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# PG SLUGLINE
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EXT ROW OF SHACKS NIGHT
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INT JAY'S MOTEL ROOM NIGHT
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EXT EDGE OF WOODS – DAWN
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INT CAR DAY
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INT PICKUP TRUCK DAY
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INT CAR DAY
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EXT RURAL DINER DAY
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EXT DEEP WOODS DAY
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EXT WOOD'S EDGE DAY
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EXT COVERED BRIDGE DAY
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EXT TRAIL DAY
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EXT WOOD'S EDGE DAY
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INT HOTEL DAY
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INT HOTEL STAIRCASE NIGHT
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INT HOTEL STAIRCASE LATER
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EXT HOTEL SIDE CONTINUOUS
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INT JAY'S HOTEL ROOM CONTINUOUS
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INT HOTEL FRONT DESK NIGHT
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INT JAY'S HOTEL ROOM NIGHT
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INT JAY'S HOTEL ROOM NIGHT
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INT JAY'S HOTEL ROOM CONTINUOUS
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INT HOTEL 2ND FLOOR LANDING DAY
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INT HOTEL LOBBY DAY
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EXT BARN DAY
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EXT TRAIL IN THE WOODS DAY
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EXT RIVERBANK DAY
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EXT RIVERBANK CONTINUOUS
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EXT TRAIL DAY
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EXT CLEARED LAND DAY
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INT SHACK DAY
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EXT EDGE OF WOODS DAY
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INT PLANTATION MANOR HOUSE - CHAMBER WINDOW DAY
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INT PLANTATION - BACK VERANDA DAY
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EXT PLANTATION SHED DAY
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EXT ENSLAVED PERSONS QUARTERS DAY
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INT PLANTATION MANOR HOUSE - FOYER DAY
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INT STAIRCASE/FOYER – CONTINUOUS
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INT PLANTATION MANOR HOUSE - CHAMBER CONTINUOUS
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INT PLANTATION MANOR HOUSE - CHAMBER CONTINUOUS
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INT PLANTATION MANOR HOUSE - FOYER CONTINUOUS
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EXT MANOR HOUSE CONTINUOUS
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EXT WOODED TRAIL LATER
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EXT HOTEL DUSK
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INT SECOND FLOOR LANDING DUSK
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INT JAY'S HOTEL ROOM CONTINUOUS
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EXT HOTEL - EARLY EVENING
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INT ASSEMBLY ROOM CONTINUOUS
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INT BOTTOM OF BACK STAIRCASE - EARLY EVENING
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INT HOTEL BACK STAIRCASE - EARLY EVENING
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INT HOTEL LOBBY - EARLY EVENING CONTINUOUS
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EXT TRAIL IN THE WOODS - SUNRISE
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EXT COVERED BRIDGE DAY
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EXT DEEP WOODS DAY
