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Scene Map 60
# PG SLUGLINE
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EXT BROOKLYN BACKSTREETS DAY
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INT GAS STATION/TILL DAY
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EXT PARIS TENNESSEE EVENING
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INT PAIREE BAR MOMENTS LATER
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EXT OUTSIDE PAIREE BAR/BAPTIST CHURCH MOMENTS LATER
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EXT OUTSIDE BAPTIST CHURCH MOMENTS LATER
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EXT CHEROKEE/SWAMP SLOPE NIGHT
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INT LUCYS HOME LATER
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INT LUCYS HOME MORNING
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INT LUCY'S KITCHEN LATER
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EXT GORILLA ENCLOSURE LATER
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EXT FOOD COURT/MAIN SQUARE CONTINUOUS
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EXT GORILLA ENCLOSURE CONTINUOUS
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INT ZOO OFFICE LATER
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INT ZOO OFFICE CONTINUOUS
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EXT LUCY'S HOME LATER
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INT LUCY'S LIVINGROOM LATER
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EXT CHEROKEE/SWAMP SLOPE EVENING
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EXT SWAMP-SLOPE/DIRT ROAD CONTINUOUS
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INT THE STUDIO LATER
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INT SUNBEAM STUDIO LATER
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INT SUNBEAM STUDIO EVENING
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INT SUNBEAM STUDIO MOMENTS LATER
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EXT OUTSIDE SUNBEAM STUDIO CONTINUOUS
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INT THE STUDIO - NEXT MORNING
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INT SUNBEAM LOBBY - HOURS LATER
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EXT THE VALLEY EVENING
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INT THE CABIN CONTINUOUS
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EXT THE VALLEY - HOURS LATER
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INT SUNBEAM STUDIO DAY
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INT THE CABIN LATER
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EXT THE VALLEY LATER
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INT THE CABIN LATER
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EXT THE VALLEY CONTINUOUS
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INT THE CABIN CONTINUOUS
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EXT THE VALLEY LATER
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EXT OUTSIDE SUNBEAM STUDIO NIGHT
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EXT THE VALLEY AFTERNOON
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INT THE CABIN LATER
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EXT LUCYS HOME LATER
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EXT AROUND PARIS NIGHT
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INT SUNBEAM LOBBY/OFFICE AFTERNOON
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INT THE CABIN LATER
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EXT OUTSIDE SUNBEAM STUDIO CONTINUOUS
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EXT OUTSIDE SUNBEAM STUDIO MOMENTS LATER
