at a bar with his friend Salvador. He eventually gains access to the VIP room and seems to find some satisfaction in it.
- Cassius and Salvador visit a VIP room where Cassius tries to impress a woman and looks uncomfortable in a cramped space, his drink gets spilled and he leaves. He then shows up at work and gets a lesson on using a 'white voice' for telemarketing.
- Callers learn about bagging and tagging sales while a new Team Leader joins the company.
- Cassius and his friends drive around the city, make jokes, and end up at a bar.
- Cassius and his friends discuss cooking spaghetti and the concept of becoming a Power Caller in their telemarketing job while a violent protest and disturbing game show play on the TV in the background.
- Cassius begins to excel in his telemarketing job, thanks to using a 'white voice', while also dealing with financial stress as his friend may lose his apartment. Detroit makes an appearance with a unique accessory.
- Cassius and his friends discuss their telemarketing job and watch a disturbing game show in the background while at a bar. Later, Detroit makes an appearance and surprises Cassius. Street artists alter a WorryFree billboard overnight.
- Cassius and Detroit join a mini-rally outside the Regalview entrance to protest unfair work treatment. Squeeze leads the group in planning a work stoppage and warns of potential retaliation. Cassius hesitates but ultimately joins in. In the office, the callers participate in the work stoppage while Cassius looks at a photo that briefly changes. Johnny, Anderson, and Diana are angry.
- Cassius is promoted to a prestigious position as a Power Caller but is warned to only use his 'white voice' in the new role. He is conflicted about leaving his friends behind and unsure about the strange environment.
- Cassius is promoted to Power Caller and enters a luxurious, high-stakes environment where he is taught to sell WorryFree's slave labor to other companies. Meanwhile, Detroit vandalizes WorryFree ads with disturbing imagery.
- Detroit and Squeeze discuss their respective approaches to activism, while Detroit anxiously waits for Cassius. Later, Cassius studies for his new role as a Power Caller before visiting Detroit at her job.
- Cassius reaches out to Detroit about his new job as a Power Caller, and the two talk about the themes behind her art exhibit
- Cassius interacts with his friends and faces conflict over his promotion to Power Caller. He later enters the new luxurious high-stakes environment where he has to pass a test before speaking to valuable contacts.
- Cassius undergoes a rigorous test before he begins his job as a Power Caller, but eventually secures a deal that earns WorryFree upwards of $10 million. Cassius then asks for a cash advance before going to see his uncle Sergio and giving him a check.
- Cassius surprises Detroit with his new car and they upgrade their surroundings before an intimate moment.
- Cassius and Detroit wake up in a new luxurious apartment, watch TV, and argue over his promotion to Power Caller and crossing the picket line. Detroit threatens to leave Cassius if he goes to work that day.
- Cassius undergoes a test to become a Power Caller and later secures a deal worth $10 million. He and Detroit upgrade their lifestyle, but she threatens to leave him if he crosses the picket line. Cassius receives an invitation to a party that could change his life.
- Cassius attends Detroit's art show, where she performs a shocking piece and gets pelted by the audience. Cassius tries to intervene, but Detroit insists it's part of the show.
- Cassius attends a lavish party and meets Steve Lift, who praises his work. Meanwhile, Detroit finalizes her art show exhibition and receives some praise as well.
- Cassius attends a party where he is pressured to perform a rap. After reluctantly giving in, he is left distraught by his performance and bleeding from an injury. He is then summoned to a mysterious room in the mansion.
- Cassius is summoned to Steve Lift's office, where he is offered a job at WorryFree and is shown a strange video. After going to the bathroom, Cassius discovers a group of chained and collared part-man, part-horse creatures in the next stall.
- Cassius is offered a job at WorryFree and discovers disturbing secrets about the company.
- Cassius is shown a disturbing video that reveals WorryFree's newest development: Equisapiens, part-man part-horse creatures created to be the ultimate workforce. Cassius is horrified and appalled.
