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Scene Map 60
# PG SLUGLINE
1 1
EXT FLINT, MICHIGAN - ESTABLISHING - PRESENT DAY
2 3
EXT CITY STREET/EXT. GOODMAN HOUSE MOMENTS LATER
3 5
INT GOODMAN HOUSE CONTINUOUS
4 6
EXT MARKET - DOWNTOWN FLINT - LATER THAT DAY
5 8
EXT GOODMAN HOUSE/INT. LACY’S MERCEDES - SUNSET
6 10
EXT TOM’S HOUSE/INT. GARAGE - A LITTLE LATER
7 12
EXT GOODMAN HOUSE CONTINUOUS
8 12
EXT LAKE FENTON CONTINUOUS
9 13
INT GEORGE AND FRAN'S BEDROOM CONTINUOUS
10 14
EXT HANK ROBERTS’ HOUSE DAY
11 14
INT /EXT. TRUCK - COUNTRY ROAD - A LITTLE LATER
12 16
EXT DORT MALL SHOPPING CENTER - A LITTLE LATER
13 16
INT GOODMAN HOUSE NIGHT
14 17
EXT HANK’S HOUSE CONTINUOUS
15 21
EXT GOODMAN HOUSE DAY
16 22
EXT GOODMAN HOUSE CONTINUOUS
17 24
EXT SOCCER FIELD - FLINT, MICHGAN - 20 YEARS PREVIOUS
18 25
INT ICE CREAM PARLOR - A LITTLE LATER
19 27
INT TOM’S GARAGE NIGHT
20 29
EXT GEMM HOUSE - BACKYARD CONTINUOUS
21 30
INT GOODMAN HOUSE - LIVING ROOM/KITCHEN CONTINUOUS
22 30
EXT POLICE STATION DAY
23 31
INT STARLITE CONEY ISLAND RESTAURANT - A LITTLE LATER
24 32
INT JOE’S TRUCK CONTINUOUS
25 32
EXT GOODMAN HOUSE CONTINUOUS
26 33
EXT JOE’S TRUCK - FLINT BACKWOODS - SUNSET
27 35
EXT GEMM HOUSE - FIREPIT NIGHT
28 37
INT NAIL SALON DAY
29 38
INT GEMM HOUSE CONTINUOUS
30 41
EXT BACKWOODS NIGHT
31 42
EXT FRANK MARTINI’S BARN DAY
32 47
EXT BREE’S HOUSE LATER
33 48
INT OLD PICK-UP TRUCK - COUNTRY ROAD LATER
34 50
INT FLOWER SHOP CONTINUOUS
35 51
INT GEMM HOUSE - KITCHEN CONTINUOUS
36 52
INT KITCHEN CONTINUOUS
37 52
EXT GOODMAN HOUSE DAY
38 53
INT LACY'S BEDROOM CONTINUOUS
39 54
INT LACY'S ROOM CONTINUOUS
40 55
EXT GOODMAN HOUSE CONTINUOUS
41 56
EXT /INT. GEMM HOUSE CONTINUOUS
42 57
EXT MARKET DAY
43 57
INT MIDDLE EASTERN DINER LATER
44 59
INT GOODMAN HOUSE - JOE’S BEDROOM CONTINUOUS
45 60
INT BAR NIGHT
46 60
INT GOODMAN HOUSE DAY
47 61
INT JAIL CELL CONTINUOUS
48 61
INT GOODMAN HOUSE - JOE’S ROOM CONTINUOUS
49 62
INT GEMM HOUSE - A LITTLE LATER
50 63
INT GEMM HOUSE - LACY'S BEDROOM NIGHT
51 64
EXT JOE’S BEDROOM NIGHT
52 64
INT JOE’S TRUCK DAY
53 65
EXT FRANK’S BARN - SATURDAY MORNING
54 67
INT BARN - LOBBY CONTINUOUS
55 68
INT HORSE STALL CONTINUOUS
56 70
INT BARN - MAIN AREA CONTINUOUS
57 74
INT MAIN STAGE CONTINUOUS
58 84
EXT BARN - RECEPTION - SUNSET
59 87
EXT BISHOP AIRPORT/EXT. NEW YORK CITY - A YEAR EARLIER
60 87
INT FRANK'S BARN - PRESENT
Scene Map
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# PG SLUGLINE
1 1
EXT FLINT, MICHIGAN - ESTABLISHING - PRESENT DAY
EXT. FLINT, MICHIGAN - ESTABLISHING - PRESENT DAY
B.F.F. Written by Vern Urich © 2025 Reel Eyes Enterprises Draft: 11/19/2025
2 3
EXT CITY STREET/EXT. GOODMAN HOUSE MOMENTS LATER
EXT. CITY STREET/EXT. GOODMAN HOUSE - MOMENTS LATER
EXT. CITY STREET/EXT. GOODMAN HOUSE - MOMENTS LATER John turns down a side street. Old, broken down, dilapidated houses are seen. Lacy sees Joe next to his cleaning supplies and big sign under the shade tree. Joe rocks back and forth. Mumbles to himself.
3 5
INT GOODMAN HOUSE CONTINUOUS
INT. GOODMAN HOUSE - CONTINUOUS
INT. GOODMAN HOUSE - CONTINUOUS Joe ENTERS. Waves the bill. JOE Mom! Dad! George APPEARS with his sensible, strong, loyal wife, Fran.
4 6
EXT MARKET - DOWNTOWN FLINT - LATER THAT DAY
EXT. MARKET - DOWNTOWN FLINT - LATER THAT DAY