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INT SUNBEAM LOBBY/OFFICE - THE NEXT DAY
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EXT OUTSIDE THE CABIN LATER
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INT THE CABIN CONTINUOUS
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EXT THE VALLEY/SHED LATER
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EXT OUTSIDE THE CABIN LATER
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EXT THE VALLEY/GROVE CONTINUOUS
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EXT THE GROVE CONTINUOUS
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EXT THE VALLEY/TRUCK CONTINUOUS
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INT THE CABIN MOMENTS LATER
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EXT CABIN PORCH CONTINUOUS
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INT SUNBEAM LOBBY/OFFICE LATER
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EXT OUTSIDE SUNBEAM STUDIO LATER
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INT SUNBEAM STUDIO - HOURS LATER
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INT SUNBEAM STUDIO LATER
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EXT OUTSIDE SUNBEAM STUDIO CONTINUOUS
Scene Map
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# PG SLUGLINE
1 2
EXT BROOKLYN BACKSTREETS DAY
EXT. BROOKLYN BACKSTREETS - DAY
EXT. BROOKLYN BACKSTREETS - DAY STEVE STEIN (53yrs-lean,slightly tattered suit, badly black dyed freak flag but still arrogant) dashes out from a derelict building carrying a huge cardboard box. Across the street towards his Cherokee Jeep parked legally (for once).
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INT GAS STATION/TILL DAY
INT. GAS STATION/TILL - DAY
INT. GAS STATION/TILL - DAY ATTENDANT swiping Steve’s bundle of credit cards through the machine. Almost halfway through. ATTENDANT Seems all of them are maxed out.
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EXT PARIS TENNESSEE EVENING
EXT. PARIS TENNESSEE - EVENING
EXT. PARIS TENNESSEE - EVENING The Cherokee rolls down a slope and comes to a lull outside a bar. Big neon sign: PAIREE Cafe Bar next to stylistic Eiffel tower. I/E. OUTSIDE PAIREE BAR - LATER
4 6
INT PAIREE BAR MOMENTS LATER
INT. PAIREE BAR - MOMENTS LATER
INT. PAIREE BAR - MOMENTS LATER Steve by the bar. STEVE Give me the cheapest you got. JIM THE BARTENDER
5 9
EXT OUTSIDE PAIREE BAR/BAPTIST CHURCH MOMENTS LATER
EXT. OUTSIDE PAIREE BAR/BAPTIST CHURCH - MOMENTS LATER
EXT. OUTSIDE PAIREE BAR/BAPTIST CHURCH - MOMENTS LATER Steve surveys his environment.Reels towards the Cherokee. Stops. STEVE Now what?
6 12
EXT OUTSIDE BAPTIST CHURCH MOMENTS LATER
EXT. OUTSIDE BAPTIST CHURCH - MOMENTS LATER
EXT. OUTSIDE BAPTIST CHURCH - MOMENTS LATER Plastered Steve calls. CLOSE UP: Moe’s mobile: Says S**TSTAIN. Moe answers while getting a deep tissue massage. STEVE
7 13
EXT CHEROKEE/SWAMP SLOPE NIGHT
EXT. CHEROKEE/SWAMP SLOPE - NIGHT
EXT. CHEROKEE/SWAMP SLOPE - NIGHT Cherokee is positioned precariously and suspiciously on thick wet, grass next to a river, back wheels sunk in marsh. In it sleeps Steve. Strong rays of light dancing in the mist. O.S.
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INT LUCYS HOME LATER
INT. LUCYS HOME - LATER
INT. LUCYS HOME - LATER Steve and Lucy enter a clean, quaint house with references to both children/family and music. Lucy pointing. LUCY Couch. Quilt. Bathroom. Kitchen.
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INT LUCYS HOME MORNING
INT. LUCYS HOME - MORNING
INT. LUCYS HOME - MORNING Steve snoring on the couch. Mouth open. A hand-held airhorn slowly nears his face.Faint giggles. BLLLLAAAAAAAAHHHHH! Steve bolts aghast. STEVE
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INT LUCY'S KITCHEN LATER