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EXT GRAVEYARD DAY
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EXT RESIDENTIAL STREET, BROOKLYN - EARLY EVENING
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INT BROOKLYN TOWNHOUSE MORNING
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EXT NYC PARK - TWILIGHT
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INT SAFE ROOM NIGHT
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EXT PUBLIC THEATER NIGHT
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INT BACKSTAGE CONTINUOUS
Scene Map
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# PG SLUGLINE
1 1
EXT ROW OF SHACKS NIGHT
EXT. ROW OF SHACKS - NIGHT
Confederate Ghosts story by Robert Sherwin & Christopher Williams
2 3
INT JAY'S MOTEL ROOM NIGHT
INT. JAY'S MOTEL ROOM - NIGHT
INT. JAY'S MOTEL ROOM - NIGHT JAY WILLIAMS, late-30s, African-American, in reading glasses, hunched over a laptop, typing. SADIE (V.O.) May the good lord be with you, Lewis.
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EXT EDGE OF WOODS – DAWN
EXT. EDGE OF WOODS – DAWN
EXT. EDGE OF WOODS – DAWN LEWIS emerges from the thick fog. A SYMPHONY of cicadas and morning songbirds. He crouches behind a rock, eyes locked on a distant house. The cellar door CREAKS open. A shadowy FIGURE appears, gently
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INT CAR DAY
INT. CAR - DAY
INT. CAR - DAY Annie, turned away, SNAPS out her SIM card. Jay notices in the mirror. She pockets it, then glances over at him, forced smile. JAY
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INT PICKUP TRUCK DAY
INT. PICKUP TRUCK - DAY
INT. PICKUP TRUCK - DAY A MYSTERY MAN lights a cigarette. Weathered hands. Long nails. Silver bracelets. Skull ring. A rattlesnake wrist tattoo coils around "SEVEN-1." His eyes narrow as he tracks Jay and Annie.
6 9
INT CAR DAY
INT. CAR - DAY
INT. CAR - DAY Annie and Jay pick up where they left off. ANNIE People have been trying for centuries.
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EXT RURAL DINER DAY
EXT. RURAL DINER - DAY
EXT. RURAL DINER - DAY The Sheboygans exit the diner. A white Corvette pulls in. SHEBOYGAN GINNY Nobody's going to believe us—a real battle!
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EXT DEEP WOODS DAY
EXT. DEEP WOODS - DAY
EXT. DEEP WOODS - DAY Jay follows Annie down the path. A low-rolling fog swirls around them. They freeze. Up ahead—a massive statue choked by vines.
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EXT WOOD'S EDGE DAY
EXT. WOOD'S EDGE - DAY
EXT. WOOD'S EDGE - DAY Annie and Jay reach the meadow. Waist-high grass. A wide carpet of emerald leads to the river. They go still, taking in the natural beauty. Jay spots a buckboard wagon, single horse and driver, across
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EXT COVERED BRIDGE DAY
EXT. COVERED BRIDGE - DAY
EXT. COVERED BRIDGE - DAY They duck under cover, wet. Catch their breath. Thunder CRACKS above. Rain DRUMS the roof. Jay spots his water bottle on the ground. JAY
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EXT TRAIL DAY
EXT. TRAIL - DAY
EXT. TRAIL - DAY The wagon rolls along, wheels crunching rhythmically. Terence sits rigid, clad in antebellum farm hand clothes. ANNIE How long have you been working in
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EXT WOOD'S EDGE DAY
EXT. WOOD'S EDGE - DAY
EXT. WOOD'S EDGE - DAY The wagon breaks through the trees and enters a dusty Southern town, circa 1865. EXT. MAIN STREET - DAY Townsfolk bustle about in period clothing—blacksmith
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INT HOTEL DAY
INT. HOTEL - DAY
INT. HOTEL - DAY Jay and Annie step into the dusty lobby, smells of old wood and trapped memories. INTERCUT A coffle of chained PEOPLE passes outside the hotel.
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INT HOTEL STAIRCASE NIGHT
INT. HOTEL STAIRCASE - NIGHT
INT. HOTEL STAIRCASE - NIGHT Jay and Annie appear at the top of the staircase. Annie elegant in an antebellum gown. Jay strikingly handsome, dressed Frederick Douglass-like. Annie missteps and grabs Jay's arm.
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INT HOTEL STAIRCASE LATER
INT. HOTEL STAIRCASE - LATER
INT. HOTEL STAIRCASE - LATER Reaching the second-floor landing, Annie and Jay look down at the boisterous crowd spilling into the lobby. ANNIE What was that?