EXT. MARKET - DOWNTOWN FLINT - LATER THAT DAY BREE, SANDY, and TINA hang out with BOB, TOM, MIKE, and LENNY. 20s/30s. DIVERSE as Flint. They’re all spoiled. Entitled. Rich. The boys fuck off. Drink beer. The girls are absorbed with their iPhones. Text. Gossip.
5 8
EXT GOODMAN HOUSE/INT. LACY’S MERCEDES - SUNSET
EXT. GOODMAN HOUSE/INT. LACY’S MERCEDES - SUNSET
EXT. GOODMAN HOUSE/INT. LACY’S MERCEDES - SUNSET Lacy drives up with Joe. Parks. Fran and George spy on them through the blinds. LACY Are you sure you don’t want to come
6 10
EXT TOM’S HOUSE/INT. GARAGE - A LITTLE LATER
EXT. TOM’S HOUSE/INT. GARAGE - A LITTLE LATER
EXT. TOM’S HOUSE/INT. GARAGE - A LITTLE LATER This opulent HOUSE is also located on Parkside Drive. Tom, Mike, Bob, and Lenny rehearse their band. They suck. Tina and Sandy hang out. Text. Bree and Lacy ENTER. Bree works it for the boys. Loves the attention. Lacy gives no fucks.
7 12
EXT GOODMAN HOUSE CONTINUOUS
EXT. GOODMAN HOUSE - CONTINUOUS
EXT. GOODMAN HOUSE - CONTINUOUS Books on acting, actors, and DVDs are on shelves. Photos of great actors and posters of great films are on his walls. Joe sits on his bed. Rocks back and forth. Mumbles to himself. Joe gets a text from Lacy. Looks at it.
8 12
EXT LAKE FENTON CONTINUOUS
EXT. LAKE FENTON - CONTINUOUS
EXT. LAKE FENTON - CONTINUOUS A BONFIRE roars. “ALL SUMMER LONG,” by KID ROCK blares. Everyone except Lacy drinks, dances, and parties. Lacy looks at classical dance companies of New York City on her phone. SANDY
9 13
INT GEORGE AND FRAN'S BEDROOM CONTINUOUS
INT. GEORGE AND FRAN'S BEDROOM - CONTINUOUS
INT. GEORGE AND FRAN'S BEDROOM - CONTINUOUS George gets in bed. Fran hands him a ball jar of moonshine. He sips it. GEORGE Mmmm. Good batch, Franny.
10 14
EXT HANK ROBERTS’ HOUSE DAY
EXT. HANK ROBERTS’ HOUSE - DAY
EXT. HANK ROBERTS’ HOUSE - DAY HANK ROBERTS, 50s, large and usually in charge, helps Joe unload plastic jugs of moonshine into his garage. JOE That should do it, Hankie.
11 14
INT /EXT. TRUCK - COUNTRY ROAD - A LITTLE LATER
INT./EXT. TRUCK - COUNTRY ROAD - A LITTLE LATER
INT./EXT. TRUCK - COUNTRY ROAD - A LITTLE LATER “BAD TIME” by GRAND FUNK RAILROAD blares on the radio. Joe drives. Rocks back and forth. Mumbles. Lenny steps out on the side of the road next to his truck. Flags down Joe. JOE
12 16
EXT DORT MALL SHOPPING CENTER - A LITTLE LATER
EXT. DORT MALL SHOPPING CENTER - A LITTLE LATER
EXT. DORT MALL SHOPPING CENTER - A LITTLE LATER Lacy, Bree, Sandy, and Tina EXIT with bags of shoes, clothes and other useless shit. Bob, Mike, Tom, and Lenny drive up in Lenny’s truck. Bob holds up a huge wad of cash. BOB
13 16
INT GOODMAN HOUSE NIGHT
INT. GOODMAN HOUSE - NIGHT
INT. GOODMAN HOUSE - NIGHT The house is DARK. Joe limps in. Slow. Quiet. In pain. FRAN (O.C.) Hi, honey. I was wondering where you were...
14 17
EXT HANK’S HOUSE CONTINUOUS
EXT. HANK’S HOUSE - CONTINUOUS
EXT. HANK’S HOUSE - CONTINUOUS Cars line the street. NEIGHBORS walk dogs. George screeches up. Takes out the mailbox. Staggers out with a shotgun. EXT. HANK’S BACKYARD - CONTINUOUS Lacy, Bree, Tina, Sandy, Bob, Tom, Mike, and Lenny eat and
15 21
EXT GOODMAN HOUSE DAY
EXT. GOODMAN HOUSE - DAY
EXT. GOODMAN HOUSE - DAY George is on the phone. Looks at “MOONSHINER” magazine. Fran cleans and dusts. Nervous energy. GEORGE “Yes. That’ll be all. Thank you.”
16 22
EXT GOODMAN HOUSE CONTINUOUS
EXT. GOODMAN HOUSE - CONTINUOUS
EXT. GOODMAN HOUSE - CONTINUOUS George and Fran watch Joe help Lacy to her Mercedes. GEORGE You’ve got chores to do, boy!
