Adaptation

Satirical logline: A painfully self-aware screenwriter attempts to adapt the unfilmable, attending hack seminars and suffering Hollywood pressure while the real story—obsession, theft, and grotesque passion—unfolds into a chaotic, tragic comedy about art and authenticity.

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

Adaptation revolutionizes cinematic storytelling by making the creative process itself the subject of the narrative, blending multiple layers of reality while exploring profound themes of passion, identity, and artistic integrity. Its unique meta-structure and intellectual depth distinguish it from conventional screenplays while maintaining commercial appeal through compelling characters and unexpected narrative turns.

AI Verdict & Suggestions

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GPT5
 Recommend
Grok
 Highly Recommend
Gemini
 Highly Recommend
Claude
 Recommend
DeepSeek
 Highly Recommend
Average Score: 9.1
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
The script’s core strengths — its singular meta-voice, the swamp/orchid imagery, and the Kaufman/Donald dynamic — are all intact. The primary creative fix is to ground the late escalation so the film’s tonal leap feels earned: strengthen Orlean’s psychological arc (show incremental susceptibility rather than a sudden drug-conversion), make the ‘Passion’ extract and Laroche’s motive for escalation more internally plausible (specifics about the drug, marketplace and why Laroche turns violent), and foreshadow the mythic elements (Swamp Ape/legend) earlier so the climax reads as payoff instead of deus ex machina. Also tighten Act II by compressing long research/exposition stretches and give Charlie clearer, active choices earlier so his transformation is driven as much by agency as by catastrophe. Finally, deepen Seminole characters enough to avoid cultural flattening and make their involvement ethically grounded.
For Executives:
This is a high-value, festival/awards-ready, meta-commercial property: distinctive voice, dual commercial hooks (writer-story + thriller climax), and strong lead opportunities. The key production risk is tonal and credulity drift in Act III — studios/test audiences may reject the sudden genre pivot and implausible character turns. Mitigate risk with a focused rewrite that anchors the third act emotionally and factually (drug mechanics, Laroche’s stakes, foreshadowed mythic elements) and address cultural representation issues. Budget-wise, the swamp/action sequences and greenhouse set pieces are expensive but central to the USP; fund them only after script fixes that reduce audience confusion and maximize the film’s festival/arthouse and awards positioning.
Story Facts
Genres:
Drama 50% Comedy 40% Romance 20% Thriller 15% Action 10% Fantasy 10%

Setting: Contemporary, with flashbacks to the past, Primarily set in Florida's Fakahatchee Strand and various locations in New York City

Themes: Self-Acceptance and Identity, The Nature of Passion and Obsession, The Search for Authentic Connection and Love, The Absurdity and Chaos of Existence, The Creative Process and the Nature of Storytelling, The Illusion vs. Reality of Nature and Beauty, Evolution and the Drive Towards Perfection (or Entropy)

Conflict & Stakes: Charlie's internal struggle with self-acceptance and creative integrity, alongside the external conflict involving Laroche's illegal activities and Orlean's shifting loyalties.

Mood: Introspective and melancholic, with moments of dark humor and tension.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The screenplay's meta-narrative structure, blending real-life events with fictional elements.
  • Plot Twist: The revelation of Orlean's drug-induced passion for orchids and her shift in priorities.
  • Innovative Ideas: The exploration of body dysmorphic disorder and its impact on creativity.
  • Distinctive Settings: The contrasting environments of the lush Florida swamps and the urban landscape of New York City.
  • Character Depth: Complex characters grappling with their desires and failures, particularly Kaufman's introspective journey.

Comparable Scripts: Adaptation (2002), Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind (2004), Synecdoche, New York (2008), Being John Malkovich (1999), The Orchid Thief (2002), The Science of Sleep (2006), Her (2013), Wild Strawberries (1957), The Master (2012)

Data Says…
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Our stats model looked at how your scores work together and ranked the changes most likely to move your overall rating next draft. Ordered by the most reliable gains first.