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EXT HOTEL SIDE CONTINUOUS
EXT. HOTEL SIDE - CONTINUOUS
EXT. HOTEL SIDE - CONTINUOUS The drunk Confederate corporal waves a pistol at a LOCAL FARMER, 65. CORPORAL (stumbles, growling)
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INT JAY'S HOTEL ROOM CONTINUOUS
INT. JAY'S HOTEL ROOM - CONTINUOUS
INT. JAY'S HOTEL ROOM - CONTINUOUS Warm, flickering gaslight. Jay reviews his notes, seated comfortably in an armchair. INT. ANNIE'S HOTEL ROOM - CONTINUOUS Annie rummages through her backpack, frantic.
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INT HOTEL FRONT DESK NIGHT
INT. HOTEL FRONT DESK - NIGHT
INT. HOTEL FRONT DESK - NIGHT An ELDERLY COUPLE stands before Cynthia Wright. Head bowed, Wright shuffles some papers. Then— She looks up, thin smile. CYNTHIA WRIGHT
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INT JAY'S HOTEL ROOM NIGHT
INT. JAY'S HOTEL ROOM - NIGHT
INT. JAY'S HOTEL ROOM - NIGHT Jay picks up his notes. Exhales. JAY Jack expects the first three, two weeks after we're back.
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INT JAY'S HOTEL ROOM NIGHT
INT. JAY'S HOTEL ROOM - NIGHT
INT. JAY'S HOTEL ROOM - NIGHT Jay smiles at Annie's naivete. JAY Lead. ANNIE
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INT JAY'S HOTEL ROOM CONTINUOUS
INT. JAY'S HOTEL ROOM - CONTINUOUS
INT. JAY'S HOTEL ROOM - CONTINUOUS Annie WHISPERS— ANNIE Who was that? JAY
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INT HOTEL 2ND FLOOR LANDING DAY
INT. HOTEL 2ND FLOOR LANDING - DAY
INT. HOTEL 2ND FLOOR LANDING - DAY Jay, dapper in a scaled-down version of his evening suit, locks his door. NELLI (O.S.) 'Morning, sir.
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INT HOTEL LOBBY DAY
INT. HOTEL LOBBY - DAY
INT. HOTEL LOBBY - DAY Dust particles and tobacco smoke hang in pale shafts of light. Jay and Annie at the front desk. Cynthia Wright, paperwork in hand, barely looks up. CYNTHIA WRIGHT
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EXT BARN DAY
EXT. BARN - DAY
EXT. BARN - DAY Terence approaches, leading his horse. The horse's harness CLINKS rhythmically with each step. ANNIE Good morning.
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EXT TRAIL IN THE WOODS DAY
EXT. TRAIL IN THE WOODS - DAY
EXT. TRAIL IN THE WOODS - DAY The wagon rattles along a leafy path. They reach a small cemetery of wooden crosses. Terence pulls on the reins. TERENCE
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EXT RIVERBANK DAY
EXT. RIVERBANK - DAY
EXT. RIVERBANK - DAY Pigeons SCATTER. GENERAL (V.O.) The skirmish began on the vernal equinox. Better part of two days.
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EXT RIVERBANK CONTINUOUS
EXT. RIVERBANK - CONTINUOUS
EXT. RIVERBANK - CONTINUOUS Mist rises. Dying soldiers MOAN. The river runs red. The ghostly General stands among the dead soldiers. Dozens of white orbs rise through the river's mist. The bridge shimmers into existence—then SLAMS into place.
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EXT TRAIL DAY
EXT. TRAIL - DAY
EXT. TRAIL - DAY Jay, Annie and Terence creak along in the wagon. ANNIE He's out of his mind. Jay stares ahead, unsettled.
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EXT CLEARED LAND DAY
EXT. CLEARED LAND - DAY
EXT. CLEARED LAND - DAY The wagon rolls off the trail and into a clearing. Up ahead: a weathered wood shack. Stray chickens peck at the dirt. A mangy mutt dozes on the porch. TERENCE
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INT SHACK DAY
INT. SHACK - DAY
INT. SHACK - DAY Sparse. Dirt floor. A single bed, a table, a hearth. By the hearth sits SADIE, 50s—frail, nearly blind, hands gnarled with arthritis. She knits slowly. The Aide resumes her post beside her.
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EXT EDGE OF WOODS DAY
EXT. EDGE OF WOODS - DAY
EXT. EDGE OF WOODS - DAY Terence watches Annie and Jay approach, their faces grim. Without a word, they climb onto the wagon. Terence feels their unease, then softly flicks the reins.
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INT PLANTATION MANOR HOUSE - CHAMBER WINDOW DAY
INT. PLANTATION MANOR HOUSE - CHAMBER WINDOW - DAY
