SEVENTY TIMES SEVEN - Final Draft

After surviving childhood abuse at the hands of his mother and sister, a pastor-turned-writer (Sean Grayson) must choose whether to carry his rage or practice the radical Christian forgiveness he's been preaching—while his fractured family and his church press him toward a final reconciliation.

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

This screenplay offers a rare, unflinching look at religious trauma and redemption from within the faith community itself, combining the emotional depth of abuse recovery narratives with the spiritual journey of forgiveness in a way that could appeal to both faith-based and general audiences seeking stories of resilience.

AI Verdict & Suggestions

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GPT5
 Recommend
Gemini
 Consider
Grok
 Recommend
Claude
 Recommend
DeepSeek
 Consider
Average Score: 7.5
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
Tighten the spine: the script’s emotional core — a pastor’s journey from childhood abuse to hard-won forgiveness — is powerful and marketable, but the middle acts read episodic and several subplots (notably Joan’s reincarnation thread) feel dangling or tonally at odds. Do a surgical rewrite: prune scenes that only move time forward, consolidate or remove the Joan material unless you can fully integrate its stakes into J’net/Sean arcs, and add concrete, realistic aftermath for abuse (therapy, CPS/legal threads or clearly-portrayed restorative steps). Deepen J’net’s inner motive so her cruelty registers as complex rather than cartoonish, trim on‑the‑nose VO/dialogue, and show change through behavior rather than exposition. Those moves will unify tone, increase dramatic credibility, and let the forgiveness payoff land emotionally without feeling naïve.
For Executives:
High commercial potential in the faith-based and adult-drama marketplace: strong emotional hook, distinctive USP (a male survivor pastor who preaches what he must practice), and clear ancillary opportunities (book, soundtrack, church outreach). Risks: the current draft is long and episodic, with an unresolved supernatural-leaning subplot and limited realistic accountability for child neglect/abuse — issues that could alienate both mainstream and faith audiences and complicate marketing. Before greenlighting, require a focused rewrite to tighten structure, resolve or remove the Joan thread, and ensure responsible, realistic handling of abuse and restorative/justice elements. With those fixes the project could perform solidly with faith-forward audiences and cross over to broader prestige drama positioning.
Story Facts
Genres:
Drama 70% Comedy 10% Romance 15%

Setting: Present day, spanning several years from childhood to adulthood, Primarily set in suburban neighborhoods, churches, hospitals, and a coffee shop in the United States

Themes: Healing from Trauma and the Power of Forgiveness, Family Dysfunction and Cycles of Abuse, The Search for Belonging and Identity, Faith and Redemption, Resilience and Survival, The Complexity of Mother-Child Relationships, Generational Trauma and Breaking Cycles, The Nature of Love and Acceptance

Conflict & Stakes: Sean's struggle to confront and forgive his abusive past while dealing with family dynamics and the impact of his mother's actions on his life.

Mood: Reflective and somber, with moments of hope and healing.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The exploration of forgiveness and healing from childhood trauma, making it relatable and impactful.
  • Character Development: Sean's journey from victimhood to empowerment and forgiveness provides a compelling arc.
  • Emotional Depth: The screenplay delves into complex family dynamics and the impact of abuse, offering a raw and honest portrayal.
  • Relatable Themes: Themes of forgiveness and personal growth resonate with a wide audience, enhancing its appeal.

Comparable Scripts: The Pursuit of Happyness, A Beautiful Mind, This Is Us, The Glass Castle, Ordinary People, The Fault in Our Stars, Little Fires Everywhere, The Kite Runner, The Help

Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

Screenplay Insights

Breaks down your script along various categories.