INT. LUCY'S KITCHEN - LATER
INT. LUCY'S KITCHEN - LATER Messy kitchen. Severely intoxicated Steve almost pukes from the strain. Pancake batter everywhere. A pile of burnt ones in and around the trashcan. Kids munching. Steve manages to swallow one or two.
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EXT GORILLA ENCLOSURE LATER
EXT. GORILLA ENCLOSURE - LATER
EXT. GORILLA ENCLOSURE - LATER Kids banter who looks most like a gorilla. Blowing raspberries against the filthy glass. Gorillas lethargic. Hank on another wave length. HANK
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EXT FOOD COURT/MAIN SQUARE CONTINUOUS
EXT. FOOD COURT/MAIN SQUARE - CONTINUOUS
EXT. FOOD COURT/MAIN SQUARE - CONTINUOUS Steve stands next to corn dog stand. Checks his funds. No cash. He observes the attendant. Leaves. EXT. GORILLA ENCLOSURE - CONTINUOUS STEVE
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EXT GORILLA ENCLOSURE CONTINUOUS
EXT. GORILLA ENCLOSURE - CONTINUOUS
EXT. GORILLA ENCLOSURE - CONTINUOUS As there is little action overall the affray has summoned much more staff than Steve counted on and they have now separated the panting kids. The kerfuffle has inspired the former lethargic gorillas that are now in a state of frenzy
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INT ZOO OFFICE LATER
INT. ZOO OFFICE - LATER
INT. ZOO OFFICE - LATER Steve and the kids sitting in the office in silence.Brooding. Across the room two animal behaviorists observe them. Making notes. INT. ZOO OFFICE CORRIDOR - CONTINUOUS
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INT ZOO OFFICE CONTINUOUS
INT. ZOO OFFICE - CONTINUOUS
INT. ZOO OFFICE - CONTINUOUS The door finally opens. Deputy Schiller steps in. Flummoxed. All kids and Steve stare at him. Equally flummoxed. THE KIDS (in unison)
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EXT LUCY'S HOME LATER
EXT. LUCY'S HOME - LATER
EXT. LUCY'S HOME - LATER Dept Schiller presses the doorbell several times quite aggressively. Finally the door opens.Lucy in a gown of sorts.She looks at each of them. What a bunch of idiots. The kids sneak in remorsefully.
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INT LUCY'S LIVINGROOM LATER
INT. LUCY'S LIVINGROOM - LATER
INT. LUCY'S LIVINGROOM - LATER All kids laughing hysterically, jumping around impersonating the gorillas in the zoo repeating Steve's band names. THE KIDS Turdmongers, Skinny Bitches, Dave
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EXT CHEROKEE/SWAMP SLOPE EVENING
EXT. CHEROKEE/SWAMP SLOPE - EVENING
EXT. CHEROKEE/SWAMP SLOPE - EVENING Lucy has towed Steve's Cherokee out of the swamp. Steve's standing idle. Useless at practical things. LUCY Beats me how you managed to gel
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EXT SWAMP-SLOPE/DIRT ROAD CONTINUOUS
EXT. SWAMP-SLOPE/DIRT ROAD - CONTINUOUS
EXT. SWAMP-SLOPE/DIRT ROAD - CONTINUOUS Lucy's truck tows the Cherokee up from the dirt road. Far in a distance another truck follows. No headlights on. I/E. CHEROKEE/DIRT ROAD - CONTINUOUS Steve sees the dark truck in the rear view mirror.
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INT THE STUDIO LATER
INT. THE STUDIO - LATER
INT. THE STUDIO - LATER Lucy and Steve wander around the dusty and filthy studio.Fiddling with some papers is MR BANE a 60’s - something once angelic glam rock-relic. LUCY
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INT SUNBEAM STUDIO LATER
INT. SUNBEAM STUDIO - LATER
INT. SUNBEAM STUDIO - LATER Deputy SCHILLER and ALPHONSE aimlessly prodding gear with their hickory truncheons. DEPUTY SCHILLER What kind of business do you plan
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INT SUNBEAM STUDIO EVENING
INT. SUNBEAM STUDIO - EVENING
