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# PG SLUGLINE
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COLD OPEN
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INT BATHROOM CONTINUOUS
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INT JOHN'S SUV DAY
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INT BILL'S LIVING ROOM CONTINUOUS
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INT KEMP'S BEDROOM DAY
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EXT GRASS FIELD DAY
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INT KEMP'S KITCHEN DAY
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EXT OLD JONES COMPOUND DAY
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INT METH LAB CONTINUOUS
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INT KEMP'S GARAGE DAY
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INT DIA - UNDERGROUND RENTAL CAR PARKING GARAGE CONTINUOUS
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INT BILL'S OLD LIVING ROOM CONTINUOUS
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INT JOHN’S LIVING ROOM
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INT UNDERGROUND BUNKER
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EXT HOSPITAL DAY
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EXT SPACE
Scene Map
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# PG SLUGLINE
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COLD OPEN
COLD OPEN
COLD OPEN BLACK -- NOTHING -- SILENCE A low-pitch HUM builds. BRUMMM -- louder -- a deafening BRAAAM -- light reflected off a black surface. Everything is blurry -- spatial distortion puckers outward...
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INT BATHROOM CONTINUOUS
INT. BATHROOM - CONTINUOUS
INT. BATHROOM - CONTINUOUS A nice bathroom, jacuzzi tub, fancy faucet. John splashes water on his face -- looks in mirror. Handsome but tired. His eyes though -- they hold volumes. Takes a deep breath and reaches under the sink, digging
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INT JOHN'S SUV DAY
INT. JOHN'S SUV - DAY
INT. JOHN'S SUV - DAY John in aviators, driving his Porsche SUV. Empty highway, nothing for miles. Turns on the radio -- Type O Negative -- "I Don't Wanna Be Me." Cranks it. Floors it. NOW -- OUTSIDE - a bird's eye view of the SUV cruising the
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INT BILL'S LIVING ROOM CONTINUOUS
INT. BILL'S LIVING ROOM - CONTINUOUS
INT. BILL'S LIVING ROOM - CONTINUOUS A nice house with tacky-ass shit. Plaid couches with cigarette burns. A card table with a half-done poker game atop. Ashtrays and beer bottles litter the landscape. Dave makes a beeline up the hallway and stops at a room with
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INT KEMP'S BEDROOM DAY
INT. KEMP'S BEDROOM - DAY
INT. KEMP'S BEDROOM - DAY Easing back -- a dark-cobalt iris -- an eye -- a man's face takes shape. KEMP ALBURN (50s, Black-British) a rugged Alpha with serious gravitas. Kemp sits up in bed, puts his face in his palms, rubs his
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EXT GRASS FIELD DAY
EXT. GRASS FIELD - DAY
EXT. GRASS FIELD - DAY Helicopter lands in a field. Kemp and Cade exit their RANGE ROVER and are greeted by DAWN (40s), MI5 through and through. DAWN Alright, you brawny Brummies, ready
7 24
INT KEMP'S KITCHEN DAY
INT. KEMP'S KITCHEN - DAY
INT. KEMP'S KITCHEN - DAY Back at the house, like nothing happened. They calmly finish breakfast. Kemp’s boot has a dried chunk of someone stuck to it. Back on Kemp.
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EXT OLD JONES COMPOUND DAY
EXT. OLD JONES COMPOUND - DAY
EXT. OLD JONES COMPOUND - DAY John stands by his Porsche staring at the wreckage of his old life. Making peace with the vessel he has resided in for the last 22 years. JOHN
9 31
INT METH LAB CONTINUOUS
INT. METH LAB - CONTINUOUS
INT. METH LAB - CONTINUOUS Shiny polished metal everywhere. BILL Look around. It's glorious... like a... like... oiled-up booty-rama.
10 38
INT KEMP'S GARAGE DAY
INT. KEMP'S GARAGE - DAY
INT. KEMP'S GARAGE - DAY Kemp and Cade enter. KEMP Any progress, Zaz? ZAZ
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INT DIA - UNDERGROUND RENTAL CAR PARKING GARAGE CONTINUOUS
INT. DIA - UNDERGROUND RENTAL CAR PARKING GARAGE - CONTINUOUS
INT. DIA - UNDERGROUND RENTAL CAR PARKING GARAGE - CONTINUOUS A dark underground parking garage. CADE So what car you get? A luxury vehicle? A Tesla?
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INT BILL'S OLD LIVING ROOM CONTINUOUS
INT. BILL'S OLD LIVING ROOM - CONTINUOUS
INT. BILL'S OLD LIVING ROOM - CONTINUOUS Everything is burned. The ceiling and a wall are gone. Rotting wood rides on the wind. JOHN Are you ready, John? It's as good a
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INT JOHN’S LIVING ROOM
INT. JOHN’S LIVING ROOM
INT. JOHN’S LIVING ROOM John runs by the pictures. Closer on pictures. The friend -- the one with John in Europe -- it's Dave, no shit. They are maybe 25, but it's Dave for sure.
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INT UNDERGROUND BUNKER
INT. UNDERGROUND BUNKER
INT. UNDERGROUND BUNKER A dark cavernous bunker. AMBROSE SAMAD (40s, British-Indian). Thin, muscular. Long thick lashes give a natural mascara sinister look. He lays on a leather couch staring at his phone.
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EXT HOSPITAL DAY
EXT. HOSPITAL - DAY
EXT. HOSPITAL - DAY An Umbra floats 100 feet off the ground and moves toward a hospital. It darts toward a patient's window and passes through. INSIDE THE HOSPITAL ROOM is a sick, unconscious young man,
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EXT SPACE
EXT. SPACE
EXT. SPACE The Moon approaches. Fast orbit around to its dark side -- which is not dark. NOW -- toward the surface. Artificial structures. Some kind of base or station. CLOSER -- a POWER STATION. 30 or so huge thin solar-panel