1. Conflict (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Conflict (Script Level) score: 7.4
Typical rewrite gain: +0.6 in Conflict (Script Level)
Gets you ~3% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Confidence: High (based on ~4,676 similar revisions)
  • This is currently your highest-impact lever. Improving Conflict (Script Level) is most likely to move the overall rating next.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Conflict (Script Level) by about +0.6 in one rewrite.
  • Why it matters: At your level, improving this one area alone can cover a meaningful slice of the climb toward an "all Highly Recommends" script.
2. Character Development (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Character Development (Script Level) score: 7.9
Typical rewrite gain: +0.4 in Character Development (Script Level)
Gets you ~3% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Confidence: High (based on ~2,672 similar revisions)
  • This is another meaningful lever. After you work on the higher-impact areas, this can still create a noticeable lift.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Character Development (Script Level) by about +0.4 in one rewrite.
  • Why it matters: After you address the top item, gains here are still one of the levers that move you toward that "all Highly Recommends" zone.
3. Theme (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Theme (Script Level) score: 8.0
Typical rewrite gain: +0.45 in Theme (Script Level)
Gets you ~3% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Confidence: High (based on ~3,490 similar revisions)
  • This is another meaningful lever. After you work on the higher-impact areas, this can still create a noticeable lift.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Theme (Script Level) by about +0.45 in one rewrite.
  • Why it matters: After you address the top item, gains here are still one of the levers that move you toward that "all Highly Recommends" zone.

Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

Screenplay Insights

Breaks down your script along various categories.

Overall Score: 7.95
Key Suggestions:
The script's core is rich — a unique premise and a strong, conflicted protagonist in Charlie Kaufman — but it loses emotional traction because John Laroche and Susan Orlean often feel under-cooked. Prioritize deepening Laroche and Orlean: give each clearer, concrete motivations, private moments that reveal contradictions, and scenes that tie their transformations directly to Kaufman's emotional stakes. At the same time, trim exposition-heavy sequences and tighten pacing so character moments can breathe and land. Focus revisions on a handful of scenes (e.g., 5, 12, 32, 38, 44) to make changes surgical and testable before a larger rewrite.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
The script has a strong, original voice and rich thematic material, but it sprawls. Tighten the middle by pruning or compressing secondary threads (e.g., some McKee/seminar, peripheral comic set pieces, and repetitive therapy/Donald beats), reduce reliance on explanatory voice-over, and center the story emotionally on a clearer throughline between Kaufman and Orlean (and how Laroche’s actions concretely affect them). Raise or clarify external stakes (legal, reputational, or mortal consequences of Laroche’s plan) so the film’s introspection has forward motion and the ending resolves a clearer emotional question about passion and self-acceptance.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The character analyses show rich, complementary players but a fuzziness in emotional throughlines. The script will be stronger if you clarify the protagonist’s arc (Charlie/Kaufman) so his internal beats land clearly against Orlean and Laroche’s trajectories. Tighten turning points (what exactly changes him and when), make Orlean’s motives for the radical choices feel earned (show more interior fallout), and give Laroche a sharper humanizing moment or consequence so he reads as more than an eccentric plot engine. Keep the script’s intelligence and metafictional edge, but anchor it with unmistakable, causal emotional shifts for the audience to follow.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
The script's core strengths are its intellectual curiosity and raw emotional honesty (especially Kaufman's vulnerability). But the emotional architecture is uneven: long stretches of introspection collapse into a sudden thriller in the final act, which sacrifices the nuanced character work you build earlier. To fix this, smooth the tonal bridge by planting escalating paranoia and moral stakes earlier, deepen Orlean and Donald's arcs so their choices feel earned, and sprinkle small, believable positive moments for Kaufman (creative breakthroughs, genuine connection) to prevent emotional fatigue. Keep the film's unusual voice but make the emotional transitions more deliberate and earned.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
You have a rich, layered meditation on authorship, obsession and self-worth—beautiful material. Right now the script risks feeling diffuse because it oscillates between Kaufman’s neurotic inwardness and a wild, plot-driven swamp thriller. Tighten the throughline: pick a single emotional anchor (Kaufman’s need for self-acceptance or Orlean/Laroche’s corrupting passion) and make every scene serve that arc. Preserve the film’s philosophical authenticity, but simplify structural beats so the audience can experience the ideas without getting lost in tonal whiplash. Trim or rework set pieces that don’t advance the protagonist’s inner transformation and make the climax a clear, earned resolution of the Authenticity vs. Commercialism conflict.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
Lean the script toward its emotional center: Charlie Kaufman’s struggle for self-acceptance must be the through-line that every scene serves. Trim or rework detours (excessive parable-like digressions, diffuse subplots, and overly meta moments) that dilute emotional momentum. Make the mechanical beats of Kaufman’s internal journey visible in external choices — incremental failures and small, believable steps toward acceptance — and ensure the Orlean/Laroche plotlines either reflect or catalyze that inner change rather than compete for screen time. Tighten voice-over use so it clarifies rather than explains, and make the climax and resolution feel earned by aligning stakes, consequences, and character transformation.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
The script's emotional core is muddled by inconsistent characterization and repeated voice-over. Tighten Charlie Kaufman's throughline: decide whether he is a study in paralysis (BDD, self-loathing) or an active, changing protagonist and make every scene reflect that journey. Remove redundant self-loathing monologues and show inner conflict through specific, escalating actions and choices. At the same time, pick a tonal center (literary character study vs. dark thriller) and reconcile major plot beats — Orlean's turn toward Laroche and the introduction of the Swamp Ape/drug-and-murder material need clearer set-ups and motivations so shifts feel earned rather than abrupt.