INT. SUNBEAM STUDIO - EVENING Steve folded double under the console, hand fumbling with a fader, a scrunching sound. He dives in under the console BANG! A massive noise from the loudspeakers. Steve's jerking, electrocuted, smoke emitting from his hair. He pulls the
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INT SUNBEAM STUDIO MOMENTS LATER
INT. SUNBEAM STUDIO - MOMENTS LATER
INT. SUNBEAM STUDIO - MOMENTS LATER Steve's tidying up. Lucy's sauntering. LUCY I have spread the word.People seem interested.
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EXT OUTSIDE SUNBEAM STUDIO CONTINUOUS
EXT. OUTSIDE SUNBEAM STUDIO - CONTINUOUS
EXT. OUTSIDE SUNBEAM STUDIO - CONTINUOUS Steve watches as Tom pulls out, tailing Lucy.Steve picks up his mobile. CLOSE UP: Moe’s mobile:S**TSTAIN. Moe answers.Riding a stationary bike.
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INT THE STUDIO - NEXT MORNING
INT. THE STUDIO - NEXT MORNING
INT. THE STUDIO - NEXT MORNING Steve wakes up tucked into a cozy corner in a fetal position. Someone's banging on the front door. Steve panics. The Cartel! he slither towards the emergency exit. Tries to open. It's bolted. More pounding on the front door.Picks up his
26 45
INT SUNBEAM LOBBY - HOURS LATER
INT. SUNBEAM LOBBY - HOURS LATER
INT. SUNBEAM LOBBY - HOURS LATER Everybody's packing up. Lucy checks her watch. LUCY Hurry up. STEVE
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EXT THE VALLEY EVENING
EXT. THE VALLEY - EVENING
EXT. THE VALLEY - EVENING Truck halts in a bucolic valley. LUCY We’re here. Exits. Steve bewildered. Lucy points towards a small cabin on
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INT THE CABIN CONTINUOUS
INT. THE CABIN - CONTINUOUS
INT. THE CABIN - CONTINUOUS STEVE Hello? He paces cautiously through a rather cozy cabin.Suddenly round a corner he bumps into an elderly man with greyish hair
29 49
EXT THE VALLEY - HOURS LATER
EXT. THE VALLEY - HOURS LATER
EXT. THE VALLEY - HOURS LATER Lucy exits the truck. Walks up to the cabin. Birds chirping. Laughter from the cabin. This pleases her. Happy bunny. Vizz and Steve are yucking it up.Lucy enters. VIZZ
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INT SUNBEAM STUDIO DAY
INT. SUNBEAM STUDIO - DAY
INT. SUNBEAM STUDIO - DAY A boring band plays. Steve fast asleep behind the console. Saliva dripping from the corner of his mouth.A hard cymbal crash awakens him. BANDMEMBER A
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INT THE CABIN LATER
INT. THE CABIN - LATER
INT. THE CABIN - LATER Lucy waiting by the cabin door. LUCY I'll leave you two to talk. UNCLE VIZZ
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EXT THE VALLEY LATER
EXT. THE VALLEY - LATER
EXT. THE VALLEY - LATER Crickets galore. Loads of toads.Pastoral. UNCLE VIZZ (OFF SCREEN) I died - literally - I was dead. Clinically dead. Declared dead. For
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INT THE CABIN LATER
INT. THE CABIN - LATER
INT. THE CABIN - LATER UNCLE VIZZ I was never interested in the money. It was all about the music.
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EXT THE VALLEY CONTINUOUS
EXT. THE VALLEY - CONTINUOUS
EXT. THE VALLEY - CONTINUOUS Vizz brings Steve down the slope towards a shed.Opens the door.Lights an old kerosene lamp hanging on a beam revealing an exotic piece of mechanical engineering. Dark grey. A sign: U.S. NAVY, some odd numbers.
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INT THE CABIN CONTINUOUS
INT. THE CABIN - CONTINUOUS
INT. THE CABIN - CONTINUOUS Vizz walks up to a bench next to the armoire covered with a table cloth. Steve follows his movements with wonderment. UNCLE VIZZ These are the two recorders we used
