In the darkness, we hear a voice, a woman's voice. Her name
is Evey.
EVEY (V.O.)
"Remember, remember, the fifth of
November, the gunpowder treason and
plot. I know of now reason why the
gunpowder treason should ever be
forgot."
Her voice has a strength that is metered by a calmness, a
deep centered peace that we can feel.
EVEY (V.O.)
Those were almost the very first
words he spoke to me and, in a way,
that is where this story began, four
hundred years ago, in a cellar beneath
the Houses of Parliament.
In the darkness, we find a lantern. Guy Fawkes, a dangerous
man who wears a goatee, is struggling with a wheelbarrow
stacked with barrels of gunpowder.
EVEY (V.O.)
In 1605, Guy Fawkes attempted to
blow up the Houses of Parliament.
The wheelbarrow bumps over the heavy stone mortar of the
cellar floor. From the dark depths, we hear the sound of
dogs.
EVEY (V.O.)
He was caught in the cellars with
enough gunpowder to level most of
London.
Guy sees lanterns coming from both sides. He tries to run
as the dogs reach him first. He grabs for his sword as dozens
of pole axes pin him against the tunnel's stone wall.
EVEY (V.O.)
Sometimes I wonder where we would be
if he hadn't failed. I wonder if it
would have mattered.
In the dim pre-dawn light, Guy is led to the gallows.
EVEY (V.O.)
I suppose the answer is in the rhyme.
More than the man, what we must
remember is the plot itself.
(CONTINUED)
0 CONTINUED: 0
The coarse noose of rope is snugged up to Guy's throat. He
looks into the crowd until he finds a face, a woman's face,
staring up at him.
EVEY (V.O.)
For in the plot we find more than
just a man, we find the idea of that
man, the spirit of that man, and
that is what we must never forget.
The lever is thrown and the woman looks down, a tear falling
down her face.
EVEY (V.O.)
This, then, is the story of that
idea, of that spirit that began with
an anarchist's plot four hundred
years ago.
Guy's body hangs in silhouette, lifeless against a red morning
sun.
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Compelled to keep Reading Score: 8/10
This opening scene immediately grabs the reader's attention with its intriguing voiceover and historical context. The execution of Guy Fawkes is visually striking and creates a sense of drama and mystery. The voiceover's emphasis on the 'spirit of rebellion' and the 'plot itself' leaves the reader wanting to know more about this 'story' and how it connects to the present. The ending lines directly promise a larger narrative, hooking the reader into the overarching story.
Script Continuation Score: 8/10
The strong opening sets a high bar for the rest of the script. The historical prologue effectively establishes a theme of rebellion and the enduring power of ideas. The voiceover introduces Evey as a key figure, and the mystery of her connection to the events of 1605 immediately piques interest. The reader is left eager to see how the past influences the present, and what role Evey will play in the story.
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Echoes of Innocence and Fear - Overall Grade:
8.2
A young Evey sits on her father's lap, combing her Barbie's
hair.
EVEY (V.O.)
I was born near the end of the
millennium, the year 1997. My father
used to say that people were so afraid
that the world was going to end that
they were willing it to happen.
Her father sits beside her mother on the living room couch,
watching the news. From the look on their faces, the news
is bad.
EVEY (V.O.)
I don't remember much of the century's
turn. I don't remember the market
crash or the plague or any of the
Trafalgar riots.
The television flickers with images of heavily armed soldiers
fighting in a shelled city.
EVEY (V.O.)
I've read about them since but I
don't recall how any of them impacted
(MORE)
(CONTINUED)
1 CONTINUED: 1
EVEY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
my life except for the fear. They
would hide it from me, like a secret
between them.
Little Evey sees her father staring at her mother. They
take hold of each other's hand, clasping them tight.
EVEY (V.O.)
But I could feel it.
2 EXT. CITY STREET 2
It is a new day. People are gathered along the street as if
they were waiting for a parade.
EVEY (V.O.)
Of the chaos that seemed to swallow
the beginning of the 21st century,
there is one thing I do remember.
Evey holds her father's hand. Unable to see what is coming,
she can hear it.
EVEY (V.O.)
Very clearly, I can remember that
sound.
We hear them, hundreds of marching soldiers.
EVEY (V.O.)
And I remember those boots, black
leather that gleamed bright in the
morning sun. I had never seen such
boots. All moving in perfect unison.
Little Evey hides in the forest of adults, clinging to her
father's leg, staring as row after row of boots march by
with military precision.
3 EXT. CITY STREET 3
In the midst of a political rally for the emerging new party
calling itself Norsefire, we find little Evey now on her
father's shoulders.
Dascombe, a young man, paces the podium, inciting the crowd.
DASCOMBE
The time has come, London, to return
to a bygone age, an age of tradition,
an age of values that have been
disparaged and all but forgotten.
What this country needs is a leader!
(MORE)
(CONTINUED)
3 CONTINUED: 3
DASCOMBE (CONT'D)
A true leader to remind us of that
age. A righteous leader with the
strength of his moral convictions to
do what must be done. I give you
that man! I give you our leader!
Adam Susan!
Adam Susan rises and the crowd cheers. Evey's father looks
at her mother and again they clasp hands.
EVEY (V.O.)
It must have seemed so easy to them.
They offered such a simple deal;
give up control and we will restore
order.
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The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 8/10
This scene effectively uses Evey's voiceover to establish a compelling backstory, hinting at a dystopian future without explicitly showing it. The juxtaposition of a seemingly idyllic childhood moment with the ominous news reports and the later political rally creates a strong sense of unease and foreshadowing. The scene ends with the introduction of Dascombe and the Norsefire party, raising questions about their intentions and how they will impact Evey's life. The visual of her parents' clasped hands amidst the rally's fervor creates a potent visual hook, emphasizing the family's shared anxiety and setting the stage for future conflicts. The promise of order in exchange for control immediately sets up the central conflict of the film.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The opening scene established a thematic connection to Guy Fawkes and rebellion, and this scene immediately grounds that theme in a personal narrative. We now understand that Evey's rebellion is not abstract but rooted in a traumatic childhood marked by political upheaval and the rise of a totalitarian regime. The unresolved questions of Evey's parents' fate, the nature of Norsefire's power, and the meaning of the marching soldiers and gleaming boots create strong forward momentum. The overall tone is dark but intriguing, promising a story of political intrigue, personal struggle, and rebellion against a powerful oppressor. The script has a clear hook based around the contrast of innocent memories and an authoritarian threat.
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The Silence of Oppression - Overall Grade:
9.2
EVEY (V.O.)
At first, the arrests were political.
Dissidents. Radicals. Liberals.
A loud crash of splintering wood wakes her up.
EVEY (V.O.)
When my parents were younger, they
had been activists. They had marched
with Labor in the great train strike.
The sound of heavy boots swarms through the house.
LITTLE EVEY
Mommy?
Her bedroom door bursts open and a heavily armed soldier
scoops her up.
She is carried through the dark house which is filled with
soldiers. On the floor of the living room, she sees her
parents being bound with plastic zip-ties.
MOTHER
My daughter! Don't take my daughter!
FATHER
Evey! Evey!
LITTLE EVEY
Mommy! Daddy!
A heavy black hood is pulled over each of her parent's heads
as Evey is carried out of the house.
(CONTINUED)
4 CONTINUED: 4
EVEY (V.O.)
I never saw them again. Overnight,
my life, my entire world was erased.
5 INT. BATHROOM 5
A nun with a switch in her crossed arms watches as Evey and
several other little girls scrub the floor of a dormitory
bathroom.
EVEY (V.O.)
It was done so quickly and violently,
so completely, that it began to seem
that it had never even existed.
A tear rolls down Little Evey's cheek.
6 EXT. HOUSE 6
A gay man is dragged violently from his Piccadilly home.
Outside, he sees his lover being forced to the cobblestones.
EVEY (V.O.)
The homosexuals were next. What God
had started with AIDS had to be
finished by man. It was God's work.
That's what we were told.
He reaches for him as the clubs rise and fall, vicious and
bloody.
EVEY (V.O.)
But once they were gone, there was
someone else. Someone different.
In another neighborhood, we see the police arresting
Pakistanis.
EVEY (V.O.)
Someone dangerous.
In a different area, young black men are packed into a caged
van so tightly they are unable to move.
EVEY (V.O.)
There were those who understood what
was happening, who knew it was wrong
but who kept silent.
A young detective named Finch looks down as the van pulls
away. When he looks up, another man in a military uniform
whose name is Almond is watching him.
(CONTINUED)
6 CONTINUED: 6
EVEY (V.O.)
And in the vacuum of that silence,
order was imposed.
Finch sticks his pipe in his mouth and turns away.
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“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
This scene ends on a powerful cliffhanger. The abrupt arrest of Evey's parents and her subsequent abduction leave the reader with a profound sense of unease and unanswered questions. The quick cuts to the arrests of other marginalized groups, coupled with Detective Finch's observation, broaden the scope of the oppression and create a chilling atmosphere. The final voiceover line, 'And in the vacuum of that silence, order was imposed,' is a stark and thought-provoking statement that leaves the reader wanting to know more about this new oppressive order and how Evey will navigate it. The juxtaposition of Evey's childhood innocence with the harsh reality of her sudden loss creates a powerful emotional hook, driving the reader to the next scene to see what happens to Evey and understand the nature of this new world.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The script maintains a strong hook through the consistent build-up of tension and mystery. The initial scene set the tone of rebellion, which is immediately contrasted by the unsettling reality of the oppressive regime. The introduction of Evey's backstory provides emotional depth, making the reader invested in her journey. The cliffhanger ending of Scene 3, with Evey's abduction and the implied systematic persecution of minority groups, creates a significant amount of suspense. The unresolved questions surrounding the nature of the new order and its impact on Evey's life, coupled with the introduction of Detective Finch as a potential point of resistance, are effective in pushing the reader forward. The pacing is excellent so far; not dwelling too long on a single event, but building a narrative momentum.
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Fateful Encounters in a Dystopian Night - Overall Grade:
8.5
EVEY (V.O.)
Order that was like those boots,
order that required rigorous
discipline. Order that is exactly
the same, where each single step
falls with every step. The order of
the many shaped into one.
We move through the columns of marching soldiers to a wall
where a poster has been plastered up. The poster reads,
"Strength Through Purity, Purity Through Faith."
EVEY (V.O.)
Somehow in my heart, I knew it
wouldn't last.
As the sound of the marching fades, a shadow falls over the
sign.
After a moment, we hear the hiss of spray paint.
EVEY (V.O.)
What they thought they had crushed,
the spirit they believed trampled
and ground beneath the marching of
their boots, rose up, rose as if
from a four hundred year old grave,
rose to remind us all that day.
The shadow sprays a "V" over the poster.
FADE OUT:
FADE IN:
Close on a loudspeaker. There is one on every major street
corner.
FATE (V.O.)
Good evening, London. It's nine
o'clock, the fourth of November in
the year 2019 and this is the voice
of Fate broadcasting on 275 and 285
of the medium wave.
(CONTINUED)
7 CONTINUED: 7
Beneath the loudspeaker is a surveillance system labeled,
"For your protection."
Bubble eyed lenses iris at the end of stalks that move, insect-
like, racheting and clicking as they watch a little girl
pedal her bicycle. The little girl glances nervously over
her shoulder up at the mechanical eyes watching her.
FATE (V.O.)
People of London, be advised --
8 EXT. EVEY'S APARTMENT 8
There is a radio on a small makeup table.
FATE (V.O.)
-- that Braxton and Streathon are
quarantine zones as of today.
Evey is now a young woman. She slips into a dress that is
little more than a nightgown. She tries to adjust it, pulling
it down at the hem, pulling it up at the thin shoulder straps,
but it is like trying to hide behind a lamppost.
FATE (V.O.)
It is suggested that these area be
avoided for reasons of health and
safety.
9 INT. SHADOW GALLERY 9
Another radio in a room that seems to be of another world.
FATE (V.O.)
Good news following the productivity
reports from Herefordshire indicating
a possible end to meat rationing
starting mid February.
A man enters the room as he once entered the world. His
body is lean and strong and though we do not see his face,
there is a strength in his carriage, a power to his presence.
10 INT. EVEY'S APARTMENT 10
She packs tissue paper into the toes of a pair of high heels
that are too big for her.
FATE (V.O.)
Police raided seventeen homes in the
Birmingham area, uncovering what is
believed to be a major terrorist
ring.
11 INT. SHADOW GALLERY 11
We move over a dressing bureau, past a wig and over a pair
of black leather gloves, moving until we find the mask; it
is like something from the masquerade ball of another era.
It has an exaggerated goatee, harlequin cheeks and a smile,
forever fixed, at once be-guiling and be-deviling.
FATE (V.O.)
Twenty eight people, eight of them
women, are currently in detention
awaiting trial.
12 INT. EVEY'S APARTMENT 12
Evey coats her lips with a lascivious red. She stares into
the mirror, her makeup like a mask over her own face.
FATE (V.O.)
And that is the face of London
tonight.
13 INT. SHADOW GALLERY 13
The man, now fully dressed in cloak, hat, and mask gazes
into the mirror.
This is V.
FATE (V.O.)
And this is the voice of Fate signing
off and bidding you a pleasant
evening.
14 EXT. CITY STREET 14
Close on Evey's high heels, stumbling and awkward as she
walks down a dark cobblestoned street.
15 EXT. CITY STREET 15
Close on V's boots walking in the opposite direction so that
it seems they are walking towards each other.
EVEY (V.O.)
I don't know what brought us together
that night. I had never been to
that part of Westminster but ever
since I've known him, I've stopped
believing in coincidence.