- Cassius is shown a disturbing video and offered a job managing Equisapiens, part-man part-horse creatures created by WorryFree to be the ultimate workforce. He is horrified, appalled and emotionally distressed, which leads to a negotiation for a $100 million contract with the offer of a 'special sauce serum' that would return him back to 'normal'
- Cassius discovers the dark and twisted secrets of WorryFree, leading him to contact the press. He experiences a range of emotions, from shock and horror to dejection and frustration, as he tries to come to terms with what he has just learned.
- Cassius discovers WorryFree's dark secrets and the creation of Equisapiens engineered to become the ultimate workforce. Emotionally distressed, Cassius contacts the press and tries to come to terms with what he has learned.
- Cassius and Detroit's relationship is strained as they discuss his decision to leave WorryFree. Cassius has a disturbing dream about the creation of Equisapiens. The next morning, Detroit reveals her involvement in a protest and displays a provocative art piece revealing WorryFree's dark secrets.
- Cassius experiences the negative consequences of viral fame and seeks help from his friend Detroit. He decides to go on a TV show to speak out against WorryFree's unethical practices.
- Cassius's appearance on a TV game show leads to him playing a clip of the Equisapien message, which prompts him to speak out against WorryFree's unethical practices on various TV shows. This eventually leads to WorryFree's record-breaking stock market rally and the street preacher's belief that Steve Lift is Jesus.
- Cassius meets with his friends to discuss his next move against WorryFree, gets slapped by a waitress with a soda, sneaks into Steve Lift's mansion, and loads stolen statues onto a truck with Detroit.
- Cassius and his friends join the strikers, who violently clash with the Blackwater security guards. Detroit's statues provide a surprise advantage, and Cassius blows a whistle that signals the arrival of the football team wearing Coke-And-A-Smile-Bitch wigs. They defeat the Blackwaters, but soon face an even larger group of guards.
- Cassius escapes from a paddywagon with the help of Equisapiens, celebrates a victory with strikers, gives his car to Salvador, and apologizes to him. He comes back to his old studio apartment, now much more luxurious.
- Cassius transforms into an Equisapien while struggling with his door. His transformation is broadcast to Steve Lift, who is woken up by the disruption.
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Analysis: This screenplay showcases a strong focus on character development, with well-rounded characters who display depth, complexity, and transformative journeys. Particularly notable is the evolution of Cassius's character as he grapples with his beliefs and the consequences of his actions, echoing themes of morality, ambition, and the significance of standing up for what one believes in. However, some characters could benefit from further development and exploration, especially in terms of their motivations and the impact of their decisions on the overall narrative.
Key Strengths
- The screenplay effectively portrays Cassius's transformative journey, delving into the complexities of morality and personal growth.
Analysis: The screenplay's premise about telemarketing employees discovering the unethical practices of their company shows promise in establishing a compelling narrative that could appeal to audiences. The theme of social justice and the exploration of morality in the workplace have the potential to resonate with viewers.
Key Strengths
- The exploration of ethical conflicts within the telemarketing industry offers a fresh and relevant setting for a socially conscious narrative.
Analysis: The screenplay presents a well-structured and engaging narrative that effectively develops tension and escalates stakes. The plot's unfolding aligns well with the intended themes and character arcs, leading to a satisfying resolution. However, the pacing could be slightly improved to enhance the impact of certain scenes and maintain audience engagement throughout.
Key Strengths
- The screenplay effectively balances multiple plotlines and themes, creating a complex and engaging narrative.
- The character arcs are well-developed and emotionally resonant, adding depth to the story and connecting with the audience.
Analysis: The screenplay effectively explores themes of class division, ethics in capitalism, and the power of collective action. The narrative is well-structured to convey these messages, and the characters' arcs are tied to the thematic development. However, some aspects of the message could be more refined to enhance their overall impact.
Key Strengths
- The screenplay's exploration of class division is particularly powerful, showcasing the struggles and injustices faced by the working class in a thought-provoking and emotionally resonant way.