INT. PLANTATION MANOR HOUSE - CHAMBER WINDOW - DAY The Colonel watches through binoculars, lowering them as a faint smile creeps in. EXT. PLANTATION MANOR HOUSE - FRONT STEPS - DAY
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INT PLANTATION - BACK VERANDA DAY
INT. PLANTATION - BACK VERANDA - DAY
INT. PLANTATION - BACK VERANDA - DAY Annie and the Colonel gaze out at a lush landscape. COLONEL The moment I laid eyes on you, said to myself: that's Annabelle Stewart.
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EXT PLANTATION SHED DAY
EXT. PLANTATION SHED - DAY
EXT. PLANTATION SHED - DAY A surly guard throws Jay threadbare, Negro-cloth overalls. He examines them, looks up in disbelief. JAY You fuckin' kidding?
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EXT ENSLAVED PERSONS QUARTERS DAY
EXT. ENSLAVED PERSONS QUARTERS - DAY
EXT. ENSLAVED PERSONS QUARTERS - DAY Jay, hands bound and in rags, staggers past enslaved people at work—woozy from the blow. Hushed WHISPERS: PERSON1
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INT PLANTATION MANOR HOUSE - FOYER DAY
INT. PLANTATION MANOR HOUSE - FOYER - DAY
INT. PLANTATION MANOR HOUSE - FOYER - DAY Annie and the Colonel stroll past the winding marble staircase. She stops. Turns to him with a razor smile. ANNIE
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INT STAIRCASE/FOYER – CONTINUOUS
INT. STAIRCASE/FOYER – CONTINUOUS
INT. STAIRCASE/FOYER – CONTINUOUS Annie reaches the last step—when she crashes hard on the floor. She motionless, supine. Slight movement. Lifts her head, woozy. Her eyes register the rifle at the front door.
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INT PLANTATION MANOR HOUSE - CHAMBER CONTINUOUS
INT. PLANTATION MANOR HOUSE - CHAMBER - CONTINUOUS
INT. PLANTATION MANOR HOUSE - CHAMBER - CONTINUOUS The wife kneels at a sunlit prayer desk. Finishes Lord's Prayer. She rises and crosses to the dressing table. In the mirror, she unpins a small collar brooch—a gleaming
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INT PLANTATION MANOR HOUSE - CHAMBER CONTINUOUS
INT. PLANTATION MANOR HOUSE - CHAMBER - CONTINUOUS
INT. PLANTATION MANOR HOUSE - CHAMBER - CONTINUOUS The wife stands over the bed folding a silk gown, determined to smooth out every wrinkle. She lifts a pair of evening shoes, pausing mid-air. Her fingers linger on the delicate straps, then slowly sets them
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INT PLANTATION MANOR HOUSE - FOYER CONTINUOUS
INT. PLANTATION MANOR HOUSE - FOYER - CONTINUOUS
INT. PLANTATION MANOR HOUSE - FOYER - CONTINUOUS The wife, in a simple hoop skirt, grips the wide banister and slowly descends the staircase. She carries two travel bags, awkwardly switching hands. An enslaved woman sits on the bottom stair, hunched over,
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EXT MANOR HOUSE CONTINUOUS
EXT. MANOR HOUSE - CONTINUOUS
EXT. MANOR HOUSE - CONTINUOUS The wife stands on the portico, diminished—her Gladstone bag and toiletry sack at her feet. BACK ON JAY JAY
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EXT WOODED TRAIL LATER
EXT. WOODED TRAIL - LATER
EXT. WOODED TRAIL - LATER Terence grips the reins, eyes locked on the road ahead. Annie and Jay stare toward the horizon, both exhausted. A tear tracks down Jay's face. He doesn't wipe it. She reaches for his hand, lacing her fingers through his.
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EXT HOTEL DUSK
EXT. HOTEL - DUSK
EXT. HOTEL - DUSK Terence halts the wagon. Dust swirls. The heavy stillness is broken only by distant cannon FIRE. Confederate soldiers pile rocks and dirt onto the hotel fortification.
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INT SECOND FLOOR LANDING DUSK
INT. SECOND FLOOR LANDING - DUSK
INT. SECOND FLOOR LANDING - DUSK They reach the second-floor landing. Jay scans the hallways. His gaze keeps returning to the battle preparations below. ANNIE Where is she!?
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INT JAY'S HOTEL ROOM CONTINUOUS
INT. JAY'S HOTEL ROOM - CONTINUOUS
INT. JAY'S HOTEL ROOM - CONTINUOUS Jay, in contemporary clothes, blows dust from the locket. He opens it. Gazes wistfully at the faded photo. KNOCK. Jay closes the locket. Door creaks open. It's Nelli.
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EXT HOTEL - EARLY EVENING
