APOKALYPSIS

In a plague-ravaged kingdom echoing the Book of Revelation, a prince-turned-king battles inner demons and supernatural riders in the Blackmire, learning that true salvation demands surrendering the crown to purity.

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

APOKALYPSIS uniquely blends authentic medieval historical drama with supernatural horror grounded in the Book of Revelation, creating a rare fusion of biblical epic and psychological thriller that explores faith, power, and human frailty against an apocalyptic backdrop.

AI Verdict & Suggestions

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GPT5
 Recommend
Grok
 Recommend
Claude
 Recommend
Gemini
 Consider
DeepSeek
 Consider
Average Score: 7.6
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
You have a powerful, cinematic concept and a clear emotional center in Cedric’s sacrificial arc. The script now needs surgical rewrites to make its metaphysics and human motives intelligible: define the rules of the supernatural so prophetic images and the seals operate with consistent cause-and-effect; tighten and earn supporting characters’ choices (especially Edrick and Aldred) so their betrayals and deaths feel inevitable rather than reactive; and trim or re-order repetitive mid-act vision beats so the journey builds forward momentum toward a meaningful mid-point reversal. Do these three things and the apocalyptic set pieces will land emotionally and narratively rather than feeling ornamental.
For Executives:
APOKALYPSIS is a high‑concept medieval apocalyptic that can be both arthouse and marketable to genre audiences (think THE WITCH meets Biblical spectacle). Its strengths—striking visuals, a clear sacrificial throughline, and memorable set pieces—make it attractive for festival and mid‑budget prestige genre buyers. The risks: currently unclear supernatural rules, uneven pacing, and under‑earned supporting arcs that will confuse general audiences and complicate director/visual effects decisions. Before committing significant production dollars, invest in a focused rewrite (and attach a director with a clear visual grammar) to lock the internal logic and character causality; this will reduce VFX scope creep and protect audience comprehension—two things financiers will scrutinize.
Story Facts
Genres:
Drama 45% Fantasy 25% Horror 20% Action 15% Thriller 15%

Setting: Final days of the thirteenth century, Medieval England, primarily in the Blackmire region and surrounding villages

Themes: Faith vs. Despair/Divine Judgment, Leadership, Corruption, and Societal Decay, The Supernatural and Prophecy, Guilt, Sin, and Redemption, Sacrifice and Loss, The Cycle of Life, Death, and Renewal

Conflict & Stakes: The struggle for power and survival amidst supernatural threats, famine, and internal betrayal, with the fate of the kingdom hanging in the balance.

Mood: Dark, foreboding, and melancholic

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The intertwining of medieval superstition with apocalyptic themes, creating a rich narrative backdrop.
  • Major Twist: The revelation of Cedric's internal struggles manifesting as supernatural threats, culminating in his self-sacrifice.
  • Distinctive Setting: The eerie and decaying landscapes of Blackmire, enhancing the film's dark atmosphere.
  • Innovative Ideas: The use of biblical references and prophecies to drive the narrative forward.
  • Unique Characters: Complex characters like Nhoj, who challenge societal norms and beliefs.

Comparable Scripts: The Seventh Seal, The Witch, Macbeth, The Road, The Dark Tower Series, The Last Kingdom, The Book of Eli, The Plague, The Road to Perdition

Data Says…
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Our stats model looked at how your scores work together and ranked the changes most likely to move your overall rating next draft. Ordered by the most reliable gains first.