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The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
This scene ends with a strong hook. The visual of the 'V' sprayed onto the poster, symbolizing rebellion against the oppressive regime, immediately creates intrigue and raises questions about the mysterious figure who did it. The introduction of V, shrouded in shadow, further adds to the suspense. The final image of Evey and V walking towards each other on a dark street creates a palpable sense of anticipation, leaving the reader eager to discover their meeting and the events that will follow. The scene expertly builds on the previous scenes' establishment of an oppressive regime, creating a clear need for further exploration of the rebellion.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall script maintains a strong hook. The initial scenes effectively established a dystopian world characterized by oppression and control, creating a compelling backdrop for the narrative. The introduction of V as a symbol of rebellion and the mystery surrounding his identity provide a strong narrative pull. The unresolved tension between the oppressive regime and the emerging rebellion keeps the reader invested in the unfolding events. The fragmented glimpses of Evey's past trauma and her subsequent journey add emotional depth and further engage the reader. The mystery of V's identity and the overall goal create a compelling enigma, driving the reader's desire to know more about the rebel who challenges the regime.
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 10/10
This scene ends on a powerful cliffhanger. Evey's desperate attempt to solicit sex for money is immediately subverted into a violent encounter with Fingermen, setting the stage for a dramatic rescue by V. V's sudden appearance and swift, almost superhuman, takedown of the Fingermen is thrilling and unexpected. The scene concludes with Evey being whisked away by V just as sirens approach, leaving the reader breathless and eager to see what happens next. The introduction of V, a mysterious and capable figure, creates immediate intrigue and a strong desire to discover more about him and his role in the unfolding story. The open question of V's identity and his motives, coupled with the immediate danger Evey was in, ensures that the scene compels the reader to continue.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall script maintains a high level of engagement. The opening scenes established a dystopian world and introduced Evey's backstory, creating a compelling context for the unfolding narrative. The introduction of V in this scene adds a layer of excitement and mystery, building on the existing suspense. While some might argue that there is not a large amount of character development at this stage, the strong action and fast-paced plot, compounded with the intrigue surrounding V, significantly outweighs this concern at this point in the script. The unanswered questions regarding V's identity and his plans, alongside the unresolved tension created by the oppressive regime, effectively hook the reader, ensuring continued engagement.
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The Orchestration of Chaos - Overall Grade:
9.2
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Compelled to keep Reading Score: 10/10
This scene ends on a spectacular and unexpected note, leaving the reader completely captivated and eager to know what happens next. The destruction of Big Ben and the Statue of Justice is a visually striking climax, enhanced by the dramatic use of Tchaikovsky's 1812 Overture. The scene leaves multiple open questions: What is V's ultimate goal? What will be the consequences of his actions? How will Evey react to this display of power and chaos? The sheer scale of V's actions and the unresolved questions about his motivations create an undeniable pull to continue reading. The introduction of the 'V' fireworks display as a symbol of rebellion also creates a significant hook for future events.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall script, up to this point, has effectively established a compelling dystopian world and introduced intriguing characters. V's actions in this scene significantly raise the stakes, confirming him as a powerful and unpredictable force. The mystery surrounding his identity and ultimate objectives remains a powerful hook. The relationship between Evey and V is also developing, creating a potential emotional core to the narrative. However, some earlier plot threads, such as Detective Finch's observations of the regime's oppression, might start fading if not revisited soon. The potential for a larger conflict between V and the authorities is clearly established, fueling anticipation for what will happen next.
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The Leader's Demand for Control - Overall Grade:
8.5
A massive modern building that is the seat of the new
government.
A long, black car pulls up to the entrance. Adam Susan gets
out, wearing a long black trenchcoat over his pajamas. He
is the Leader and he looks older, heavier, and meaner.
He hurries past the heavily armed guards, barely acknowledging
the snap and cock of their Nazi-like salute.
19 INT. LEADER'S OFFICE 19
The Leader enters his main chambers and we see the Fate
computer system.
(CONTINUED)
19 CONTINUED: 19
It is a cerebral cortex for a vast intelligence network.
Information can almost be felt coursing through its hard
drives.
The Leader sits, at once regaining a measure of composure.
He takes a deep calming breath and accesses the system.
Dozens of monitors fill with images from all across the city,
most of them are of the damage caused by V.
LEADER
Gentlemen, I will hear your reports
now. Mr. Heyer, speak for the Eye.
Conrad Heyer appears on one of the screens. He is at his
desk inside the command center for the Eye, the governmental
organization responsible for the visual surveillance systems.
CONRAD
We have less than two minutes of
usable footage, Leader. It took the
suspect less than a minute to dispatch
the Finger's vice patrol.
On an insert screen, we see grainy footage of V rescuing
Evey from one of the pole-mounted cameras.
CONRAD
As you can see, the suspect's reflex
speed is extraordinary. As is his
strength.
As the last body falls, V seems to pause and looks back over
his shoulder straight into the camera.
LEADER
Freeze it!
The Leader stares at the smiling face.
CONRAD
I'm afraid the mask makes retinal
identification impossible.
LEADER
Mr. Etheridge, report for the Ear!
Bunny Etheridge appears on another screen. Behind him, huge
spooling reels of audiotape wind constantly.
ETHERIDGE
We were able to triangulate the origin
of the fireworks. We also are
currently monitoring a lot of phone
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(CONTINUED)
19 CONTINUED: (2) 19
ETHERIDGE (CONT'D)
surveillance indicating a high
percentage of conversation concerned
with the explosions. All suspect or
significant transcripts are being
forwarded to Mr. Almond.
LEADER
Very good. Mr. Finch, speak for the
Nose.
Finch, no longer the same young man, stands at the site of
the fireworks launch.
FINCH
Thanks to Etheridge, we found the
launch for the fireworks. These
appear to be individually weighted
flares and we have found traces of
the same chemicals at both of the
detonation sites which leads us to
conclude that, despite a level of
sophistication, these devices are
all home-made with over the counter
chemicals, making them impossible to
trace. Whoever he is, Leader, he's
good.
LEADER
Thank you for that professional
annotation.
An intercom opens.
LIEUTENANT (V.O.)
Leader, Mr. Almond has arrived.
LEADER
Very good. Gentlemen, keep me
informed of any further developments.
England prevails.
They answer in unison as Almond enters the office. His face
is harder but he has the same violent gleam in his eye.
The Leader turns in his chair.
LEADER
Mr. Almond, do you know what this is
behind me?
ALMOND
Uh... the Fate computer system, sir?
(CONTINUED)
19 CONTINUED: (3) 19
LEADER
No. No sir. It's more than that.
This, this computer is a symbol, Mr.
Almond. A symbol of the highest
attainable goal of mankind. Do you
know what that goal is, Mr. Almond?
Almond does not. The Leader leaps from his chair while
pounding the desk.
LEADER
Control, Mr. Almond! Control! The
world around us is a changing,
directionless, amoral morass and it
is up to man and man alone to set
things right!
He moves around the desk at Almond.
LEADER
Without control, man is nothing more
than any other stinking, sweating,
brute animal. Control, Mr. Almond.
The control that we have painstakingly
built up over the last ten years.
Now, do you understand what happened
last night?
ALMOND
We... lost control.
LEADER
Yes, Mr. Almond. Last night someone
did the unthinkable. Someone hurt
us. It is imperative that we act
swiftly and precisely. I want that
man found, Mr. Almond. I want his
head or, by god, I'll have yours.
Genres:
Dystopian, Political Thriller Tone:
Intense, Authoritative, Suspenseful
Ratings
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The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
This scene ends on a cliffhanger, leaving the reader desperate to know what happens next. The Leader's furious demand for V's capture, his threat to Almond, and the overall sense of urgency and chaos created by V's actions create intense suspense. The scene also introduces the Fate computer system, hinting at a larger, more complex plot involving surveillance and control. The visual description of the Leader's intense anger and the grainy footage of V make for a compelling visual experience, driving the reader onward to witness the next steps in the pursuit of V.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The screenplay maintains a strong sense of forward momentum. The initial scenes established a dystopian world and introduced the mystery of V. This scene significantly escalates the conflict, revealing the government's response to V's actions and their determination to recapture him. The introduction of the Fate system adds a layer of intrigue, suggesting a larger technological conflict in addition to the ideological one. The unresolved mystery of V's identity and motivations, combined with the threat to Almond and the emphasis on the pursuit of V's capture, keeps the reader invested in the overall narrative.
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Discovery in the Shadow Gallery - Overall Grade:
8.5
Evey is wearing a blindfold and V leads her by her fingertips,
guiding her almost as if they were dancing...
His fingers slip free of her and she reaches out.
EVEY
Wait. I've lost you.
V
No, you haven't.
He is behind her and he removes the blindfold, revealing his
house to her.
(CONTINUED)
20 CONTINUED: 20
EVEY
Oh...
It is a labyrinth of interconnecting underground tunnels and
rooms.
The gallery is the main room as it is filled with an amazing
collection of human culture. There is art that spans from
the renaissance to the painted covers of Eerie comics,
literature that ranges from Shakespeare to Spillane,
philosophy from Plato to Bukowski, and a vast collection of
nonfiction.
There are movie posters everywhere and an entire wall is
lined with videocassettes.
A jukebox stands in front of an enormous vinyl and CD
collection of music.
EVEY
A jukebox? Where did you get it?
V
I saved it. Like everything here.
She punches a button and Billie Holiday begins to sing.
EVEY
Oh, it's beautiful. I've never heard
anything like it.
V
Of course not. You grew up in their
world. Art is created by individuals
and there are no individuals in a
world where you are told what to
think.
EVEY
This place is amazing.
V
You're welcome to stay.
She stops suddenly and looks at him. The offer is terribly
exciting but it is so unlike anything she has ever done that
it's almost impossible to imagine.
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 8/10
This scene ends on a strong note of intrigue and offers a compelling invitation to continue reading. The revelation of V's hidden sanctuary, a haven of art and culture contrasting sharply with the oppressive world outside, leaves the reader wanting to explore this new environment further. The offer for Evey to stay with V creates immediate suspense—will she accept? The scene also ends with a burgeoning connection between Evey and V, whose shared smile suggests a growing bond and hints at potential future developments in their relationship. The enigmatic nature of V's name and his unique world create a desire to learn more about him and his motivations.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall script maintains a high level of engagement. The initial scenes effectively established the oppressive backdrop and Evey's plight, creating a strong emotional foundation. V's dramatic entrance and his rescue of Evey successfully introduced a compelling character and immediate action. The destruction of Big Ben established V as a force to be reckoned with. This scene further strengthens the narrative by adding a layer of mystery and intrigue around V's identity and his sanctuary. The burgeoning relationship between Evey and V provides an engaging emotional core. The overall arc of rebellion against the oppressive regime remains a compelling hook, and the questions surrounding V’s identity and motives are only intensifying.
The only operating broadcast tower in London; home of the
Mouth.
22 INT. RADIO BROADCAST BOOTH 22
Lewis Prothero leans forward and lets his voice pour like
syrup over the microphone.
PROTHERO
Good morning, London. This is the
voice of Fate -- Damn.
He stops and coughs.
PROTHERO
Good morning -- ack. Good morning
Lond-- Goddammit! Where is my bloody
tea?!
In the control booth, Roger Dascombe, his hair thinner now,
rubs his temple.
DASCOMBE
Would someone get his lordship his
bloody tea?
He clicks on the microphone.
DASCOMBE
Lewis, they want this report on the
first hour --
PROTHERO
I know. I know. Damned inconvenient
this entire affair. Fine. Let's
try again.
He clears his voice and the red "record" light turns on.
(CONTINUED)
22 CONTINUED: 22
PROTHERO
Good morning, London. It is 6 am,
the fifth of November 2019 and this
is the voice of Fate. The new day
brings good news and bright prospects
from overseas, where negotiations
with New China are moving in a
positive direction. Last night's
scheduled demolition of two
deteriorating landmarks went off
without a hitch.
Dascombe is unable to stop himself from smiling.
PROTHERO
Spokesman for the Interior ministry
said both structures were severely
damaged and judged to be a danger to
the unsuspecting public. Plans for
new landmarks are well underway.
Prothero sits back, shaking his head.
PROTHERO
Do you believe this crap, Dascombe?
DASCOMBE
It's not our job to believe it, Lewis.
Our job is to tell the people --
PROTHERO
"Exactly what they tell us." I Know
but do you think that people will
believe it?
DASCOMBE
They will if it's you that's telling
it to them. Now let's try it again.
23 INT. SHADOW GALLERY 23
V is alone, listening to the first morning broadcast.
PROTHERO (V.O.)
... plans for new landmarks are
already well underway.
He clicks off the radio. Walking down a hall, he stops and
peers into Evey's new bedroom.
She is fast asleep, looking remarkably at peace. Quietly,
he shuts the door.
24 EXT. TRAIN STATION 24
People are hurrying to board a departing train.
25 INT. TRAIN CAR 25
Prothero is staring out his window.
PROTHERO
"Remember, remember, the fifth of
November..."
He talks to his bodyguards almost as if talking to himself.
PROTHERO
Do you suppose that's why he did it?
BODYGUARD 1
Sir, who did what, sir?
PROTHERO
Guy Fawkes. He tried to blow up
Parliament.
The guards look at each other, confused.
PROTHERO
Don't they teach history in school
anymore?
BODYGUARD 1
Sir, we're both straight military,
sir.
BODYGUARD 2
Sir, yes, sir. I was fighting in
Ireland by the time I was sixteen.
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
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The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 7/10
This scene ends with a clear cliffhanger. Prothero's cryptic reference to Guy Fawkes and the fifth of November, coupled with the bodyguards' confusion, leaves the reader wondering about the connection between these seemingly disparate elements. The scene also subtly introduces a sense of unease with Prothero's dismissive attitude towards his bodyguards. The final shot of Prothero looking out of the train window, seemingly lost in thought, leaves the reader anticipating some kind of event. The introduction of the train as a setting hints at further action to come, and we expect this to play a role in the impending conflict.
Script Continuation Score: 8/10
The overall script maintains a strong sense of intrigue. The introduction of V and his actions have created a compelling mystery. The government's response to V's actions, as seen in previous scenes, is also a significant plot line that continues to be compelling, making the reader want to see how the conflict unfolds. This scene builds on that tension, hinting at another encounter between V and one of the story's established antagonists. The unresolved threads and many mysteries around V's actions make it hard to put down and eagerly anticipate further developments.
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Confrontation in the Dark - Overall Grade:
9.2
PROTHERO
I love trains. I remember riding
the underground with my father.
Shame they shut them all down.
