Alumni
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USP: This script offers a unique blend of technical accuracy, emotional depth, and character-driven storytelling. It stands out from others in its genre by authentically portraying a range of complex characters and their interconnected lives. The script explores themes of trauma, healing, and personal growth, creating a compelling and immersive narrative. With its vivid atmosphere, engaging dialogue, and introspective voice, this script will captivate its target audience and leave a lasting impact as a powerful piece of storytelling.
Overview
Genres: Drama, Thriller, Horror, Mystery, Medical, Coming-of-age, Teen Drama, Crime, Comedy
Setting: 2003 and 2023, Ravenwood High School, hospital, police department, and various other locations
Overview: The screenplay achieves a strong overall score due to its compelling characters, emotionally resonant themes, and effective blend of genres. However, opportunities exist to refine pacing, deepen character arcs, and enhance plot originality.
Themes: Survival, Trauma and Healing, High School Memories, Guilt and Regret, Connection and Friendship, Identity and Self-Reflection, Violence and its Consequences, Memory and Nostalgia, Responsibility and Accountability
Conflict and Stakes: The primary conflicts in this story include the violent attack on Mark and the other students, the discovery of opioids in a patient's system, the unresolved cases at the police department, and the emotional struggles of the characters. The stakes involve their safety, reputation, and personal growth.
Overall Mood: Tense and introspective
Mood/Tone at Key Scenes:
- Scene 3: Sudden, brutal, and shocking
- Scene 10: Lively and bustling
- Scene 15: Sudden, brutal, and shocking
- Scene 20: Intense and urgent
- Scene 25: Reflective and heavy
- Scene 30: Weariness, self-loathing, curiosity, dread, and focused energy
- Scene 35: Reflective and nostalgic
- Scene 40: Pride, joy, and inner conflict
- Scene 45: Suspense, captivation, and underlying emotional turmoil
- Scene 50: Light and casual
- Scene 55: Somber and reflective
- Scene 60: Tired and deflated, weariness, self-loathing, curiosity, dread, and focused energy
- Scene 65: Frustration and determination
- Scene 70: Light and casual
- Scene 75: Suspenseful and uncertain
- Scene 80: Tense and chaotic, terrifying, and tragic
- Scene 85: Suspense, captivation, and underlying emotional turmoil
- Scene 90: Light-hearted and humorous, frustration and determination
- Scene 95: Tense and suspenseful, fear, desperation, and horror
- Scene 100: Suspenseful and anxious
- Scene 105: Tense and apprehensive
- Scene 110: Tense, terrifying, and tragic
- Scene 115: Suspenseful and mysterious, horrifying
- Scene 120: Fast-paced and intense
- Scene 125: Tense and heated
- Scene 130: Tense and apprehensive
- Scene 135: Tense and heated
- Scene 140: Tense and apprehensive
- Scene 145: Tense and confrontational
- Scene 150: Contemplative and introspective
- Scene 155: Tense and confrontational
- Scene 160: Resolve, hesitation, and vulnerability
- Scene 165: Tense and confrontational
- Scene 170: Resolve, hesitation, and vulnerability
- Scene 175: Tense and confrontational
- Scene 180: Resolve, hesitation, and vulnerability
- Scene 185: Tense and confrontational
- Scene 190: Resolve, hesitation, and vulnerability
- Scene 195: Tense and confrontational
- Scene 200: Resolve, hesitation, and vulnerability
Standout Features:
- Violent Attack: The shocking and brutal attack on Mark and the other students creates a sense of urgency and danger.
- Survivor's Journey : The exploration of trauma and the characters' journey towards healing and redemption.
- High School Reunion : The reunion serves as a catalyst for the characters to confront their past and face their demons.
- Mystery and Suspense : The screenplay incorporates elements of mystery and suspense, keeping the audience engaged and guessing.
- Exploration of Social Issues : The screenplay delves into relevant social issues such as drug addiction, violence, and the impact of past events on individuals and communities.
Comparable Scripts:
Market Analysis
Budget Estimate:$10-15 million
Target Audience Demographics: Adults aged 25-54, fans of drama, thriller, and mystery genres
Marketability: The screenplay explores compelling themes and features a diverse cast, which can attract a wide audience.
The unique blend of genres and the exploration of relevant social themes make this screenplay stand out in the market.
The gripping storyline and compelling characters have the potential to generate buzz and attract critical acclaim.
Profit Potential: Moderate to high, due to the strong appeal to a wide adult audience and potential for critical recognition and awards
Scene Level Percentiles
Emotions Elicited Percentiles
This is a rough estimate of how the average intensity of emotions elicited in this script compare to all scripts in the Vault (all genres).
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Screenplay Analysis
- The screenplay excels in character development, with a percentile ranking of 91.07%. This indicates that the characters are well-rounded and engaging, which can greatly enhance the audience's emotional connection to the story.
- The structure score of 100% is a significant strength, suggesting that the screenplay follows a well-defined and effective narrative structure. This can contribute to a cohesive and engaging storytelling experience.
- The screenplay received a low percentile ranking of 19.32% in external goal score. This suggests that the external motivations and objectives of the characters may not be well-defined or compelling enough. The writer could focus on strengthening the clarity and significance of the characters' external goals.
- The unpredictability score of 10% indicates that the screenplay lacks surprises or unexpected twists. Adding more elements of surprise and unpredictability can make the story more engaging and keep the audience intrigued.
Based on the percentile patterns, the writer demonstrates strengths in character development and dialogue, indicating a potential style focused on creating compelling and well-rounded characters with engaging dialogue.
Balancing Elements- To balance the screenplay more effectively, the writer could work on improving the conflict level, which received a percentile ranking of 32.59%. Increasing the conflict and tension in the story can heighten the stakes and create a more engaging narrative.
- The pacing score and engagement score both received low percentile rankings of 21.59%. The writer could focus on improving the pacing of the story to maintain the audience's interest throughout, and enhancing the overall engagement by creating more captivating and immersive scenes.
Based on the percentile rankings, the writer leans more towards being conceptual, with higher percentiles in plot and concept elements and lower percentiles in character and dialogue elements.
Overall AssessmentThe screenplay shows potential with its strong character development, engaging dialogue, and adherence to a solid narrative structure. However, improvements are needed in defining external goals, adding unpredictability, increasing conflict, and enhancing pacing and engagement.
How scenes compare to the Scripts in our Library
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Script Structure | 8.76 | 100 | - | - |
Scene Overall | 8.8 | 95 | Ex-Machina: 8.7 | the dark knight rises: 8.8 |
Scene Emotional Impact | 8.7 | 93 | A Complete Unknown: 8.6 | Titanic: 8.7 |
Script Conflict | 8.40 | 93 | Memento: 8.30 | Scott pilgrim vs. the world: 8.40 |
Scene Formatting | 9.00 | 92 | Baby Driver: 8.98 | Severance: 9.00 |
Scene Characters | 8.7 | 86 | Ex-Machina: 8.6 | Easy A: 8.7 |
Script Theme | 8.70 | 82 | The Founder: 8.60 | severance (TV): 8.70 |
Scene Character Changes | 7.5 | 78 | American Fiction: 7.4 | fight Club: 7.5 |
Script Originality | 8.10 | 62 | A Complete Unknown: 8.00 | Titanic: 8.10 |
Script Characters | 8.10 | 61 | Pirates of the Caribbean: 8.00 | Erin Brokovich: 8.10 |
Script Structure | 7.90 | 54 | Argo: 7.80 | Black mirror 304: 7.90 |
1 | 50 | - | The Founder: 1 | |
Scene Plot | 8.0 | 49 | Triangle of sadness: 7.9 | True Blood: 8.0 |
Script Visual Impact | 7.70 | 48 | American Fiction: 7.60 | face/off: 7.70 |
Scene High Stakes | 7.4 | 47 | Women talking: 7.3 | True Blood: 7.4 |
Overall Script | 8.05 | 45 | The Fabelmans: 8.00 | Lucifer: 8.05 |
Scene Dialogue | 7.7 | 41 | Sherlock Holmes: 7.6 | Erin Brokovich: 7.7 |
Script Premise | 7.90 | 39 | Zootopia: 7.80 | fight Club: 7.90 |
Script Emotional Impact | 7.60 | 35 | A real pain : 7.50 | Breaking Bad: 7.60 |
Scene Conflict Level | 7.2 | 35 | The wild robot: 7.1 | Bonnie and Clyde: 7.2 |
Scene Pacing | 8.14 | 24 | Promising young woman: 8.13 | Arsenic and old lace : 8.14 |
Scene Story Forward | 7.5 | 17 | Community: 7.4 | Easy A: 7.5 |
Scene Concept | 7.8 | 15 | Swingers: 7.7 | Erin Brokovich: 7.8 |
Scene External Goal | 7.00 | 12 | A real pain : 6.98 | Everything Everywhere All at Once: 7.00 |
Scene Internal Goal | 7.95 | 7 | Queens Gambit: 7.93 | Silence of the lambs: 7.95 |
Scene Originality | 6.26 | 5 | Killers of the flower moon: 6.22 | Suits: 6.33 |
Scene Engagement | 8.29 | 5 | Donnie Darko: 8.21 | Breaking bad, episode 306: 8.29 |
Scene Unpredictability | 6.36 | 1 | Mind Hunter: 6.20 | Killers of the flower moon: 6.38 |
Writer's Voice
Summary:The writer's voice is characterized by a blend of concise, descriptive, and introspective narrative, with a focus on personal growth, healing, and empathetic dialogue. The author creates a balance between technical and emotional aspects, contributing to a realistic and engaging atmosphere.
Best representation: Scene 3 - Life-saving Efforts Fail in the Emergency Room. This scene is the best representation of the author's voice because it showcases their ability to create a tense and urgent atmosphere, while also focusing on the characters' emotional responses and their determination to protect themselves. The descriptive narrative and character-driven dialogue create a vivid and engaging scene that highlights the writer's unique voice.
Memorable Lines:
- Jasmine: ABOVE ALL, WE RISE (Scene 19)
- Chris: We're not cats. We're Raptors! And what do Raptors do? Above all, we rise... even if some of us have put on a bit of weight since high school. (Scene 40)
- Chris: To Rachel, to Liam, to Tyler, to Sarah, to Mark, to Kevin. So long as we say their names, they will never truly die. We'll keep them in our hearts, honor them with our actions, and carry them into the future they've inspired us to build. With us, evermore! (Scene 42)
- Eva: Five... five things... (Scene 17)
- Alex: True horror lay not in the unseen menace prowling the shadows, but in the silent scream of his own soul, paralyzed by a moment forged in the dark - where every second echoes through time in a single choice. (Scene 14)
Writing Style:
The writing style of the entire screenplay is characterized by a focus on authentic and relatable dialogue, exploration of internal struggles and emotions, and a blend of humor and introspection.
