APEX

When a BSL-4 experiment leaks, wildlife becomes a hive and the Rockies an organism. A hardened park officer with familial ties to the program races into the mountain’s heart to sever a neural infection before the world breathes its last.

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

APEX distinguishes itself by blending creature horror with environmental sci-fi, creating a sentient mountain ecosystem as the true antagonist. The script's unique selling proposition lies in its fusion of military conspiracy, genetic experimentation, and ecological horror, with a protagonist whose personal connection to the catastrophe becomes the key to both understanding and potentially controlling it. The transformation of Clare from wildlife protector to apex predator creates a compelling moral and physical journey rarely seen in the genre.

AI Verdict & Suggestions

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GPT5
 Recommend
Gemini
 Consider
Claude
 Recommend
Grok
 Recommend
DeepSeek
 Recommend
Average Score: 8.0
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
APEX’s concept and imagery are strong — the mountain-as-organ metaphor and Clare’s arc are cinematic and marketable — but the script needs surgical rewrites to tighten mid-act pacing and, above all, to clearly define the contagion. Turn exposition into actionable scenes: show transmission, limits, incubation and why Clare is unique through physical clues and short dramatic beats (not logbooks or long dialogue dumps). At the same time deepen two or three supporting characters with small, memorable moments so their losses land emotionally. Trim repetitive dream imagery and focus each vision to advance Clare’s choice and stakes.
For Executives:
APEX is a high-concept, female-led eco‑body‑horror with festival and commercial crossover potential (think The Thing + Annihilation). Its production-friendly standout set pieces (mine hive, diner siege, radio-tower finale) make it attractive to genre buyers. The main risk: unclear rules around the infection and mid‑act pacing that dilute audience investment — issues that are fixable with targeted rewrites rather than structural overhaul. Recommend investing in a short rewrite pass (clarify contagion mechanics, tighten Act II, deepen select supporting arcs) before greenlight. This will materially reduce creative and VFX scope risk and increase marketability.
Story Facts
Genres:
Horror 60% Thriller 50% Science Fiction 40% Drama 30% Action 25%

Setting: Present day, Rocky Mountains, primarily in remote forested areas, a small mountain town, and a decayed military facility

Themes: Humanity vs. Nature, Scientific Hubris and Unintended Consequences, Survival and Adaptation, Loss of Innocence, The Dangers of Playing God, Faith vs. Science, Isolation and Vulnerability

Conflict & Stakes: Clare and Jack's struggle against a mysterious and deadly creature in the mountains, compounded by Clare's infection and the threat of a military cover-up, with their lives and the safety of the community at stake.

Mood: Tense and suspenseful, with elements of horror and introspection.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The integration of a supernatural infection that connects Clare to the mountain, blurring the lines between human and nature.
  • Plot Twist: Clare's transformation into a hybrid creature at the end, symbolizing her acceptance of her new identity.
  • Distinctive Setting: The remote and eerie Rocky Mountains serve as a character in their own right, enhancing the atmosphere.
  • Innovative Ideas: The exploration of environmental themes through horror, addressing the consequences of human actions on nature.
  • Unique Characters: Complex characters with rich backstories that contribute to the emotional weight of the narrative.

Comparable Scripts: The Revenant, Annihilation, Into the Wild, The Call of the Wild, The Girl with All the Gifts, The Descent, The Edge, Pet Sematary, The Thing

Data Says…
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Our stats model looked at how your scores work together and ranked the changes most likely to move your overall rating next draft. Ordered by the most reliable gains first.

1. Premise (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Premise (Script Level) score: 8.4
Typical rewrite gain: +0.6 in Premise (Script Level)
Gets you ~5% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Confidence: High (based on ~574 similar revisions)
  • This is currently your highest-impact lever. Improving Premise (Script Level) is most likely to move the overall rating next.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Premise (Script Level) by about +0.6 in one rewrite.
  • Why it matters: At your level, improving this one area alone can cover a meaningful slice of the climb toward an "all Highly Recommends" script.
2. Theme (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Theme (Script Level) score: 8.7
Typical rewrite gain: +0.6 in Theme (Script Level)
Gets you ~4% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Confidence: High (based on ~329 similar revisions)
  • This is another meaningful lever. After you work on the higher-impact areas, this can still create a noticeable lift.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Theme (Script Level) by about +0.6 in one rewrite.
  • Why it matters: After you address the top item, gains here are still one of the levers that move you toward that "all Highly Recommends" zone.
3. Character Development (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Character Development (Script Level) score: 7.8
Typical rewrite gain: +0.6 in Character Development (Script Level)
Gets you ~3% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Confidence: High (based on ~3,170 similar revisions)
  • This is another meaningful lever. After you work on the higher-impact areas, this can still create a noticeable lift.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Character Development (Script Level) by about +0.6 in one rewrite.
  • Why it matters: After you address the top item, gains here are still one of the levers that move you toward that "all Highly Recommends" zone.

Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

Screenplay Insights

Breaks down your script along various categories.