1. Theme (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Theme (Script Level) score: 8.0
Typical rewrite gain: +0.45 in Theme (Script Level)
Gets you ~3% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Confidence: High (based on ~3,490 similar revisions)
  • This is currently your highest-impact lever. Improving Theme (Script Level) is most likely to move the overall rating next.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Theme (Script Level) by about +0.45 in one rewrite.
  • Why it matters: At your level, improving this one area alone can cover a meaningful slice of the climb toward an "all Highly Recommends" script.
2. Character Development (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Character Development (Script Level) score: 7.6
Typical rewrite gain: +0.43 in Character Development (Script Level)
Gets you ~3% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Confidence: High (based on ~4,567 similar revisions)
  • This is another meaningful lever. After you work on the higher-impact areas, this can still create a noticeable lift.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Character Development (Script Level) by about +0.43 in one rewrite.
  • Why it matters: After you address the top item, gains here are still one of the levers that move you toward that "all Highly Recommends" zone.
3. Emotional Impact (Script Level)
Moderate Impact Script Level
Your current Emotional Impact (Script Level) score: 7.8
Typical rewrite gain: +0.25 in Emotional Impact (Script Level)
Gets you ~2% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Confidence: High (based on ~3,550 similar revisions)
  • This is another meaningful lever. After you work on the higher-impact areas, this can still create a noticeable lift.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Emotional Impact (Script Level) by about +0.25 in one rewrite.
  • Why it matters: After you address the top item, gains here are still one of the levers that move you toward that "all Highly Recommends" zone.

Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

Screenplay Insights

Breaks down your script along various categories.

Overall Score: 7.81
Key Suggestions:
Your screenplay’s strongest asset is its emotional core—Cedric’s tragic arc and the film’s visceral, apocalyptic mood. To realize that promise, focus first on deepening the secondary leads (especially Edrick and Baldwin) and clarifying the rules/experience of the supernatural. Add a couple of compact, character-focused beats (brief flashbacks or private confrontations) that explain why Edrick is bitter and why Baldwin’s faith cracks. At the same time, tighten exposition-heavy sequences and make the line between vision and reality visually consistent (a recurring sound, color shift, or tactile rule) so audiences can invest emotionally without being confused. These surgical changes—more interior stakes for antagonist-turned-counterpoint characters, clearer supernatural logic, and trimmed exposition—will sharpen theme, increase empathy, and speed pacing without sacrificing atmosphere.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
APOKALYPSIS has a powerful atmosphere and a compelling apocalyptic concept with strong character bones (especially the Cedric–Edrick axis). To sharpen the script, focus on tightening pacing and converting expository beats into visual, character-driven moments. Trim or combine scenes that linger without advancing plot or revealing interior stakes; make key motivations (why Cedric risks everything, why Edrick rebels, what Nhoj truly costs them) evident through decisive actions and small, repeatable visual motifs rather than long explanatory speeches. Give Oswin one clear, emotionally resonant beat of closure after the climax. Replace or pare down overtly expository dialogue and let the supernatural imagery carry more of the theme work—show, don’t tell.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The character analysis shows strong archetypes and vivid moments, but the script currently relies more on spectacle and symbolic imagery than on clear, emotionally grounded character logic. The highest-impact improvement is to tighten and clarify the protagonists' internal arcs—especially Cedric's—so that his choices (which drive major plot consequences) feel earned. Deepen a few key relationships (Cedric–Oswin, Cedric–Edrick, Aldred–Oswin, and Baldwin–Cedric) with short, specific beats that reveal motivation, fear, and doubt. Insert micro-scenes or moments that explain why Cedric makes the decisions he does (flash memory, private confession, small ritual) and give Oswin and Edrick clearer emotional turning points to make the apocalyptic stakes resonate through human losses rather than only through images and prophecy.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
The script's atmosphere and visual ambition are strong, but the emotional landscape is too relentlessly bleak, which blunts the impact of major beats. Prioritize adding measured emotional contrast: expand brief moments of genuine warmth (e.g., the firefly/Oswin-Aldred beat), seed earlier scenes with small, humanizing details for Baldwin and Edrick, and create deliberate 'valleys' after high-intensity horror sequences so the audience can process and invest. Simplify the final apocalyptic spectacle to center on Cedric's internal transformation and Oswin's earned emergence as the moral core—this will make tragic losses feel earned and the catharsis more powerful.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
The analysis shows a powerful, emotionally rich central arc: Cedric’s movement from guilt and paralysis to active, sacrificial leadership. To strengthen the script, tighten the cause-and-effect between his internal choices and the external supernatural beats. Make Cedric’s moral dilemmas visible through decisive scenes (choices with clear consequences), trim repetitive ritual/prophecy moments, and consolidate or clarify secondary character arcs (Edrick, Aldred, Baldwin, Nhoj) so they each illuminate a specific facet of Cedric’s transformation rather than diffuse the focus. Also set firmer, consistent rules for the supernatural (the seals, riders, mirror-wounds) early so the climax lands emotionally and narratively.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
The script has a powerful central idea — an apocalyptic, faith-versus-despair epic rooted in vivid medieval imagery — but it needs a clearer emotional throughline and sharper character agency. Tighten Cedric’s arc so his internal journey (from doubt/guilt to sacrificial clarity) is unmistakable and earned; prune or consolidate repetitive apocalyptic set-pieces that dilute emotional payoff; and ensure secondary threads (Edrick’s rebellion, Aldred/Oswin’s father-son beats, Baldwin’s crisis of faith) consistently advance the primary theme rather than creating tonal noise. Anchor supernatural motifs to character decisions (make visions and omens respond to choices) so visual spectacle serves psychological stakes and the final renewal feels deserved, not decorative.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
The script's apocalyptic atmosphere and striking imagery are compelling, but the story falters where character motivation and causal logic should anchor the spectacle. The highest priority is to make Edrick's arc believable — seed his resentments and choices earlier, show concrete turning points, and give his betrayal psychological logic. At the same time clarify the mechanics and stakes of the Mire/curse so the escalation from suffering → hysteria → violence feels earned. Small, surgical scenes (short beats of exposition, a private confrontation, or a revealing flashback) and tightened dialogue can preserve tone while restoring emotional cause-and-effect.