(CONTINUED)
27 CONTINUED: 27
Bodyguard 1 looks out the opposite window just as the train
enters the tunnel.
BODYGUARD 1
What the hell's that!
28 EXT. TRAIN 28
For a flashing instant, we see V in silhouette, cloak swirling
around him like dark wings as he jumps from the bridge onto
the train.
29 INT. TRAIN CAR 29
Prothero and Bodyguard 2 stare at Bodyguard 1.
BODYGUARD 1
I thought I saw a man jumping onto
the train.
BODYGUARD 2
The train's doing almost seventy.
It would break his legs.
BODYGUARD 1
You're right, I... It must have been
rags.
30 EXT. TRAIN 30
Deep in the tunnel, a dark figure glides across the rooftops.
31 INT. CONDUCTOR'S CAB 31
The conductor hears something on the roof. He peers up just
as V swings down, smashing feet first into the cab.
32 INT. TRAIN CAR 32
The brakes suddenly lock, throwing Bodyguard 2 into Prothero.
PROTHERO
Get off of me!
A moment later, the lights are cut off and the entire train
is plunged into complete darkness.
BODYGUARD 2
What the fuck is going on?
BODYGUARD 1
Lock the car doors.
PROTHERO
I have a lighter... somewhere...
(CONTINUED)
32 CONTINUED: 32
BODYGUARD 2
I can't find the lock -- wait. Hey
wha--
There is a muffled shriek followed by a sharp snap.
BODYGUARD 1
What's happening --
There is another sound, like the leather slap of a boxer
pounding a heavy bag, followed by the sound of the heavy bag
collapsing onto the floor.
PROTHERO
I found it!
He flicks on the lighter and, in the dim light of its flame,
he sees the smiling face.
PROTHERO
Oh god.
V sits casually, arms folded, across from Prothero. The
bodyguards lay dead on the floor.
PROTHERO
Who are you? What do you want?
Money? Is that it?
V just smiles.
PROTHERO
Wait, wait. You're, you're the one
that blew the Bailey.
V nods and Prothero's eyes go wide.
PROTHERO
You're making a mistake. I'm nobody --
On the floor, he sees the bodyguard's gun. He kills the
lighter and dives for it.
In the darkness, we hear the struggle. It ends quickly.
When the lighter flicks back on, V is holding it and the
gun.
PROTHERO
Oh god, what do you want?
V
I've come to offer you a choice.
Commander Prothero.
(CONTINUED)
32 CONTINUED: (2) 32
PROTHERO
What -- What did you call me?
V
Commander Prothero.
Prothero's heart begins to pound.
V
That was your title at Larkhill.
You remember Larkhill, don't you,
Commander?
33 EXT. LARKHILL RESETTLEMENT CAMP - FLASHBACK 33
A sign reads, "Larkhill Resettlement Camp."
V (V.O.)
Where they sent the undesirables.
A caged truck packed with minorities rolls into the gates
which are topped with spools of razor wire.
34 INT. TRAIN CAR 34
Prothero is sweating.
PROTHERO
I don't know what you're talking
about.
V
Maybe I can help your memory. Let's
see. Larkhill opened in the summer
of 2009. You were appointed it
commander. You wore a uniform in
those days. You looked very good in
it.
V (V.O.)
You were a man of many
responsibilities. You made sure
Larkhill made all its quotas,
especially the oven quotas even though
they required an excessive amount of
maintenance.
36 EXT. LARKHILL OVENS - FLASHBACK 36
We see a detail of black and Indian men, shoveling mounds of
black ash from a series of furnace like ovens.
(CONTINUED)
36 CONTINUED: 36
As the shovels lift, we see blackened bones and burnt skulls.
37 EXT. LARKHILL MAIN YARD - FLASHBACK 37
Prothero saunters through the lines of camp prisoners.
V (V.O.)
But there was one task you took to
with exceptional relish. Remember
the medical block, Commander? I
believe you called it the funny farm.
You were the one that selected the
prisoners. You hand picked each
one.
Prothero steps in front of a woman who remains beautiful
despite the suffering she has endured. Prothero smiles.
PROTHERO
Her.
As the guards grab her, we become aware of a man that is
staring at Prothero. He is one of the prisoners but we do
not see his face.
Prothero notices the man. He doesn't like the way the man
is staring at him.
PROTHERO
You.
Genres:
Thriller, Drama Tone:
Intense, Dark, Revealing
Ratings
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“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
This scene ends on a powerful cliffhanger. The revelation of Prothero's dark past at Larkhill Resettlement Camp and V's offer of a choice—injecting himself with an unknown substance or facing immediate death—leaves the reader desperate to know what happens next. The suspense is expertly built through flashbacks interspersed with the tense confrontation on the train, creating a compelling narrative hook. The scene’s intensity, coupled with the unresolved conflict, leaves the reader craving the immediate resolution. The visual imagery of the Larkhill camp is particularly disturbing and further fuels the need to see the consequences of Prothero's actions.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall screenplay maintains a high level of engagement. The introduction of V and his mysterious actions has established a central conflict that continues to drive the narrative forward. While some plot threads from earlier scenes (Evey's early life, the Leader's motivations) are temporarily sidelined, the focus remains sharp on the immediate stakes for the characters. The escalating tension between V and the authorities, combined with the suspenseful cliffhangers at the end of each scene, keeps the reader fully invested. The pacing remains excellent. The flashbacks effectively reveal Prothero's background, providing crucial context to the current confrontation, and further enhance the reader's anticipation for the resolution of this scene and many other conflicts.
V
You gave us a choice, remember,
Commander? You said we could
cooperate with the doctors or...
V cocks the gun.
V
Hold out your hand.
(CONTINUED)
38 CONTINUED: 38
Trembling, Prothero sticks out his hand. V lets the light
die for a moment.
When he flicks it back on, Prothero is holding a long, metal
syringe filled with a murky liquid.
PROTHERO
Oh no, no! Please I was just doing
what I was told!
V
Of course you were. Now I'm telling
you to make a choice. Either you
stick that syringe into your neck or --
He presses the gun barrel to Prothero's forehead.
V
I can kill you right now.
Prothero begins to blubber.
V
Crying doesn't help, Commander. I
remember there was a woman who had
been screaming for two days. You
winked at the doctor and laughed,
"All in the name of science."
PROTHERO
Please, don't make me do this...
V
It's a difficult choice, isn't it?
Certain death versus something that
might be... worse. But you never
know. There is still a chance. You
could survive. Look at me. Now,
time's up, Commander. Choose.
Anger galvanizes his fear and steadily Prothero lifts the
needle towards his neck.
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“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
This scene ends on a powerful and chilling cliffhanger. The immediate threat of death, coupled with the morally ambiguous choice presented to Prothero, creates intense suspense. The reader is left wondering about the contents of the syringe, the nature of the 'worse' fate V alludes to, and the ultimate consequences of Prothero's choice. The scene's strong emotional impact and unresolved questions leave the reader eager to discover what happens next. The finality of Prothero's defiant statement, "I'll see you in hell," adds another layer of intrigue and leaves the reader wanting to see how V reacts and what unfolds in the aftermath.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The screenplay maintains a high level of intrigue due to several compelling threads. The mystery surrounding V's identity and motives continues to drive the narrative forward. The introduction of Larkhill and the atrocities committed there adds a significant layer of complexity and darkness, making the reader eager to understand V's connection to these events. Prothero's death, however sudden, leaves a lingering question of the syringe's contents and their long-term effects. The overall narrative arc, with its blend of action, suspense, and moral ambiguity, keeps the reader deeply engaged. Even though some plot threads (such as the Leader's overarching ambitions) haven't been actively advanced in the last few scenes, their importance is still latent, waiting to be reintroduced.
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 8/10
This scene ends with a strong sense of unanswered questions and intrigue. The discovery of Prothero's death, the spray-painted 'V', and the unusual violet carson rose create immediate suspense. The abrupt summons to headquarters for Finch, coupled with his instructions to analyze the rose and paint, leaves the reader wanting to know more about the significance of these clues and how they connect to V. The scene successfully pivots from the immediate aftermath of a violent encounter to a new investigative thread, maintaining forward momentum.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall screenplay maintains a high level of engagement due to the ongoing mystery surrounding V and his motives. The introduction of new clues, such as the violet carson and the spray-painted 'V', keeps the reader invested in uncovering the truth behind V's actions. The previous scenes have built a solid foundation of suspense and unanswered questions, and this scene effectively adds to that momentum, creating a strong desire to understand how all the pieces fit together. The narrative effectively moves between different characters and perspectives, keeping the plot dynamic and unpredictable.
LEADER
Ah, Mr. Finch. I sent for you because
what I have to say cannot be said
over a phone or a radio. What I
have to say cannot leave these four
walls. Do I make myself clear?
FINCH
Yes, sir.
(CONTINUED)
42 CONTINUED: 42
LEADER
I believe in a few things, Mr. Finch.
I believe in god. I believe in the
destiny of the Nordic race. And I
believe in fascism. The romans
invented fascism. They had a symbol
for it; a bundle of twigs bound
together. One twig could be broken
but a bundle would prevail. That is
the heart and soul of fascism.
Strength in unity. I tell you these
things knowing full well that they
make you uncomfortable.
FINCH
Well, I...
LEADER
You have in fact expressed your
discomfort in several arrest reports,
arrests that were, in your opinion,
"unnecessary." The fact that you
are here, that you are not rotting
in a prison cell, is a mark of my
respect and admiration for you, for
your craft, and for what you have
done for this country.
Finch looks at the ground.
LEADER
It is also because I know you, Finch.
I know what you are. You're a man
like me. A man who understands when
they are given a job what must be
done. I understand you, Finch, and
that is why I can trust you.
He moves in close to Finch.
LEADER
This terrorist knows us, Finch.
These attacks are perfectly calculated
and they are divisive. He knows
what he's doing, Finch. He knows us
all too well.
FINCH
You think he's an insider?
LEADER
What I think is that this man must
be stopped. Stopped at all costs
and no one, I repeat, no one is to
(MORE)
(CONTINUED)
42 CONTINUED: (2) 42
LEADER (CONT'D)
be placed above suspicion. Do I
make myself clear?
FINCH
Perfectly.
LEADER
England prevails, Mr. Finch.
FINCH
England prevails.
Genres:
Political Thriller, Dystopian Tone:
Intense, Authoritative, Suspenseful
Ratings
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 7/10
The scene ends with a strong sense of impending threat and unresolved tension. The Leader's speech about fascism and his suspicion of an insider create a compelling mystery. The direct statement that 'no one is to be placed above suspicion' leaves the reader wondering who the terrorist might be and how the plot will unfold. The final exchange, 'England prevails,' reinforces the overarching theme of the conflict and leaves the reader eager to see how it will resolve.
Script Continuation Score: 8/10
The overall script maintains a high level of engagement due to the ongoing mystery surrounding V's identity and motivations. The introduction of suspicion within the government itself adds another layer of intrigue. The escalating tension between V and the authorities, coupled with the unresolved questions about Larkhill and the seemingly random acts of violence, keeps the reader invested. While some subplots (e.g., the train attack) might feel somewhat contained, the larger narrative arc remains compelling.
Evey, alone in the Shadow Gallery, stares up at the
inscription above the crooked staircase.
EVEY
V, v, v, v, v.
V
I hear your summons, my lady. And
obey.
She jumps, V suddenly appearing behind her.
EVEY
Oh, V, you scared me.
She turns back to the carving.
EVEY
I was reading the inscription. What
is it?
V
A Latin quotation. A motto. "Vi
veri veniversum vivus vici." "By
the power of truth, I, while living,
have conquered the universe."
She nods.
EVEY
Yes, I suppose you have. This place
is the only universe I have right
now.
V
Does that bother you?
(CONTINUED)
43 CONTINUED: 43
EVEY
I don't know. I'm so grateful to
you -- I just feel I should help
you, you know, the way you're helping
me. I mean, that's the deal, isn't
it?
V drifts over to the big old Wurlitzer, fingers scanning the
song list.
V
No deals, Evey. Not unless you want
them.
She looks up at the inscription as an old blues song begins
to play.
EVEY
I think I do. Part of me wants to
stay here forever and never have to
face what's going on outside. But
that's not right. Is it? That's
not taking responsibility. Not
conquering my universe.
She turns to him.
EVEY
I want to help you, V. I want to do
something. Can we make a deal?
V
Yes. I think we can make a deal if
you like. I think I know a way you
could help me very soon indeed.
Evey smiles nervously.
EVEY
Good. That's that, then.
The blues song curls in the air around them like a heavy
incense.
EVEY
V, you said that Latin thing was a
quote. Who said it?
V
Nobody you'd have heard of. A German
gentleman named Dr. John Faust.
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
This scene ends with a strong sense of forward momentum. The conversation between Evey and V establishes a clear partnership and hints at an upcoming plan. The revelation that the Latin quote is from Dr. John Faust, who also 'made a deal,' creates a mysterious and intriguing hook, leaving the reader eager to discover the nature of this deal and how it connects to the larger plot. The open-ended nature of their agreement, combined with the ominous yet alluring music, generates significant suspense, compelling the reader to immediately proceed to the next scene.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall screenplay maintains a high level of engagement. The introduction of Evey into V's world and their burgeoning partnership creates a new, compelling dynamic. Previous plot lines, such as the mystery surrounding V's identity and motivations, remain relevant, interwoven with the growing relationship between the two main characters. The revelation of Dr. John Faust adds another layer of intrigue, connecting to themes of deals and consequences. The escalating conflict with the government provides ongoing tension, ensuring that the reader remains invested in the characters' fates and the unfolding events. There is a palpable sense of impending action and discovery, keeping the reader fully engaged.
The church doors have opened with the flow of parishioners
as the final mass of the day has ended.
The tide slowly pours out onto the sidewalk, separating around
the clumps of people that conglomerate to network and gossip.
Church bells toll in the orange dusk above them.
Helen Heyer, a woman whose spite and guile are hidden behind
her looks and clothes she drapes them with, charges into the
gossipers, her trophy husband in tow, a timid looking man
that we recognize as Conrad Heyer.
CONRAD
Hello, Rosemary. Derek, how --
Helen's head snaps over at the mention of the name.