WE CALLED THEM GODS

An ancient alien god, living as a single father and darknet drug kingpin, must protect his new life when his vengeful brother returns to destroy humanity and reclaim their lost home.

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Overview

Poster
Unique Selling Point

A unique fusion of ancient astronaut mythology with modern crime thriller, featuring alien gods who have been living among humans for millennia, now operating a darknet drug empire while battling their own kind. This blends high-concept sci-fi with gritty crime drama in a way that feels both epic and grounded, appealing to fans of both 'The X-Files' and 'Breaking Bad' while offering something genuinely original.

AI Verdict & Suggestions

Ratings are subjective. So you get different engines' ratings to compare.

Hover over verdict cards for Executive Summaries

GPT5
 Recommend
Gemini
 Consider
Claude
 Recommend
Grok
 Consider
DeepSeek
 Consider
Average Score: 7.6
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
To improve the script creatively, focus on establishing a consistent tone that harmoniously blends the mix of dark humor, violence, and mythic elements to avoid jarring shifts that disrupt emotional flow. Clarify the rules of the speculative elements, such as umbra possession and cloning mechanics, to make the mythology more accessible and engaging. Additionally, tighten pacing by reducing overreliance on lengthy flashbacks and exposition, and deepen emotional stakes, particularly for characters like John and his daughter, to foster stronger audience connections and thematic resonance.
For Executives:
The script has strong value with its innovative blend of ancient mythology and modern crime drama, offering visually striking elements and franchise potential in a crowded sci-fi market. However, risks include tonal inconsistencies that could confuse or alienate viewers, unclear world-building that might overwhelm audiences, and pacing issues that dilute tension, potentially limiting broad appeal. Market perception sees it as a high-concept project with niche draw, but it needs significant refinement to compete with polished series like Westworld or Mr. Robot, or it risks being seen as amateurish or unfocused.
Story Facts
Genres:
Science Fiction 35% Action 30% Drama 25% Thriller 20% Fantasy 15% Crime 15%

Setting: Distant future and present day, Various locations including space, futuristic generation ship, urban settings, and a moon base

Themes: The Cyclical Nature of Existence and Destiny, Supernatural and Cosmic Forces vs. Humanity, Duality and Possession, Family and Legacy, Existentialism and Free Will, Redemption and Breaking Cycles, Violence and Morality, Drug Use and Addiction

Conflict & Stakes: The main conflict revolves around John's struggle against existential threats from Enlil and his commandos, while also dealing with personal demons and the fate of his family and friends.