17 24
EXT SOCCER FIELD - FLINT, MICHGAN - 20 YEARS PREVIOUS
EXT. SOCCER FIELD - FLINT, MICHGAN - 20 YEARS PREVIOUS
EXT. SOCCER FIELD - FLINT, MICHGAN - 20 YEARS PREVIOUS Joe coaches high school soccer practice and soccer games. LACY (V.O.) You worked our asses off, but you always made it fun. You motivated
18 25
INT ICE CREAM PARLOR - A LITTLE LATER
INT. ICE CREAM PARLOR - A LITTLE LATER
INT. ICE CREAM PARLOR - A LITTLE LATER Joe and Lacy ENTER. A strong, new bond between them. JULIE, the waitress, APPROACHES. JULIE Hi, guys. What can I get you?
19 27
INT TOM’S GARAGE NIGHT
INT. TOM’S GARAGE - NIGHT
INT. TOM’S GARAGE - NIGHT Tom, Mike, and Lenny wait to rehearse. Pissed. Bob paces like a caged, enraged animal. MIKE Come on, Bob! We gotta rehearse!
20 29
EXT GEMM HOUSE - BACKYARD CONTINUOUS
EXT. GEMM HOUSE - BACKYARD - CONTINUOUS
EXT. GEMM HOUSE - BACKYARD - CONTINUOUS Lacy and Joe sit by the FIRE PIT. Joe is remote. Subdued. Lacy kisses Joe. Joe pulls back. Shocked. Stunned. LACY What wrong?
21 30
INT GOODMAN HOUSE - LIVING ROOM/KITCHEN CONTINUOUS
INT. GOODMAN HOUSE - LIVING ROOM/KITCHEN - CONTINUOUS
INT. GOODMAN HOUSE - LIVING ROOM/KITCHEN - CONTINUOUS George sits in his chair. Sips shine. Watches “MOONSHINERS” on T.V.. Fran’s at the kitchen sink. Dirty dishes are piled high. Fran turns on the water. It’s dirty and brown. FRAN
22 30
EXT POLICE STATION DAY
EXT. POLICE STATION - DAY
EXT. POLICE STATION - DAY CHIEF OF POLICE, AL STONE, 60s, EXITS. Hank drives up. Rolls down his window. HANK
23 31
INT STARLITE CONEY ISLAND RESTAURANT - A LITTLE LATER
INT. STARLITE CONEY ISLAND RESTAURANT - A LITTLE LATER
INT. STARLITE CONEY ISLAND RESTAURANT - A LITTLE LATER Al and Hank enjoy Koegels chili dogs, french fries, creamy coleslaw, and Faygo pop. AL You want to tell me what the hell
24 32
INT JOE’S TRUCK CONTINUOUS
INT. JOE’S TRUCK - CONTINUOUS
INT. JOE’S TRUCK - CONTINUOUS Joe drives. Mumbles. His phone RINGS. Looks at it. LACY. JOE Lacy! LACY (O.C.)
25 32
EXT GOODMAN HOUSE CONTINUOUS
EXT. GOODMAN HOUSE - CONTINUOUS
EXT. GOODMAN HOUSE - CONTINUOUS Lacy hangs up. Hobbles away. The door OPENS. Fran’s in a robe. Disheveled. Holds a joint and a jar of shine. Slurs. FRAN Joseph’s not here. This family
26 33
EXT JOE’S TRUCK - FLINT BACKWOODS - SUNSET
EXT. JOE’S TRUCK - FLINT BACKWOODS - SUNSET
EXT. JOE’S TRUCK - FLINT BACKWOODS - SUNSET Joe loads jugs of moonshine into the back of his truck. Tom and Bob drive up in a brand new G.M. truck. Stop. BOB Hey! Shit for brains!
27 35
EXT GEMM HOUSE - FIREPIT NIGHT
EXT. GEMM HOUSE - FIREPIT - NIGHT
EXT. GEMM HOUSE - FIREPIT - NIGHT Lacy does ballet moves on crutches. Joe mumbles to himself. LACY Are you okay? JOE
28 37
INT NAIL SALON DAY
INT. NAIL SALON - DAY
INT. NAIL SALON - DAY Tina and Sandy get manicures and pedicures. Bree blows in. BREE You’re not going to believe it! SANDY
29 38
INT GEMM HOUSE CONTINUOUS
INT. GEMM HOUSE - CONTINUOUS
INT. GEMM HOUSE - CONTINUOUS Lacy sits on her bed. Looks at ballerina Instagram videos. She hears a CRASH outside. Hobbles to the curtains. Opens them. Bob just hit garbage cans. Stumbles out of his car. EXT. GEMM HOUSE - MOMENTS LATER
30 41
EXT BACKWOODS NIGHT
EXT. BACKWOODS - NIGHT
EXT. BACKWOODS - NIGHT Al walks around. Smokes a Cuban. AL George!? You out here!? GEORGIE?! (trips)
31 42
EXT FRANK MARTINI’S BARN DAY
EXT. FRANK MARTINI’S BARN - DAY