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EXT THE VALLEY LATER
EXT. THE VALLEY - LATER
EXT. THE VALLEY - LATER Lucy exits the truck. Walks up to the cabin. Stops. It’s awfully quiet. All silent. She walks faster.Worried. INT. THE CABIN - CONTINUOUS Lucy enters. Steve's in a meditative state all puffy eyed
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EXT OUTSIDE SUNBEAM STUDIO NIGHT
EXT. OUTSIDE SUNBEAM STUDIO - NIGHT
EXT. OUTSIDE SUNBEAM STUDIO - NIGHT Lucy drops off Steve. Steve walks a few paces. Takes out his mobile. CLOSE UP: Moe’s mobile:S**TSTAIN. Moe answers. In the sauna. STEVE
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EXT THE VALLEY AFTERNOON
EXT. THE VALLEY - AFTERNOON
EXT. THE VALLEY - AFTERNOON The kids bailing out of Lucy's truck. Steve at the wheel awaits Lucy's Ranger RAM. Approaches. Lucy's window down. Lucy's overjoyed. LUCY
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INT THE CABIN LATER
INT. THE CABIN - LATER
INT. THE CABIN - LATER Turmoil. Shani gets up in Vizz's lap.Hank rummaging in Vizz's bedroom. HANK Can I use your guitar, Uncle Vizz?
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EXT LUCYS HOME LATER
EXT. LUCYS HOME - LATER
EXT. LUCYS HOME - LATER Steve lets the sleepy bobcats into the house. SHANI Bedtime hug. Steve hugs all. Last one is Hank. Steve leans over.
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EXT AROUND PARIS NIGHT
EXT. AROUND PARIS - NIGHT
EXT. AROUND PARIS - NIGHT Lush vegetation. Streetlights. Crickets. Steve in and out of darkness. A car liberates itself from the shadows. Follows Steve slowly at a distance. No headlights. This is not Tom. Steve oblivious.
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INT SUNBEAM LOBBY/OFFICE AFTERNOON
INT. SUNBEAM LOBBY/OFFICE - AFTERNOON
INT. SUNBEAM LOBBY/OFFICE - AFTERNOON Close up Tom's face. DEPUTY SCHILLER 3. (Light Jamaican flair) A-HA A-HA- A-HA WOOORD! Hey girl! You like me
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INT THE CABIN LATER
INT. THE CABIN - LATER
INT. THE CABIN - LATER All is rigged for recording. Vizz on a stool in the middle of the room. Lucy Putting the mikes on the stands. Steve threading the tapes. Vizz (with glasses) going through some notes. Strums the chord changes on the guitar. Clears his
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EXT OUTSIDE SUNBEAM STUDIO CONTINUOUS
EXT. OUTSIDE SUNBEAM STUDIO - CONTINUOUS
EXT. OUTSIDE SUNBEAM STUDIO - CONTINUOUS The studio is on fire. Several fire engines and patrol units have arrived.Firefighters running pell-mell hosing water. Police officers cordoning off the area. Lucy and Steve dismount. Lucy finds Alphonse.
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EXT OUTSIDE SUNBEAM STUDIO MOMENTS LATER
EXT. OUTSIDE SUNBEAM STUDIO - MOMENTS LATER
EXT. OUTSIDE SUNBEAM STUDIO - MOMENTS LATER High on adrenaline Tom lurches in circles like a MMA champion. Someone puts a blanket over his shoulders. Lucy's gently trying to lead him to her truck. Alphonse is bringing Toms smouldering outfit.
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INT SUNBEAM LOBBY/OFFICE - THE NEXT DAY
INT. SUNBEAM LOBBY/OFFICE - THE NEXT DAY
INT. SUNBEAM LOBBY/OFFICE - THE NEXT DAY Steve checking the damage. Scorched sooty walls. Pools of water. Torn bits of metal. Pieces of ripped lining in piles on the floor. A knock on the door.
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EXT OUTSIDE THE CABIN LATER
EXT. OUTSIDE THE CABIN - LATER
EXT. OUTSIDE THE CABIN - LATER Steve paces back and forth. Lucy exits the cabin. LUCY He wants to talk to you. Steve nods. Enters.
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INT THE CABIN CONTINUOUS
INT. THE CABIN - CONTINUOUS
INT. THE CABIN - CONTINUOUS STEVE He wants you. Lucy rounds up the bobcats. LUCY