EXT. HOTEL - EARLY EVENING
EXT. HOTEL - EARLY EVENING Union riflemen crouch behind scrub, keeping a steady volley on the battered hotel. Lewis locks in the Gatling. A young soldier threads the bullet ribbons. Another slams
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INT ASSEMBLY ROOM CONTINUOUS
INT. ASSEMBLY ROOM - CONTINUOUS
INT. ASSEMBLY ROOM - CONTINUOUS The General storms in, waving his pistol. The Sheboygans are frozen in fear. GENERAL To the stairs! Move! Now!
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INT BOTTOM OF BACK STAIRCASE - EARLY EVENING
INT. BOTTOM OF BACK STAIRCASE - EARLY EVENING
INT. BOTTOM OF BACK STAIRCASE - EARLY EVENING Jay COCKS the revolver against the Rebel's head. The terrified soldier turns—a trembling 14-year-old boy. BOY SOLDIER Please mister...
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INT HOTEL BACK STAIRCASE - EARLY EVENING
INT. HOTEL BACK STAIRCASE - EARLY EVENING
INT. HOTEL BACK STAIRCASE - EARLY EVENING Annie slings the boy's rifle over her shoulder. Nelli and Annie lift Jay to his feet. He grimaces in pain. JAY Union soldiers behind the hedgerow.
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INT HOTEL LOBBY - EARLY EVENING CONTINUOUS
INT. HOTEL LOBBY - EARLY EVENING - CONTINUOUS
INT. HOTEL LOBBY - EARLY EVENING - CONTINUOUS Waving a revolver, the General leads the four Sheboygans onto a covered porch. Joel steps up, chest out. SHEBOYGAN JOEL
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EXT TRAIL IN THE WOODS - SUNRISE
EXT. TRAIL IN THE WOODS - SUNRISE
EXT. TRAIL IN THE WOODS - SUNRISE Terence checks his pocket watch, frowning. TERENCE Seventy-five minutes until you're stuck on this side.
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EXT COVERED BRIDGE DAY
EXT. COVERED BRIDGE - DAY
EXT. COVERED BRIDGE - DAY The wagon pulls up as distant THUNDER rumbles. Terence, Nelli and Annie help Jay down. He steadies himself with a crutch. TERENCE
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EXT DEEP WOODS DAY
EXT. DEEP WOODS - DAY
EXT. DEEP WOODS - DAY Annie follows Jay as he walks steadily up the path. ANNIE Soooo, after he, ummm, sold the factory, he didn't just, you know,
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EXT GRAVEYARD DAY
EXT. GRAVEYARD - DAY
EXT. GRAVEYARD - DAY A small, restless crowd gather in drab funeral attire. Tattered rebel flags mark individual graves. Four pine boxes are carried to the burial sites. Two open
55 80
EXT RESIDENTIAL STREET, BROOKLYN - EARLY EVENING
EXT. RESIDENTIAL STREET, BROOKLYN - EARLY EVENING
EXT. RESIDENTIAL STREET, BROOKLYN - EARLY EVENING A police car SCREECHES to a stop outside a brownstone. Two cops leap from the cruiser, sprint up the stoop. Dog BARKS. Sirens rise, ECHOING down the street. INT. JAY'S APARTMENT - CONTINUOUS
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INT BROOKLYN TOWNHOUSE MORNING
INT. BROOKLYN TOWNHOUSE - MORNING
INT. BROOKLYN TOWNHOUSE - MORNING Doorbell BUZZING. Annie peeks through the blinds. On the stoop—JEFF NOKOVICH, late 20s, backpack slung over his shoulder. He paces, restless.
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EXT NYC PARK - TWILIGHT
EXT. NYC PARK - TWILIGHT
EXT. NYC PARK - TWILIGHT Leaves rustle along a shadowy, deserted path. Jay strides ahead, every step deliberate. Annie stuggles to keep pace. ANNIE
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INT SAFE ROOM NIGHT
INT. SAFE ROOM - NIGHT
INT. SAFE ROOM - NIGHT A bare bulb hums, casting a jaundiced light on Jay. He leans forward on a makeshift desk, hunched over a laptop. Two thumb drives and a half-empty water bottle sit nearby. He scratches his five-day stubble. Scrolls the screen, eyes
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EXT PUBLIC THEATER NIGHT
EXT. PUBLIC THEATER - NIGHT
EXT. PUBLIC THEATER - NIGHT Students and locals cluster outside. The marquee reads: Jay Lewis Williams: "Confederate Ghosts" INT. PUBLIC THEATER - NIGHT Dr. PETE JAROMBEK, Humanities Chair, stands at a lectern
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INT BACKSTAGE CONTINUOUS
INT. BACKSTAGE - CONTINUOUS
INT. BACKSTAGE - CONTINUOUS Noise BLEEDS IN from the auditorium—applause, shouts, chanting. Jay and Annie are SWARMED by SUPPORTERS—hands clapping shoulders, voices overlapping.