Analysis: The screenplay boasts a commendable level of visual imagery that successfully brings its world to life. Creative and impactful descriptions abound, contributing to a visually engaging and immersive reading experience. The screenplay effectively uses visual elements to enhance the narrative and convey emotions, leading to a strong connection between the reader and the story.
Key Strengths
- The opening scene in the telemarketing office is visually striking, establishing a distinctive atmosphere with its use of fluorescent lighting, cramped cubicles, and a sea of identical suits.
Areas to Improve
- The description of the Equisapiens in the test scene lacks originality and could benefit from a more imaginative and visually striking approach.
Analysis: The screenplay effectively harnesses emotional storytelling techniques to evoke a range of emotions, including empathy, frustration, anger, and hope. By delving into Cassius's inner struggles and exploring the social and economic realities faced by the characters, the script provides ample opportunities for emotional investment. However, expanding the range of emotions, particularly moments of vulnerability and tenderness, could further enhance the film's emotional depth.
Key Strengths
- The screenplay successfully immerses the audience in the emotional struggles of Cassius and other characters, making their experiences relatable and impactful.
Analysis: The screenplay effectively presents conflict and stakes, but there are some areas where it could be enhanced to heighten narrative tension and audience engagement. The central conflict is well-defined, but the stakes could be made more personal and significant to drive the protagonist's motivations and increase emotional investment. Enhancing the escalation of stakes throughout the screenplay and refining the resolution to provide a more satisfying and impactful conclusion would elevate the overall narrative.
Key Strengths
- The film effectively explores the theme of exploitation and dehumanization within a capitalist system. The depiction of Cassius's journey from a desperate job seeker to a complicit participant in the exploitation of others is powerful and thought-provoking.
Analysis: This screenplay exhibits a strong level of originality and creativity. It tackles important social issues, such as labor exploitation and racial inequality, in a fresh and thought-provoking manner. The characters are well-developed and have clear motivations. The narrative is structured in a way that keeps the audience engaged and the pacing is well-balanced. Overall, this screenplay shows great potential and has the makings of a truly unique and memorable film.
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Character Cassius Green
Description Cassius's transformation from a morally conflicted individual to a seemingly enthusiastic Power Caller and then back to a morally conscious activist feels abrupt and lacks a convincing internal struggle. His motivations shift based on external events rather than a gradual evolution of his character.
( Scene 10 (35) Scene 12 (52) Scene 14 (67) Scene 20 (86) Scene 23 (99) Scene 26 (113) Scene 27 (117) Scene 30 (120) )
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Description The effectiveness of the statues in stopping the Blackwater guards is questionable. While the scene serves a symbolic purpose, it's hard to believe that static statues would be enough to halt a trained security force.
( Scene 27 (117) )
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Description The nature and mechanism of Cassius's transformation into an Equisapien are unclear. It's implied that he may have been exposed to the fusing catalyst, but the lack of explanation and the abruptness of the transformation leave a significant gap in the narrative.
( Scene 24 (81) Scene 26 (113) Scene 31 (121) Scene 31 (122) )
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Description The use of the "White voice" overdub is a stylistic choice, but its overuse and inconsistency can detract from the authenticity of the dialogue in certain scenes. The transition between Cassius's normal voice and the overdubbed voice can feel jarring and disrupt the flow of conversation.
( Scene 10 (35) Scene 13 (54) Scene 14 (67) Scene 16 (74) Scene 21 (86) Scene 22 (78) )
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Element Cassius getting hit in the face with a drink
( Scene 5 (21) Scene 26 (113) Scene 27 (117) )
Suggestion While each instance serves a slightly different purpose, the repetition of Cassius getting hit in the face with a drink could be streamlined. Perhaps one or two instances could be removed or replaced with a different form of humiliation to maintain variety.