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EXT THE VALLEY/SHED LATER
EXT. THE VALLEY/SHED - LATER
EXT. THE VALLEY/SHED - LATER Steve finds a spot near the shed. Sits and takes a swig of King's Gold. Quite tasty. Steve lights up. Hears car approaching and sees some cousins gather up on the hilltop. The valley is tranquil. Steve wonders at this. A gentle
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EXT OUTSIDE THE CABIN LATER
EXT. OUTSIDE THE CABIN - LATER
EXT. OUTSIDE THE CABIN - LATER A bit of commotion around the cabin. Exiting the cabin a congregation carries a sunburst laquered casket. They disappear behind the lush foliage. Music. A hymn. Almost a whisper.
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EXT THE VALLEY/GROVE CONTINUOUS
EXT. THE VALLEY/GROVE - CONTINUOUS
EXT. THE VALLEY/GROVE - CONTINUOUS Steve walks up the hill to the grove. Beautiful view overlooking the other side of the valley. In the middle of the grove a mound. A simple white cross: Uncle Vizz. The clouds scatter. A bright full moon appears and renders a
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EXT THE GROVE CONTINUOUS
EXT. THE GROVE - CONTINUOUS
EXT. THE GROVE - CONTINUOUS Steve enters the grove. In front of the grave: a kneeling soldier silhouetted in the moonlight. Camouflage uniform.Hat in hand. A mark of reverence. Steve clears his throat. Soldier turns around. Not easily
53 85
EXT THE VALLEY/TRUCK CONTINUOUS
EXT. THE VALLEY/TRUCK - CONTINUOUS
EXT. THE VALLEY/TRUCK - CONTINUOUS V E Hood has no problems lifting the recorders and boxes onto the truck. STEVE Ever so grateful. I could have been
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INT THE CABIN MOMENTS LATER
INT. THE CABIN - MOMENTS LATER
INT. THE CABIN - MOMENTS LATER Steve loads a canvas sack with all the hooch. Grabs the suitcase.Exits the cabin. EXT. OUTSIDE THE CABIN - CONTINUOUS Steps out on the porch. From the grove there comes a song.
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EXT CABIN PORCH CONTINUOUS
EXT. CABIN PORCH - CONTINUOUS
EXT. CABIN PORCH - CONTINUOUS Steve stares at the sack and suitcase.Ponders. Takes sack, suitcase and exits... STEVE The tyrannous and bloody deed is
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INT SUNBEAM LOBBY/OFFICE LATER
INT. SUNBEAM LOBBY/OFFICE - LATER
INT. SUNBEAM LOBBY/OFFICE - LATER Steve's logged on to E-bay on the old computer. Photos of the two Ampex 350s and the Navy sync. Adds + Magic Box, mobile number and...wooosh. Send. Quite content he is, but then.
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EXT OUTSIDE SUNBEAM STUDIO LATER
EXT. OUTSIDE SUNBEAM STUDIO - LATER
EXT. OUTSIDE SUNBEAM STUDIO - LATER Feverish honking. Steve steps out. Dave Grohl (THE REAL DAVE GROHL)and Pat Smear (THE REAL PAT SMEAR) arrive in the FOO van. DAVE GROHL
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INT SUNBEAM STUDIO - HOURS LATER
INT. SUNBEAM STUDIO - HOURS LATER
INT. SUNBEAM STUDIO - HOURS LATER Steve's mobile again.Unknown.Answers. DAVE GROHL There was a tape in the box.
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INT SUNBEAM STUDIO LATER
INT. SUNBEAM STUDIO - LATER
INT. SUNBEAM STUDIO - LATER Steve looks at the wad of money filling his hand. Takes a good look around the studio. STEVE Time to move on.
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EXT OUTSIDE SUNBEAM STUDIO CONTINUOUS
EXT. OUTSIDE SUNBEAM STUDIO - CONTINUOUS
EXT. OUTSIDE SUNBEAM STUDIO - CONTINUOUS Like a Magritte painting the studio lies in the lush embedded environment.Image tilts slowly upwards to reveal a clear starry sky. A specific star suddenly gleams in a Disneyesque way. Then another star twinkles. And another. And another.