Mood: Darkly humorous and intense, blending action with existential themes.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The protagonist's dual identity as Enki, an ancient entity, adds depth and intrigue.
  • Major Twist: The revelation of John's possession by Enki and the implications for his character arc.
  • Distinctive Setting: The futuristic generation ship and the moon's artificial landscapes provide a visually stunning backdrop.
  • Innovative Ideas: The integration of advanced technology and themes of cloning and identity crisis.
  • Unique Characters: A diverse cast with complex backgrounds and motivations, enhancing the narrative depth.

Comparable Scripts: Interstellar, Event Horizon, The Matrix, Altered Carbon, Blade Runner 2049, The Expanse, Inception, The Umbrella Academy, Dark

Data Says…
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Our stats model looked at how your scores work together and ranked the changes most likely to move your overall rating next draft. Ordered by the most reliable gains first.

1. Theme (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Theme (Script Level) score: 7.2
Typical rewrite gain: +0.7 in Theme (Script Level)
Gets you ~7% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Confidence: High (based on ~3,836 similar revisions)
  • This is currently your highest-impact lever. Improving Theme (Script Level) is most likely to move the overall rating next.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Theme (Script Level) by about +0.7 in one rewrite.
  • Why it matters: At your level, improving this one area alone can cover a meaningful slice of the climb toward an "all Highly Recommends" script.
2. Character Development (Script Level)
Moderate Impact Script Level
Your current Character Development (Script Level) score: 7.4
Typical rewrite gain: +0.45 in Character Development (Script Level)
Gets you ~4% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Confidence: High (based on ~4,107 similar revisions)
  • This is another meaningful lever. After you work on the higher-impact areas, this can still create a noticeable lift.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Character Development (Script Level) by about +0.45 in one rewrite.
  • Why it matters: After you address the top item, gains here are still one of the levers that move you toward that "all Highly Recommends" zone.
3. Scene Structure
Moderate Impact Scene Level
Your current Scene Structure score: 8.1
Typical rewrite gain: +0.21 in Scene Structure
Gets you ~3% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Confidence: High (based on ~5,843 similar revisions)
  • This is another meaningful lever. After you work on the higher-impact areas, this can still create a noticeable lift.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Scene Structure by about +0.21 in one rewrite.
  • Why it matters: After you address the top item, gains here are still one of the levers that move you toward that "all Highly Recommends" zone.

Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

Screenplay Insights

Breaks down your script along various categories.