HELEN
Derek!
She pushes past Conrad, giving Derek Almond an exuberant
kiss on both cheeks.
HELEN
Darling, how are you? Hello,
Rosemary.
Always behind her husband, Rosemary Almond smiles nervously
as she straightens her drab church dress.
ROSEMARY
Hello.
DEREK
It's so good to see you. Since this
bloody terrorist business, the old
man has me literally chained to the
office.
Helen pouts at him.
HELEN
Oh, you poor dear.
Derek taps the bottom of his cigarette box, drawing one with
his lips.
(CONTINUED)
44 CONTINUED: 44
DEREK
It comes with the job. How are things
in the Eye, Conrad?
CONRAD
Well, we've been working some bugs
out of the new Mark IX fiber optic
network, actually --
HELEN
Oh, Conrad, don't be such a bloody
bore. Do tell us about the terrorist,
Derek. Is it true he blew up Big
Ben and the old Bailey?
DEREK
I'm afraid so. We're dealing with a
pathological psychotic in the most
extreme case. We'll catch him though.
I promise.
Helen rubs her white sable against her body.
HELEN
Oh, it sounds dreadfully exciting.
Aren't you glad you've got such a
ruthless, implacable brute for a
husband, Rosemary?
ROSEMARY
Yes, well --
HELEN
Believe me, you're lucky. You could
be struck with a professional peeping
tom like Conrad. England's highest
paid voyeur, aren't you darling?
CONRAD
Helen, I think we'd better --
HELEN
Oh yes, of course. We have to get
back so the little pervert can watch
what the neighbors do after Sunday
lunch. He's so exciting.
Derek laughs as they climb into their car.
HELEN
Ciao!
DEREK
Goodbye, Helen. Conrad.
(CONTINUED)
44 CONTINUED: (2) 44
Rosemary waves as it pulls off.
ROSEMARY
She's a bit hard on him, isn't she?
Derek sneers at her.
DEREK
Until you're half the woman of Helen's
sophistication, I'd keep your little
mouth shut.
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 7/10
This scene introduces new characters and a social dynamic that creates intrigue. The sharp contrast between Helen's biting wit and Conrad's timid nature generates curiosity about their relationship and its possible connection to the larger plot. The casual conversation about the terrorist attacks, coupled with Helen's provocative remarks, hints at underlying tensions and secrets. The scene ends on a somewhat unresolved note with Derek's condescending dismissal of Rosemary, leaving the reader wondering about the dynamics between the characters and their potential roles in the unfolding events. While it doesn't end with a dramatic cliffhanger, the conversational style and character interactions are engaging enough to prompt the reader to see what happens next.
Script Continuation Score: 8/10
The overall script maintains a strong continuation score due to the ongoing mystery surrounding V and the unresolved tensions between different characters. The previous scenes established V's actions and the oppressive regime, creating a compelling narrative arc. This scene effectively introduces new players – Helen, Conrad, Rosemary, and Derek – who represent different aspects of the political and social landscape. Their interactions, particularly Helen's sharp tongue and Derek's dismissive attitude, suggest they might play significant roles, furthering the mystery surrounding the terrorist attacks. The unresolved nature of V's motives and the ongoing investigation maintained by Finch provide continuous engagement. Although some plot threads from earlier scenes might be temporarily sidelined, the introduction of new characters and their connections to the main plot keeps the momentum going.
From above, a hand sweeps aside the red plush curtain.
LILLIMAN
Ah, there they go. My happy and
contented flock. Spiritually
refreshed and ready to face the world
again.
Bishop Anthony Lilliman is a slender man of pious elegance
with a warm, beautiful smile.
He turns from the window to his valet, Dennis, as Derek and
Rosemary get in their car.
LILLIMAN
Did you enjoy the sermon today,
Dennis?
DENNIS
Very inspiring, your grace. Though
the segue of the forces of Satan
among us did strike me as a bit of a
curious digression.
He whisks a lint brush over the Bishop's robes before putting
them away.
LILLIMAN
Hmm, yes. A trifle purple, I thought.
Still, Fate wanted it included and
who are we to question the will of
the almighty, miserable sinners that
we are?
A gentle smile spreads across his mouth.
(CONTINUED)
45 CONTINUED: 45
LILLIMAN
And speaking of sin, I wonder which
of the seven deadlies the good lord
will see fit to tempt me with today.
Dennis finishes with the Bishop's robes and sweeps the closet
door shut.
DENNIS
Perhaps pride, your grace.
Lilliman chuckles.
LILLIMAN
I was thinking of something a little
less ethereal. Has the young lady
arrived?
DENNIS
The agency informed me she'll be
here directly. However, there was a
mixup. It's not one of the usual
girls. She's a little older.
LILLIMAN
Oh dear. Oh dear. Not too old, I
trust?
DENNIS
They promise me she's no more than
fifteen.
LILLIMAN
Fifteen, hmm.
The Bishop rubs his cheek, ponderously.
LILLIMAN
Ah well, if Job could bear his
disappointments, I suppose I must
have the good grace to bear mine.
Show her in when she arrives.
DENNIS
Yes, your grace.
46 EXT. WESTMINSTER ABBEY - NIGHT 46
A pair of headlights melt through the heavy night's fog as a
taxicab pulls into the circle drive.
47 INT. BISHOP'S QUARTERS 47
Dennis peers into the Bishop's living quarters.
(CONTINUED)
47 CONTINUED: 47
DENNIS
The young lady, your grace.
LILLIMAN
Oh my!
Standing next to Dennis is Evey, wearing a frilly pink summer
dress, pigtails and bows and white ruffled socks.
LILLIMAN
And to think I doubted your loveliness
for even an instant. Mea culpa, my
child, mea culpa. You are a vision.
An angel.
Evey smiles awkwardly.
EVEY
Uh... thank you.
48 EXT. WESTMINSTER ABBEY - NIGHT 48
A shadow begins moving across the manicured grounds borne on
the thick mist like a dark phantom. V glides toward the
rectory, cloak undulating against the dark, wet wind.
49 INT. BISHOP'S BEDROOM 49
It is extravagantly furnished, somewhere between posh and
pimp. The Bishop is sitting very close to Evey on his plush
water bed.
LILLIMAN
Of course, "hate the sin, love the
sinner." I always say. Take your
dress off, please.
Evey stammers, backing up along the bedside.
EVEY
Listen -- I was kind of hoping --
He paws at her, groping hands pushing the front of her dress
down as she backs up against the nightstand.
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
This scene ends on a cliffhanger, leaving the reader with a strong sense of unease and anticipation. The initial setup with the Bishop's seemingly innocent conversation creates a deceptive calm before the abrupt shift to his predatory behavior towards Evey. The scene ends with Evey's clear distress and resistance against the Bishop's advances, leaving the reader wondering how she will escape this dangerous situation and what role V, seen approaching in the shadows, will play. The stark contrast between the Bishop's pious demeanor and his actions heightens the tension and compels the reader to move forward to see the immediate resolution of this conflict.
Script Continuation Score: 8/10
The overall script maintains a high level of engagement due to the ongoing mystery surrounding V's identity and actions. The introduction of new characters like the Bishop adds layers to the story and introduces new potential conflicts. The unresolved tension from previous scenes, especially those involving V's interventions and his targets, continues to drive the narrative forward. However, some earlier plot threads, such as Finch's investigation, are currently on the back burner, and their absence might begin to affect the overall engagement if not re-introduced soon. The current scene adds to the sense of mystery and danger, further increasing the reader's compulsion to discover what happens next.
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17 -
Confrontation in the Fog - Overall Grade:
9.2
The guards look out into the night, fear suddenly gripping
their faces.
(CONTINUED)
50 CONTINUED: 50
V emerges demonically through the parting veils of fog, the
white smiling mask bobbing eerily up and down as he rushes
them.
A cigarette drops from the first guard's mouth, red embers
exploding when it hits the wet cement.
Close as the two guards claw for their arms and the white
hot flash of V's knives --
That slice like talons.
The two men crumple to the ground, clutching their gaping,
gurgling wounds. A whisper. V sprints into the courtyard.
51 INT. BISHOP'S BEDROOM 51
Evey grabs a metal table lamp and swings it down on the
Bishop's head. There is a shuddering clank and he collapses
to the floor.
LILLIMAN
You -- You filthy whore!
His blood speckles the white bearskin throw rug as the Bishop
slowly rises after the retreating Evey.
LILLIMAN
I'll kill you, you fucking sow.
He charges after her but freezes dead in his tracks as V
swings around the corner in front of him.
LILLIMAN
What's this? Who --
V
Please allow me to introduce myself...
V bows.
V
I'm a man of wealth and taste.
LILLIMAN
Dennis?
Instantly, the point of one of V's knives is against the
Bishop's throat. V presses a finger to his frozen smile.
V
Shh. It isn't polite to disturb the
dead on their journey.
Evey watches from around the corner.
(CONTINUED)
51 CONTINUED: 51
V
A courtesy I'll most respectfully
extend to his grace.
EVEY
V?
Lilliman swallows audibly.
EVEY
V, what are you doing?
V
Vi veri veniversum vivus vici, Evey.
Evey looks down at the knives on his belt, dripping blood.
EVEY
Oh no.
She begins backing to the door.
EVEY
You can't kill him!
V
Death has followed his grace the
whole of his career. Is it any
coincidence it has finally followed
him here?
EVEY
Oh god, V. I can't -- I can't --
V turns back to Lilliman as Evey runs.
V
Let us pray.
52 EXT. WESTMINSTER ABBEY - NIGHT 52
Evey sprints past the dead guards at the man gate and into
the fog.
Genres:
Thriller, Action, Drama Tone:
Intense, Menacing, Tense, Violent
Ratings
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
This scene ends on a powerful cliffhanger. The shocking violence against the guards immediately grabs the reader's attention, creating a sense of urgency and danger. The subsequent attack on the Bishop, and V's chilling pronouncements, leave the reader desperate to know what happens next. V's cryptic Latin phrase ('Vi veri veniversum vivus vici') adds a layer of mystery and intrigue, further fueling the desire to continue reading. The escape of Evey leaves the reader with questions about her safety and her next steps. This quick succession of action and dramatic pronouncements leaves the reader hooked.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall script maintains a strong level of engagement. The introduction of V has been a major hook, and his actions continue to propel the narrative forward. The unresolved tension between V and the authorities, combined with the mystery surrounding V's identity and motivations, keeps the reader invested. While some earlier plot points (Evey's childhood trauma) might be fading into the background, the current action and the introduction of new characters and conflicts keeps the overall plot momentum strong. The Bishop's murder, the escape of Evey, and V's cryptic pronouncements guarantee the reader will want to see how the story resolves these new developments.
A cramped control room that looks like something between a
radio and television switching room, though it does not
broadcast. It receives.
Two operators sit at the main substation as the sounds of
lovemaking come over the speakers. The moans are stifled
and low, however, as if they were afraid someone was
listening.
(CONTINUED)
53 CONTINUED: 53
OPERATOR 1
Bloody hell. Doesn't anybody fuck
with feeling anymore?
Operator 2 does not look at him, scrolling through an
intricate city map on his computer.
OPERATOR 2
Hey, it's Sunday. Children's hour
over at the Abbey.
OPERATOR 1
Let's see what that filthy old pervert
is up to.
Operator 1 punches in some coordinates and the sound over
the speakers changes to a garbled fart of noise. Two voices
drown beneath a cacophony of classical music.
OPERATOR 1
What the --
He tries to dial out the background and suddenly the voices
rise clearly above the din.
VOICE 1
... And I saw a black shape against
the flames. Oh god. It's you. The
man from room five. You've come --
VOICE 2
To collect what's mine.
VOICE 1
I beg you! I don't want to die!
Please have mercy!
The two men look at each other, Operator 1 lunging for a red
phone.
OPERATOR 1
Get me the Finger. This is an
emergency!
54 EXT. BISHOP'S QUARTERS - NIGHT 54
Close on a stain of white vomit and blood on the thick pile
of a Persian rug. It is encircled in police chalk.
Pull back to reveal the chalk outline where the body of Bishop
Lilliman was found. The circled bloodstain floats above the
head like the last word balloon of a crude comic strip
character.
(CONTINUED)
54 CONTINUED: 54
The Bishop's quarters is slowly being picked over by a
forensic team from the Nose. A photographer's flash bursts
against a painted "V" on the wall near the body outline.
At the window, Finch chews on his pipe, staring at a plastic
evidence bag that contains a single violet carson rose.
DOMINIC
No prints yet, sir. Just like
Prothero.
FINCH
I want those tapes from the Ear in
my office tonight, Dominic.
DOMINIC
Yes, sir. They're on top of it.
Finch turns to a muscular man named Creedy, second in command
at the Finger.
FINCH
Any word from your superior, Mr.
Creedy?
CREEDY
Mr. Almond doesn't seem to be
answering his page, sir. I'm sure
he's in the field.
FINCH
Quite.
Genres:
Thriller, Crime, Mystery Tone:
Tense, Suspenseful, Dark
Ratings
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
The scene ends on a cliffhanger. The desperate plea for mercy, the chilling response "To collect what's mine," and the immediate call for emergency assistance from Operator 1 leave the reader with a strong sense of urgency and unanswered questions. The shift to the Bishop's quarters, showing the aftermath of the murder and the discovery of the violet carson rose, adds another layer of mystery and links the events in 'The Ear' directly to the ongoing investigation. The unresolved nature of the situation and the cryptic nature of the conversation strongly compels the reader to proceed to the next scene to discover the identities of the speakers and the significance of the violet carson.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall mystery surrounding V's actions and motives continues to drive the narrative forward. The introduction of the violet carson rose as a recurring motif adds another layer of intrigue. The unresolved murder of the Bishop, the mysterious conversation overheard in 'The Ear,' and the ongoing investigation by Detective Finch all contribute to a compelling narrative. The script effectively maintains tension and suspense, successfully hooking the reader into wanting to know more about V's identity, his targets, and the larger conspiracy at play. The fading storyline of the political uprising is effectively overshadowed by the more immediate and suspenseful mysteries of the Bishop's murder and V's ongoing actions.