King's gold

To pay off a dangerous debt, a desperate producer must find 'a new Elvis.' He succeeds beyond his wildest dreams when he finds the original—alive, hidden, and sitting on a lifetime of unreleased recordings.

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

The script's core premise—a washed-up producer discovering Elvis alive and sitting on a treasure trove of legendary cover recordings—is a fantastic, high-concept hook that blends music nostalgia, conspiracy theory, and redemption. It offers a unique 'what if' fantasy for music lovers and a fresh take on the 'hidden genius' trope, setting it apart from standard comedies or music biopics.

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Average Score: 7.1
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
To improve 'King's Gold', focus on refining the narrative structure to address tonal inconsistencies and pacing issues, ensuring a smoother blend of comedy, drama, and mystical elements. Strengthen character arcs by clarifying Steve's motivations and providing deeper emotional resolutions, particularly for antagonists like Moe and the cartel. Additionally, resolve continuity errors, such as the tape inventory, to create a more believable and cohesive story, allowing the script's strong premise and musical authenticity to shine through with greater impact.
For Executives:
The script has a high-concept appeal with its Elvis conspiracy and music redemption theme, offering potential for festival buzz and soundtrack sales, but it's undermined by significant risks: uneven tone, unresolved subplots, and timeline inconsistencies that could confuse audiences and increase production costs. Market perception may view it as a quirky indie with niche draw, but without major rewrites to tighten structure and clarify stakes, it risks being dismissed as amateurish or unfocused in a competitive landscape.
Story Facts
Genres:
Drama 50% Comedy 30% Thriller 20% Fantasy 15% Romance 10% Action 10% Crime 15%

Setting: Contemporary, Primarily set in Brooklyn, New York, and various locations in Tennessee, including a swamp, a cabin, and a music studio.

Themes: The Search for Artistic Authenticity and Legacy, Hidden Talent and Unexpected Artistry, Redemption and Second Chances, The Chaos and Commercialization of the Music Industry, Deception, Conspiracy, and Truth, Found Family and Connection, The Absurdity of Life and Fate

Conflict & Stakes: Steve's struggle to escape his past and find redemption while dealing with financial ruin, personal relationships, and the threat of a cartel due to his debts.

Mood: Chaotic, comedic, and introspective, with moments of tension and absurdity.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The premise of a music producer searching for a hidden Elvis Presley adds a whimsical and intriguing element.
  • Major Twist: The revelation that Uncle Vizz is believed to be Elvis Presley, which ties into the themes of identity and legacy.
  • Distinctive Setting: The contrast between urban Brooklyn and the rural Tennessee landscape enhances the narrative's exploration of escape and self-discovery.
  • Innovative Ideas: The use of music as a central theme, with various genres blending throughout the story, reflects the protagonist's journey.
  • Unique Characters: A diverse cast of eccentric characters, each representing different aspects of Steve's life and struggles.

Comparable Scripts: The Wrestler, Crazy Heart, The Hangover, The Big Lebowski, Little Miss Sunshine, A Star is Born, The Office (U.S.), The Pursuit of Happyness, The Last Waltz

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Your current Theme (Script Level) score: 7.4
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2. Character Development (Script Level)
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Your current Character Development (Script Level) score: 7.3
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Your current Emotional Impact (Script Level) score: 7.3
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Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