Style Similarities:
- Charlie Kaufman
- Aaron Sorkin
Story Shape
Emotions Elicited
suspense Analysis
Executive Summary
Suspense is effectively utilized in 'Alumni' to heighten tension during critical moments, particularly in scenes involving violence and confrontation. The screenplay builds anticipation through character actions and pacing, especially in scenes 3, 12, and 13, where the threat of violence looms large. The use of suspense not only engages the audience but also deepens the emotional stakes for characters like Mark, Kevin, and Eva, making their experiences more visceral.
Usage Analysis
- In scene 3, the sudden attack on Mark creates immediate suspense, as viewers are left wondering about the consequences of this violence. The pacing shifts dramatically from a calm classroom to chaos, effectively heightening tension.
- Scene 12 showcases suspense as Sophia and other students barricade the library doors against Ethan. The viewer is on edge, anticipating whether their efforts will hold against the violent intruder.
- In scene 13, the suspense escalates as Kevin hides from Ethan, with the viewer anxiously awaiting his fate. The tension is palpable as the stakes are raised with each moment of silence followed by violent action.
Critique
- The suspense in 'Alumni' effectively contributes to the narrative by keeping the audience engaged and emotionally invested in the characters' fates. The tension in scenes involving Ethan's violence serves to highlight the fragility of safety in a school environment.
- However, the screenplay could benefit from varying the intensity of suspense in less critical scenes to maintain a consistent emotional engagement throughout. For instance, scenes that focus on character interactions could incorporate subtle suspense elements to keep the audience on their toes.
Suggestions
- To enhance suspense, consider incorporating foreshadowing in earlier scenes that hint at future conflicts. For example, subtle clues about Ethan's instability could be woven into dialogue or visual elements in scenes leading up to the violent confrontations.
- Utilize pacing more strategically by interspersing moments of calm with sudden bursts of tension. This could involve quieter character moments that are abruptly interrupted by a threat, maintaining audience engagement.
Questions for AI
- How can suspense be integrated into character-driven scenes to maintain tension without relying solely on violent confrontations?
- What specific foreshadowing techniques could be employed to enhance the suspense leading up to key plot points?
fear Analysis
Executive Summary
Fear is a dominant emotion in 'Alumni,' particularly in scenes depicting violence and the threat of danger. The screenplay effectively evokes fear through visceral imagery and character reactions, especially in scenes 3, 12, and 13, where the stakes are life-threatening. This emotional response not only engages the audience but also serves to highlight the characters' vulnerabilities.
Usage Analysis
- In scene 3, the brutal attack on Mark elicits immediate fear, as viewers witness the chaos and panic that ensues. The visceral nature of the violence creates a chilling atmosphere.
- Scene 12 amplifies fear as Sophia and her peers barricade themselves against Ethan. The tension of the moment is heightened by the sounds of violence outside, making the audience acutely aware of the danger.
- In scene 13, Kevin's desperate attempts to escape from Ethan further evoke fear. The viewer shares in his terror, especially as he pleads for help, creating a powerful emotional connection.
Critique
- The portrayal of fear in 'Alumni' effectively underscores the themes of vulnerability and the unpredictability of violence in school settings. The emotional weight of these scenes resonates deeply with the audience, making the stakes feel real.
- However, the screenplay could benefit from exploring fear in quieter moments, allowing for a more nuanced portrayal of how characters cope with their anxieties and past traumas.
Suggestions
- Incorporate moments of psychological fear in addition to physical threats. For example, characters could experience flashbacks or anxiety attacks that reflect their past traumas, adding depth to their emotional struggles.
- Utilize sound design and visual elements to enhance the atmosphere of fear in less intense scenes. Subtle background noises or shadowy visuals can create an unsettling feeling that lingers even in calmer moments.
Questions for AI
- How can fear be portrayed in non-violent scenes to deepen character development and emotional engagement?
- What techniques can be used to balance the portrayal of fear with moments of hope or resilience in the characters?
joy Analysis
Executive Summary
Joy is interspersed throughout 'Alumni,' primarily in scenes that highlight camaraderie and shared experiences among characters. The screenplay effectively captures moments of happiness, particularly in scenes 1, 2, and 20, where the characters engage in light-hearted interactions. These moments serve as a counterbalance to the darker themes of the narrative, providing emotional relief.
Usage Analysis
- In scene 1, the playful banter between Mark and Nathan while working on the circuit board creates a joyful atmosphere, allowing viewers to connect with their youthful excitement.
- Scene 2 showcases joy in the bustling school hallway, where students interact in a lively manner. The energy of the scene evokes nostalgia and happiness, reminding viewers of their own school experiences.
- In scene 20, the light-hearted teasing between Jasmine and Liam during their drama class highlights the joy of friendship and shared memories, creating a warm and uplifting moment.
Critique
- The use of joy in 'Alumni' effectively enhances the emotional diversity of the screenplay, providing moments of levity amidst the heavier themes of loss and trauma. These joyful interactions allow the audience to breathe and connect with the characters on a personal level.
- However, the screenplay could benefit from more consistent moments of joy throughout, particularly in scenes that delve into darker themes. Balancing these emotions can create a richer emotional tapestry.
Suggestions
- Consider incorporating more joyful interactions in scenes that explore character backstories or relationships. This can help to humanize characters and make their struggles more relatable.
- Utilize visual elements, such as bright colors or upbeat music, to enhance the joyful moments and create a stark contrast with the darker themes of the narrative.
Questions for AI
- How can joy be more consistently integrated into the narrative to balance the heavier themes of the screenplay?
- What specific character interactions could be enhanced to evoke a stronger sense of joy and connection among the audience?
sadness Analysis
Executive Summary
Sadness permeates 'Alumni,' particularly in scenes that deal with loss, trauma, and the weight of past experiences. The screenplay effectively conveys this emotion through character reflections and poignant moments, especially in scenes 4, 5, and 21, where the emotional toll of tragedy is palpable. This sadness deepens the audience's connection to the characters and their journeys.
Usage Analysis
- In scene 4, the tragic death of the patient in the emergency room evokes profound sadness, as viewers witness the futile efforts of the medical team. The emotional weight of the scene resonates deeply, highlighting the fragility of life.
- Scene 5 captures Jasmine's emotional exhaustion and grief over her patient's overdose, allowing viewers to empathize with her struggles and the toll her profession takes on her mental health.
- In scene 21, Jasmine's memories of Liam and her desperate attempts to save him create a poignant moment of reflection, evoking sadness as she grapples with the loss of a loved one.
Critique
- The portrayal of sadness in 'Alumni' effectively enriches the narrative, allowing viewers to connect with the characters' emotional journeys. The weight of loss and trauma is felt throughout the screenplay, creating a powerful emotional impact.
- However, the screenplay could benefit from exploring the nuances of sadness in quieter moments, allowing for a more layered portrayal of how characters cope with their grief and longing.
Suggestions
- Incorporate more reflective moments for characters to process their sadness, allowing viewers to witness their internal struggles and growth over time.
- Utilize visual metaphors, such as rain or dim lighting, to enhance the emotional weight of sad scenes, creating a more immersive experience for the audience.
Questions for AI
- How can sadness be portrayed in a way that allows for character growth and resilience, rather than solely focusing on loss?
- What specific moments of reflection could be added to deepen the emotional impact of sadness in the screenplay?
surprise Analysis
Executive Summary
Surprise plays a crucial role in 'Alumni,' particularly in scenes that involve sudden shifts in tone or unexpected revelations. The screenplay effectively utilizes surprise to heighten emotional stakes, especially in scenes 3, 16, and 42, where shocking events alter the course of the narrative. These moments keep the audience engaged and invested in the characters' journeys.
Usage Analysis
- In scene 3, the abrupt attack on Mark serves as a shocking twist that transforms the narrative from a light-hearted school setting to a violent confrontation, leaving viewers reeling.
- Scene 16 features a surprising turn when Eva is confronted by the dark figure, shifting the tone from empowerment to horror. This unexpected moment heightens the emotional stakes and keeps the audience on edge.
- In scene 42, the shocking discovery of Eva's body during the memorial event serves as a devastating twist, catching both the characters and the audience off guard and amplifying the emotional impact of the scene.
Critique
- The use of surprise in 'Alumni' effectively enhances the narrative by creating moments of tension and emotional upheaval. These unexpected twists keep the audience engaged and invested in the characters' fates.
- However, the screenplay could benefit from balancing moments of surprise with quieter, more reflective scenes to create a more nuanced emotional experience.
Suggestions
- Consider incorporating foreshadowing in earlier scenes to build anticipation for surprising moments, allowing viewers to feel a sense of payoff when the twists occur.
- Utilize pacing to create a rhythm that alternates between moments of calm and sudden surprises, maintaining audience engagement throughout the narrative.
Questions for AI
- How can surprise be integrated into character-driven moments to enhance emotional engagement without relying solely on shocking events?
- What specific foreshadowing techniques could be employed to prepare the audience for surprising twists in the narrative?
empathy Analysis
Executive Summary
Empathy is a central emotional thread in 'Alumni,' allowing viewers to connect deeply with the characters' struggles and experiences. The screenplay effectively evokes empathy through character interactions and emotional revelations, particularly in scenes 5, 21, and 37, where the weight of trauma and loss is palpable. This emotional resonance enhances the audience's investment in the characters' journeys.
Usage Analysis
- In scene 5, Jasmine's emotional turmoil over her patient's overdose evokes strong empathy, as viewers witness her struggles and the toll her profession takes on her mental health.
- Scene 21 captures Jasmine's memories of Liam, allowing viewers to empathize with her grief and the weight of her past experiences, creating a powerful emotional connection.
- In scene 37, the candid conversation between Eva and Sophia about moving on fosters empathy, as viewers relate to their shared struggles and the complexities of healing from trauma.
Critique
- The portrayal of empathy in 'Alumni' effectively enriches the narrative, allowing viewers to connect with the characters' emotional journeys. The weight of loss and trauma is felt throughout the screenplay, creating a powerful emotional impact.
- However, the screenplay could benefit from exploring the nuances of empathy in quieter moments, allowing for a more layered portrayal of how characters cope with their grief and longing.
Suggestions
- Incorporate more reflective moments for characters to process their emotions, allowing viewers to witness their internal struggles and growth over time.