Cassius - Score: 80/100
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Protagonist
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Detroit - Score: 81/100
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Salvador - Score: 77/100
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Supporting Character
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Squeeze - Score: 83/100
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Steve - Score: 85/100
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Antagonist
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Identified Themes
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Capitalism and Exploitation
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The film explores the effects of capitalism on individuals and society, showing how the pressure to succeed in a capitalist society leads to exploitation and dehumanization. Cassius specifically faces conflicts with his own morals as he rises through the ranks of telemarketing, ultimately accepting a promotion to sell slave labor.
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The film reveals the dark side of capitalism, exploring how individuals are often exploited and dehumanized in their attempts to succeed in a capitalist society. Cassius faces conflicts with his own sense of morality as he participates in promoting the exploitation of others. |
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Identity and Racism
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The theme of identity and racism is prominent throughout the film, with Cassius grappling with his own identity as a black man in a world dominated by white power and success. He faces pressure to adopt a 'white' voice to succeed in telemarketing, and ultimately experiences firsthand the exploitation of black bodies for profit.
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The film portrays the struggles of a black man navigating a predominantly white power structure, highlighting the racism and exploitation that exists within capitalist systems. Cassius's experiences with using a 'white' voice and his later exposure to slave labor emphasize the ways in which black bodies are commodified and exploited for profit. |
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Art and Activism
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The film also touches on themes of art and activism, with Cassius's friend Detroit using street art as a form of activism against capitalist oppression. The two friends have debates about the efficacy of activism and protest and ultimately clash over their differing beliefs about how to create meaningful social change.
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The film explores the role of art and activism in fighting against capitalist oppression, with Detroit using street art to express his political ideas. Cassius's conflicts with his friend underscore the differing perspectives on how to create meaningful social change. |
Screenwriting Resources on Themes
Articles
| Site | Description |
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| Studio Binder | Movie Themes: Examples of Common Themes for Screenwriters |
| Coverfly | Improving your Screenplay's theme |
| John August | Writing from Theme |
YouTube Videos
| Title | Description |
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| Story, Plot, Genre, Theme - Screenwriting Basics | Screenwriting basics - beginner video |
| What is theme | Discussion on ways to layer theme into a screenplay. |
| Thematic Mistakes You're Making in Your Script | Common Theme mistakes and Philosophical Conflicts |
Scene Analysis
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| Click for Full Analysis | Tone | Overall | Concept | Plot | Characters | Character Changes | Conflict | High stakes | Story forward | Emotional Impact | Dialogue | ||
| 1 - Telemarketing Interview | "Lighthearted" | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 2 | 3 | 2 | 5 | 4 | 7 | ||
| 2 - Surviving for Now | "Contemplative" | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 5 | 5 | 3 | 7 | 6 | 9 | ||
| 3 - Cassius gets hired and faces financial pressure | "humorous" | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 6 | 7 | ||
| 4 - Telemarketing Frustrations | "Satirical" | 7 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 5 | 5 | 4 | 6 | 6 | 7 | ||
| 5 - Cassius and Salvador visit a crowded VIP room | "awkward" | 7 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 3 | 5 | 2 | 5 | 6 | 7 | ||
| 6 - The Sales Pitch | "Sarcastic" | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 4 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 6 | 8 | ||
| 7 - Night Out with Friends | "Light-hearted" | 8 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 2 | 3 | 2 | 3 | 4 | 9 | ||
| 8 - Boozeday Talk | "sarcastic, cynical" | 8 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 5 | 5 | 3 | 6 | 6 | 9 | ||