Confederate Ghosts

A contemporary investigative writer discovers that a tourist 'Park' hides an immortal Confederacy that literally rewrites the present — and mounts a dangerous plan to rescue those stolen by the past and record the truth for the world.

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Overview

Poster
Unique Selling Point

The script for "Confederate Ghosts" offers a unique and compelling take on the historical drama genre by blending elements of time travel, the supernatural, and the enduring legacy of the Civil War. The story's innovative use of a mysterious re-enactment group as a gateway to the past, coupled with the well-developed characters and their personal journeys, make this script a standout in the genre. The script's exploration of themes such as identity, family, and the cyclical nature of history would resonate with audiences seeking thought-provoking and emotionally engaging narratives.

AI Verdict & Suggestions

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GPT5
 Recommend
Grok
 Consider
Gemini
 Consider
DeepSeek
 Consider
Claude
 Recommend
Average Score: 7.5
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
The analysis highlights that the script's supernatural elements, such as the bridge and portal mechanics, need clearer definition to avoid audience confusion and enhance believability, which is crucial for immersive storytelling. Additionally, addressing pacing issues in the middle act and fleshing out antagonist motivations, like those of the Seven Club, will improve narrative flow and emotional depth, making the story more engaging and thematically resonant from a craft perspective.
For Executives:
The script has strong value in its unique blend of supernatural thriller and historical drama, tackling timely themes of racial legacy that could appeal to socially conscious audiences and festivals, with potential for streaming adaptation. However, risks include unclear supernatural rules that may confuse viewers and lead to poor word-of-mouth, uneven pacing that could bore audiences, and underdeveloped antagonist arcs that weaken the overall threat, potentially limiting commercial success without significant revisions.
Story Facts
Genres:
Drama 50% Fantasy 30% Thriller 40% War 20% Action 15%