EXT. FRANK MARTINI’S BARN - DAY This shit hole barn is located in a rural part of Flint. Old, rusted, FARM EQUIPMENT, FARM ANIMALS, animal shit, and mud are everywhere. Lacy and Joe pull up in Lacy’s Mercedes. Park. EXIT. The smell of shit assaults their senses.
32 47
EXT BREE’S HOUSE LATER
EXT. BREE’S HOUSE - LATER
EXT. BREE’S HOUSE - LATER This opulent house is also located on Parkside Drive. INT. BREE’S BEDROOM - CONTINUOUS Bree sits on her bed. Sex chats on her laptop. BREE
33 48
INT OLD PICK-UP TRUCK - COUNTRY ROAD LATER
INT. OLD PICK-UP TRUCK - COUNTRY ROAD - LATER
INT. OLD PICK-UP TRUCK - COUNTRY ROAD - LATER Lacy drives Bree’s truck. A case of vodka in the front seat. Gets a text. Looks down at her phone. It’s from MOM. MOM TEXT
34 50
INT FLOWER SHOP CONTINUOUS
INT. FLOWER SHOP - CONTINUOUS
INT. FLOWER SHOP - CONTINUOUS MACHKA, 30s, the energetic, vibrant florist, arranges a beautiful bouquet. Joe ENTERS. Energized. Optimistic. MACHKA Hi, Joey! How are we today!?
35 51
INT GEMM HOUSE - KITCHEN CONTINUOUS
INT. GEMM HOUSE - KITCHEN - CONTINUOUS
INT. GEMM HOUSE - KITCHEN - CONTINUOUS Lacy puts the flower in a vase. Sits. Rubs her sore neck. JOE Are you okay? LACY
36 52
INT KITCHEN CONTINUOUS
INT. KITCHEN - CONTINUOUS
INT. KITCHEN - CONTINUOUS Lacy sits. Weak. Nauseous. Joe rubs Lacy’s sore neck. LACY Mmmm. That feels good, Joey. John eavesdrops in the HALLWAY.
37 52
EXT GOODMAN HOUSE DAY
EXT. GOODMAN HOUSE - DAY
EXT. GOODMAN HOUSE - DAY Joe sits by his supplies and sign. Rocks. Mumbles. George stumbles out with a jar of shine. Faded. GEORGE
38 53
INT LACY'S BEDROOM CONTINUOUS
INT. LACY'S BEDROOM - CONTINUOUS
INT. LACY'S BEDROOM - CONTINUOUS Lacy's in bed. Sick. Low energy. Linda stumbles in. Wears a dirty robe. No make-up. Rat nest hair. A mojito in one hand. A joint in the other. A fucked up mess. LINDA
39 54
INT LACY'S ROOM CONTINUOUS
INT. LACY'S ROOM - CONTINUOUS
INT. LACY'S ROOM - CONTINUOUS Dr. David ENTERS. APPROACHES Lacy in bed. DOCTOR DAVID How are we today, Lacy? LACY
40 55
EXT GOODMAN HOUSE CONTINUOUS
EXT. GOODMAN HOUSE - CONTINUOUS
EXT. GOODMAN HOUSE - CONTINUOUS George rocks in a chair on the porch. Smokes weed. Sips moonshine. Watches a VIDEO of Lacy weep at the clinic. Joe pulls in. EXITS the truck. Exhausted. APPROACHES. GEORGE
41 56
EXT /INT. GEMM HOUSE CONTINUOUS
EXT./INT. GEMM HOUSE - CONTINUOUS
EXT./INT. GEMM HOUSE - CONTINUOUS Bree is dressed to undress. Rings the bell. John opens it. Pleased. Leads Bree inside. Looks around. Kisses her. BREE Aren’t you worried your wife will
42 57
EXT MARKET DAY
EXT. MARKET - DAY
EXT. MARKET - DAY Joe EXITS with an envelope. BOOM, BOOM, BOOM! Joe is SHOT! Three times. Goes down. A CAR peel out in the b.g.. The envelope’s in Joe’s lifeless hand. A WOMAN runs to Joe. EXT. GOODMAN HOUSE - CONTINUOUS
43 57
INT MIDDLE EASTERN DINER LATER
INT. MIDDLE EASTERN DINER - LATER
INT. MIDDLE EASTERN DINER - LATER Al eats. George blows IN. Looks around. Pissed. Al is at a table. He sees George. Waves him over. AL
44 59
INT GOODMAN HOUSE - JOE’S BEDROOM CONTINUOUS
INT. GOODMAN HOUSE - JOE’S BEDROOM - CONTINUOUS
INT. GOODMAN HOUSE - JOE’S BEDROOM - CONTINUOUS Lacy tends to Joe’s wounds. Joe cringes. LACY Are you in pain? JOE
45 60
INT BAR NIGHT
INT. BAR - NIGHT
INT. BAR - NIGHT The place is packed. Lacy and Al drink at a BACK TABLE. AL What do you want me to do? LACY
46 60
INT GOODMAN HOUSE DAY