Overall Score: 7.56
Key Suggestions:
To strengthen the script's creative craft, focus on deepening the backstories of supporting characters like Kemp and Zaz to enhance their emotional depth and relatability, drawing from successful examples like Breaking Bad. Additionally, clarify the cosmic elements and stakes through smoother exposition and thematic integration, ensuring the narrative remains engaging and cohesive without overwhelming the audience.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
From a creative perspective, the script's strengths lie in its vivid imagery and character depth, but improvements should focus on crafting a more cohesive narrative by integrating flashbacks and subplots more fluidly to avoid confusion. Enhancing the balance between humor and serious themes will create a consistent tone, allowing emotional stakes to resonate more deeply and ensuring that character motivations drive the story forward effectively.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The character analysis highlights that while the script features well-defined protagonists with strong foundational traits, many characters lack sufficient depth in their arcs and emotional complexity, leading to static portrayals. To improve, focus on integrating backstory elements, enhancing internal conflicts, and developing relationship dynamics to create more nuanced, relatable characters that drive emotional engagement and thematic resonance, ultimately strengthening the narrative's impact.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
The script excels in emotional variety and intensity but needs refinement in pacing and depth to avoid audience fatigue and enhance engagement. By incorporating more emotional counterpoints, such as quieter moments of reflection or curiosity, and ensuring better continuity between narrative threads, the writer can create a more balanced, empathetic, and layered emotional journey that deepens character connections and amplifies the story's impact without overwhelming viewers.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
The goals and philosophical conflict analysis reveals a compelling character arc driven by internal and external stakes, but to elevate the script's craft, focus on integrating the philosophical tensions—such as sacrifice versus self-preservation—more evenly across acts to avoid late resolutions feeling rushed. This would deepen emotional engagement, strengthen thematic resonance, and provide more opportunities for character growth, making the narrative more dynamic and relatable.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
The theme analysis reveals a strong emphasis on the cyclical nature of existence and destiny, which is a compelling hook, but to elevate the script's craft, focus on amplifying character agency and moments of redemption to create more dynamic arcs and emotional resonance. This would counteract the risk of the narrative feeling overly deterministic, allowing for deeper audience connection; additionally, integrating the themes of family and legacy more seamlessly could enhance character development and provide clearer motivations, while reducing gratuitous violence and drug use to maintain pacing and avoid desensitizing viewers.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
The script's inconsistencies and plot holes, such as unexplained alien motivations and unresolved elements like John's injury, weaken its narrative coherence and character authenticity. To enhance the craft, focus on integrating alien lore more seamlessly into human elements, resolving key plot gaps for better believability, and streamlining redundancies like repetitive flashbacks and banter to improve pacing and emotional depth, ultimately creating a tighter, more engaging story.

Scene Analysis

All of your scenes analyzed individually and compared, so you can zero in on what to improve.

Scene-Level Percentile Chart
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Other Analyses

Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
The writer's voice excels in blending dark humor with intense action, but to elevate the script, focus on refining the pacing of tone shifts to avoid abruptness that could disorient viewers, and deepen character motivations to make the moral ambiguities more resonant and less reliant on shock value. By building on the vivid descriptions and witty dialogue, incorporating subtler emotional layers could enhance audience investment without diluting the gritty realism.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
The script's strengths lie in its engaging blend of action, humor, and character dynamics, but to enhance its creative impact, focus on refining dialogue to feel more natural and less expository, tightening pacing to sustain tension without drag, and deepening character arcs to build stronger emotional connections. By addressing these craft elements through targeted study and exercises, the writer can create a more immersive and resonant narrative.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
The script's world-building effectively merges sci-fi elements with everyday realities to create a compelling, chaotic universe, but to elevate the craft, focus on ensuring seamless integration of advanced technologies and mythological themes with character development. This will prevent the world from feeling overwhelming and instead make it a more organic extension of the characters' internal conflicts, enhancing emotional depth and pacing for a tighter narrative flow.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
The analysis reveals that your script excels in using emotional depth and humor to drive character development and dialogue, but there's room to enhance character growth in surreal or absurd scenes by integrating more personal moments. By consciously amplifying these elements, you can achieve greater narrative cohesion, ensuring that high-stakes tension and comedic relief work in harmony to create a more immersive and balanced story, ultimately elevating the overall craft and emotional resonance.
Loglines
Presents logline variations based on theme, genre, and hook.

Comparison with Previous Draft

See how your script has evolved from the previous version. This section highlights improvements, regressions, and changes across all major categories, helping you understand what revisions are working and what may need more attention.

Version Comparison Analysis
Summary of Changes
Improvements (5)
  • Character Complexity - characterDiversity: 6.0 → 8.0 +2.0
  • Story Structure - themeIntegration: 7.0 → 8.0 +1.0
  • Emotional Impact - emotionalPacing: 6.0 → 7.0 +1.0
  • Character Complexity - characterRelatability: 7.0 → 8.0 +1.0
  • Character Complexity - characterDialogue: 7.0 → 8.0 +1.0
Areas to Review (0)

No regressions detected