Overall Score: 8.38
Key Suggestions:
The script's biggest creative win is Clare's arc — it's emotionally compelling and cinematic — but the screenplay would be markedly stronger if secondary characters (notably Sandy and Walter) were deepened and their personal stakes woven into the main plot earlier. Do this by giving them distinct wants, small scenes that reveal who they are (brief flashbacks, private lines, or choices), and by making their choices matter to Clare's journey. Also tighten pacing by trimming explanatory exposition and varying emotional tone (small moments of hope or levity) so the horror beats land harder and the audience stays invested emotionally rather than only viscerally.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
Anchor the screenplay's emotional and thematic payoffs earlier by planting clearer, concrete signs of the biohazard and Clare’s unique link to it. Right now the Project Apex reveal and Clare’s transformation feel powerful but somewhat sudden; add subtle foreshadowing (visual, auditory, or behavioral cues) and a few explicit connective beats about the infection’s mechanics and Ray Lockwood’s research in the middle of the script. Also deepen two or three supporting characters (Sandy, Walter, Bill) with small but distinguishing moments so their deaths and sacrifices carry weight. Finally, lean into the evolution vs. monstrosity theme with concise, recurring imagery or dialogue so the ending reads as earned, not merely supernatural shock.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The character work is strong: Clare is a layered, sympathetic protagonist whose arc from skeptical wildlife officer to hybrid embodiment of the mountain drives the story. The script will be stronger if you better seed and pace her physical and psychological transformation earlier — use recurring, specific motifs (asthma inhaler, finger scar, golden pulse) and tighten the emotional through-lines with Jack so stakes land. Also give Jack a few more intermediary beats that show his internal conflict and deepen his bond with Clare so his final sacrifice feels earned rather than abrupt. Small, targeted additions (one line, one beat, one visual motif) in early scenes will make the later spectacle resonate emotionally without adding pages or major structural change.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
The script delivers a potent, cinematic horror with a strong central arc, but the emotional pacing needs tightening. Add more deliberate emotional 'valleys' — quieter, human moments that let the audience breathe and invest in the characters' inner lives (especially Clare and Jack) before and after major shocks. Deepen Jack's backstory, give Walter and Sandy earlier, smaller touchpoints, and slow Clare's transformation so her final surrender feels earned. Also weave moments of awe or bittersweet connection to the mountain to create richer contrast and make the horror land harder.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
The analysis makes clear that the film’s emotional center is Clare’s internal arc — from control and investigation to accepting a primal transformation. To strengthen the script, make that arc more explicit and earned: show earlier, incremental moral/psychological decisions that force Clare to choose action over flight, keep the sensory motifs (breath, gold veins, father’s voice) consistent as signposts, and heighten the personal cost of her transformation so the climax and her final choice feel inevitable rather than sudden.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
The script has a compelling, high-concept core: ecological/biological hubris that culminates in a visceral, personal metamorphosis. To strengthen it, tighten the throughline that links Project Apex (scientific cause) to the mountain’s agency and Clare’s arc (emotional effect). Cut or consolidate expository beats that stall momentum, and replace them with recurring sensory motifs (breath, gold light, the mountain's pulse) that echo Clare’s internal change. Focus scenes on decisions that make her transformation feel earned—show more active choice rather than passive infection—so the horror remains both spectacular and emotionally resonant.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
Two structural problems are undermining the script’s emotional and thematic payoff: the infection’s rules and progression feel inconsistent (sometimes debilitating, later conveniently empowering), and the origin/spread of the contagion is underexplained. Fixing these will tighten character arcs (especially Clare’s moral/physical journey), preserve suspense, and make the final transformation earned rather than accidental. Also resolve a few character beats (e.g., Walter’s tunnel decision, the dynamite’s narrative impact) so actions feel motivated, not plot-driven.

Scene Analysis

All of your scenes analyzed individually and compared, so you can zero in on what to improve.

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Other Analyses

Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
Your voice—highly visceral, sensory, and spare in dialogue—is a major strength. To sharpen the script, focus that immersive atmosphere so every lush description directly advances character or plot stakes. Trim any descriptions that pause momentum; use the terse dialogue to reveal interior stakes and relationships more consistently (especially Clare’s emotional arc). Use Scene 8 as the tonal template: vivid detail that propels investigation and character decisions, not just mood. Finally, clarify and tighten the climax beats so the transformation feels earned emotionally as well as viscerally.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
You already excel at atmosphere, set pieces, and visceral imagery. To elevate the screenplay from a compelling genre piece to a resonant character drama, sharpen Clare’s internal stakes and throughline: make clear why she keeps risking herself (beyond duty), let that motivation drive scene choices and choices under pressure, and layer subtext into dialogue so emotional truth carries the spectacle. Tighten pacing by pruning scenes that don’t advance her arc or the central mystery and use scene-level decision points to track her transformation from investigator to participant in the mountain’s will.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
You have a potent, high-concept eco-horror rooted in a vivid mountain world and a compelling female lead. The immediate writing work is to tighten focus: center Clare’s emotional throughline and make the infection/Project Apex rules concrete and discoverable through action (not monologue). Trim or combine scenes that duplicate mood beats (many echo the same dread) and use sensory detail to reveal world-build instead of expository dumps. Anchor the climax in Clare’s personal choice — make her transformation feel earned by clearer cause-effect and by escalating stakes that test her identity earlier and more frequently.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
Your screenplay’s core strength is its command of high-stakes tension, dreadful atmosphere, and a few surreal set pieces — those scenes consistently deliver the highest emotional impact and drive the plot. Lean into that formula: tighten quieter, expository scenes so they serve character change or forward momentum, deepen the surreal/mystical beats (they score highest with audiences), and be surgical about where you deploy shocks so each one has clear emotional payoff. Also preserve and sharpen the strong dialogue moments that amplify emotion — when your lines land, the scene lands.
Loglines
Presents logline variations based on theme, genre, and hook.