Scene Analysis

All of your scenes analyzed individually and compared, so you can zero in on what to improve.

Scene-Level Percentile Chart
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Other Analyses

Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
Your voice — intimate, self-deprecating, intellectually playful and melancholic — is the script's strongest asset. Preserve that tone, but prioritize cinematic clarity: convert some of the heavy internal narration into observable action and sharper dramatic beats so the audience can feel the characters rather than only hear them. Tighten scenes that linger in inward rumination, heighten external stakes and emotional payoffs, and ensure each long, lyrical passage advances character or plot. That will keep the script true to its sensibility while making it more watchable and emotionally immediate.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
You have a distinct, emotionally rich script with memorable characters and a strong thematic core (obsession, passion, self-loathing). To make it work dramatically, tighten the screenplay around a clear throughline: decide whose emotional journey the audience will follow most closely and cut or compress sequences that don't advance that arc or heighten stakes. Refine dialogue to increase subtext (show more, tell less) and make each scene push character change or reveal motivation. Practical next steps: map act breaks, set a target running time, and perform ruthless line/item cuts and focused rewrites to restore narrative urgency while preserving the script’s voice and nuance.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
Your world is rich and evocative — the contrast between swamp wildness and urban sterility, the obsessive cultural milieu around orchids, and the self-conscious, meta-textual play all give you a lot to work with. The biggest creative need is focus: choose a single emotional through-line and let the world consistently serve it. Right now the script splits its allegiance between Kaufman's neurotic interior, Orlean’s reportage, and Laroche’s outlaw romance with nature. Decide which of those is the primary journey (or make their interrelation explicit and causal), tighten scenes that don’t move that arc, and use the swamp, orchids, and time-jumps as metaphors that escalate character stakes rather than as episodic texture. That will preserve the script’s intellectual ambition while making it dramatically compelling and emotionally clear.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
Your script's core concept is strong and emotionally rich, but its consistent lean into melancholic, introspective scenes early on weakens plot momentum and makes the later surge of high-stakes conflict feel abrupt. Tighten structure by embedding clear, concrete stakes and forward-driving choices inside the quieter scenes (even small, tangible consequences will do). Make dialogue do double duty — reveal character AND move the plot — and use the comedic beats already working in the script to relieve weight and sharpen pacing. Add subtle foreshadowing for the later escalation so the tone shift feels earned, not sudden.
Loglines
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