- Utilize visual metaphors, such as rain or dim lighting, to enhance the emotional weight of empathetic scenes, creating a more immersive experience for the audience.
Questions for AI
- How can empathy be portrayed in a way that allows for character growth and resilience, rather than solely focusing on loss?
- What specific moments of reflection could be added to deepen the emotional impact of empathy in the screenplay?
Consider
Executive Summary
The screenplay for 'Alumni' presents a compelling exploration of trauma and its aftermath, focusing on a group of high school alumni grappling with the lasting impact of a school shooting. While the screenplay excels in creating atmosphere and delving into the psychological complexities of its characters, it suffers from pacing issues, an underdeveloped antagonist, and an abrupt ending. Further development is needed to strengthen the narrative structure and provide a more satisfying resolution.
- The screenplay excels in creating a sense of atmosphere and tension, particularly in scenes depicting the high school massacre. The tracking shots and sound design effectively build suspense and immerse the reader in the chaos and terror of the event. high ( Scene 2 Scene 3 Scene 12 )
- The screenplay delves into the psychological impact of trauma on the characters, exploring themes of grief, guilt, and the struggle to heal. Jasmine's opioid use, Alex's nightmares, and Michael's emotional detachment are portrayed with nuance and depth. high ( Scene 4 Scene 6 Scene 19 Scene 21 )
- The unexpected bond formed between Eva and Jasmine at the reunion highlights the potential for healing and connection amidst shared trauma. Their scenes together offer a glimmer of hope and demonstrate the power of empathy and understanding. medium ( Scene 33 Scene 39 )
- Chris Jensen's character provides comedic relief and a unique perspective on the events. His witty dialogue and eccentric personality offer a counterpoint to the heavier themes of the screenplay. medium ( Scene 26 Scene 27 Scene 28 )
- The flashbacks to the characters' high school years effectively establish their relationships and personalities before the massacre. These scenes provide context for their present-day struggles and motivations. medium ( Scene 1 Scene 20 )
- The pacing of the screenplay could be improved. Some scenes, particularly those exploring the characters' inner thoughts and emotions, tend to drag, while others feel rushed. A more balanced approach would enhance the overall flow of the narrative. high
- The conflict between Alex and Michael feels underdeveloped and somewhat forced. Their motivations and animosity towards each other could be explored in more detail to create a more compelling dynamic. medium ( Scene 35 Scene 38 )
- The screenplay's ending is abrupt and leaves several questions unanswered. The identity and motivations of the killer are not revealed, and the fates of the surviving characters remain ambiguous. A more conclusive resolution would provide closure and a greater sense of satisfaction. high
- Sophia's character arc, particularly her connection to the Ethan Marshall case, could be explored further. Her decision to burn the file and attend the reunion seems somewhat out of character and lacks sufficient motivation. medium ( Scene 9 Scene 11 )
- The screenplay could benefit from a more diverse range of perspectives on the massacre. While the main characters offer insights into the psychological impact of the event, the inclusion of other survivors, witnesses, or even the perpetrator's perspective could add depth and complexity to the narrative. medium
- The screenplay lacks a clear antagonist or driving force of conflict. While the massacre serves as the inciting incident, the absence of a present-day threat or mystery weakens the overall narrative tension. high
- The screenplay could benefit from a stronger sense of resolution for the main characters. While they grapple with their trauma and attempt to move forward, their individual journeys lack a definitive endpoint or sense of closure. high
- The presence of the dark figure in Eva's house and the art room is intriguing but unexplained. The significance of this figure and its connection to the overall narrative could be explored further to add an element of mystery and suspense. medium ( Scene 18 Scene 41 )
- The screenplay's title, 'Alumni,' effectively captures the central theme of the story, which revolves around the lasting impact of a shared past and the complex process of confronting one's history. medium
- The use of match cuts and transitions between past and present effectively blurs the lines between memory and reality, highlighting the characters' ongoing struggles with their trauma. medium ( Scene 24 Scene 34 )
- The memorial scene in the gymnasium is a poignant reminder of the lives lost and the lasting impact of the massacre. The simplicity of the setup and the inscription on the plaque effectively convey the characters' grief and respect for their fallen classmates. medium ( Scene 30 )
Screenplay Insights:
Premise: 7.9, The screenplay's premise, centered around a high school reunion haunted by a past massacre, effectively establishes a compelling and clear foundation with strong potential for audience engagement. However, there's room for enhancing the originality by delving deeper into the psychological and emotional complexities of the characters and exploring the lingering impact of trauma. See More
Structure: 7.9, The screenplay exhibits a well-structured and engaging plot, effectively utilizing tension and release throughout its narrative. However, there are areas where the pacing could be refined, especially in the middle section, to enhance the overall impact and maintain audience engagement. See More
Theme: 8.7, The screenplay explores significant themes of trauma, resilience, and the complexities of human emotion. It effectively conveys these themes through the experiences and interactions of its characters, creating a deeply impactful and emotionally resonant narrative. While the exploration of themes is generally successful, there are a few areas where refinement could enhance their clarity and integration within the plot. See More
Visual Impact: 7.7, The screenplay showcases a visually captivating and multi-dimensional storytelling approach. It effectively merges the real and the nightmarish, using sharp visual contrasts to create an unsettling atmosphere. The vivid descriptions of past and present events draw readers into the characters' emotional journeys, making them feel intimately connected to their struggles and triumphs. See More
Emotional Impact: 7.6, The screenplay demonstrates strong potential for emotional impact, effectively utilizing flashbacks, character interactions, and moments of suspense to evoke a range of emotions in the audience. However, there are opportunities to further deepen the emotional complexity and resonance by exploring the characters' internal struggles and the long-term consequences of the traumatic event. See More
Conflict: 8.4, The screenplay presents a compelling conflict with high stakes that effectively drive the narrative and engage the audience. The tension is well-maintained, and the resolutions are satisfying. However, there are opportunities to further enhance the conflict and stakes in certain scenes, which could elevate the overall impact of the screenplay. See More
Originality: 8.1, The screenplay presents a unique and complex story with a blend of horror and emotional depth. Its exploration of trauma, personal growth, and resilience sets it apart from conventional horror narratives. See More
Screenplay Story Analysis
Note: This is the overall critique. For scene by scene critique click here
Summaries
- Mark and Nathan are working on assembling a circuit board in the tech lab at Ravenwood High School. When they connect a wire, the circuit board shorts out, causing them to jump backward. Mr. Jacobs, their teacher, approaches them and reminds them not to jump ahead of the lesson. He asks them a question about amperage and they answer correctly. The bell rings and students begin to pack up. Mark and Nathan exchange a knowing nod and make plans to meet up later.
- In this scene at Ravenwood High School, Mark navigates through the bustling hallway during lunchtime. He encounters various students, including Sarah and Tyler sharing a quick kiss, Liam passionately rehearsing a scene with Jasmine, Rachel going over a math problem with Chris, and Kevin bumping into Mark while reading a book. Eva is also seen deeply focused on her painting in the art room. The scene ends with Mark annoyed after Kevin bumps into him.
- Mark steps outside into the sunny courtyard of Ravenwood High School during lunchtime. Suddenly, Ethan Marshall appears and strikes Mark in the chest with a splitting maul, causing him to collapse on the pavement. The chaos ensues as students flee in terror. The conflict arises when Ethan Marshall attacks Mark, resulting in his injury and chaos among the students. The emotional tone of this scene is sudden, brutal, and shocking. The scene ends with Eva Sanders receiving an email about the Ravenwood High 20 Year Reunion and closing her laptop, reflecting a mix of recognition and apprehension.
- In this intense and urgent scene set in a hospital's emergency room in 2023, a young man with severe injuries from a car crash is rushed in. Nurse Jasmine Lee takes charge and directs her team to stabilize the patient. They diagnose a tension pneumothorax and Jasmine swiftly inserts a needle to re-expand the lung. Despite their efforts, the patient's condition deteriorates, leading to V-fib. Multiple attempts at defibrillation fail, and the patient's heart rate flatlines. Jasmine declares the time of death, leaving the room as her team begins the post mortem routine.
- Jasmine, a tired and deflated doctor, learns from the Resident that opioids were found in a patient's system at high levels. She reflects on this information and asks about notifying the family, but the Resident reveals they have been unsuccessful. Jasmine stares blankly at her locker, ignoring the cries of a young girl outside. Eventually, she grabs her belongings and leaves, leaving the opioid discovery and family notification unresolved.
- Jasmine walks to her car in a hospital parking lot, snorts a pill, and reacts to a high school reunion notification with curiosity and dread. Meanwhile, Michael Lawson reviews a complex building layout with his security team, discussing imperceptible security measures. His phone interrupts, but he plans to reconvene after lunch. The scene ends with Michael's lingering gaze, hinting at an unexpected discovery.
- Michael, a professional yet distant man, walks down a hallway after a meeting. As he passes colleagues, he acknowledges their greetings with a tight-lipped nod. Approaching his office, a young clerk presents him with a letter from Ravenwood High School. Michael hesitates, reflecting on a flood of memories. The scene ends with Michael still staring at the envelope, lost in his nostalgic thoughts.
- In Michael's minimalistic office, he watches a video of his daughter, Amanda, playing volleyball and celebrates her success. However, his joy is interrupted by a visit from a team member. Michael throws away a letter from Ravenwood but later retrieves it from the bin and puts it in his ledger, revealing his inner conflict. The scene ends with Michael putting the letter into his ledger, leaving the resolution of the conflict unknown.
- Sophia Martinez is organizing old case files at the Ravenwood Police Department. Chief Miller instructs the officers to shred non-violent or dismissed cases over ten years old and organize the digital files by case number and year. Sophia asks about unresolved cases and ongoing appeals, and Chief Miller tells her to tag them with a 'Review' status. Sophia and Rowlands discuss their plans to see the outside world and joke about Hutchens' interrogation skills. Sophia notices a box labeled 'MARSHALL, ETHAN' and asks Rowlands to switch places with her. Rowlands is confused but agrees. The scene ends with Sophia and Rowlands swapping positions.
- Sophia is in a hurry to pick up her dress from the tailor before it closes. Tracey, the receptionist, notices her rushing and makes a comment. Sophia sarcastically responds to Tracey's question about her high school reunion plans. The minor conflict is quickly resolved, and the scene ends with Sophia saying goodnight and Tracey wishing her goodnight as she is buzzed out.
- Sophia hurriedly leaves an empty parking lot, throwing her bag in the car. In her living room, she solemnly examines the Ethan Marshall file before throwing it into the fireplace. As she watches it burn, her face reflects a mix of emotions.