INT. GOODMAN HOUSE - DAY
INT. GOODMAN HOUSE - DAY Fran irons clothes. There are KNOCKS at the door. Fran goes to the door. Opens it. Lacy blows by. LINDA Hey!
47 61
INT JAIL CELL CONTINUOUS
INT. JAIL CELL - CONTINUOUS
INT. JAIL CELL - CONTINUOUS Bob, Tom, Mike, and Lenny are nervous. Anxious. Sit next to TRIXIE, a trans female. BOB This is bullshit!
48 61
INT GOODMAN HOUSE - JOE’S ROOM CONTINUOUS
INT. GOODMAN HOUSE - JOE’S ROOM - CONTINUOUS
INT. GOODMAN HOUSE - JOE’S ROOM - CONTINUOUS Lacy cries. Very emotional. Joe comforts her. JOE It’s going to be okay.
49 62
INT GEMM HOUSE - A LITTLE LATER
INT. GEMM HOUSE - A LITTLE LATER
INT. GEMM HOUSE - A LITTLE LATER Al puts John in handcuffs. JOHN You’re making a big mistake, Al. AL
50 63
INT GEMM HOUSE - LACY'S BEDROOM NIGHT
INT. GEMM HOUSE - LACY'S BEDROOM - NIGHT
INT. GEMM HOUSE - LACY'S BEDROOM - NIGHT Lacy cries. She tries to sleep. We hear KNOCKS on her door. Lacy covers herself with the down comforter. LACY GO AWAY!
51 64
EXT JOE’S BEDROOM NIGHT
EXT. JOE’S BEDROOM - NIGHT
EXT. JOE’S BEDROOM - NIGHT Fran knocks on Joe’s door. No answer. George APPROACHES. FRAN Are you okay, Joseph? JOE (O.S.)
52 64
INT JOE’S TRUCK DAY
INT. JOE’S TRUCK - DAY
INT. JOE’S TRUCK - DAY Joe drives. Down. Depressed. A full load of clear plastic moonshine jugs are in the back. Joe sees Lacy pass in the other direction. Lacy sees Joe. Joe quickly pulls over. Lacy makes a quick U-TURN. Pulls up behind Joe. Joe and
53 65
EXT FRANK’S BARN - SATURDAY MORNING
EXT. FRANK’S BARN - SATURDAY MORNING
EXT. FRANK’S BARN - SATURDAY MORNING All the PEOPLE that we’ve seen so far, and their GUESTS, APPROACH. ENTER. INT. HORSE STALL/DRESSING ROOM - CONTINUOUS Joe looks in the mirror. Checks his hair. Adjusts his suit.
54 67
INT BARN - LOBBY CONTINUOUS
INT. BARN - LOBBY - CONTINUOUS
INT. BARN - LOBBY - CONTINUOUS Doug and CLYDE, the boy who videotaped Lacy at the clinic, stand at a table. A metal cabinet is behind them. PEOPLE check their guns and get a ticket. Other PEOPLE pass by. DOUG
55 68
INT HORSE STALL CONTINUOUS
INT. HORSE STALL - CONTINUOUS
INT. HORSE STALL - CONTINUOUS HAIR and MAKE-UP PEOPLE tend to Lacy, Bree, Sandy, and Tina. BREE You’re the prettiest bride ever, Lacy.
56 70
INT BARN - MAIN AREA CONTINUOUS
INT. BARN - MAIN AREA - CONTINUOUS
INT. BARN - MAIN AREA - CONTINUOUS Everyone settles in. Animal shit permeates the air. MACHKA It stinks like shit in here. HENRIETTA
57 74
INT MAIN STAGE CONTINUOUS
INT. MAIN STAGE - CONTINUOUS
INT. MAIN STAGE - CONTINUOUS Bob has his gun on Lacy. He’s wasted. Sways. Sweats. LACY The only way you’re gonna stop me from getting married is to kill me.
58 84
EXT BARN - RECEPTION - SUNSET
EXT. BARN - RECEPTION - SUNSET
EXT. BARN - RECEPTION - SUNSET Everyone eats, drinks, and parties. Bob, Mike, Tom, and Lenny play their shitty music on STAGE. They’re ignored. MRS. JONES They really suck don’t they?
59 87
EXT BISHOP AIRPORT/EXT. NEW YORK CITY - A YEAR EARLIER
EXT. BISHOP AIRPORT/EXT. NEW YORK CITY - A YEAR EARLIER
EXT. BISHOP AIRPORT/EXT. NEW YORK CITY - A YEAR EARLIER Lacy’s bags are packed. The ACTION follows her VOICE-OVER. LACY (V.O.) I finally got the courage to move to New York City. I was going to
60 87
INT FRANK'S BARN - PRESENT
INT. FRANK'S BARN - PRESENT
INT. FRANK'S BARN - PRESENT Everyone is silent. Empathetic. They feel Lacy's pain. LACY WHERE’S MY MOM WHEN I REALLY NEED HER...!?