| 9 - Telemarketing Success and Housing Woes | "humorous" | 8 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 2 | 4 | 4 | 7 | 3 | 8 | ||
| 10 - Bar Chat and Street Art | "satirical" | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 5 | 6 | 5 | 7 | 6 | 8 | ||
| 11 - Protest and Consequences | "tense" | 8.5 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | ||
| 12 - Promotion to Power Caller | "sarcastic, dark" | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | ||
| 13 - Promotion to Power Caller | "darkly comedic" | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 5 | 9 | 10 | 8 | 5 | 7 | ||
| 14 - Art and Activism | "thoughtful" | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 3 | 6 | 4 | 6 | 6 | 8 | ||
| 15 - Confronting Ideals | "somber" | 8 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 3 | 3 | 2 | 4 | 6 | 6 | ||
| 16 - Promotion Conflict | "Tense" | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | ||
| 17 - Cassius Becomes a Power Caller | "Serious" | 10 | 9 | 10 | 9 | 6 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | ||
| 18 - Upgrade | "Romantic" | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 4 | 2 | 3 | 5 | 8 | 6 | ||
| 19 - Morning Conversations | "contemplative" | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 8 | ||
| 20 - Cassius' Promotion | "Tense" | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | ||
| 21 - Detroit's Show | "tense" | 7 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | ||
| 22 - Parties and Promotions | "tense" | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 5 | 6 | 5 | 7 | 7 | 9 | ||
| 23 - The Performance | "Tense" | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | ||
| 24 - The Mr. Ed Spiral | "surreal" | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 10 | 8 | 8 | 7 | ||
| 25 - The Misunderstanding | "tense" | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 8 | ||
| 26 - WorryFree's Dark Secret Revealed | "tense, disturbing" | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 10 | 9 | 9 | 8 | ||
| 27 - The Equisapiens Proposal | "Tense" | 9 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 11 | 9 | 10 | 8 | ||
| 28 - Cassius Discovers the Truth | "Disturbing" | 9 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | ||
| 29 - The Discovery | "Tense" | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 10 | 9 | 10 | 7 | ||
| 30 - Revelations and Betrayal | "Disturbing" | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | ||
| 31 - The Aftermath of Social Media Fame | "defeated" | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 6 | ||
| 32 - Cassius goes viral and speaks out against WorryFree | "serious" | 9 | 10 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 10 | 8 | 9 | 9 | ||
| 33 - Taking a Stand | "emotional" | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | ||
| 34 - The Strike | "tense" | 8 | 7 | 9 | 6 | 4 | 10 | 10 | 9 | 7 | 5 | ||
| 35 - Escape and Apologies | "Tense" | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 5 | 6 | 6 | 7 | ||
| 36 - Equisapien Transformation | "Humorous" | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 6 | ||
Summary of Scene Level Analysis
Here are insights from the scene-level analysis, highlighting strengths, weaknesses, and actionable suggestions.
Some points may appear in both strengths and weaknesses due to scene variety.
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Scene Strengths
- Strong comedic elements, witty dialogue, and a memorable character in Cassius
- The tension and humor in the scene make it engaging and entertaining to watch
- Interesting exploration of themes and personal dilemmas of main characters
- The scene establishes the high-stakes nature of Cassius's new job as a Power Caller
- Compelling dialogue between Cassius and Steve Lift
Scene Weaknesses
- The scene can feel slow and uneventful at times
- The scene doesn't do much to advance the overall plot
- Lack of significant plot development in this scene
- The dialogue is heavy-handed in its exposition
- Lack of clear character development
Suggestions
- To improve the screenplay, the writers could focus on creating more dynamic and impactful dialogue, avoiding heavy-handed exposition and developing their characters in more depth
- The writers could also explore different visual techniques to enhance the emotional impact and tension of the scenes, as well as the overall plot of the film
- In terms of their craft, the writers could work on improving their pacing and structure to ensure that each scene moves the plot forward significantly and has a clear focus
- Furthermore, the writers could take a closer look at the use of symbolism and imagery in their work to add layers of meaning and subtext to their story
- Finally, the writers could also consider conducting thorough research and including different perspectives in their work to create a more well-rounded and nuanced story.