Scene Analysis

All of your scenes analyzed individually and compared, so you can zero in on what to improve.

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Other Analyses

Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
Your voice—richly atmospheric, poetic, and ominous—is the script’s greatest asset. Preserve that mood, but let it serve clarity and momentum: trim or tighten passages where description drowns forward action, make character choices and motivations unmistakable in key beats, and vary pacing so moments of lyricism punctuate rather than stall the plot. Keep the archaic diction where it deepens theme, but simplify when it obscures emotional causality. Small structural edits (one clear through-line per act, sharper scene transitions, and more active beats for your protagonists) will let the voice elevate the story rather than overshadow it.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
Your script is powerful visually and tonally — rich atmosphere, clear thematic ambition, and memorable images. To elevate it, tighten the dramatic spine by deepening character arcs and concentrating on subtextual dialogue: let characters reveal motives through conflict, choices and small physical beats rather than explanatory lines. Also trim or rework slow, introspective stretches to preserve momentum and let revelations land emotionally instead of intellectually. Use targeted rewriting exercises (subtext-focused dialogue scenes, monologues to clarify inner logic) and structural reads to translate your strong imagery into sustained audience investment.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
The world is rich, vivid and thematically bold, but the script would benefit most from sharpening the rules and stakes of its supernatural/apocalyptic elements and tying them more directly to character choices. Define how the curse/‘seals’ operate, what exact costs actions incur, and what concrete means (if any) exist to avert or accept the end. Doing so will give emotional weight to Cedric’s decisions, reduce ambiguity that currently diffuses tension, and let the visual, ritualistic and religious imagery support a clearer dramatic engine rather than only creating atmosphere.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
Your script’s strength is its vivid supernatural imagining and consistently strong dialogue, but its emotional payoffs — especially in hopeful or redemptive moments — are underwritten. Tighten and deepen the quieter scenes (the coronation, the mourning, and the final reconciliations) so they carry as much weight as the spectacle: front-load character revelation earlier, let characters show vulnerability with small, specific beats, and use dialogue to amplify internal change rather than merely convey plot. Preserve the apocalyptic lore and visual set pieces, but balance them with amplified, earned emotional catharses so audiences feel the consequences of the horror as well as its cost.
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