B.F.F.

When a moonshining would-be actor and his childhood B.F.F. decide to get married, their chaotic wedding becomes the battleground where revenge, political scandal, and community redemption collide — and a ruined town gets one last chance to rally around its own.

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

The screenplay's unique selling proposition is its authentic portrayal of working-class life in Flint, Michigan, combining regional specificity with universal themes of friendship and resilience. The unconventional central relationship between an older working-class man and younger privileged woman provides fresh perspective on redemption and personal growth, while the backdrop of economic decline adds social relevance rarely explored in mainstream cinema.

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Average Score: 7.3
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
The script has a big, winning heart—memorable setpieces, a clear emotional throughline between Joe and Lacy, and a vivid Flint milieu—but it’s weighed down by tonal wobble and too many underresolved subplots. Your next draft should ruthlessly clarify the core throughline (Joe–Lacy–community), choose one or two supporting arcs to deepen (e.g., the shooting/investigation OR John’s political fall), and strip or fold remaining threads into that spine. Tighten tone (decide where the script is tender vs. broad comedy), make Lacy’s motivations and trauma chronological and earned, and either justify or remove the more miraculous payoff beats so the finale feels earned rather than convenient.
For Executives:
B.F.F. is commercially promising as a mid‑budget adult dramedy with strong local color, crowd-pleasing setpieces (the barn/wedding) and an emotionally resonant core—elements that can play well in festivals and specialty theatrical/streaming windows. Risks: the current draft’s tonal inconsistency, sprawling subplots (police/political threads, moonshining legalities), and deus‑ex resolutions create buyer hesitation and potential budget creep (stunts, large ensemble scenes, music rights/celebrity cameo). Recommended: green-light only after a focused rewrite that tightens stakes, reduces extraneous characters, and either fully commits to the satire/politics or excises it to protect the film’s emotional center and marketability.
Story Facts
Genres:
Drama 55% Romance 35% Comedy 25% Action 15% Crime 10% Thriller 10%