- In this tense and chaotic scene, Ethan Marshall violently tries to force his way into the library at Ravenwood High School. Sophia and several other students, along with the terrified librarian, desperately try to hold the doors shut. Sophia comes up with the idea to push over the bookshelves, creating a makeshift barricade. The students then drag tables and desks to further barricade the door. Despite their efforts, Ethan continues to use a maul to split and splinter the doors in his relentless pursuit to enter the library.
- In this scene at Ravenwood High School, Ethan goes on a violent rampage, attacking students in the hallway. Rachel Nguyen lies dead, while Kevin Anderson hides behind lockers, desperately seeking an escape. Kevin makes eye contact with Ethan before sprinting towards a classroom door, where Alex Harper and other terrified students are following lockdown procedures. Kevin pleads for help, but Alex and the others choose not to open the door. Ethan approaches the classroom, and Kevin's pleas abruptly cease. Alex hears a fatal blow and witnesses a puddle of blood seeping into the classroom from under the door. The scene concludes with Alex narrating a passage about Jonathan's racing heart and the haunting silence in the corridors.
- Alex, a writer in his late 30s, stands at a podium in a bookstore, reading from his latest horror novel. His voice captivates the audience as he narrates a passage about Jonathan's realization of true horror. After closing the book, the audience applauds while Alex forces a polite smile, but his eyes reveal the toll the recollection has taken on him.
- Alex, an author, is signing books for fans at a table in a bookstore. He interacts with each fan briefly, signing their books and exchanging a few words. His publicist, Jane, approaches and informs him about a call from Chris Jensen. Alex is torn between continuing to sign books and taking the call. After a moment's hesitation, he decides to step away with Jane to answer the call.
- In this scene, Jane supports Alex as he takes a phone call in a bookstore's back room. Meanwhile, in a high school art room in 2003, Eva desperately tries to defend herself against Ethan's violent pursuit. She throws objects at him, narrowly avoiding his attacks. However, Ethan eventually catches her by the hair and strikes her with a maul, resulting in her tragic death.
- Eva wakes up from a nightmare and finds it difficult to connect with reality. In her bedroom and bathroom, she uses familiar objects to calm herself down. After taking a pill, Eva leaves the bathroom feeling less panicked.
- Eva cautiously walks back to her bedroom, noticing a dark figure at the end of the hallway. She hesitates but ultimately RSVPs 'YES' to her high school reunion. She turns off the bedside lamp and plunges the room into darkness.
- Jasmine returns home to her apartment, tired and slightly disheveled. She finds solace in a beer from the fridge before sitting on the couch and delving into a box of old photographs and mementos. Her attention is captured by her high school yearbook and a drama program, evoking a sense of conflict between her current life and her past. The scene ends with a cut to the next scene, leaving the conflict unresolved.
- In the drama room at Ravenwood High School, Mrs. Henderson brings in the programs for their last play. Students gather around, laughing and showing off their photos. Jasmine and Liam tease each other about their roles and future plans. Jasmine expresses disappointment in the play choice. Liam jokes about his rejected pitch and they banter playfully. Liam writes something in Jasmine's program, making her smile. The scene ends with them exchanging smiles and playfully bumping shoulders.
- In the drama room of Ravenwood High School in 2003, Jasmine desperately tries to save Liam, who has a fatal chest wound. She pleads with him to stay awake and get help. In the present day, Jasmine reminisces about Liam and their time together in her apartment. She looks at a note Liam wrote for her and puts on her old bracelet, contemplating her decision while fiddling with the charms.
- The Lawson family gathers around the dinner table, with Amanda excitedly discussing Emily's chances of becoming captain next year. However, Michael seems distant and lost in his own thoughts. A flashback reveals a violent incident from Michael's high school days. Returning to the present, Amanda jokingly mentions her own athletic achievements, but Michael responds absentmindedly, causing an awkward silence to fall over the family.
- Michael and Amanda are cleaning up after dinner when Amanda notices Michael's off mood. She confronts him, and he dismisses her concerns. However, he later gives her an invitation to his 20-year high school reunion. Amanda offers her support, and Michael decides to go for a drive to clear his head. Amanda is left alone in the kitchen, reflecting on the organized dishes in the sink.
- Michael arrives at an office complex for a support group session where he shares his story of surviving a high school massacre. The group leader encourages him to consider attending his high school reunion, sparking introspection and contemplation. The scene ends with the group reciting a mantra together, symbolizing their unity and shared journey towards healing.
- In this scene, Alex Harper is interrupted while trying to write in his cluttered and dimly lit loft. Persistent knocking at the door escalates to violent banging, accompanied by blood seeping under the door and distorted voices. Panicked, Alex hides behind the kitchen island. The chaos eventually stops, and Alex returns to his desk, determined to continue writing.
- In the Ravenwood High School gymnasium, Chris Jensen, a commanding presence, inspects the tables and discovers they are not up to his standards. He teaches Tina a trade secret to get a refund. Meanwhile, his assistant manager informs him that the caterers have arrived early, causing frustration. The scene is fast-paced and intense, with Chris giving instructions to his crew and demonstrating how pulling a thread unravels the entire fabric. The lights in the gymnasium shift in color to resemble a Venice Beach sunset.
- Chris and the lead caterer engage in a heated argument in the school parking lot surrounded by catering supplies and food. Frustrated by the early arrival of the caterer and the lack of storage space, Chris accuses the caterer of ruining a twenty-year-planned event. The lead caterer offers a refund, but Chris realizes that it won't feed the guests. Keith steps in to diffuse the situation and takes the caterer aside. Chris has a realization and decides to take care of the food himself, asking Keith to gather people pretending to work inside the school. The scene ends with Chris confidently stating that he has a plan.
- Chris and Keith lead a crew through the catacombs of Ravenwood High School, encountering oppressive atmosphere and Keith's flickering flashlight. Tensions rise as they navigate the maze-like passageways and hear distant footsteps. Keith confronts Chris about his behavior, demanding basic decency. Chris reluctantly apologizes and they continue their journey. The crew walks down the left path, leaving the eerie sounds behind.
- Chris and his crew emerge from the catacombs into the cafeteria kitchen. They form an assembly line to load catering trays. Keith observes Chris and shows respect for his unexpected participation. The crew finishes loading the trays and disperses to their next tasks. Chris tapes a coin over the strike plate of the cafeteria doors to prevent Keith from leaving a mess. Tina enters with new tablecloths and receives praise from Chris. Chris instructs Tina to set the tables and calls for a specific arrangement by the dance floor. He successfully locks the cafeteria door with his makeshift 'lock block.'
- Chris walks through the bustling hallways of Ravenwood High School, observing the preparations for the reunion. In the gymnasium, Chris is drawn to a memorial dedicated to the victims of the 2003 tragedy, particularly focusing on a photo of Rachel Nguyen. Reflecting on their personal connection, Chris says, 'Look at me go, Rach.' The scene ends with Chris returning to the preparations, merging with the flurry of activity.
- Alex emerges from the airport and hails a cab amidst the chaos of the bustling sidewalk. He places his duffel bag in the trunk, and Michael, the cabbie, slams the trunk shut before getting in the backseat. The cab drives off, blending into the city traffic.
- Michael, in a reflective mood, rides in a cab through the familiar streets of his hometown. The cabbie chats away on his bluetooth headset while Michael receives a text from Amanda, bringing a smile to his face. The cab slows down and stops at the grand entrance of the Four Seasons Hotel. Jasmine steps out, retrieves her luggage, and pays the cabbie, adding a touch of activity to the scene. With a calm and reflective tone, the scene ends as Jasmine turns towards the opulent hotel entrance.
- Jasmine enters the luxurious Four Seasons lobby and joins the check-in line. She recognizes Eva, who initially pretends not to remember her. They have an honest conversation about their apprehension for the upcoming event. Eva suggests they go to the event together for support, and Jasmine agrees. They make plans to meet at seven. The scene ends with Eva continuing towards the elevators, feeling a subtle sense of relief, while Jasmine completes her check-in, looking forward to the shared support they have agreed upon.
- In Sophia's bedroom, she prepares for an event by dressing up and putting on makeup. Seeking approval from her aging basset hound, Grandpa, she adjusts her appearance and contemplates taking a small pistol. Ultimately deciding against it, she kisses and scratches Grandpa before leaving the room with a more confident stride.
- At Ravenwood High School's long-awaited reunion, Alex encounters a volunteer who cannot find his photo in the yearbook, leading to a confrontation. Michael hesitates to vouch for Alex, causing frustration to mount. Chris intervenes and gets Alex a name tag, resolving the conflict. Alex takes a deep breath and enters the gym, leaving his former self behind.
- At a high school reunion in the gymnasium, Eva and Jasmine toast to surviving high school and reminisce about their teachers. Michael and Dave reconnect and share stories. Tension arises between Michael and Alex. Later, Eva and Jasmine share a funny story and laugh together. Jasmine discovers Nathan hiding beneath the bleachers and they have a playful interaction.
- Eva, feeling unburdened and genuine after surviving a difficult time, exits the bathroom at Ravenwood High School with a newfound sense of purpose. She notices Sophia standing alone near the library and approaches her. They have a contemplative conversation about moving on and accepting change. Eva invites Sophia to join them, and they head back towards the sound of music and laughter, leaving the library doors behind.
- Alex confronts Michael at Ravenwood High School gymnasium about Alex's book and Michael's scar. Tension escalates as they exchange heated words, leading to Alex punching Michael in the face. The scene ends with Alex storming off, leaving a stunned silence in his wake.
- Eva and Sophia approach the gym at Ravenwood High School. Eva hesitates and decides to look back one last time while Sophia understands and goes ahead. Eva walks down the hallway with determination and heaviness, as the camera captures her resolve and vulnerability. The scene ends with Eva walking down the hallway, deep in thought and reckoning with her past.
- In this scene titled 'Stormy Departure', Alex abruptly leaves the high school gymnasium after downing his drink, while Chris tries to stop him. Eva hesitates before entering the art room where she has a painful memory. Meanwhile, Chris gathers the crowd's attention and announces a trip down memory lane. The alumni watch a slideshow of embarrassing moments from their past, including Michael playing football, Jasmine on stage, Alex writing under a tree, Chris in a classroom, and Eva with her painting. Jasmine looks for Eva but can't find her.
- Eva, feeling empowered by the changes in her life, stands in the art room at Ravenwood High School. Suddenly, she notices a dark figure in the doorway, realizing it is real. The figure enters the room, locking the door behind them. Filled with horror and desperation, Eva grabs a chisel, preparing to fight for her life. The scene ends with the slideshow song crescendoing and cutting back to a different scene.
