APEX

When a wildlife officer investigating a brutal, inexplicable attack uncovers a buried army lab and a fungal intelligence that is turning the Rockies into a living hive, she must choose between stopping the contagion or becoming the mountain’s final, terrifying apex.

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

APEX distinguishes itself through its unique biological horror premise where the infection isn't just a disease but a sentient ecosystem that rewrites nature itself. The protagonist's personal connection to the outbreak through her father's research creates emotional stakes rarely seen in creature features, while the concept of the mountain as a living, breathing antagonist elevates it beyond typical monster movies.

AI Verdict & Suggestions

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GPT5
 Recommend
Gemini
 Recommend
Claude
 Recommend
Grok
 Recommend
DeepSeek
 Recommend
Average Score: 8.3
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
APEX has a powerful central metaphor, striking set pieces, and a compelling protagonist arc — but it needs surgical rewrites to turn spectacle into resonance. Prioritize clarifying the origin and mechanics of Project APEX (why Ray used his DNA, how the spore transmits and limits), tighten the bloated middle-act by combining or pruning repetitive investigation beats, and deepen two or three supporting characters (especially Jack and at least one townsperson) so their deaths carry emotional weight. Rework the lab/hazmat scenes so exposition is spread across discovery-driven moments rather than one big info-dump, and sharpen the ending’s moral note so Clare’s transformation reads as an earned thematic choice rather than ambiguity for its own sake.
For Executives:
This script is a high-concept, visually marketable eco-body-horror with strong commercial set pieces (opening attack, diner siege, mine chamber, ridge duel) and a memorable protagonist. It’s attractive for genre labels and auteur directors, but current weakness in character depth, unclear military/backstory mechanics, and a deliberately ambiguous finale raise risk for mainstream audiences and sales. A focused rewrite — clarifying Project APEX’s timeline/rules, tightening mid-act pacing, and adding clear emotional payoffs — would materially reduce creative risk and increase buyer confidence without changing the core spectacle or budget profile (expect practical/CG creature FX and location costs).
Story Facts
Genres:
Horror 50% Thriller 40% Science Fiction 25% Action 30% Drama 25% Fantasy 15%

Setting: Present day, Rocky Mountains, primarily in a dense forest, a remote mountain town, and an abandoned military facility

Themes: The Primal Power and Untamed Nature of the Wild, Humanity's Reckless Ambition and the Unintended Consequences of Science, Transformation and Adaptation (Human and Animal), The Clash Between Reason/Science and Instinct/Primal Force, Survival and Resilience in the Face of Overwhelming Odds, The Cycle of Destruction and Rebirth/Reclamation, The Burden of Legacy and Family Secrets, Faith vs. Science as Modes of Understanding and Survival

Conflict & Stakes: Clare and Jack face a supernatural threat in the Rocky Mountains while dealing with Clare's transformation and the mystery of a deadly creature, with their lives and the safety of the town at stake.

Mood: Suspenseful and eerie, with moments of horror and introspection.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The transformation of Clare into a supernatural being tied to the mountain, blending horror with ecological themes.
  • Major Twist: Clare's internal struggle with her identity as she embraces her predatory nature, culminating in a climactic battle with the Alpha.
  • Distinctive Setting: The Rocky Mountains serve as both a beautiful and terrifying backdrop, enhancing the story's tension and atmosphere.
  • Innovative Ideas: The screenplay explores themes of environmental degradation and the consequences of human actions on nature.

Comparable Scripts: The Ritual, Annihilation, The Descent, Into the Wild, The Thing, Pet Sematary, The Call of the Wild, The Revenant, The Edge

Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

Screenplay Insights

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Overall Score: 8.43
Key Suggestions:
Focus your next pass on sharpening the emotional core: deepen at least one or two supporting characters (Sandy, Walter or Bill) so their choices and deaths carry personal weight, and interleave stronger, earlier foreshadowing of Clare’s connection to the biohazard (her father/Project Apex). These changes will make the supernatural escalation feel earned, smooth abrupt emotional shifts, and give Clare’s transformation greater thematic payoff without changing the plot’s spine.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
The script has a powerful core — a lived-in protagonist, a unique ‘living mountain’ antagonist, and a tense escalation from mystery to visceral horror — but the emotional payoff needs tightening. Most importantly, Clare’s metamorphosis and acceptance of the Apex power should be earned: add earlier, subtle beats (physical symptoms, fleeting sensory connections, psychological slips, or small moral/ethical compromises tied to her father’s research) so her final choice reads like a culmination rather than an abrupt turn. Also tighten the Alpha’s origin and the science of the infection so the mythology feels logically tied to Project Apex and not purely supernatural.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
Tighten character cause-and-effect so emotional payoffs land. Right now Clare’s physical metamorphosis is visceral, but it risks feeling unearned because the script under-foreshadows her internal shift and the infection’s personal stakes. Anchor her transformation with earlier, repeatable motifs (asthma, golden veins, brief hallucinations, a mid-point confrontation about her father) and give Jack incremental beats that escalate his bond with Clare so his sacrifice resonates. Small structural tweaks—one explicit mid-point crisis, recurring visual motifs, and a scene that shows Clare attempting (and failing) to act before a major loss—will strengthen motivation and make the climax emotionally credible.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
The script's emotional engine is strong—Clare's arc, Jack's sacrifice, and the mountain-as-character deliver powerful beats—but the second half sustains near-constant high-intensity terror, which risks numbing the audience before the climax. Introduce more deliberate emotional valleys: extend moments of grief and reflection after major losses, expand brief warm or humanizing scenes (e.g., deepen Sandy/Walter backstory and the diner connection), and add one or two small, quiet interludes between major set pieces so the shocks land with more weight. Also sprinkle moments of conflicted curiosity or awe amid the horror to give your characters more layered responses and make Clare’s transformation feel earned rather than inevitable.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
The analysis shows the script’s emotional power hinges on Clare’s philosophical arc — her move from survival to active acceptance of a hybrid identity. Right now that transition risks feeling sudden because the internal justification (why she chooses the mountain’s logic over human morality) isn’t tracked tightly enough in the early and middle acts. Strengthen and space the emotional beats that show her changing beliefs: more scenes that layer her father’s influence, the lab revelations, and incremental moments where Clare chooses agency (not just reaction). Make the final embrace feel earned by giving the audience a clear, observable progression of doubt → conflict → deliberate choice, and by showing the costs of that choice so the theme of humanity vs nature lands with real stakes.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
To enhance the script, consider deepening the exploration of Clare's internal conflict between her scientific background and her primal transformation. This could be achieved through more nuanced dialogue and character interactions that highlight her struggle, making her eventual acceptance of her new identity more impactful. Additionally, refining the pacing of the horror elements to build tension gradually will help maintain audience engagement and amplify the emotional stakes throughout the narrative.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
The script's strongest asset is its atmosphere and escalating set pieces, but several core logic breaks undercut emotional payoff. The priority is to tighten the story rules around the infection/origin and to make Clare's arc earn her final transformation and choices. Rework the lab-materials, containment history, and the mechanics of immunity so that later events (Clare’s infection, the Alpha’s voice, the hazmat team's behavior) follow logically and are foreshadowed. Also give key character beats—especially Jack's sacrifice and Clare's final acceptance—clearer buildup so they land emotionally rather than feeling driven purely by plot necessity.

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Other Analyses

Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
You have a powerful, consistent voice that excels at building dread through vivid sensory detail and sparse, hard-hitting dialogue. To elevate the script, preserve that atmospheric language but sharpen the dramatic engine: tighten scenes that are heavily descriptive but low on forward momentum, clarify Clare’s emotional stake and decision-making earlier, and use sensory beats to advance plot or character rather than only to set mood. Streamline the Project Apex exposition so it feels earned and discovered, not dumped, and let key emotional reversals (loss, sacrifice, transformation) land by pairing them with clearer character choices.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
You already excel at atmosphere, sensory detail, and sustained tension. The single biggest creative win will come from sharpening dialogue and subtext so characters reveal themselves through choice, action, and silence rather than stating feelings or plot facts. Target a handful of pivotal scenes (morgue, diner, Clare/Jack exchanges, and key flashbacks) for rewrite: strip overt exposition, add restrained beats, and let environment and physical behavior carry emotional truth. Pair those rewrites with a pacing experiment—slow one or two tension scenes and compress at least one quieter moment—to diversify dramatic rhythm and deepen theme without sacrificing momentum.
Memorable Lines
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Tropes
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World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
You have a powerful eco-horror premise and a visceral sequence of set pieces, but the script needs a tighter throughline: clarify the origin and internal rules of the threat and make every spectacle serve Clare’s emotional arc. Trim or rework scenes that feel like disconnected shocks so they escalate logically from investigation to revelation to confrontation. Ground the high-concept infection/mountain mythology with concrete mechanics (how it spreads, what it wants, what it costs Clare) and thread smaller, character-driven beats through action sequences so the audience cares as much about Clare’s transformation as they do about the monsters.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
Your screenplay’s biggest strength is clear: relentlessly high stakes fuel powerful emotional payoff and steady plot momentum. Lean into that by making every major scare or escalation have a concrete, personal consequence for Clare (and other core characters) so the audience always feels the cost. At the same time, introduce sharper tonal variety — use quieter, reflective or awe-filled beats (which the analysis shows can elevate dialogue and characterization) to recharge the audience before the next terror beat and to deepen Clare’s emotional arc. Finally, tighten the ‘rules’ of the infection/Project Apex on the page: specific, repeatable rules will make the horrifying moments more satisfying and the climax more earned.
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