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19 -
Whispers of Seduction and Surveillance - Overall Grade:
8.5
Grunting like an animal, Derek's face is frozen, locked in
the rigor of a violent orgasm. After a moment, he collapses
beside Helen onto the sweat soaked sheets.
HELEN
There you go, baby. Now my baby boy
can think so much clearer. Can't
he?
She grabs her cigarette case and her lighter.
HELEN
You have been thinking, haven't you?
She straddles his chest then lights two cigarettes.
HELEN
I know you have. Ever since this
terrorist appeared.
(CONTINUED)
55 CONTINUED: 55
He smiles as she puts one of the cigarettes in his mouth.
HELEN
Oh jesus, that smile. That smile
turns me on like nothing else.
She whispers in his ear.
HELEN
Tell me. Tell me what's going on in
that ruthless sadistic brain of yours.
DEREK
Everyone is so worried about the
terrorist. Especially Susan. You
know why? Because nobody knows what
he's going to do.
He exhales through his grinding teeth.
DEREK
If I were him, I know what I'd do.
He whispers.
DEREK
I'd blow that fat bastard to kingdom
come.
Helen bolts up.
HELEN
No. You're kidding.
DEREK
Am I?
He smiles, blowing more smoke.
DEREK
There's an old train line under the
New Government Building. It collapsed
when they poured the foundation.
You could haul in enough TNT to launch
our Leader's ass all the way to the
moon.
Helen's eyes gleam as he laughs.
HELEN
You're serious, aren't you?
He eyes her sucking on the cigarette.
(CONTINUED)
55 CONTINUED: (2) 55
DEREK
You need to be careful, Helen. Your
mouth is going to get you into trouble
one day.
HELEN
Is that the same trouble you love
putting in my mouth?
DEREK
You never know who might be listening.
HELEN
I know, Derek. You love your country
and you love your party, just like
you love your wife.
He glares at her.
HELEN
Derek. I'm sorry. I know I can be
a bitch. But that's why you're here,
isn't it?
He smiles again and she presses her body to his.
HELEN
This is it, isn't it, Derek? What
we've been waiting for. At last,
you'll be rid of Susan. I'll be rid
of Conrad. And we'll be free. Free,
won't we?
His eyes close as he grinds his hips into hers and we rise,
drifting up to the ceiling light fixture --
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
This scene ends on a powerful cliffhanger. Derek reveals a detailed plan to blow up the New Government Building, a shocking and highly consequential plot. The revelation of the hidden microphone immediately raises the stakes, implying that their conversation is being monitored, creating suspense and leaving the reader desperate to know what happens next. Will they be caught? Will the plan proceed? The intimate and conspiratorial tone of the scene, coupled with the sudden reveal of surveillance, creates a strong urge to continue reading to see the immediate consequences of this dangerous plot.
Script Continuation Score: 8/10
The overall script maintains a high level of engagement. The introduction of V and his acts of rebellion, coupled with the ongoing mystery of his identity, continues to drive the narrative. Several plot threads remain unresolved: the investigation into V's activities, the internal conflicts within the government, and the personal arcs of key characters like Evey and Finch. The scene adds another layer of complexity to the plot, directly connecting the conspiracy to a high-stakes act of terrorism. The pacing feels excellent; the revelations come at just the right moments to keep the reader engaged.
Finch sits at his desk, staring into the silence of his
notepad. He has doodled a little "V" with a circle around
it.
He looks up as Dominic enters, holding up a portable cassette
player.
DOMINIC
Sorry it took so long. The boys had
a devil of a time trying to filter
out the background noise.
FINCH
Background noise?
(CONTINUED)
56 CONTINUED: 56
DOMINIC
The perpetrator apparently turned on
the Bishop's stereo. Subsequently,
a great deal of the tape is useless.
He hands the player to Finch.
FINCH
What music did he play?
DOMINIC
Beethoven. The fifth, I believe.
Finch smiles.
FINCH
Da, da, da, dum. That's code. Morse
code.
DOMINIC
Sir?
FINCH
For the letter "V".
Finch punches "play".
Over the small speaker, we sear Evey protesting to V, then
run. He stops it.
FINCH
Anything on the girl yet?
DOMINIC
No. The agency said somebody claiming
to be Lilliman's valet canceled his
Sunday appointment.
Finch starts it again and this time the tape is very fuzzy.
FINCH
What is it?
DOMINIC
23rd Psalm.
We recognize some of the words though muted and crackly.
TAPE (V.O.)
Though I walk through the valley of
the shadow of death...
(CONTINUED)
56 CONTINUED: (2) 56
DOMINIC
It goes on like that for a while.
Fairly incoherent except we could
make out a few words in this part.
Transubstantiation.
Finch nods, understanding.
DOMINIC
That miracle business when the wafer
transform into the body of Christ.
FINCH
He made him eat a host.
DOMINIC
Yes, listen to this part.
The tape becomes somewhat clearer as the music rests.
TAPE (V.O.)
... And at the moment this enters
your mouth it becomes the flesh of
the savior? Yes... please... And
whatever it is made of now it will
become the body of Christ? Yes...
yes...
They eye each other.
TAPE (V.O.)
I want you to swallow it.
DOMINIC
There's a couple of funny human
noises...
FINCH
And then just Beethoven's fifth.
He shuts off the tape.
FINCH
We have got the initial path report
back. The host was full of cyanide.
Finch picks up the bag with the violet carson.
FINCH
And do you know what?
He rises, sliding into his jacket.
(CONTINUED)
56 CONTINUED: (3) 56
FINCH
When it reached his abdomen, it was
still cyanide.
Genres:
Thriller, Mystery, Drama Tone:
Tense, Intriguing, Foreboding
Ratings
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
This scene ends on a strong cliffhanger. The discovery that the host given to Bishop Lilliman contained cyanide, and that it remained potent even after ingestion, is a shocking revelation that immediately raises questions. Who poisoned the host? How did they know Lilliman would ingest it? Was this a planned assassination, and if so, who orchestrated it? The scene's focus on deciphering the Morse code in Beethoven's Fifth Symphony adds intrigue and cleverly links the previous scenes involving V to this murder. The final line, highlighting the cyanide's potency even in the abdomen, leaves the reader with a sense of unsettling dread and a strong desire to know more about V's methods and motivations. The mystery surrounding the cyanide is also cleverly linked to the previous scene's unsettling encounter between Evey and the Bishop.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall mystery surrounding V's actions continues to build momentum. The script effectively weaves together seemingly disparate events—the attack on the Bishop, the cryptic messages, and the forensic analysis—to create a compelling narrative. The use of clues, like the Morse code and the cyanide-laced host, keeps the reader engaged and encourages them to piece together the puzzle. The unresolved question of V's identity and his overall goals is still a major hook. While some earlier threads might be fading slightly (e.g., what will happen with Evey's imprisonment?), the newer, more immediate mystery of the Bishop's murder, and the role of the cyanide, are very compelling.
Close on the heavy stitching of a "Y" incision sewn into the
chest of a corpse. It is one of the Bishop's guards.
DELIA
Do you have a motive?
Finch is standing next to the cadaver gurney with the coroner,
Delia Surridge. She is a serious woman, hair wound tight
behind her head in a severe bun.
DELIA
I mean, was anything taken?
She fills the dead man's head with cotton and replaces the
top of his skull.
FINCH
Just lives.
Pulling at the man's scalp, she stretches it over the replaced
skull piece.
FINCH
I know it's too early for your profile
but do you have any initial
impressions?
DELIA
Well...
She points at a jagged puncture wound at the base of the
man's sternum with a ball point pen.
DELIA
He's incredibly powerful. This man's
sternum was split like dry wood from
the base all the way up to the
manubrium.
Finch peers into the hole.
DELIA
And he's resourceful. On that table
behind you is a breakdown of all the
chemicals found in Prothero's blood
stream.
Finch hefts the pile of computer paper.
(CONTINUED)
57 CONTINUED: 57
FINCH
Bloody hell.
DELIA
There were hundreds of different
chemicals in him. From
trinitrotoluene to estrogen to motor
oil.
He flips through the document, biting into the wooden end of
his pipe.
FINCH
Perhaps Fate will make something
more of all this. I certainly can't.
DELIA
The Leader finally authorized an
uplink for you? He must be getting
nervous.
FINCH
Quite. Government directed terrorism
never sews healthy ideas into the
public. Oh, that reminds me.
Finch pulls the evidence bag from his pocket.
FINCH
Can you tell us anything about this?
Delia's eyes lock onto the violet carson.
FINCH
We found one in the carriage with
Prothero and this one in the Bishop's
quarters. A violet carson.
He hands it to her.
FINCH
I heard that strain had died off.
Thought a botanist might shed some
light on it. Delia?
Delia, riveted to the rose, suddenly looks up to him.
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 8/10
This scene ends with a strong hook. The discovery of the violet carson, a seemingly insignificant detail, is presented as potentially significant, leaving the reader wanting to know its meaning and connection to the broader plot. The coroner's description of the victim's strength and resourcefulness also hints at the capabilities of V, adding to the mystery. The mention of government-directed terrorism and the Leader's nervousness creates suspense, making the reader eager to learn more about the overarching conspiracy.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall script maintains a high level of engagement due to the ongoing mysteries surrounding V's identity, motives, and methods. The introduction of the violet carson adds a new layer of intrigue, connecting seemingly disparate events (the Bishop's murder and Prothero's death). The unresolved questions regarding government involvement in terrorism and the Leader's growing unease create a compelling narrative arc. The pacing is effective, with enough information revealed to keep the reader invested but not so much as to diminish the suspense.
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22 -
Contrasts of Darkness and Light - Overall Grade:
8.5
V relaxes with a book in an overstuffed reading chair, a
violet carson rose resting on a table next to him. He begins
to read a passage aloud.
V
"There is more behind and inside of
V than any of us had suspected. Not
who, but what: what is she?"
He places the book down. Thomas Pynchon's "V".
V rises, lifting the rose and moving into the darkness of
the Shadow Gallery.
59 EXT. EMPTY STREET 59
A small figure moves down the dark wet street, the
cobblestones glistening like black scales.
The huddled figure arcs across the street in the shadows,
avoiding the pools of streetlight. It is Evey, a frightened
look on her face.
60 INT. KITTY KAT KELLER 60
A woman in combat boots, fishnets, and a tight fitting
soldier's uniform is in the middle of a cheeky number on
stage in this smoky burlesque bar. It is a popular place
with locals and Fingermen.
Peter Creedy squeezes through the crowd, angling for the
back of the bar where a number of loud Fingermen are drinking.
CREEDY
What's all this, then, Harper? I
get a radio that a man's down and in
need of assistance?
HARPER
I ain't gone down yet but I sure do
need some assistance.
Creedy leans in.
CREEDY
Are you flat broke already?
They break up in laughter, led by Creedy who sits next to
Harper, pouring himself a drink.
LOUT
How'd you sneak away, Creedy? Almond
off buggering that blonde chippy?
(CONTINUED)
60 CONTINUED: 60
HARPER
The one with the tits?
They all begin to hoot and whistle.
CREEDY
What I wouldn't give for a piece of
that.
LOUT
She could serve a tray of drinks on
those thingies.
HARPER
I bet you get your chance with her
sooner than later, Creedy, with the
way Almond's crackin' up.
LOUT
Bloody bugger's losing his marbles.
HARPER
Terrorist or no, if that bastard
gives me another double shift, I'll
stomp his fucking head.
Creedy raises his drink.
CREEDY
Aye. This nonsense has put a serious
strain on my drinking. I think I
was actually sober today.
LOUT
I'll drink to that.
HARPER
We need to get a real man of the
people in that director's position.
Like Creedy here.
Everyone cheers in agreement.
CREEDY
Well, it's good to know when the
shit hits the fan who your real
friends are.
They salute and drink.
Genres:
Thriller, Drama Tone:
Tense, Dark, Seductive, Humorous
Ratings
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 7/10
This scene offers a compelling contrast to the previous, more serious scenes. The playful banter and camaraderie among the Fingermen create a sense of dark humor and intrigue. While the scene feels somewhat self-contained, the mention of Almond 'cracking up' and the general chaos hints at ongoing tensions and unresolved conflicts. This leaves the reader wanting to know more about Almond's mental state and how it relates to the larger plot. The casual conversation also foreshadows potential future conflict and reinforces the sense of a crumbling society.
Script Continuation Score: 8/10
The screenplay maintains a strong overall momentum. The introduction of several key characters and storylines keeps the reader engaged. While some plot threads might be fading (e.g., the initial mystery surrounding V's identity is becoming clearer), new mysteries and tensions are introduced effectively, keeping the reader hooked. The contrast between serious plot points and lighter scenes, like the one with the Fingermen, prevents the story from becoming too heavy. The unresolved issues surrounding Almond, the continuing investigation into V, and the ominous undertones of the oppressive regime provide sufficient hooks to drive the narrative forward.
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 8/10
Scene 23 ends on a cliffhanger with Derek physically assaulting Rosemary, leaving her in tears and him angrily dismissing her. This act of violence creates immediate tension and leaves the reader wanting to know what happens next. Will Rosemary leave? Will Derek regret his actions? The abrupt end and unresolved conflict strongly propel the reader forward.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall narrative remains highly engaging. The mystery surrounding V's identity and motives continues to drive the plot forward. The interconnectedness of the characters and the growing body count linked to Larkhill creates a sense of suspense and urgency. While some plot threads from earlier scenes might seem less prominent, the escalating violence and the revelation of conspiracies involving high-ranking officials maintain reader investment.
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24 -
Confrontation of Shadows - Overall Grade:
8.7
V floats on the edge of the room's shadows, a dark angel.
V
Are you afraid?
DELIA
No, no. I thought I would be, but
I'm not. I'm --
(CONTINUED)
66 CONTINUED: 66
She looks at the hovering, smiling mask.
DELIA
Relieved.
She starts to cry again.
DELIA
Oh god, all these years. All this
waiting. And somehow I always knew
you'd come back.
Delia thinks back.
DELIA
When I saw you that night -- the
night you escaped, you were standing
against the flames and you looked
straight at me.