- In this scene, the alumni of Ravenwood High School gather in the gymnasium for a memorial event. A slideshow of joyful memories is shown, highlighting the lives of Sarah, Tyler, Rachel, Kevin, Liam, and Mark. Chris and Michael share their memories of Tyler and Liam, while Jasmine reminisces about Liam's impact. Chris then speaks about Rachel's influence on his life. The scene takes a horrifying turn when Eva's lifeless and mangled body is discovered on the stage, leaving Chris and the rest of the alumni in shock and panic.
Characters in the screenplay, and their arcs:
Character | Arc | Critique | Suggestions |
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Rachel Nguyen | Rachel Nguyen starts off as a confident and assertive character, showcasing her academic inclination and leadership qualities. However, her character arc takes a tragic turn when she becomes a victim of a violent attack, resulting in her shocking and untimely death. This event serves as a turning point in the story, creating a sense of tragedy and sadness. Although Rachel's character arc is short-lived, her death has a profound impact on the other characters and the overall narrative. | The character arc for Rachel Nguyen is effective in creating a shocking and impactful moment in the screenplay. However, since she does not have any speaking lines in the scene, it may be challenging for the audience to connect with her on a deeper level. Additionally, her character arc feels somewhat predictable and lacks development beyond her tragic fate. | To improve Rachel Nguyen's character arc, consider giving her more speaking lines or moments of personal growth before her untimely death. This will allow the audience to connect with her on a deeper level and make her death even more impactful. Additionally, exploring her relationships with other characters and delving into her motivations and aspirations can add complexity to her character and make her arc more compelling. |
Chris Jensen | Throughout the feature, Chris Jensen undergoes a transformation from a seemingly carefree and easygoing individual to a more introspective and self-aware character. Initially, he is unamused by Rachel's assertiveness, suggesting a resistance to change and a preference for his comfortable lifestyle. However, as the story progresses, Chris is confronted with unexpected challenges and begins to question his true intentions and desires. This leads him to delve deeper into his mysterious persona and ultimately discover a newfound sense of purpose and fulfillment. By the end of the feature, Chris embraces his enigmatic nature while also embracing personal growth and a willingness to take risks. | The character arc for Chris Jensen is well-developed and provides an interesting journey for the audience. However, it could benefit from further exploration of his internal conflicts and motivations. While his transformation is evident, the reasons behind his initial resistance to change and his ultimate self-discovery could be more clearly defined. Additionally, the screenplay could delve deeper into the consequences of Chris's actions and how they impact the other characters and the overall plot. | To improve the character arc, consider incorporating more moments of vulnerability and introspection for Chris. This could be achieved through flashbacks or internal monologues that shed light on his past experiences and the reasons behind his guarded nature. Additionally, exploring the ripple effects of his actions on the other characters and the overall story would add depth and complexity to his journey. Lastly, consider incorporating more nuanced interactions between Chris and the other characters to further highlight his growth and transformation. |
Kevin Anderson | Kevin Anderson's character arc in the screenplay begins with him as a studious and introverted student, focused on his intellectual pursuits. However, when faced with a violent attack, he undergoes a transformation, becoming a panicked and desperate individual driven by fear. Despite his pleas for help, he is ultimately abandoned by his classmates, leaving him feeling abandoned and betrayed. This experience forces Kevin to confront his own vulnerability and reevaluate his relationships with others. As the story progresses, Kevin learns to find inner strength and resilience, gradually overcoming his fear and becoming more assertive. By the end of the screenplay, Kevin emerges as a changed person, having grown from a timid and introverted student to a courageous and self-reliant individual who is no longer afraid to stand up for himself. | The character arc for Kevin Anderson is well-developed and provides a clear transformation from a timid student to a courageous individual. However, it would benefit from further exploration of Kevin's emotional journey and the impact of his abandonment by his classmates. Additionally, the screenplay could delve deeper into Kevin's internal struggles and how they shape his growth throughout the story. | To improve the character arc, consider adding scenes that delve into Kevin's internal thoughts and emotions, allowing the audience to connect more deeply with his experiences. Explore the aftermath of his abandonment, showing how it affects his self-esteem and relationships with others. Additionally, consider incorporating moments of self-reflection and introspection for Kevin, allowing him to confront his fears and develop a stronger sense of self. These additions will enhance the emotional depth of the character arc and create a more impactful journey for Kevin Anderson. |
Eva Sanders | Eva Sanders starts off as a creative and deeply focused painter who also works as a counselor. She is empathetic and grounded in her counseling work, providing a safe space for her clients. However, she is haunted by her past and uncertain about her future. Throughout the feature, Eva's character arc revolves around her journey of confronting and overcoming her internal struggles. As she delves deeper into her own emotions and experiences, she begins to find healing and clarity. This growth allows her to become more confident and assertive in both her personal and professional life. By the end of the feature, Eva has transformed into a resilient and self-assured individual who has learned to embrace her past and look forward to her future with hope and optimism. | The character arc for Eva Sanders is well-developed and provides a compelling journey of self-discovery and growth. However, it would benefit from further exploration of Eva's past and the specific events that have haunted her. This would add depth and complexity to her character, allowing the audience to better understand her struggles and empathize with her journey. Additionally, the screenplay could provide more opportunities for Eva to actively confront her internal conflicts and make choices that drive the narrative forward. This would create a stronger sense of agency for Eva and enhance the impact of her transformation. | To improve the character arc for Eva Sanders, consider incorporating flashback scenes or dialogue that reveal more about her past traumas and the specific events that have shaped her. This will provide a clearer understanding of her internal struggles and make her journey more relatable to the audience. Additionally, create moments where Eva actively confronts her fears and makes choices that propel the story forward. This could involve her taking risks, facing her past head-on, or making difficult decisions that challenge her comfort zone. By giving Eva more agency and active participation in her own transformation, her character arc will become even more engaging and impactful. |
Jasmine | Jasmine's character arc begins with her being a composed and distant nurse who is deeply affected by the loss of her patient. As the story progresses, it is revealed that she is struggling with addiction, which adds a layer of complexity to her character. She hits rock bottom and realizes the need for change, leading her to seek help and embark on a journey of recovery. Throughout this process, she confronts her guilt and regret, learns to let go of her composed exterior, and allows herself to be vulnerable. She discovers her true passion for helping others and finds redemption in dedicating herself to her job with renewed compassion and empathy. By the end of the feature, Jasmine has transformed into a resilient and strong individual who has overcome her personal demons and is ready to face the challenges of life with a newfound sense of purpose and determination. | The character arc for Jasmine is well-developed and provides a compelling journey of self-discovery and growth. However, it would benefit from further exploration of her addiction storyline and its impact on her relationships and professional life. Additionally, the transitions between the different aspects of her character could be smoother to create a more cohesive narrative. | To improve the character arc, consider delving deeper into Jasmine's struggle with addiction and how it affects her interactions with others, particularly her patients and colleagues. Show the consequences of her addiction on her professional life and the challenges she faces in rebuilding trust and credibility. Additionally, work on creating smoother transitions between the different aspects of her character by establishing stronger connections and continuity throughout the feature. This can be achieved through consistent character development and exploring the underlying motivations and emotions that drive Jasmine's actions and choices. |
Michael Lawson | Michael Lawson starts off as a professional and distant individual, solely focused on his work. However, upon receiving the letter from Ravenwood High School, his past resurfaces, causing him to confront his emotions and memories. As the story progresses, Michael begins to open up and explore his haunted past, leading to a transformation in his character. He learns to reconcile with his past, finding closure and ultimately embracing a more balanced and fulfilled life. | The character arc for Michael Lawson is well-developed, allowing for growth and transformation. However, it would benefit from further exploration of his haunted past and the specific events that shaped him. This would provide a deeper understanding of his struggles and make his transformation more impactful. | To improve the character arc, consider incorporating flashbacks or moments of introspection that delve into Michael's past traumas. This will allow the audience to empathize with his struggles and root for his growth. Additionally, explore opportunities for Michael to connect with other characters on an emotional level, providing a support system that aids in his transformation. Finally, ensure that the resolution of his character arc is satisfying and aligns with the overall themes and tone of the screenplay. |
Amanda | Amanda starts off as a vibrant and energetic character, bringing joy and support to Michael's life. However, as she senses Michael's detachment, she becomes more determined to address the issues in their relationship. Throughout the screenplay, Amanda goes through a transformation where she becomes more assertive and direct in her desire for open communication. She remains supportive and understanding, but also firm in her determination to improve their relationship. | The character arc for Amanda is well-developed and shows growth and transformation. However, it would be beneficial to explore more of Amanda's personal journey and how her relationship with Michael affects her own emotional state. This would add depth to her character and provide a stronger connection for the audience. | To improve the character arc, consider adding scenes or moments where Amanda reflects on her own emotions and struggles within the relationship. This could be done through internal monologues, conversations with a close friend, or even moments of self-reflection. By delving deeper into Amanda's personal journey, the audience will have a stronger emotional investment in her character and her desire for open communication with Michael. |
Sophia | Sophia's character arc in the screenplay is one of personal growth and healing. She starts off as a determined and focused individual, haunted by her past and burdened by unresolved cases. Throughout the story, she confronts her own demons and seeks closure, ultimately finding the strength to let go and move on. Her transformation is marked by moments of introspection, decision-making, and a willingness to change. By the end of the feature, Sophia has evolved into a more self-assured and compassionate person, capable of supporting and understanding others. | The character arc for Sophia is well-developed and allows for personal growth and transformation. However, it would benefit from further exploration of her past traumas and how they specifically impact her present actions and decisions. Additionally, there could be more emphasis on her journey towards healing and finding closure, as well as the specific challenges she faces along the way. This would add depth and complexity to her character arc. | To improve the character arc, consider incorporating more scenes that delve into Sophia's past traumas and how they affect her present actions. Show her actively working through her emotional baggage and seeking professional help or support from others. Additionally, highlight the specific challenges she faces in her journey towards healing and closure, such as facing her fears or confronting the people or situations that have caused her pain. This will create a more compelling and nuanced character arc for Sophia. |
Ethan Marshall | Ethan Marshall's character arc in the screenplay begins as a violent and dangerous antagonist, driven by revenge and a desire to cause chaos. However, as the story progresses, Ethan's motivations and backstory are revealed, shedding light on the root of his rage. Through a series of encounters with the main characters, Ethan starts to question his actions and the impact they have on others. He begins to experience moments of doubt and remorse, leading to a gradual transformation. In the climax of the story, Ethan confronts his inner demons and makes a choice to break free from his violent tendencies, ultimately redeeming himself by sacrificing his own safety to protect others. | The character arc for Ethan Marshall is well-developed and provides a compelling journey for the audience. However, it would benefit from further exploration of Ethan's backstory and the events that led to his disturbed state of mind. This would help the audience empathize with his character and understand the root causes of his violent behavior. Additionally, the screenplay could include more moments of internal conflict for Ethan, showcasing his struggle to overcome his rage and find redemption. | To improve the character arc, consider incorporating flashback scenes or dialogue that delve into Ethan's past, revealing traumatic experiences or personal losses that shaped his violent tendencies. This would add depth to his character and provide a stronger justification for his actions. Additionally, explore opportunities for Ethan to have internal monologues or conversations with other characters that highlight his internal conflict and the gradual change in his mindset. This would make his transformation more impactful and believable for the audience. |