Setting: Present day, with flashbacks to a year earlier, Flint, Michigan, primarily in urban and rural settings, including a barn, a house, and various outdoor locations

Themes: Resilience and Hope in Adversity, The American Dream and Its Corruption, Personal Loss and Grief, Flawed Human Relationships and Redemption, Self-Discovery and Authenticity, Addiction and its Consequences, Justice and Injustice, The Power of Art and Performance

Conflict & Stakes: The main conflicts revolve around Joe's relationship with Lacy amidst familial and societal pressures, personal struggles with addiction, and the threat of violence from Bob and others, with stakes including personal safety, love, and the future of their dreams.

Mood: Bittersweet and introspective, with moments of humor and tension.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The juxtaposition of personal struggles against the backdrop of urban decay in Flint, Michigan.
  • Major Twist: The revelation of Joe's past as a teacher and the complexities of his relationship with Lacy.
  • Distinctive Setting: The use of Flint, Michigan, as a character in itself, representing socio-economic challenges.
  • Innovative Ideas: The integration of humor within serious themes, creating a balance that resonates with audiences.
  • Unique Characters: A diverse cast that reflects various aspects of society, from the struggling working class to the political elite.

Comparable Scripts: The Pursuit of Happyness, Good Will Hunting, A Streetcar Named Desire, The Florida Project, Lady Bird, The Wrestler, Manchester by the Sea, The Fault in Our Stars, The Blind Side

🎯 Your Top Priorities

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Your current Visual Impact (Script Level) score: 7.8
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Typical rewrite gain: +0.45 in Visual Impact (Script Level)
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2. Theme (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Theme (Script Level) score: 8.0
Expected gain: ~4% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
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Your current Concept score: 8.1
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Typical rewrite gain: +0.35 in Concept
Confidence: High (based on ~4,150 similar revisions)
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Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

Screenplay Insights

Breaks down your script along various categories.