The mask almost nods.
DELIA
I knew then that one day you'd come
looking for me, that you'd find me.
Her voice drops to an almost confessional whisper.
DELIA
What -- what happened at Larkhill.
What we did -- What I did. That
terrible knowledge, it's been with
me so long. That I could do things
like that.
Delia rubs the salty tears from her eyes.
DELIA
For years, I blamed it on the
government, on the authority I could
never stand up to. But living so
long with the knowledge of what I
did has made me understand otherwise.
I alone was accountable.
V watches her.
DELIA
There is something wrong with us.
With all of mankind. With me.
Something evil that made me enjoy
what I did. Some hideous flaw.
Her voice almost trails off.
(CONTINUED)
66 CONTINUED: (2) 66
DELIA
We deserve to be culled. We deserve
it.
67 INT. ALMOND BEDROOM 67
Light sweeps across Rosemary from the opening bedroom door
as she sobs softly in bed. Derek enters, holding a bottle
of whiskey and his clean gun.
She sits up as Derek looms over her.
ROSEMARY
Derek? What?
He lifts the gun into her bruised face. Her eyebrows cringe
as he slowly pulls the trigger.
DEREK
Bang.
Click. It is empty.
DEREK
Don't worry, Rose. I didn't load
it.
The phone rings.
DEREK
Not tonight.
He grins evilly at her and answers the bedside phone.
DEREK
Almond. What?! Where?
Derek's drunk eyes light up.
DEREK
Oh god, yes! God, thank you!
He slams the phone down, charging out of the room.
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
This scene ends on a powerful cliffhanger. Delia's confession and acceptance of her guilt, coupled with V's mysterious presence and the immediate shift to Derek pointing a gun at Rosemary, creates intense suspense. The unanswered question of whether Rosemary will survive and the unresolved tension surrounding V and Delia's interaction leave the reader desperate to know what happens next. The juxtaposition of Delia's emotional vulnerability with Derek's violent threat provides a compelling contrast, increasing the urgency to continue reading.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall screenplay maintains a high level of suspense and intrigue. The mysteries surrounding V's identity and motivations, the government's dark secrets, and the various characters' interconnected fates keep the reader deeply engaged. This scene adds another layer of complexity, introducing a potential connection between V and Delia, while the simultaneous threat to Rosemary adds immediate urgency. While some plotlines, like the overall government conspiracy, are developing slowly, the constant introduction of new, immediate threats keeps the momentum strong. The pacing is effective in creating a sense of dread and anticipation.
A gaggle of drunks exit the bar, laughing and singing as
they pass a small figure.
69 INT. KITTY KAT KELLER 69
Evey wanders into the bar amidst the lustful screams and cat
calls for the line of high stepping, semi-clothed girls on
stage.
(CONTINUED)
69 CONTINUED: 69
She stares out into the crowd, not sure why she is here when
a man approaches her: Creedy. His sloppy smile indicates he
has had a few drinks.
CREEDY
You look lost.
She looks blankly at him.
CREEDY
Can I buy you a drink?
EVEY
No... I made a mistake.
She turns for the door.
EVEY
I have to find someone.
Creedy frowns as his radio crackles.
CREEDY
Well I didn't like the looks of you
anyway --
RADIO (V.O.)
All units, all units. Code red.
Converge in Plaistow to apprehend
codename V.
CREEDY
Bloody hell!
He screams to the Fingermen at the back.
CREEDY
It's him! We got him!
Evey watches as they storm out of the bar, then follows.
70 EXT. CITY STREET 70
The emergency lights blaring, Finch's car squeals around a
corner.
71 INT. DELIA SURRIDGE'S BEDROOM 71
V hovers ghostly at Delia's bedside.
DELIA
It's funny, I was given one of your
roses today. I wasn't sure you were
the terrorist until I saw it.
(CONTINUED)
71 CONTINUED: 71
She manages a smile.
DELIA
What a strange coincidence. That I
should be given it today.
V
There are no coincidences, Delia.
Only the illusion of coincidence.
He reaches into his cloak.
V
I have another rose. This one is
for you.
He hands it to her.
DELIA
Then you are going to kill me now?
V produces an empty syringe.
V
I killed you ten minutes ago. While
you slept.
DELIA
Is there any pain?
V sits on the bed.
V
No. No pain.
DELIA
Thank you.
She stares at the mask.
DELIA
Can I -- Can I see your face again?
V slowly pulls off his hat and lifts his mask. Delia stares
into his face.
DELIA
It's beautiful...
The rose falls from her hands.
Genres:
Thriller, Drama Tone:
Tense, Menacing, Emotional
Ratings
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
This scene ends on a powerful and unexpected cliffhanger. The revelation that V killed Delia while she slept is shocking and immediately raises questions about V's methods and motivations. The scene also ends with Delia seeing V's face and finding it beautiful, leaving the reader wanting to know more about V's identity and his connection to Delia. The abrupt ending, coupled with the lingering mystery surrounding V's actions, strongly compels the reader to proceed to the next scene to discover the consequences of V's actions and the broader implications of his visit.
Script Continuation Score: 8/10
The overall screenplay maintains a high level of engagement through a combination of suspense, intriguing characters, and unresolved plot lines. The introduction of V as a mysterious and seemingly omnipotent figure keeps the reader hooked, while the ongoing investigations into his actions and the various conflicts among the supporting characters provide ample forward momentum. The various storylines, like Finch's investigation and the parallel plotlines involving the government officials, are interwoven well, although some might find the sheer volume of characters and plots a little overwhelming at times. The unresolved mysteries surrounding V's identity and ultimate goals, along with the cliffhanger ending of this scene, solidify the reader's desire to continue the script.
V quietly shuts the door as if not to wake her and turns
just as --
(CONTINUED)
72 CONTINUED: 72
Derek Almond reaches the top of the stairs.
DEREK
Don't move an inch, you bloody
bastard.
He trains his gun.
DEREK
You didn't hear me arrive, did you?
Didn't know we'd rumbled you?
He squints.
DEREK
It's all finished, chummy. All of
it. The old man told me it was my
head or yours and what do you know.
It's yours.
The smiling mask stares.
DEREK
Because you're standing over there
with your bloody stupid knives and
your fancy karate gimmicks --
Derek pulls back the hammer.
DEREK
And I've got a gun.
He smiles.
DEREK
Bang.
Click. He never loaded it.
There is an awkward moment of silence, then V moves --
Cloak opening, filling the hall like a black tidal wave that
envelopes Derek. He chokes a scream as V embraces him,
slipping a knife above his floating rib.
Derek Almond sputters as he claws at V's mask.
DEREK
Who -- Who are you?
V
Yes, look. Look and tell me what
you see.
He rips V's mask off as V thrusts the knife in deeper.
(CONTINUED)
72 CONTINUED: (2) 72
Derek's eyes widen in horror as his life pours out the knife
wound.
DEREK
Horrible! God, it's horrible!
V jerks his blade free, letting Derek slip to the ground.
73 EXT. DELIA SURRIDGE'S HOME 73
Finch's car bucks up onto the sidewalk.
Finch and Dominic tear out of the car and barrel into the
house.
74 INT. DELIA SURRIDGE'S HOME 74
At the top of the stairs, they find the dead Derek. Finch
rushes past him for the bedroom.
FINCH
Delia?
Inside, he finds her. Her eyes fixed, cold, and dead, a
single violet carson in her lap.
FINCH
Get an ambulance.
75 EXT. DELIA SURRIDGE'S HOME 75
Evey rushes around a corner to see a crime scene bathed in
siren light. She pushes up to the police barricade as the
M.E.'s load a draped body into their van.
EVEY
Oh no... V?
She tries to angle around to get a better look when a man in
a brown overcoat grabs her from behind and drags her into
the alley.
76 INT. DELIA SURRIDGE'S BEDROOM 76
From the corner of the room, Finch sits, watching as the
M.E.'s wheel out Delia's body.
Dominic squeezes past the gurney and crosses toward Finch.
DOMINIC
I'm sorry, sir. You knew the doctor
pretty well?
Finch nods.
(CONTINUED)
76 CONTINUED: 76
DOMINIC
We found this on her bureau, sir.
It's Dr. Surridge's journal. It
covers her years at Larkhill. It
might contain the whole story.
Dominic searches for something more to say when Finch does
not answer.
After a moment, Finch looks at the book in Dominic's hand,
then takes it, leafing through the pages. They flip by, a
breathy sigh, rising to a cold wind.
DELIA (V.O.)
May 23rd...
Genres:
Thriller, Drama Tone:
Tense, Dark, Suspenseful
Ratings
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
This scene ends on a powerful cliffhanger. The unexpected murder of Derek Almond, followed immediately by the discovery of Delia Surridge's death, leaves the reader with a shocking revelation and several unanswered questions. The scene's fast pace and violent action create a sense of urgency, pushing the reader to immediately want to know what happens next. The discovery of Delia's journal further fuels this desire, hinting at potential answers to the mysteries surrounding V and Larkhill. The final image of Evey being dragged away adds another layer of suspense.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall narrative continues to be highly compelling. The mystery surrounding V's identity and motivations remains central, and this scene adds significant weight to it by linking V to the deaths of key characters. The unresolved plotlines involving Larkhill, the government's conspiracy, and Evey's capture create a strong sense of anticipation. The introduction of Delia Surridge's journal promises further revelations, ensuring that the reader remains invested in the unfolding events. The pace remains brisk, ensuring the story does not lose momentum.
77 INT. LARKHILL MEDICAL RESEARCH BLOCK - DAY - FLASHBACK 77
A younger Dr. Surridge, one by one, administers a series of
injections to her research stock.
DELIA (V.O.)
Prothero has hand picked my subjects.
Four dozen of them, none of which
will be any use to me if I don't get
to work soon.
She finishes an injection, Prothero encouraging the next
subject. We recognize her as the woman Prothero pointed at.
DELIA (V.O.)
They're so weak and pathetic I find
myself hating them.
Delia prepares the next dose, a sour look on her face.
DELIA (V.O.)
They don't fight or struggle. Just
stare at you with weak eyes.
PROTHERO
Next.
78 INT. LARKHILL OVENS - DAY - FLASHBACK 78
Two inmate orderlies are hefting sacked cadavers from a cart
into an incinerator.
DELIA (V.O.)
June 9th: Of the original four dozen,
over 75% are now deceased. Strangely,
no clear patterns have emerged as of
yet.
Another body thuds onto the pile.
(CONTINUED)
78 CONTINUED: 78
DELIA (V.O.)
Batch 5 seems to have no common
discernible effect on any specific
group though the men seem slightly
more resilient than the women.
When it is full, they move to the next door until the cart
is empty.
DELIA (V.O.)
I'm hoping the survivors will provide
more answers or my time here will
have gone to waste.
Red heat suddenly glows from the oven vents as the orderly
throws a series of switches.
79 INT. LARKHILL MEDICAL RESEARCH BLOCK - DAY - FLASHBACK 79
Dr. Surridge moves down the drab aseptic hallway accompanied
by an armed guard. Roman numerals on the doors to each cell
ascend to five.
DELIA (V.O.)
June 18: And only five left now.
Two men and three women. Which tends
to contradict my entry on the 9th.
She pauses at room five.
DELIA (V.O.)
The man in room five is a fascinating
case.
She looks through the small chicken wire glass window in the
door.
DELIA (V.O.)
Physically, there doesn't seem to be
anything wrong with him. No cellular
anomalies, nothing.
In the back, just on the edge of the room's shadow, sits the
man in room five, silently staring back.
DELIA (V.O.)
Batch five, however, seems to have
brought on some kind of psychotic
breakdown. He's quite insane.
Dr. Surridge can't seem to break her stare.
(CONTINUED)
79 CONTINUED: 79
DELIA (V.O.)
He has this way of looking through
you. Reverend Lilliman won't go
near him. He claims that it is the
devil in room five. I see him cross
himself whenever he passes his door.
Still, there's something about him...
80 EXT. LARKHILL GARDEN - DAY - FLASHBACK 80
Dr. Surridge slowly moves through the Larkhill garden, an
incredible abundance of fruits, vegetables and violet carson
roses.
DELIA (V.O.)
I'm glad Prothero let room five have
a go at the gardening project. He
is quite proficient. Prothero was
reluctant to allow an inmate access
to the tool and chemical supply at
first but now the fat toad is
delighted. The crop has almost
doubled.
She traces the petals of a rose with her finger.
DELIA (V.O.)
He also grows roses. Beautiful roses.
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 8/10
This flashback sequence ends on a compelling cliffhanger. The description of the man in Room Five, his unsettling gaze, and the Reverend's fear create a strong sense of mystery and intrigue. The juxtaposition of his seemingly normal physical state with his psychotic breakdown and gardening proficiency hints at a deeper, more complex story. The visual imagery of the man silently staring back at Dr. Surridge leaves the reader wanting to know more about his identity and his connection to the larger narrative. The detailed descriptions of the experiments and the disturbing implications of the high mortality rate also leave the reader wanting to understand the context and the eventual consequences.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall script maintains a strong level of intrigue. The introduction of V and his mysterious actions, the oppressive regime, and the various characters' interwoven stories have created a compelling narrative. The flashback to Larkhill adds another layer of complexity, connecting to the present-day events and hinting at the origins of V's motivations. The unresolved questions surrounding Room Five, the experiments at Larkhill, and the identity of V himself maintain a high level of suspense, encouraging the reader to continue exploring the story's mysteries. The pacing is well-managed, with flashbacks integrated effectively without disrupting the flow of the present-day narrative.
Dr. Surridge and several other Larkhill appointees relax
after dinner.
DELIA (V.O.)
December 24th: I was in the mess.
It was about half past ten when we
heard the first explosion.
A massive explosion shakes the building to its very core,
its windows shattering and hooded pendulum lights swinging.
82 EXT. LARKHILL LOUNGE - NIGHT - FLASHBACK 82
Men and women clutch at their throats as they tumble out
into the yard.
DELIA (V.O.)
The ones at the front ran straight
into the gas. It was horrible.
They drop to the ground, gasping and vomiting.
The back door is kicked open, Dr. Surridge following two
guards.