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Overall Score: 7.29
Key Suggestions:
To elevate the script, focus on deepening character backstories and motivations, particularly for supporting characters like Deputy Schiller and Uncle Vizz, to add complexity and emotional resonance. Additionally, refine pacing and transitions between comedic and dramatic scenes to ensure smoother emotional flow and greater audience investment in the character arcs. Incorporating more introspective moments for Steve and Lucy could enhance the overall craft, making the narrative more cohesive and impactful.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
To enhance this script's creative potential, prioritize tightening the narrative flow by establishing clearer connections between scenes and raising the stakes early on, ensuring each moment builds cohesively toward Steve's goals. Delve deeper into character emotions, particularly Steve's struggles, to balance the humor with heartfelt development, making the story more engaging and resonant while leveraging the unique Elvis premise for authentic musical transformation.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The character analysis highlights opportunities to enhance the script's emotional depth and thematic resonance by focusing on character backstories and internal conflicts. For instance, developing Steve's past failures and Lucy's emotional wounds can create more authentic arcs, while addressing Deputy Schiller's static nature and Uncle Vizz's regrets can add layers to the antagonist and mentor roles. Prioritizing relational dynamics and vulnerability will make the story more engaging and help convey the themes of redemption and music more effectively, leading to a richer narrative.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
To improve the script's emotional craft, focus on diversifying emotional tones to avoid repetition and fatigue, such as balancing chaotic scenes with moments of reflection and humor. Enhance character empathy by adding internal monologues and deeper backstories, ensuring smoother transitions in emotional intensity and more nuanced layers in key interactions, which will create a more engaging and resonant narrative for audiences.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
The script effectively portrays Steve's internal and external conflicts, particularly in themes of authenticity versus commercialization in music, which drives strong character development. To enhance the craft, focus on tightening the pacing around key resolution moments (around 80-90% through the script) to heighten emotional impact and ensure the philosophical conflict's resolution feels earned and not rushed, allowing for deeper exploration of Steve's growth and the role of music in fostering genuine connections.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
The script's exploration of artistic authenticity and legacy is compelling, but to elevate its craft, focus on tightening the narrative by reducing subplots that could overshadow the core theme. Streamlining character arcs and emphasizing key emotional beats will enhance pacing and deepen audience connection, ensuring the story's chaotic elements serve to highlight rather than dilute the protagonist's journey of redemption and discovery.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
As a screenwriter aiming for competition success, focus on tightening the narrative by resolving key plot holes and ensuring character arcs feel organic rather than plot-driven. The analysis highlights inconsistencies in Steve's behavior and unresolved elements like the cartel threat, which can be addressed with minor revisions to enhance authenticity and emotional depth, making the script more compelling and believable without overhauling its core strengths.

Scene Analysis

All of your scenes analyzed individually and compared, so you can zero in on what to improve.

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Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
The script's voice excels in witty dialogue and chaotic humor, but to elevate it creatively, focus on deepening emotional arcs and ensuring that introspective moments are as compelling as the comedic ones. By refining pacing and character development, particularly in transitions between humor and tension, the writer can create a more balanced narrative that resonates on a deeper level, preventing the absurdity from overshadowing thematic depth and enhancing overall audience engagement.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
The screenplay has a solid foundation in dialogue and character dynamics, but to enhance its creative impact, focus on deepening character motivations and arcs for greater emotional resonance, refining pacing to sustain tension and momentum, and adding subtext to dialogue to make interactions more nuanced and engaging. By addressing these areas, the writer can transform the script into a more compelling and polished narrative that effectively blends humor with deeper themes.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
The script's world-building is a strong asset, effectively using contrasting settings and cultural elements to drive character development and themes, but to improve creatively, focus on tightening the integration of the Elvis conspiracy to avoid feeling contrived, and enhance sensory details in rural scenes to heighten emotional stakes and make the narrative more immersive and believable.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
As an intermediate screenwriter, your script's heavy reliance on humor is a strength that drives engaging dialogue and light-hearted moments, but it often undermines tension and emotional stakes, particularly in dramatic scenes. To elevate your craft, focus on subtly increasing stakes within humorous contexts and ensuring that comedic elements serve to build toward emotional payoffs, which will add depth and prevent the story from feeling overly frivolous. This minor polish can enhance character arcs and overall impact, making your script more competitive by balancing its charm with genuine drama.
Loglines
Presents logline variations based on theme, genre, and hook.