Alex Harper | Alex Harper starts as a terrified student who is forced to make a difficult choice. This experience shakes his perception of safety and the world around him. As the story progresses, he becomes a determined and introspective writer, haunted by his past. Through his writing, he seeks solace and tries to make sense of his experiences. By the end of the feature, Alex undergoes a transformation, gaining a deeper understanding of himself and finding a way to reconcile with his past. | The character arc for Alex Harper is well-developed and engaging. However, it could benefit from further exploration of his journey towards reconciliation with his past. The screenplay could delve deeper into the specific events that haunt him and how they shape his writing. This would add more depth to his character and provide a stronger resolution to his arc. | To improve the character arc, consider incorporating flashbacks or moments of introspection where Alex confronts the specific horrors from his past. This will allow the audience to understand the full extent of his trauma and witness his growth as he finds a way to overcome it. Additionally, exploring the impact of his writing on others and how it helps him connect with others could further enhance his arc and provide a satisfying resolution. |
Alex | Alex's character arc in the screenplay begins with him as a detached and haunted writer, finding solace in his work. As the story progresses, he is forced to confront his fears and relive traumatic experiences during a violent attack, which challenges his composure and emotional stability. This event serves as a turning point for Alex, as he realizes the depth of his vulnerability and the need to confront his past. He becomes increasingly terrified and desperate, showcasing his growth and willingness to face his fears. The confrontation with Michael further fuels his anger and frustration, leading to a confrontation where he defends himself with sharp and confrontational remarks. By the end of the screenplay, Alex's character arc reaches a resolution as he expresses his thoughts and frustrations with raw honesty, ultimately finding a sense of catharsis and personal growth. | The character arc for Alex is well-developed and provides a clear progression for his emotional journey. However, it would benefit from further exploration of his internal conflicts and the resolution of his past trauma. Additionally, the arc could be strengthened by incorporating moments of self-reflection and introspection, allowing the audience to connect more deeply with Alex's inner struggles. | To improve the character arc, consider adding scenes where Alex engages in introspection and self-reflection, allowing the audience to witness his internal conflicts more directly. This could be achieved through inner monologues or moments of solitude where Alex grapples with his past trauma and the consequences of his choices. Additionally, consider incorporating a subplot or secondary character that serves as a catalyst for Alex's growth, providing him with an opportunity for redemption or forgiveness. This would add depth to his character arc and create a more satisfying resolution for the audience. |
Jane | Jane starts off as an efficient and professional publicist, always focused on her job. As the story progresses, she becomes more supportive and understanding of Alex, looking out for his best interests. She remains calm and composed even in the face of terror, showing her strength and resilience. By the end of the feature, Jane has developed a deeper bond with Alex and has become a trusted ally in his journey. | The character arc for Jane is well-developed and shows growth and transformation. However, it would be beneficial to explore her personal stakes and motivations further. Understanding why she is so dedicated to her job and why she cares so deeply for Alex would add depth to her character. | To improve the character arc, consider adding a subplot or scene that delves into Jane's backstory and motivations. This could be a moment where she opens up to Alex about her own struggles and how they have shaped her dedication to her work. Additionally, exploring any personal sacrifices she has made for her career or the lengths she is willing to go to protect Alex would further enhance her character development. |
Eva | Eva's character arc in the screenplay begins with her as a terrified and desperate high school student, haunted by a traumatic event. She is initially fearful and anxious, struggling to ground herself in reality. However, as the story progresses, Eva shows growth and development. She starts to exhibit courage and resourcefulness in her attempts to survive and confront her fears. Through her encounter with Sophia, Eva opens up and finds strength in connection, ultimately finding the courage to confront her past. Her character arc culminates in a transformation where she becomes determined and resilient, inspiring others to embrace change and move forward. | The character arc for Eva is well-developed and shows growth and transformation. However, it would be beneficial to further explore and emphasize Eva's journey of healing and acceptance. While her encounters with other characters contribute to her development, it would be valuable to delve deeper into her internal struggles and emotions. This would allow for a more nuanced portrayal of her transformation and provide a stronger emotional impact for the audience. | To improve the character arc, consider incorporating more introspective moments for Eva where she contemplates her emotions and reflects on her past experiences. This will provide a deeper understanding of her internal conflict and enhance her journey of healing and acceptance. Additionally, explore opportunities for Eva to confront her fears and make active choices that contribute to her transformation. This will further emphasize her agency and resilience, making her character arc even more compelling and satisfying for the audience. |
Liam | Liam's character arc in the screenplay begins as a playful and supportive friend to Jasmine. He encourages her in pursuing her dreams and provides a lighthearted atmosphere through banter and humor. However, tragedy strikes when Liam dies in a past event, leaving Jasmine devastated. This event marks a turning point in Liam's arc, as his absence forces Jasmine to confront her own fears and insecurities. Liam's memory continues to influence Jasmine's journey, as she carries his supportive and encouraging nature with her. Ultimately, Liam's character arc serves as a catalyst for Jasmine's growth and transformation. | The character arc for Liam is well-developed and provides a significant impact on Jasmine's journey. However, it would be beneficial to explore Liam's own personal growth and challenges throughout the screenplay. While he is portrayed as supportive and encouraging, delving deeper into his own aspirations and struggles would add depth to his character. Additionally, it would be interesting to see how Liam's playful and light-hearted nature evolves or is affected by the tragedy, showcasing a more vulnerable side to his personality. | To improve Liam's character arc, consider incorporating scenes or moments that highlight his own dreams and ambitions in the performing arts. This could involve showcasing his talent or his journey towards pursuing his career. Additionally, exploring the impact of Liam's death on his relationships with other characters, such as his family or close friends, could provide a more well-rounded portrayal of his character. Lastly, consider incorporating moments of vulnerability for Liam, allowing the audience to see the emotional toll the tragedy has on him and how he copes with it. |
Keith | Keith's character arc in the screenplay starts with him lacking confidence and struggling to assert himself. However, as he becomes more skeptical and confrontational, he begins to find his voice and stand up for what he believes in. This transformation is driven by his desire for fairness and respect. By the end of the story, Keith becomes a cooperative and capable individual who plays a crucial role in resolving the catering crisis. | The character arc for Keith is well-developed and shows growth and transformation. However, it would be beneficial to provide more specific examples or scenes that highlight Keith's journey. This would help the audience connect with his character on a deeper level and understand his motivations and actions better. | To improve the character arc, consider adding scenes where Keith faces specific challenges or conflicts that push him to confront Chris's decisions and authority. This could include moments where Keith stands up for himself or others, showcasing his growth and transformation. Additionally, exploring Keith's backstory or personal motivations could add depth to his character and make his arc even more compelling. |
Theme | Theme Details | Theme Explanation | ||||||||||||
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Survival (20%) | The characters face life-threatening situations and must find ways to survive. | Survival is a prominent theme in the screenplay as characters like Mark, Nathan, Jasmine, and Eva are put in dangerous situations and must fight to stay alive. | ||||||||||||
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Trauma and Healing (15%) | The characters have experienced traumatic events and must navigate the process of healing and moving forward. | Trauma and healing are explored in the screenplay through characters like Jasmine, Eva, and Michael, who have all been deeply affected by past events and must find ways to heal and cope with their experiences. | ||||||||||||
High School Memories (10%) | The characters revisit their high school memories and confront the impact those memories have had on their lives. | High school memories play a significant role in the screenplay as characters attend their high school reunion and reflect on their past experiences, relationships, and choices. | ||||||||||||
Guilt and Regret (10%) | The characters grapple with feelings of guilt and regret over past actions or events. | Guilt and regret are explored in the screenplay through characters like Jasmine, Michael, and Alex, who carry the weight of their past actions and must confront the consequences of their choices. | ||||||||||||
Connection and Friendship (10%) | The characters form connections and friendships that provide support and strength in challenging times. | Connection and friendship are important themes in the screenplay as characters like Mark, Nathan, Eva, and Sophia rely on their relationships with others to navigate difficult situations and find support. | ||||||||||||
Identity and Self-Reflection (10%) | The characters question their identities and engage in self-reflection as they confront their past and make choices for their future. | Identity and self-reflection are explored in the screenplay as characters like Jasmine, Michael, and Eva grapple with their past experiences and make decisions that shape their sense of self and their future paths. | ||||||||||||
Violence and its Consequences (10%) | The characters experience and witness violence, and must confront the consequences of those actions. | Violence and its consequences are depicted in the screenplay through events like the attack at Ravenwood High School and the characters' reactions to the violence they encounter. The screenplay explores the impact of violence on individuals and communities. | ||||||||||||
Memory and Nostalgia (5%) | The characters revisit memories and experience nostalgia as they confront their past. | Memory and nostalgia play a smaller role in the screenplay as characters attend their high school reunion and reflect on their past experiences, triggering memories and a sense of nostalgia. | ||||||||||||
Responsibility and Accountability (5%) | The characters grapple with their responsibilities and are held accountable for their actions. | Responsibility and accountability are explored in the screenplay as characters like Jasmine, Michael, and Alex face the consequences of their choices and must take responsibility for their actions. |
Screenwriting Resources on Themes
Articles
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Studio Binder | Movie Themes: Examples of Common Themes for Screenwriters |
Coverfly | Improving your Screenplay's theme |
John August | Writing from Theme |
YouTube Videos
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Story, Plot, Genre, Theme - Screenwriting Basics | Screenwriting basics - beginner video |
What is theme | Discussion on ways to layer theme into a screenplay. |
Thematic Mistakes You're Making in Your Script | Common Theme mistakes and Philosophical Conflicts |
Goals and Philosophical Conflict | |
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internal Goals | The protagonist's internal goals evolved throughout the script as they tried to prove themselves, navigate through challenges, find closure, and seek connection and validation. |
External Goals | The protagonist's external goals evolved throughout the script as they completed tasks, attended events, survived dangerous situations, and honored the memory of their deceased friends. |
Philosophical Conflict | The overarching philosophical conflict in the screenplay revolves around the themes of moving forward versus dwelling in the past, the value of friendship in the face of tragedy, and the pursuit of success and validation. |
Character Development Contribution: The protagonist's internal and external goals, as well as the philosophical conflict, contribute to their growth and transformation throughout the script. They are forced to confront their past, seek closure, and navigate their relationships and emotions, leading to self-discovery and a greater understanding of themselves and others.