Scene 1 - Telemarketing Interview
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Scene 2 - Surviving for Now
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The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 3 - Cassius gets hired and faces financial pressure
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 4 - Telemarketing Frustrations
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 5 - Cassius and Salvador visit a crowded VIP room
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 6 - The Sales Pitch
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 7 - Night Out with Friends
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 8 - Boozeday Talk
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 9 - Telemarketing Success and Housing Woes
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 10 - Bar Chat and Street Art
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 11 - Protest and Consequences
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 12 - Promotion to Power Caller
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 13 - Promotion to Power Caller
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 14 - Art and Activism
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 15 - Confronting Ideals
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 16 - Promotion Conflict
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 17 - Cassius Becomes a Power Caller
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 18 - Upgrade
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 19 - Morning Conversations
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 20 - Cassius' Promotion
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 21 - Detroit's Show
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 22 - Parties and Promotions
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 23 - The Performance
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 24 - The Mr. Ed Spiral
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 25 - The Misunderstanding
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 26 - WorryFree's Dark Secret Revealed
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 27 - The Equisapiens Proposal
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 28 - Cassius Discovers the Truth
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 29 - The Discovery
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 30 - Revelations and Betrayal
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 31 - The Aftermath of Social Media Fame
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 32 - Cassius goes viral and speaks out against WorryFree
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 33 - Taking a Stand
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 34 - The Strike
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 35 - Escape and Apologies
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 36 - Equisapien Transformation
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Top Correlations and patterns found in the scenes:
| Pattern | Explanation |
|---|---|
| Tone-Emotional Impact Correlation | There is a positive correlation between the emotional impact of the screenplay and its tone, with more emotional stories tending to have more serious or tense tones. |
| Character Changes-Dialogue Correlation | There is a positive correlation between character changes and the quality of dialogue, with stories that feature well-developed character arcs having better dialogue overall. |
| Conflict-High Stakes Correlation | There is a positive correlation between the level of conflict in the screenplay and the stakes for the characters involved, with high-stakes conflicts driving more compelling storytelling. |
| Concept-Plot Correlation | There is a positive correlation between the strength of a screenplay's concept and the quality of its narrative plot, with more unique and interesting concepts leading to more engaging plotlines. |
| Tone-Character Changes Correlation | There is a correlation between a screenplay's tone and the degree to which its characters undergo meaningful changes, with darker and more serious tones often generating more impactful character arcs. |
| Emotional Impact-Conflict Correlation | There is a positive correlation between a screenplay's emotional impact and its level of conflict, with stories that provoke strong emotional responses often featuring higher-impact conflicts. |
| Move Story Forward-Dialogue Correlation | There is a positive correlation between a screenplay's ability to move its story forward and the quality of its dialogue, with stories that utilize strong dialogue to progress their narrative pacing often achieving better overall structure. |
| Character Changes-Conflict Correlation | There is a positive correlation between a screenplay's character changes and the level of conflict present in the story, with strong character development often being driven by meaningful conflicts that the characters must overcome. |
| Tone-High Stakes Correlation | There is a correlation between a screenplay's tone and the degree of high stakes present in the story, with more serious or tense tones often leading to higher stakes for the characters involved. |
| Plot-Character Changes Correlation | There is a positive correlation between the quality of a screenplay's plot and the degree to which its characters undergo meaningful changes, with well-structured plots often providing the framework for impactful character arcs. |
Here are different Tropes found in the screenplay