(CONTINUED)
82 CONTINUED: 82
DELIA (V.O.)
A few of us made it out through the
rear door. You could hear men
screaming everywhere. I hate the
sound of men screaming.
She looks out, men running, collapsing, dying in a yellow
green haze that seems everywhere.
DELIA (V.O.)
In the center of the camp, everything
was on fire. Everyone running in
all directions. We had hardly enough
time to get our bearings when the
ovens exploded.
Another explosion wracks the compound. The pillar of flame
rises into the black sky, dwarfing the men in the camp.
Dr. Surridge sees a gaping hole in the medical block, its
insides turned out like an unholy birth.
DELIA (V.O.)
It was the man in room rive. I
couldn't have known. The chemical
supplies, grease solvents, ammonia,
fertilizer. He'd been making things
with them.
Close on a soldier, doubled over, hacking up bile.
DELIA (V.O.)
Mustard gas...
A sticky blue fire licks up from a blackened body like a
dura flame.
DELIA
And napalm.
Dr. Surridge turns as a silhouette crosses the yard, backlit
by a curtain of fire.
DELIA (V.O.)
And in the yard, I saw him. He had
the flames behind him. He was naked.
The man stops.
DELIA (V.O.)
He looked at me...
Dr. Surridge seems to wilt under his stare but cannot look
away.
(CONTINUED)
82 CONTINUED: (2) 82
DELIA (V.O.)
As if I were an insect. Oh god. As
if I were something mounted on a
slide.
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
This flashback scene ends on a powerful visual cliffhanger. The revelation of the man from Room Five as the perpetrator of the Larkhill explosion, coupled with the chilling description of his gaze and the lingering image of his silhouette against the flames, creates intense suspense and a strong desire to learn more about his identity and motivations. The scene is well-written and effectively uses visual imagery and sound to build tension, leaving the reader wanting to know what happens next and how this event connects to the present-day narrative. The dramatic imagery and unresolved questions propel the reader forward.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall screenplay maintains a high level of intrigue. The mystery surrounding V's identity and his actions continues to be a major hook, and this scene provides crucial backstory that deepens that mystery. The lingering questions about the man in Room Five—his connection to V, his motivations, and his ultimate fate—are all compelling elements that keep the reader engaged. The script effectively uses flashbacks to reveal important plot points and character development without disrupting the flow of the present-day narrative. The interwoven threads of vengeance, political intrigue, and personal trauma continue to drive the story forward.
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29 -
Frustration in the Leader's Office - Overall Grade:
8.7
He sits in front of the Leader's desk puffing on his pipe
while Susan stares coldly.
FINCH
That's the last entry until six months
later when Dr. Surridge is back in
London. There is no mention of the
man in room five again. End of story.
He tosses the journal on Susan's desk.
FINCH
Except that it wasn't the end of the
story.
Finch rises, crossing to the wastebasket.
FINCH
Between 2009 and 2012, over forty
men and women who were previously
stationed at Larkhill met with what
were believed to be accidental deaths.
Eventually, only three remained.
He taps his pipe into his hand, pouring the contents into
the wastebasket.
FINCH
The three he'd been saving until
last.
Finch brushes the ashes from his hands and begins repacking
his pipe.
FINCH
Everyone who worked at Larkhill.
Everyone who could have identified
him. You see there are two possible
motives here. Not one.
Susan raises his head.
(CONTINUED)
83 CONTINUED: 83
FINCH
The first is revenge. He escapes
from Larkhill and vows to get even
with his tormentors. The whole
exercise an elaborate, chilling
vendetta.
When he finishes repacking the pipe, he replaces it in his
mouth.
FINCH
That's the explanation that I find
most reassuring, funnily enough.
Because that means he's finished.
It's over now.
Finch begins relighting his pipe.
FINCH
The second motive is more sinister.
Like I said, everyone who could have
identified him is dead.
A flame leaps into the air.
FINCH
What if he's just been clearing the
ground?
Another burst.
FINCH
What if he's planning something else?
The lighter slips back into his pocket.
FINCH
You see, the diary we found was in
full view. We didn't have to search
for it. He left it there. He wanted
us to find it. He wanted us to know
the story. Or...
Finch returns to his chair, letting out a huge cloud.
FINCH
For all we know, the diary could be
a complete and utter fake. Codename
V could have written it himself.
Finch leans forward.
(CONTINUED)
83 CONTINUED: (2) 83
FINCH
He's playing games with us. He might
never have been at Larkhill at all.
Do you see? It could all be another
smoke screen, a false trail, another
cover story --
LEADER
Enough!
Susan punches the desk.
LEADER
Mr. Finch, would you please explain
to me the nature of this meeting?!
Because I was under the impression
that you had some information about
the terrorist, codename V!
And punches it again until his fist hurts.
LEADER
No more questions, understand! I
want answers! I am not interested
in where he grew up, what kind of
flowers he likes or his favorite
color!
Susan's collar chokes his face to an unnatural crimson.
LEADER
Do I make myself clear?
FINCH
Yes, Leader.
After a moment, Finch stands, Susan hanging on his last word.
LEADER
Dismissed. England prevails, Mr.
Finch.
Finch turns, Susan calling after him as he leaves.
LEADER
Mr. Finch, the girl. Do you have
anything on the girl?
Finch pauses at the door.
FINCH
No, Leader. Not yet.
Genres:
Thriller, Mystery, Drama Tone:
Suspenseful, Intense, Foreboding, Intriguing
Ratings
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
This scene ends on a powerful cliffhanger. Finch reveals two competing theories about V's motives, leaving the reader wondering which is true (or if neither is). The revelation that the diary might be a fake, intentionally left for them to find, is a masterstroke of suspense. The Leader's frustrated demand for answers about V and, critically, the "girl" (Evey) leaves a huge question mark hanging in the air, pulling the reader forward to discover her connection to V and the unfolding plot. The scene perfectly balances exposition with intrigue, leaving the reader eager to know more.
Script Continuation Score: 10/10
The overall script remains incredibly compelling. The mystery surrounding V has been expertly layered throughout the story, and this scene adds another significant layer of complexity. The introduction of the two competing theories about V's motives keeps the mystery fresh and intriguing, preventing it from becoming stale. The unresolved question of Evey's connection to V and the Leader's desperate search for her are strong hooks that keep the narrative momentum high. The pacing is excellent, and the story so far has successfully built a high level of suspense and intrigue.
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30 -
Interrogation of Innocence - Overall Grade:
8.5
Evey stirs as voices drift in from the hall outside her door.
MAN
Wake up, cow.
Three guards are silhouetted in the doorway of a cramped
jail cell. Still sluggish from the chloroform, Evey looks
down at the coarse slipover she's now wearing.
One of the men, Rossiter, crosses toward Evey, swinging a
pair of shackles. He grabs Evey, slamming her face down
into the hard cot, driving a knee between her shoulder blades.
Evey screams.
GUARD 1
Tsk. This pathetic whore is the
famous Miss Hammond?
The shackles bite down on her wrists as they laugh in the
hall.
EVEY
You've made a mistake.
Rossiter stands her up, shoving her into the wall.
ROSSITER
Shut up.
EVEY
Please. I haven't done anything --
He slides a thick hood over her head.
ROSSITER
I said shut your hole!
85 INT. INTERROGATION ROOM 85
The hood is lifted from her head. Evey squints hard, awash
in a blinding, burning light.
A man sits, unmoving, at a desk across from her, a guard at
his side, both backlit by a harsh white kliegs.
Evey's eyes start to water as she blinks.
INTERROGATOR
Do you know why you're here. Evey
Hammond?
(CONTINUED)
85 CONTINUED: 85
EVEY
No, please, I didn't do anything.
INTERROGATOR
Allow me to be more precise. Did
you participate in the murder of Dr.
Delia Surridge?
EVEY
No.
INTERROGATOR
Did you participate in the murder of
Derek Almond, director of the Finger?
EVEY
No, I --
INTERROGATOR
Did you participate in the murder of
Bishop Anthony Lilliman?
EVEY
Oh god, I don't --
INTERROGATOR
Have you ever participated in a
terrorist act against your country?
EVEY
No --
INTERROGATOR
What is the identity of codename V?
EVEY
I don't know.
INTERROGATOR
You are a lying cunt.
A monitor next to the desk lights up. From the snowy static,
an image begins to form.
A girl is talking to a man. She is shoving her hips at him,
propositioning him. When more men appear from the alley,
Evey realizes she is watching herself.
EVEY
They were going to rape me, kill me --
Rossiter grabs a handful of her hair.
ROSSITER
Shut up.
(CONTINUED)
85 CONTINUED: (2) 85
She swallows hard when she sees V emerge on the screen. The
image freezes on his smiling face.
INTERROGATOR
This board will not tolerate any
more of your lies, Miss Hammond. We
have over 120 minutes of audio and
videotape and 75 pages of testimonials
from eye witness that identify you
as an accomplice to the terrorist,
codename V.
The monitor blinks off.
INTERROGATOR
Do you want to know why you're here?
You are formally being brought up on
charges of murder on fourteen counts
and sedition against your Leader and
country which brings an automatic
sentence of death.
EVEY
Please. I didn't do anything.
INTERROGATOR
Process the prisoner and return her
to her cell until she is more
cooperative.
Rossiter slips the hood back over Evey's head.
Genres:
Thriller, Drama Tone:
Intense, Suspenseful, Dark
Ratings
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
This scene ends on a powerful cliffhanger. Evey is accused of multiple murders and sedition, and video evidence is shown that seems to incriminate her, despite her claims of innocence. The accusations are serious (death sentence!), and the reader is left wondering if Evey is truly guilty or a victim of circumstance. The unresolved nature of her situation and the revelation of the video evidence create a strong desire to see what happens next. Will she confess? Will she be executed? The pacing is excellent and builds intense suspense, leaving the reader hooked.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall script maintains a high level of engagement due to the escalating conflict and the mystery surrounding V. The introduction of Evey as a potential accomplice adds a new layer of intrigue. While some earlier plot lines (e.g., Finch's investigation) might seem to be fading into the background, the immediate stakes for Evey and the overarching mystery of V's identity revitalize the narrative and propel the reader forward. The revelation of the video evidence directly connects to earlier scenes, strengthening the overall narrative arc and increasing the reader's investment in the characters and plot. The unresolved question of Evey's guilt and her connection to V is a central driving force, ensuring the story remains compelling.
Evey cries as a rough hand runs a pair of electric clippers
over her head. Huge sheaves of her hair fall to the ground.
DISSOLVE TO:
87 INT. CELL 87
Evey lies crumpled on the hard floor, unmoving, as a tray of
food is slid through a slot at the bottom of the door.
She watches as a rat crosses from a hole in the wall, sniffing
the murky rendered gelatin in the wooden bowl.
DISSOLVE TO:
88 INT. PROCESSING ROOM 88
Evey hangs limply from a set of manacles as she is washed
and deloused by heavy hands.
(CONTINUED)
88 CONTINUED: 88
She coughs in the yellow bug powder cloud as it burns her
eyes and the red welts on her back.
DISSOLVE TO:
89 INT. CELL 89
Evey is curled up on the cot like a dry fetus, now gaunt
arms wrapped around her legs. She blinks when she hears
something moving in the rat hole.
Evey raises her head as something is pushed through the
crevice.
Tentative fingers search the hole, pulling out a length of
toilet paper. Over every inch of it is a delicately scrawled
message.
We move into the rathole, its edges slowly filling the frame
until black.
90 EXT. INTERROGATION ROOM 90
Pull back from a shadow, the outline of the interrogator's
silhouette against sharp light coming into frame.
EVEY (V.O.)
I read her letter. Hid it. Slept.
Woke. They questioned me. And I
read her letter again.
Rossiter is buckling Evey's thin arms and legs into a chair.
Her now frail frame can barely hold up the frayed brown
slipover.
EVEY (V.O.)
Over and over...
On the table in front of her, there is a large wash basin of
water. Rossiter dunks her head into it.
EVEY (V.O.)
Her name was Valerie.
91 INT. CLASSROOM - DAY - FLASHBACK 91
A teacher reads from her lesson plan in front of rows and
rows of uniformed pubescences in this all girl private school.
Her voice drones on and on like Muzak.
VALERIE (V.O.)
I was born in a rainy burg in
Nottingham in 1975. I passed my
eleven plus and went to girl's
grammar.
(CONTINUED)
91 CONTINUED: 91
A blonde tomboy sneaks a smile to her curly haired friend
next to her.
VALERIE (V.O.)
I met my first girlfriend at school.
Her name was Sara. Her wrists. Her
wrists were beautiful.
Her hand slides across the desk, fingers tickling the young
flesh of Sara's wrist.
The teacher's voice slows, dropping octaves, becoming --
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“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
This scene sequence, spanning several dissolves, masterfully builds suspense and compels the reader forward. The brutal depiction of Evey's dehumanization—the shaving, the delousing, the confinement—creates a visceral sense of unease and fuels a desire to know what happens next. The introduction of Valerie's voiceover, interwoven with Evey's present-day suffering, hints at a backstory that promises further intrigue and emotional depth. The cliffhanger ending, with Evey's head dunked in water, leaves the reader desperate to understand Valerie's story and the connection between these two women.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall narrative remains highly compelling. The mystery surrounding V is intensifying, and the intertwining of Evey's present-day ordeal with Valerie's flashbacks creates a rich tapestry of emotional and narrative tension. The unresolved questions about V's motives and identity, combined with Evey's harrowing experiences, maintain a strong pull on the reader's attention. The story successfully balances the pacing, using flashbacks to enrich the main narrative without derailing it. The lingering mystery of what will happen to Evey sustains an ongoing emotional hook. Even the darker elements are effectively employed to build suspense instead of detracting from the larger narrative.
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32 -
Reflections of Love and Oppression - Overall Grade:
8.7
VALERIE (V.O.)
I sat in biology class staring at
the pickled rabbit fetus while Mr.
Herd said it was an adolescent phase
that people outgrew.
Valerie looks at Sara across the room, her head down in shame.
VALERIE (V.O.)
Sara did. I didn't.