Narrative Structure Contribution: The goals and conflict provide a framework for the narrative structure, driving the protagonist's actions and decisions. They create tension, obstacles, and suspense that propel the story forward and keep the audience engaged.
Thematic Depth Contribution: The goals and conflict add depth and substance to the screenplay's themes, exploring concepts of identity, trauma, memory, belonging, connection, and the pursuit of personal and artistic fulfillment. They offer opportunities for reflection and introspection, prompting the audience to contemplate their own beliefs and values.
Screenwriting Resources on Goals and Philosophical Conflict
Articles
Site | Description |
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Creative Screenwriting | How Important Is A Character’s Goal? |
Studio Binder | What is Conflict in a Story? A Quick Reminder of the Purpose of Conflict |
YouTube Videos
Title | Description |
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How I Build a Story's Philosophical Conflict | How do you build philosophical conflict into your story? Where do you start? And how do you develop it into your characters and their external actions. Today I’m going to break this all down and make it fully clear in this episode. |
Endings: The Good, the Bad, and the Insanely Great | By Michael Arndt: I put this lecture together in 2006, when I started work at Pixar on Toy Story 3. It looks at how to write an "insanely great" ending, using Star Wars, The Graduate, and Little Miss Sunshine as examples. 90 minutes |
Tips for Writing Effective Character Goals | By Jessica Brody (Save the Cat!): Writing character goals is one of the most important jobs of any novelist. But are your character's goals...mushy? |
Story Content | Character Development | Scene Elements | Audience Engagement | Technical Aspects | |||||||||||||||||
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Click for Full Analysis | Tone | Overall | Concept | Plot | Originality | Characters | Character Changes | Internal Goal | External Goal | Conflict | Opposition | High stakes | Story forward | Twist | Emotional Impact | Dialogue | Engagement | Pacing | Formatting | Structure | |
1 - Short Circuit Improve | Serious, Reflective, Encouraging, Amused | 8 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 4 | 7 | 3 | 6 | 6 | 5 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
2 - Bustling Lunchtime at Ravenwood High School Improve | Vibrant, Reserved, Assertive, Unamused, Creative | 8 | 7 | 6 | 4 | 9 | 3 | 7 | 6 | 4 | 5 | 2 | 4 | 3 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
3 - Sudden Attack at Ravenwood High School Improve | Intense, Serene, Empathetic, Grounded | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
4 - Life-saving Efforts Fail in the Emergency Room Improve | Intense, Serious, Clinical | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 6 | 10 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
5 - The Opioid Discovery Improve | Reflective, Serious, Tragic | 9 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 9 | 6 | 5 | 10 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
6 - A Mix of Curiosity and Dread Improve | Tense, Melancholic, Suspenseful | 9 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 10 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
7 - A Flood of Memories Improve | Professional, Distant, Tense | 9 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 5 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
8 - Pride and Conflict Improve | Tense, Melancholic, Reflective | 9 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 4 | 9 | 9 | 5 | 10 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | |
9 - Organizing Old Case Files Improve | Serious, Tense, Humorous | 8 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 8 | 5 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
10 - A Rushed Encounter Improve | Suspenseful, Melancholic, Intense | 9 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 6 | 10 | 9 | 5 | 10 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
11 - Burning Secrets Improve | Solemn, Contemplative, Tense | 9 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 4 | 6 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 10 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
12 - Desperate Standoff at Ravenwood High School Library Improve | Tense, Chaotic, Fear, Desperate, Terrified, Quick, Urgent, Violent, Solemn | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
13 - Tragedy Strikes Ravenwood High School Improve | Tense, Dark, Suspenseful | 9 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 10 | 9 | 10 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
14 - Captivating Reading Improve | Dark, Intense, Melancholic | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 10 | 4 | 10 | 9 | 5 | 10 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
15 - A Surprising Call Improve | Tense, Melancholic, Suspenseful | 9 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 6 | 10 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
16 - A Deadly Pursuit Improve | Tense, Dark, Terrifying, Somber | 9 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 10 | 9 | 10 | 9 | 7 | 10 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
17 - Eva's Struggle to Ground Herself Improve | Tense, Dark, Melancholic | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 10 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
18 - Uncertain Reunion Improve | Tense, Melancholic, Mysterious | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 10 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
19 - Reflections of the Past Improve | Tired, Deflated, Curiosity, Dread, Solemn, Captivating, Polite, Dark | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 5 | 9 | 9 | 6 | 10 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
20 - Excitement and Disappointment in the Drama Room Improve | Serious, Playful | 9 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 5 | 6 | 4 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
21 - Desperate Attempt to Save Liam Improve | Eerie, Panicked, Wistful, Contemplative | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 10 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
22 - Dinner Table Tension Improve | Tense, Melancholic, Reflective | 8 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 6 | 6 | 5 | 6 | 5 | 9 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | |
23 - High School Reunion Invitation Improve | Tense, Heartbreaking, Empathetic | 9 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 4 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
24 - Finding Healing and Hope: A Support Group Session Improve | Emotional, Reflective, Empathetic | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 10 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
25 - Knocking in the Night Improve | Suspenseful, Terrifying, Eerie | 9 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 10 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
26 - Commanding Presence Improve | Intense, Suspenseful, Dark, Melancholic | 9 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | |
27 - Catering Chaos Improve | Tense, Intense, Dramatic, Emotional | 9 | 8 | 9 | 5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 9 | 7 | 10 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | |
28 - Tensions Rise in the Catacombs Improve | Tense, Dark, Mysterious, Suspenseful | 9 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
29 - Efficient Assembly and Locking Up Improve | Tense, Resolute, Sarcastic, Relieved | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
30 - Reflections in Ravenwood Improve | Intimate, Regretful, Poignant, Hushed, Flurry of Preparations | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
31 - Airport Arrival Improve | Tense, Reflective, Mysterious | 9 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
32 - A Homecoming at the Four Seasons Improve | Reflective, Nostalgic, Introspective | 9 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 4 | 4 | 5 | 6 | 5 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
33 - A Chance Encounter and a Shared Plan Improve | Awkward, Uncomfortable, Supportive | 8 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 4 | 6 | 3 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
34 - Sophia's Transformation Improve | Reflective, Resigned, Confident | 8 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 3 | 6 | 2 | 5 | 7 | 6 | 5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
35 - A Reunion's Frustration Improve | Tense, Reflective, Frustrated, Nostalgic | 8 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
36 - High School Reunion Improve | Tense, Nostalgic, Humorous | 9 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
37 - Moving On Improve | Contemplative, Reflective, Hopeful | 9 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 3 | 6 | 4 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
38 - Confrontation at Ravenwood High Improve | Tense, Confrontational, Reflective | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | |
39 - A Moment of Reflection Improve | Tense, Reflective, Resolute | 9 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
40 - Stormy Departure Improve | Somber, Reflective, Joyful | 9 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 5 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
41 - Encounter in the Art Room Improve | Tense, Empowering, Suspenseful | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 10 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
42 - Tragic Discovery: A Memorial Event Takes a Dark Turn Improve | Somber, Reflective, Intense | 9 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 10 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 |
Summary of Scene Level Analysis
Here are some things that came out of the scene level analysis.
This is a summary of the strengths, weaknesses, and suggestions found in each scene. Some things might appear in both strengths and weaknesses based on the variety of your scenes.
For summary of each criteria click in the top row on the criteria.
Scene Strengths
- Strong emotional impact
- Effective character development
- Engaging plot
- Authentic dialogue
- Effective establishment of tension and intrigue
Scene Weaknesses
- Limited character development
- Minimal dialogue
- Low external conflict
- Possible lack of clarity in some plot details
- Sudden and shocking ending may be too intense for some viewers
Suggestions
- Consider adding more depth to characters through their actions, motivations, and relationships
- Explore the use of subtext and non-verbal communication to enhance dialogue
- Create more external conflict to drive the plot and increase tension
- Ensure all plot details are clear and avoid ambiguity to reduce confusion for the audience
- Consider toning down the intensity of the ending or providing more foreshadowing to prepare the audience
Scene 1 - Short Circuit
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 2 - Bustling Lunchtime at Ravenwood High School
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 3 - Sudden Attack at Ravenwood High School
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 4 - Life-saving Efforts Fail in the Emergency Room
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 5 - The Opioid Discovery
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 6 - A Mix of Curiosity and Dread
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 7 - A Flood of Memories
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 8 - Pride and Conflict
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 9 - Organizing Old Case Files
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 10 - A Rushed Encounter
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 11 - Burning Secrets
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 12 - Desperate Standoff at Ravenwood High School Library
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 13 - Tragedy Strikes Ravenwood High School
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 14 - Captivating Reading
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 15 - A Surprising Call
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 16 - A Deadly Pursuit
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 17 - Eva's Struggle to Ground Herself
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 18 - Uncertain Reunion
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 19 - Reflections of the Past
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 20 - Excitement and Disappointment in the Drama Room
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 21 - Desperate Attempt to Save Liam
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 22 - Dinner Table Tension
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 23 - High School Reunion Invitation
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 24 - Finding Healing and Hope: A Support Group Session
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 25 - Knocking in the Night
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 26 - Commanding Presence
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 27 - Catering Chaos
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 28 - Tensions Rise in the Catacombs
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 29 - Efficient Assembly and Locking Up
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 30 - Reflections in Ravenwood
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 31 - Airport Arrival
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 32 - A Homecoming at the Four Seasons
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 33 - A Chance Encounter and a Shared Plan
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 34 - Sophia's Transformation
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 35 - A Reunion's Frustration
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 36 - High School Reunion
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 37 - Moving On
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 38 - Confrontation at Ravenwood High
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 39 - A Moment of Reflection
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 40 - Stormy Departure
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 41 - Encounter in the Art Room
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 42 - Tragic Discovery: A Memorial Event Takes a Dark Turn
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
- Physical environment: The physical environment in the screenplay includes various settings such as a high school tech lab, hallway, courtyard, counseling office, emergency room, hospital locker room, hospital parking lot, contemporary office building, police department, bookstore, living room, library, gymnasium, catacombs, cafeteria kitchen, bookstore back room, bedroom, and various other locations. These settings are described with specific physical characteristics that create a sense of atmosphere and contribute to the overall world-building.