| Trope | Trope Details | Trope Explanation |
|---|---|---|
| Fake Resume | Cassius shows up at a job interview with a fake resume and trophies. | A character presenting a false or exaggerated document or information to get ahead. Seen in the TV show Suits when the main character, Mike Ross, fakes his law degree to get a job at a top law firm. |
| Magical Negro | Cassius is coached by Langston, a wise older Black man who teaches him to use a 'white voice' for better sales. | A Black character who uses supernatural wisdom to assist a white protagonist. Seen in the movie The Green Mile when the character of John Coffey possesses supernatural abilities to help a white protagonist. |
| White Voice | Cassius is coached by Langston to use a 'white voice' for better sales. | A Black character using a higher pitched, anglicized voice to sell products as it is seen in the movie Sorry to Bother You. It plays into the western trope that anything black is slightly lesser in value. |
| Journey to the Center of the Mind | Cassius has a disturbing dream about Equisapiens. | A character journeying into their own psyche, either through dreams or hallucinations. An example is the TV show Legion which follows the character David Haller as he navigates through his own mind. |
| Morally Ambiguous Character | Cassius faces conflict entering the world of Power Calling, but ultimately secures a deal that impresses his colleagues. | A character whose ethical compass is unclear or changes throughout the story. Seen in the TV show Breaking Bad where the main character, Walter White, starts off as a sympathetic character before becoming a morally ambiguous drug kingpin. |
Memorable lines in the script:
| Scene Number | Line |
|---|---|
| 30 | Detroit: WorryFree Is Turning Workers Into Horses And Fucking Them |
| 28 | Cassius: They're making horse-people. Half horse, half human workers- you snort this coke but it's not coke and you get big horse nostrils and a horse dick and I might have unknowingly snorted- |
| 22 | Steve Lift: It’s people like you who are gonna save this nation, Green. |
| 1 | Anderson: Stuss. S.T.T.S., Stick to the script. |
| 21 | Detroit: And in the end, Eddie, you know what? You’re nothing but a misguided midget asshole with dreams of ruling the world. Yeah, also from Kew Gardens. And also getting by on my tits. |
Some Loglines to consider:
| Array ( [0] => A telemarketer lands a job with a company promising lifelong employment, but discovers disturbing secrets and becomes a viral sensation as he fights against their oppressive practices. [1] => Using a 'white voice', a struggling telemarketer excels in his job at a new business model offering lifelong employment, but uncovers dark secrets and becomes a viral sensation as he fights against their oppressive practices. [2] => As he rises through the ranks of a new business offering lifelong employment, a telemarketer uncovers disturbing secrets and becomes a viral sensation as he fights against their oppressive practices with his girlfriend and striking friends. [3] => Promised lifelong employment with a new business model, a telemarketer excels using a 'white voice', but discovers dark secrets and becomes a viral sensation as he fights against their oppressive practices with his girlfriend and striking friends. [4] => After landing a job with a company that offers lifelong employment, a telemarketer uses a 'white voice' to excel but uncovers disturbing secrets and becomes a viral sensation as he fights against their oppressive practices with his girlfriend and striking friends, culminating in a dramatic and disturbing finale. ) |
| A Black telemarketer discovers a magical 'White voice' that propels him into a world of corporate greed and exploitation, forcing him to confront his identity and morality. |
| In a dystopian future where a corporation offers lifetime employment contracts, a group of telemarketers fight for their rights while a rising star uncovers a disturbing secret. |
| A struggling artist and her telemarketer boyfriend navigate a surreal world of corporate conspiracies, horse-people, and the fight against a new form of slavery. |
| With the help of a magical voice, a young man climbs the corporate ladder only to discover a sinister plot that threatens humanity's future. |
| A dark comedy that explores the lengths people will go to achieve success and the consequences of selling your soul to the system. |
| A telemarketer discovers a disturbing secret about his employer and must choose between his newfound success or standing up for what's right, in this satirical exploration of corporate greed and worker exploitation. |
| In a world where corporations genetically modify their workers to increase productivity, a telemarketer uncovers the dark truth behind his employer's practices and must risk everything to expose the truth. |
| A struggling telemarketer finds an unexpected path to success by adopting a 'White Voice,' only to be confronted with the sinister reality behind his employer's methods and the moral dilemma of choosing personal gain over activism. |
| Cassius Green is a telemarketer living in a dystopian world where corporations control the workforce, until he stumbles upon a shocking discovery that forces him to decide between his own ambition and fighting for the greater good. |
| A telemarketer's life is turned upside down when he discovers his employer is secretly turning workers into human-horse hybrids, leading him on a journey to expose the truth and challenge the system. |
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