Overall Score: 7.89
Key Suggestions:
Focus first on tightening the middle act and deepening secondary/antagonist characters (especially Bob) so emotional stakes feel earned. Consolidate or trim repetitive confrontations to create breathing room for quieter, introspective beats that reveal inner conflict. Give antagonists believable backstory moments and small, humane vulnerabilities rather than caricatured rage — shown through action and subtext, not exposition — so the wedding climax and Joe/Lacy arcs land with real weight.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
Tighten the story around the emotional core: Joe and Lacy’s relationship and Joe’s arc from passive dreamer to active self. Trim or combine secondary characters and side-plots that distract (many band/party threads, rehearse/garage beats, extra romances). Focus Act II on escalating emotional stakes and the consequences of characters’ choices rather than a sequence of chaotic set-pieces. Clarify John Gemm’s motive(s) and deepen the emotional fallout of violent incidents so the climax and reconciliation feel earned rather than theatrical crowd-pleasing.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The script’s emotional core is strong — Lacy and Joe carry a compelling blueprint of resilience and hope — but their arcs feel reactive in places and several supporting characters/readings skew toward caricature, which undercuts stakes. Prioritize tightening Lacy’s interior journey (make her change internally and proactively rather than only in response to external events), clarify Joe’s progression (use his mumbling/rocking as a purposeful motif that decreases as he gains agency), and give a few key supporting players (George, Bree, Bob) sharper, more specific vulnerabilities or consequences so their actions feel earned. Fix the melodramatic beats (notably the vomiting/overwrought breakup scene) by shifting some exposition into quieter, revealing moments (a focused flashback, a short therapy/one-on-one, or a private ritual) and redistribute emotional payoff so the wedding climax lands credibly rather than as tonal patchwork.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
The script has powerful, raw emotional material and a deeply sympathetic lead, but the audience will likely feel emotionally exhausted by long stretches of high-intensity negative beats and several unearned character turnarounds. Rebalance the emotional arc: insert quieter 'breather' scenes after violent or chaotic peaks, plant earlier foreshadowing for major revelations (e.g., Lacy’s medical trauma), and give supporting characters (George, Linda, Hank, Bob) brief, humanizing moments so their later developments feel earned. Tighten the wedding/climax to prioritize Joe and Lacy’s emotional decision rather than spectacle, and spread smaller victories through the middle to keep hope alive and stakes credible.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
The goals/philosophical analysis shows strong, clear arcs for Joe and Lacy but also a tendency to resolve deep conflicts too quickly and conveniently. Tighten the emotional logic: make the cost of choices higher, delay the community-wide reconciliation so the final payoff feels earned, and let character agency — not external plot conveniences — drive the climax. Clarify and integrate subplots (Joe’s acting, Lacy’s dance trauma/pregnancy, John’s politics) so they feed the central philosophical question (dreams vs. obligations) rather than crowding the script with competing resolutions or tonal swings.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
The script has a powerful, emotionally rich core — a working-class love story set against a decaying Flint — and a clear central theme of resilience. To make that power land harder, tighten the narrative around one clear emotional throughline (Joe and Lacy), prune or consolidate episodic detours and characters that dilute momentum, and steady the tone (balance dark comedy, violence and sentiment so they support rather than jar). Make each scene either advance character arc or raise stakes; otherwise cut or repurpose it. Clarify Lacy’s pivotal choices (why she leaves, why she returns, why she ultimately pauses/reconciles) and Joe’s inner shift so their arcs feel earned rather than event-driven. Finally, streamline subplots (moonshine business, band, politics) so they echo the central theme instead of competing with it.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
The script has a strong emotional core and vivid sense of place, but it currently undermines that core with uneven character behavior, late-stage revelations, and repetitive set-pieces. Tighten character arcs by planting motivations and trauma earlier (so actions like Lacy’s volatility or Joe’s sudden violence feel earned), consolidate redundant party scenes into two purposeful set pieces, and fix key plot logistics (who shot/attacked Joe, the robbery aftermath, the foreclosure/process server) so cause-and-effect is clear. Make major reversals (Linda’s sobriety, John’s surprise concert/fireworks) believable by adding small foreshadowing beats rather than relying on last-minute miracles. These changes will preserve the script’s emotional payoff while improving credibility and pacing.

Scene Analysis

All of your scenes analyzed individually and compared, so you can zero in on what to improve.

Scene-Level Percentile Chart
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Other Analyses

Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
Your voice — raw, colloquial, and unflinching — is the screenplay’s greatest asset. Preserve that authenticity, but sharpen the storytelling: choose a clearer throughline (who changes and why), trim or consolidate repetitive set-pieces, and tighten pacing so the gritty dialogue lands with emotional payoff rather than fatigue. Keep the dark humor and moral ambiguity, but let quieter moments breathe to reveal character growth and make the big confrontations earned.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
You have a strong foundation: vivid dialogue, a clear sense of place and tonal mix of dark humor and pathos, and many compelling scenes. The highest-leverage improvement is to deepen character interiority — give clearer, specific wants, fears and turning-point choices for your protagonist(s) so that scenes not only show action but reveal why each character acts. Do this by creating concise backstories, identifying each character’s single emotional spine, and reworking 3–5 pivotal scenes (inciting incident, midpoint, pre-climax, climax) so those beats force characters into meaningful, irreversible choices that reflect theme. Add subtext to dialogue and sprinkle tighter thematic callbacks (water, survival, redemption) through emotional decisions rather than exposition.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
The world you built is rich and specific — Flint as a character, moonshine culture, and blue-collar music-drenched atmosphere give the script strong texture. That said, the script currently spreads emotional weight across too many plot threads, tonal shifts, and supporting characters which dilutes the core relationship and thematic payoff. Tighten the world so every location, cultural detail, and violent incident directly serves Joe and Lacy’s arc and the central themes (dreams vs. survival, self-truth). Reduce or consolidate characters, clarify motives (especially John, Al, and the town’s reaction), and decide on a dominant tone (gritty drama with occasional dark humor or crowd-pleasing dramedy) to avoid audience confusion and strengthen emotional resonance.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
The analysis shows your script’s greatest strength is its high-emotion, confrontational scenes — these consistently drive character change and deliver the story’s most memorable moments. To sharpen the script, ensure those emotional peaks always have clear, causal consequences that advance plot and stakes; conversely, prune or rework reflective sequences that linger without moving the story. Use humor deliberately to puncture tension and deepen characterization, and give confrontational beats a single, specific catalyst so tension converts reliably into plot motion rather than atmosphere alone.
Loglines
Presents logline variations based on theme, genre, and hook.