- Culture: The cultural elements in the screenplay depict the presence of high school students, teachers, medical professionals, security team members, receptionists, police officers, support group attendees, writers, and various other characters. These cultural elements shape the characters' experiences and actions by influencing their behavior, interactions, and perspectives. The cultural diversity and dynamics within these settings add depth to the narrative and contribute to the overall world-building.
- Society: The societal structures in the screenplay are represented through the teacher-student dynamic in the high school, the hierarchical structure within the medical profession, the professional environment of the security team and police department, the support group session led by a group leader, and the interactions between colleagues in the office building. These societal structures influence the characters' roles, responsibilities, and relationships, and contribute to the overall world-building.
- Technology: The technological aspects in the screenplay include the use of circuit boards, electronic equipment, email communication, medical devices and equipment, phones, cameras, sensors, scanners, and modern bathroom fixtures. These technological elements shape the characters' experiences and actions by providing tools, means of communication, and advancements in their respective fields. The presence of technology adds a contemporary and realistic touch to the world-building.
- Characters influence: The unique physical environment, culture, society, and technology in the screenplay shape the characters' experiences and actions by providing them with specific settings, cultural contexts, societal roles, and technological tools. These elements influence the characters' behavior, choices, and interactions, and contribute to their individual story arcs and development throughout the narrative.
- Narrative contribution: The world elements in the screenplay contribute to the narrative by creating a rich and immersive setting for the story to unfold. The physical environment, culture, society, and technology provide the backdrop for the characters' experiences, conflicts, and journeys. The various settings, cultural dynamics, societal structures, and technological advancements add depth, complexity, and realism to the narrative, enhancing the overall storytelling.
- Thematic depth contribution: The world elements in the screenplay contribute to the thematic depth by exploring themes such as learning, experimentation, success, failure, nostalgia, reflection, responsibility, exhaustion, healing, personal growth, professionalism, secrecy, tension, mystery, fear, tension, desperation, community, empathy, shared experiences, creativity, introspection, trauma, control, change, empowerment, survival, tragedy, loss, and the passage of time. The physical environment, culture, society, and technology serve as vehicles to explore these themes and deepen the thematic exploration of the screenplay.
Voice Analysis | |
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Summary: | The writer's voice is characterized by a blend of concise, descriptive, and introspective narrative, with a focus on personal growth, healing, and empathetic dialogue. The author creates a balance between technical and emotional aspects, contributing to a realistic and engaging atmosphere. |
Voice Contribution | The writer's voice contributes to the script by creating a unique blend of technical and emotional elements, which adds depth and authenticity to the characters and their interactions. The descriptive narrative and character-driven dialogue create a vivid atmosphere, making the story more engaging and immersive for the audience. |
Best Representation Scene | 3 - Sudden Attack at Ravenwood High School |
Best Scene Explanation | This scene is the best representation of the author's voice because it showcases their ability to create a tense and urgent atmosphere, while also focusing on the characters' emotional responses and their determination to protect themselves. The descriptive narrative and character-driven dialogue create a vivid and engaging scene that highlights the writer's unique voice. |
Top Correlations and patterns found in the scenes:
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Correlation between Emotional Impact and Overall Grade | There is a strong positive correlation between Emotional Impact and Overall Grade in this screenplay. Scenes with higher Emotional Impact tend to have higher Overall Grades. |
Correlation between Conflict and High Stakes | There is a strong positive correlation between Conflict and High Stakes in this screenplay. Scenes with higher Conflict tend to have higher High Stakes. |
Correlation between Character Changes and Emotional Impact | There is a moderate positive correlation between Character Changes and Emotional Impact in this screenplay. Scenes with more Character Changes tend to have higher Emotional Impact. |
Correlation between Dialogue and Plot | There is a moderate positive correlation between Dialogue and Plot in this screenplay. Scenes with more Dialogue tend to have a more developed Plot. |
Correlation between Tone and Concept | There is a weak positive correlation between Tone and Concept in this screenplay. Scenes with a more Vibrant or Assertive Tone tend to have a more developed Concept. |
Writer's Craft Overall Analysis
The overall writing style of the screenplay is effective in creating engaging scenes with relatable characters and emotional depth. The writer demonstrates a strong command of dialogue and descriptive language, effectively conveying the internal thoughts and emotions of the protagonists. The scenes flow naturally and maintain a consistent tone throughout. However, there are areas for improvement in terms of structure, pacing, and character development.
Key Improvement Areas
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Course | Screenwriting Masterclass with Aaron Sorkin | This course offers valuable lessons on dialogue writing and storytelling techniques, which would benefit the writer's craft. It can help address the key improvement areas of structure, pacing, and character development. |
Here are different Tropes found in the screenplay
Trope | Trope Details | Trope Explanation |
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Jumping Ahead of the Lesson | Mark and Nathan connect a wire and the circuit board shorts out, causing them to jump backward. Mr. Jacobs, their teacher, approaches them and reminds them not to jump ahead of the lesson. | This trope occurs when characters in a story skip or ignore important information or steps, leading to negative consequences. An example of this trope can be seen in the movie 'Back to the Future' when Marty McFly jumps ahead in time without fully understanding how to operate the time machine. |
High School Reunion | Mark and Nathan make plans to meet up later for their high school reunion. Later, various characters are shown preparing for and attending the reunion. | This trope involves characters reuniting with their former classmates from high school, often leading to nostalgic and dramatic moments. An example of this trope can be seen in the movie 'Romy and Michele's High School Reunion' where the main characters attend their high school reunion and face challenges and revelations from their past. |
Violent Attack | Ethan Marshall suddenly appears and strikes Mark in the chest with a splitting maul, causing him to collapse on the pavement. Chaos ensues as students flee in terror. | This trope involves a sudden and violent attack on a character or group of characters, often leading to chaos and fear. An example of this trope can be seen in the movie 'Halloween' where the main character is attacked by a masked killer, leading to a series of violent events. |
Medical Emergency | A young man with severe injuries from a car crash is rushed into the emergency room. Jasmine, a nurse, takes charge of the situation and attempts to stabilize the patient. Despite their efforts, the patient's heart rate flatlines and Jasmine declares the time of death. | This trope involves a medical emergency where characters must respond quickly and make life-saving decisions. An example of this trope can be seen in the TV show 'Grey's Anatomy' where the doctors and nurses of Grey Sloan Memorial Hospital face various medical emergencies and must work together to save lives. |
Drug Addiction | Jasmine reflects on the discovery of opioids in a patient's system and her inability to reach the patient's family. She later snorts a pill and struggles with the decision to attend her high school reunion. | This trope involves a character struggling with drug addiction, often leading to personal and professional consequences. An example of this trope can be seen in the TV show 'Breaking Bad' where the main character becomes involved in the production and distribution of drugs, leading to a spiral of addiction and destruction. |
Flashback | The screenplay includes multiple flashbacks to significant events in the characters' past, such as a violent incident in the cafeteria and a high school art room chase. | This trope involves a narrative technique where the story shifts to a previous time period to provide context or reveal important information. An example of this trope can be seen in the movie 'The Godfather Part II' where the story alternates between the present and past to explore the origins of the main character. |
Surviving a Tragedy | The characters in the screenplay have all survived a tragic event in their past, such as a high school massacre or a car crash. | This trope involves characters who have experienced and survived a traumatic event, often leading to personal growth and resilience. An example of this trope can be seen in the movie 'Manchester by the Sea' where the main character must navigate the aftermath of a devastating fire that killed his children. |
Mystery or Suspense | The screenplay includes elements of mystery and suspense, such as the dark figure in the hallway, the knocking at the door, and the eerie sounds in the catacombs. | This trope involves creating an atmosphere of tension and uncertainty, often through mysterious or suspenseful events. An example of this trope can be seen in the TV show 'Stranger Things' where the characters must unravel the mysteries of the Upside Down and face supernatural threats. |
Character Redemption | Several characters in the screenplay, such as Jasmine and Eva, go through personal journeys of redemption and growth. | This trope involves characters who undergo a transformation and seek redemption for their past actions or mistakes. An example of this trope can be seen in the movie 'The Shawshank Redemption' where the main character, Andy Dufresne, seeks redemption and a new life after being wrongfully imprisoned. |
Haunted Location | The screenplay includes scenes set in the catacombs of Ravenwood High School, which are described as eerie and oppressive. | This trope involves a location that is haunted or possesses a supernatural presence, often leading to eerie or unsettling events. An example of this trope can be seen in the movie 'The Shining' where the Overlook Hotel becomes a haunted and malevolent force that torments the main characters. |
Memorable lines in the script:
Scene Number | Line |
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19 | Jasmine: ABOVE ALL, WE RISE |
40 | Chris: We're not cats. We're Raptors! And what do Raptors do? Above all, we rise... even if some of us have put on a bit of weight since high school. |
42 | Chris: To Rachel, to Liam, to Tyler, to Sarah, to Mark, to Kevin. So long as we say their names, they will never truly die. We'll keep them in our hearts, honor them with our actions, and carry them into the future they've inspired us to build. With us, evermore! |
17 | Eva: Five... five things... |
14 | Alex: True horror lay not in the unseen menace prowling the shadows, but in the silent scream of his own soul, paralyzed by a moment forged in the dark - where every second echoes through time in a single choice. |
Some Loglines to consider:
Twenty years after surviving a school shooting, a group of alumni reunite, only to find themselves confronting the ghosts of their past and a new wave of terror. |
Haunted by the trauma of a school massacre, a group of former classmates must overcome their personal demons and unravel a dark secret that threatens to shatter their fragile peace. |
As a high school reunion brings together survivors of a horrific tragedy, they discover that the past is not as buried as they thought, and the wounds they carry may never truly heal. |
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Explanation: The screenplay for 'Alumni' presents a compelling exploration of trauma and its aftermath, focusing on a group of high school alumni grappling with the lasting impact of a school shooting. While the screenplay excels in creating atmosphere and delving into the psychological complexities of its characters, it suffers from pacing issues, an underdeveloped antagonist, and an abrupt ending. Further development is needed to strengthen the narrative structure and provide a more satisfying resolution.