Setting: 1862 during the American Civil War and contemporary times, Wainwright Plantation in South Carolina, various locations in the South, and Brooklyn, New York

Themes: The Enduring Legacy of the Civil War and Historical Trauma, History, Memory, and the Quest for Truth, Identity and Lineage, Freedom and Oppression, The Supernatural and the Metaphysical, The Nature of Reality and Perception, Reconciliation and Moving Forward

Conflict & Stakes: The struggle against historical oppression and personal identity, with stakes involving freedom, family reunification, and confronting the legacy of slavery.

Mood: Bittersweet and reflective, with moments of tension and urgency.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The intertwining of historical and contemporary narratives that explore the legacy of slavery.
  • Major Twist: The revelation of Jay's connection to Lewis and the impact of their shared history.
  • Innovative Ideas: The use of ghostly figures to represent unresolved historical trauma.
  • Distinctive Settings: The contrast between the oppressive environment of the plantation and the modern urban settings.
  • Genre Blends: A mix of historical drama, supernatural elements, and social commentary.

Comparable Scripts: 12 Years a Slave, The Underground Railroad, Beloved, The Color Purple, Roots, The Help, Django Unchained, The Nightingale, The Book of Negroes

Data Says…
Feature in Alpha - Could have inaccuracies

Our stats model looked at how your scores work together and ranked the changes most likely to move your overall rating next draft. Ordered by the most reliable gains first.

1. Character Development (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Character Development (Script Level) score: 8.0
Typical rewrite gain: +0.5 in Character Development (Script Level)
Gets you ~4% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Confidence: High (based on ~2,065 similar revisions)
  • This is currently your highest-impact lever. Improving Character Development (Script Level) is most likely to move the overall rating next.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Character Development (Script Level) by about +0.5 in one rewrite.
  • Why it matters: At your level, improving this one area alone can cover a meaningful slice of the climb toward an "all Highly Recommends" script.
2. Theme (Script Level)
Moderate Impact Script Level
Your current Theme (Script Level) score: 8.0
Typical rewrite gain: +0.45 in Theme (Script Level)
Gets you ~3% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Confidence: High (based on ~3,490 similar revisions)
  • This is another meaningful lever. After you work on the higher-impact areas, this can still create a noticeable lift.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Theme (Script Level) by about +0.45 in one rewrite.
  • Why it matters: After you address the top item, gains here are still one of the levers that move you toward that "all Highly Recommends" zone.
3. Conflict (Script Level)
Moderate Impact Script Level
Your current Conflict (Script Level) score: 7.6
Typical rewrite gain: +0.65 in Conflict (Script Level)
Gets you ~2% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Confidence: High (based on ~2,057 similar revisions)
  • This is another meaningful lever. After you work on the higher-impact areas, this can still create a noticeable lift.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Conflict (Script Level) by about +0.65 in one rewrite.
  • Why it matters: After you address the top item, gains here are still one of the levers that move you toward that "all Highly Recommends" zone.

Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

Screenplay Insights

Breaks down your script along various categories.