Overall Score: 8.41
Key Suggestions:
Your script's emotional core is powerful thanks to Sean's arc, but the drama will gain real traction if you deepen and diversify the supporting cast and tighten repetitive confrontations. Prioritize giving Ray and Darlene distinct inner lives and clear, scene-level choices that intersect with Sean's journey (short scenes showing Ray's guilt/agency and Darlene's motivations will do more than extra exposition). Consolidate or rework recurring, similar mother/son conflict beats so each confrontation escalates stakes or reveals new information. Reduce heavy-handed voice-over by converting some lines into visual beats or subtexted dialogue, and use recurring motifs (thermos, ashes, cross) more dynamically to show emotional change rather than tell it.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
The screenplay has a powerful central arc—Sean’s journey from abused child to forgiving pastor—but it’s currently diluted by too many side threads and exposition-heavy scenes. Trim or combine supporting arcs (Joan, Darlene, some historical detours) so the story stays rooted in Sean’s emotional through-line. Replace some voice-over with visual, sensory moments that let the audience witness trauma and healing (one quiet shot can carry more weight than an explanatory monologue). Give key traumatic beats and the mother/daughter confrontations more breathing room so they land emotionally, and make J’net’s earliest scenes foreshadow her later collapse more clearly to build empathy and causal logic.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
You have a powerful protagonist and a clear thematic spine (forgiveness / 70x7). To make the emotional payoff inevitable rather than fortunate, strengthen Sean's mid‑story struggle: add an active, visceral moment where he resists forgiveness (a setback or relapse) and show more private interior work (journaling, a raw counseling session, a late-night prayer/flashback) so his final graveside release feels earned. At the same time, deepen key supporting players—most urgently Michelle—so they are more than stabilizers: give Michelle small but decisive choices, a voice of conflict, and a brief personal beat or backstory that explains her steadfastness. These changes will make relationships feel reciprocal and amplify the screenplay’s emotional stakes.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
The script's emotional core is powerful, but the current pacing concentrates too much trauma into prolonged stretches, which risks numbing the audience. Spread intense beats across the timeline, insert short but genuine moments of comfort or human connection within and immediately after traumatic scenes, and smooth transitions between home horror and church hope. Also deepen a few secondary arcs (especially Ray and J'net) with brief vulnerable beats so the audience can empathize rather than only recoil. These edits will preserve the story's emotional truth while keeping viewers engaged and able to absorb the payoff.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
The script’s emotional core — Sean’s move from victimhood to forgiveness — is compelling but needs sharper dramatic wiring. Tighten the arc so the philosophical conflict (forgiveness vs. resentment) isn’t just narrated or summarized in therapy and voice-over but is repeatedly tested by concrete choices and escalating costs. Make each major beat (confrontations with Renee and J’net, the church coup, pastoral crises, the graveside forgiveness) feel earned by showing active decisions, setbacks, and consequences. Reduce redundancy in montage/exposition, deepen the antagonistic force (how family dynamics and faith communities push/pull Sean), and ensure the final forgiveness is a payoff that grew out of visible, difficult sacrifices rather than a tidy emotional release.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
The screenplay’s emotional core — healing from trauma through forgiveness — is compelling but currently often told instead of dramatized. Tighten the arc by turning internal narration and explanatory montages into concrete, active scenes where Sean must choose forgiveness (or withhold it) under pressure; deepen the antagonists’ motives (especially J'net and Renee) so their cruelty feels earned and the eventual forgiveness feels costly. Trim repetitive exposition, streamline time jumps, and let small, lived moments (a single confrontation, a failed attempt, a sacramental act) carry the theme instead of relying on summary voice-over.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
The script’s emotional core — Sean’s journey from wounded child to forgiven, healed pastor — is undermined by uneven characterization (most notably J'net and Renee) and a few unresolved plot mechanics (e.g., no follow-through after medical/CPS warnings). Tighten character arcs: give J'net believable, gradual beats that explain her swings between warmth and violence, and build Renee’s redemption with incremental, motivated change. Also resolve or dramatize the CPS/medical follow-up so consequences feel real. Finally, consolidate repetitive forgiveness/dialogue moments so each scene advances theme or character rather than restating it.

Scene Analysis

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Other Analyses

Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
Your voice is a powerful mix of intimate emotional realism and spiritual reflection; the script's strength is its commitment to showing long-term trauma and the slow, complicated work of forgiveness. To improve, tighten the narrative by sharpening Sean's through-line so his internal transformation feels earned rather than episodic. Cut or consolidate scenes that repeat the same damage/reaction beats, deepen a few pivotal confrontations (the abuse revelation, the C-section/accident fallout, and the graveside forgiveness) so the emotional pivots land hard, and watch tonal shifts between faith-messaging and raw family violence to keep empathy without drifting into sermonizing or melodrama.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
Your screenplay already excels at emotional truth and creating poignant moments. To lift it from powerful scenes into a fully resonant feature, concentrate on clarifying inner motivation and sharpening subtext. Create deep character profiles (core fear, desire, formative memory), then re-map key scenes so every action and line either advances a want or reveals a hidden need. Use the provided exercises (scene rewrites focused on subtext and alternative conflict escalations) to turn exposition into implication and make resolutions feel earned rather than declarative.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
You have a richly detailed, emotionally powerful multi-decade story with clear thematic bones (trauma, faith, forgiveness). To improve craft, tighten focus: anchor the sprawling timeline to Sean's emotional throughline so each time-jump advances a single, clear arc. Strengthen show-don't-tell by using recurring visual motifs (thermos, cross, horse) as emotional anchors, trim or compress montage-heavy stretches, and make sure each supporting character has a clear, active motivation that either propels or blocks Sean’s growth. Finally, balance spiritual language and realism—keep faith scenes emotionally specific rather than didactic to avoid sentimentality and earn the final forgiveness payoff.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
The analysis shows your screenplay’s emotional high points are the engine that actually advance the plot — scenes rated highest for emotional impact also move the story forward most effectively. Tighten the script around those moments: amplify stakes in emotionally charged sequences, make reflective/nostalgic scenes serve a clear plot or character-change function, and prune or condense low-stakes ‘heartwarming’ moments that slow momentum. Keep the strong dialogue, but ensure each scene either forces a choice, escalates conflict, or delivers a measurable character change so forgiveness and catharsis feel earned rather than repetitive.
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