Overall Score: 7.95
Key Suggestions:
To improve the script creatively, focus on deepening the backstories of supporting characters like the Colonel to add nuance and heighten conflict, while refining the pacing of emotional revelations and plot transitions to allow for greater audience immersion and emotional resonance. Incorporating more moments of silence or reflection in key scenes can enhance the overall craft, making character arcs more compelling and the narrative flow smoother.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
To elevate 'Confederate Ghosts,' focus on refining pacing to ensure consistent momentum, particularly in the middle sections, by condensing scenes and integrating supernatural elements more tightly with character emotions. This will strengthen emotional resonance, reduce exposition in dialogue for more natural interactions, and create a cohesive narrative that deeply engages audiences with its themes of history and identity.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The character analysis highlights that while protagonists Annie and Jay are well-developed with strong emotional cores, opportunities exist to deepen the arcs of supporting characters like Terence and Nelli by clarifying their transformation triggers and motivations. Enhancing dialogue to reflect internal conflicts and integrating more backstory elements could amplify emotional resonance, making the script more engaging and thematically cohesive, ultimately strengthening the narrative's exploration of history and identity.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
The script excels in building tension and empathy but suffers from emotional imbalance, with prolonged high-intensity scenes causing audience fatigue. To improve, focus on incorporating more emotional variety and recovery moments, such as adding lighter interactions between characters and strategic pauses after intense sequences, to create a more nuanced, engaging narrative that allows deeper audience connection without overwhelming them.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
The script masterfully weaves personal and historical conflicts to explore themes of identity and freedom, but to elevate its craft, focus on tightening the resolution of philosophical conflicts, such as 'Freedom vs. Oppression', by ensuring clearer character-driven moments of reconciliation. This would deepen emotional stakes and provide a more cohesive narrative arc, making the story more impactful and resonant with audiences seeking meaningful social commentary.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
The script's primary theme of the enduring legacy of the Civil War is compelling and well-integrated, but to elevate the craft, focus on refining the supernatural elements to ensure they serve as metaphors for historical trauma rather than overshadowing character development. Enhancing emotional depth in scenes involving identity and memory, such as Jay's arc, could make the narrative more resonant and avoid potential pacing issues in the transitions between past and present.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
To enhance the script's creative integrity, focus on tightening supernatural elements for logical consistency, such as defining clear rules for the portal and character persistence, and ensure character arcs evolve naturally rather than being plot-driven. Additionally, streamline redundancies in themes and action sequences to improve pacing and authenticity, allowing for deeper emotional connections and a more immersive narrative that respects historical and fantastical elements.

Scene Analysis

All of your scenes analyzed individually and compared, so you can zero in on what to improve.

Scene-Level Percentile Chart
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Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
To improve the script from a creative and craft perspective, focus on amplifying the strengths of your atmospheric and tension-filled voice by ensuring that sparse dialogue is balanced with moments of introspection to deepen character arcs and thematic resonance. Consider varying pacing to avoid over-reliance on suspense, allowing for more emotional variety that complements the historical weight and mystery, ultimately making the narrative more engaging and accessible without diluting its core identity-driven essence.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
The screenplay's strengths lie in its tension and thematic depth, but to enhance its creative impact, focus on refining dialogue for more subtle subtext, tightening pacing to sustain suspense, and deepening character development to explore internal motivations. By incorporating these improvements, the writer can create a more nuanced and emotionally resonant narrative that fully realizes the story's potential in blending historical and contemporary elements.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
The script's world-building effectively blends historical and modern elements to create tension and thematic depth, but to enhance creative impact, focus on refining the transitions between eras for smoother immersion and ensuring cultural and societal depictions avoid stereotypes. This will strengthen character arcs, particularly for figures like Jay and Annie, by making their interactions with the environment more nuanced and emotionally resonant, ultimately elevating the narrative's suspense and thematic exploration.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
The scene pattern analysis highlights your script's strengths in building tension and emotional depth, but suggests refining areas where emotional and reflective tones slow story progression, and dialogue in chaotic or social scenes lacks nuance. To enhance craft, focus on ensuring transitional moments propel the narrative more dynamically and integrate clearer catalysts for character change in introspective beats, maintaining a balance between internal development and plot advancement for a more cohesive and engaging story.
Loglines
Presents logline variations based on theme, genre, and hook.