93 INT. LIVING ROOM - DAY - FLASHBACK 93
Two teenage girls stand in front of a middle aged couple.
They are holding hands.
VALERIE (V.O.)
In 1994, I stopped pretending and
took a girl called Christine home to
meet my parents.
The greying woman repeats the sign of the cross over and
over, sobbing into a handkerchief. Her husband's face is
contorted in disgust.
VALERIE (V.O.)
A week later I moved to London to go
to college and study drama. My mother
said I broke her heart.
94 EXT. PARK - DAY - FLASHBACK 94
Two young women cuddle on a park bench under a London summer
sky, feeding the pigeons.
(CONTINUED)
94 CONTINUED: 94
VALERIE (V.O.)
But it was my integrity that was
important. Is that so selfish? It
sells for so little but it's all we
have left in this place...
The black haired girl nibbles on the blonde's ear.
VALERIE (V.O.)
It is the very last inch of us...
95 INT. INTERROGATION ROOM 95
Evey struggles against Rossiter's weight who keeps her head
submerged.
VALERIE (V.O.)
But within that inch we are free.
INTERROGATOR
Enough.
Rossiter wrenches back and Evey sucks hard for air, coughing
out water.
INTERROGATOR
Now Miss Hammond, let us review the
facts.
Evey stares at him, eyes red, heart pounding in her ears.
INTERROGATOR
You work for codename V. Codename V
killed Delia Surridge and then Derek
Almond with your help and that is
why you were found outside her home.
Evey begins to shake her head, water sluicing off her thin
face.
INTERROGATOR
Isn't that what happened, Miss
Hammond?
EVEY
No. No, that isn't true --
INTERROGATOR
Oh dear, Rossiter?
Rossiter grabs Evey's neck --
EVEY
No, wait!
(CONTINUED)
95 CONTINUED: 95
Plunging her head into the bowl. Water fills Evey's nose
and ears.
VALERIE (V.O.)
London. I was happy in London.
96 INT. THEATRE - NIGHT - FLASHBACK 96
The packed house watches as a Prince kneels before a woman's
bare foot with a slipper of glass.
VALERIE (V.O.)
I played Dandini in Cinderella.
The woman glances into the dark sea of faces.
VALERIE (V.O.)
The world was strange and rustling
with invisible crowds behind the hot
lights and all that breathless
glamour.
97 EXT. MEADOW - DAY - FLASHBACK 97
Two women weep in each other's arms, embracing in a perfect
knee high meadow.
VALERIE (V.O.)
Work improved. I got small film
roles, then bigger ones.
The blonde woman brushes away a tear from the other's cheek.
VALERIE (V.O.)
In 2006, I starred in "The Salt
Flats." That's where I met Ruth.
We fell in love.
We pull back and see we are on location for a movie and the
two women are being filmed.
98 INT. CONDO - NIGHT - FLASHBACK 98
Ruth and Valerie sit on the couch watching television. On
the table behind them is a bouquet of violet carson roses.
VALERIE (V.O.)
Every Valentine's Day she sent me
roses and, oh god, we had so much.
Those were the best three years of
my life.
The two women stare at the newscast in tears, the sound of
marching coming from the set's speakers.
(CONTINUED)
98 CONTINUED: 98
VALERIE (V.O.)
In 2010, they came.
99 EXT. LONDON STREET - DAY - FLASHBACK 99
The sound of marching explodes as columns of men in brown
uniforms and jack boots fill the streets.
VALERIE (V.O.)
And after that there were no more
roses...
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Compelled to keep Reading Score: 8/10
This scene uses flashbacks to Valerie's life to contrast Evey's current suffering. The juxtaposition of Valerie's past happiness and love with Evey's present torture is highly effective. The scene ends with Evey being subjected to waterboarding, leaving the reader wanting to know if she survives and how she will react to this brutal treatment. The emotional intensity and the cliffhanger ending create a strong pull to continue reading.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall narrative continues to be gripping. The mystery of V, the political oppression, and Evey's ordeal are all compelling threads. The flashbacks provide crucial backstory while maintaining the momentum. The interweaving of Evey's present suffering and Valerie's past happiness builds suspense and underscores the stakes involved. The unresolved questions surrounding V's identity and motives, combined with Evey's desperate situation, keep the reader invested.
Rossiter presses his elbow onto Evey's neck, holding her
submerged.
VALERIE (V.O.)
Not for anybody.
Rossiter lets Evey up. Her red burnt lungs gulp at the air.
VALERIE (V.O.)
After the takeover, they started
rounding up the gays. They took
Ruth while she was out looking for
food.
Evey blinks hard, black fireworks exploding in her eyes.
VALERIE (V.O.)
Why are they so frightened of us?
She wheezes, on the edge of unconsciousness.
VALERIE (V.O.)
They burned her face with cigarettes
and made her give them my name. She
signed a statement saying I'd seduced
her.
The interrogator's voice melts into a slag heap of sound
with the hot, rhythmic pounding in her ears.
VALERIE (V.O.)
I didn't blame her. God, I loved
her but I didn't blame her.
Rossiter uncuffs Evey, slipping the black bag over her head.
VALERIE (V.O.)
But she did.
Evey's knees buckle as he forces her to stand.
(CONTINUED)
100 CONTINUED: 100
VALERIE (V.O.)
She killed herself in her cell. She
couldn't live with betraying me,
with giving up that last inch. Oh,
Ruth.
Evey weaves down the hall. Rossiter shoving her from behind.
VALERIE (V.O.)
They came for me. They shaved off
my hair. They held my head down a
toilet and told lesbian jokes. They
brought me here and pumped me full
of chemicals.
The cell door swings open.
VALERIE (V.O.)
I can't feel my tongue. I can't
speak.
Rossiter yanks the hood from her head and pushes her in.
VALERIE (V.O.)
It is strange that my life should
end in such a terrible place but for
three years I had roses and apologized
to nobody.
The iron door slams shut, lock ringing in the stale air.
VALERIE (V.O.)
I shall die here. Every inch of me
shall perish...
Evey rolls to her knees.
VALERIE (V.O.)
Except one.
She crawls for the rat hole.
VALERIE (V.O.)
An inch. It is small and fragile
and it's the only thing in the world
that's worth having.
Her shaking hand pulls the letter from the stone crevice.
VALERIE (V.O.)
We must never lose it or sell it or
give it away. We must never let
them take it from us.
Evey clutches it like a rosary as she begins to cry.
(CONTINUED)
100 CONTINUED: (2) 100
VALERIE (V.O.)
I don't know who you are but I hope
you escape this place. I hope that
the world turns and things get better
and that one day people have roses
again.
She holds the note to her face, her tears soaking into the
fragile paper.
VALERIE (V.O.)
I don't know who you are but I love
you. I love you. Valerie.
Slowly, Evey slips away, succumbing to blackness.
EVEY (V.O.)
I had come to know every inch of
those four walls in that dark hell
and they knew every inch of me.
Every inch...
Genres:
Drama, Thriller Tone:
Intense, Emotional, Dark
Ratings
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Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
This scene ends on a powerful cliffhanger. Evey's brutal interrogation, intercut with Valerie's heartbreaking flashback, creates intense emotional resonance. The discovery of the letter and Evey's subsequent descent into unconsciousness leaves the reader desperate to know what happens next. Will she survive? What is the significance of the letter? The unresolved trauma and the lingering mystery strongly compel the reader to move forward.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall script maintains a high level of engagement. The interwoven narratives of Evey and Valerie create a compelling tapestry of oppression and resilience. The mystery surrounding V, the nature of the regime, and the significance of the 'V' symbol continue to drive the narrative. While some plot lines, such as Detective Finch's investigation, have been temporarily sidelined, the intense focus on Evey's ordeal re-energizes the reader's desire to understand her connection to V and the broader rebellion. The cliffhanger ending of this scene reinforces the momentum.
A typed document sits on a small tray table in front of her.
INTERROGATOR
"My name is Evey Hammond. On the
5th of November 2019, I was abducted
by the terrorist known as codename V
and then taken against my will to an
unknown location."
Rossiter hovers just behind her as the Interrogator reads
her confession.
INTERROGATOR
"Once there, I was systematically
brainwashed by means physical and
psychological. I was frequently
subjected to sexual abuse during
this period."
Evey's expression is unchanging.
INTERROGATOR
"Eventually I was terrorized into
helping him commit the murders of
Derek Almond, Dr. Delia Surridge,
(MORE)
(CONTINUED)
101 CONTINUED: 101
INTERROGATOR (CONT'D)
and Anthony Lilliman, Bishop of
Westminster."
Rossiter drops a pen on the table.
INTERROGATOR
"I, the undersigned, swear that the
above statement is genuine and that
it was not signed by means of
intimidation."
The pen slowly rocks to a stop.
INTERROGATOR
We'd like you to sign that for us,
Miss Hammond. Where we've put the
little cross.
She blinks.
EVEY
No.
INTERROGATOR
As you wish.
Rossiter begins unbuckling Evey's restraints.
INTERROGATOR
Escort Miss Hammond back to her cell,
Rossiter, where she will wait while
you arrange a wet detail of six men.
He forces Evey to her feet.
INTERROGATOR
Then take her out behind the chemical
sheds and shoot her.
102 INT. CELL 102
The door opens behind Evey as she rereads Valerie's letter
for the last time.
ROSSITER
It's time, unless you want to change
your mind.
She holds the tattered piece of toilet paper to her chest.
ROSSITER
Sign that statement. You could be
out inside three years. Perhaps
they'd find you a job with the Finger.
(CONTINUED)
102 CONTINUED: 102
Evey closes her eyes.
EVEY
Thank you but I'd rather die behind
the chemical sheds.
Her last words hang in the air.
ROSSITER
Then there's nothing left to threaten
you with, is there? You are free.
He turns and leaves.
EVEY
What?
She listens as his footsteps fade down the hall, the door
hanging weirdly open.
Evey takes a few tentative steps toward the door and sticks
her head out into the empty hall, peering down both ways.
Slowly, she emerges from her cell, retracing her path down
the hall that her blindfold never allowed her to see.
Quietly inching along the wall, Evey peeks around a corner,
gasping at the rigid guard standing off to the side. There
is something about the man's frozen stare that keeps her
from running.
Evey straightens and crosses to the guard.
It is a mannequin.
She touches him, the wheeled platform he is mounted on rolling
back against the wall.
103 INT. INTERROGATION ROOM 103
The door creaks open as Evey enters the room where for so
long she was questioned and tortured.
She crosses to the frozen Interrogator sitting at his desk.
Her finger brushes lightly against the plastic hand, then
Evey raps a knuckle on his hollow wooden head. Around his
neck a small speaker hangs from a cord.
Evey drifts uneasily into a back room where a discarded prison
guard's uniform hangs on a rack. On a table next to a wig
and pair of gloves, the rat looks up at her through the bars
of its tiny cage.
(CONTINUED)
103 CONTINUED: 103
She moves through another door, the wind suddenly knocked
from her chest as she finally sees where her prison was built --
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Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
This scene ends on a powerful cliffhanger. Evey's refusal to sign the confession, followed by her unexpected release and the discovery of the mannequin guard, leaves the reader with several unanswered questions. What is the significance of the mannequin? Was her release a genuine mistake, a trap, or a deliberate act of rebellion from within the system? The reveal of the discarded uniform and the rat in a cage also implies a deeper level of manipulation and control within the prison, furthering the mystery. The scene's ending, with Evey entering the interrogation room again, suggests a possible confrontation or a deeper exploration of her imprisonment, compelling the reader to continue.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall narrative continues to build momentum. The previous scenes have established a compelling antagonist (V) and a strong protagonist (Evey) whose journey has been filled with intense challenges and psychological manipulation. Evey's ordeal in the prison has only intensified the conflict, and the ambiguity surrounding her release and the strange discovery of the mannequin significantly increases the suspense. The unresolved questions about V's motives and Evey's connection to him, along with the ongoing mystery of the oppressive regime, maintain a strong forward momentum. The reader remains invested in Evey's survival and the potential for rebellion against the controlling forces.
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35 -
Confrontation in the Shadow Gallery - Overall Grade:
9.2
She stumbles against the wall, unable to support herself.
EVEY
You -- You hit me and -- and cut my
hair. It was you. It was just you
all this time.
She doubles over, covering her face as she bursts into tears.
EVEY
You tortured me. You tortured me --
Evey looks up at him, body shivering as he quietly glides
toward her.
EVEY
Oh god, why?
V
Because I love you, Evey. Because I
wanted to set you free.
EVEY
Love?
A look of horror twists her starved face.
EVEY
Set me free? Don't you realize?
Slender fingers ball into fists.
(CONTINUED)
104 CONTINUED: 104
EVEY
Don't you realize what you did to
me? You nearly drove me mad!
Disgust and anger light up her eyes.
EVEY
I hate you.
Her little, wiry body coils tight as she circles him.
EVEY
I hate you! Set me free? You put
me in a prison to set me free?!
V
You were already in a prison. You've
been in a prison all your life.
EVEY
Shut up! I don't want to hear it.
I wasn't in a prison. I was happy!
I was happy here --
V
Happiness is the most insidious prison
of all, Evey.
EVEY
That's warped! That's evil and it's
wrong! What gives you the right to
judge? Who are you to say what's
not good enough?!
V
You were born in a prison, Evey. I
didn't put you there. I just showed
you the bars. You've been in a prison
so long, you no longer believe there's
an outside world.
She wheels away from him, covering her ears, trying to get
away from his voice.
EVEY
Shut up! You're mad! I don't want
to hear it!
V
That's because you're afraid, Evey.
You're afraid because you can feel
freedom closing in on you. You're
afraid because freedom is terrifying.
(CONTINUED)
104 CONTINUED: (2) 104
Evey falls, stumbling through the labyrinth of the Shadow
Gallery.
EVEY
I can't feel anything! There's
nothing left to feel! Don't you
understand?
V
Don't back away from it, Evey. Part
of you understands the truth even as
part pretends not to.
She collapses, head pounding.
V
Woman, this is the most important
moment in your life. Don't run from
it.
EVEY
I don't know what -- Oh god -- I
can't breathe --
V couches next to her.
V
Good. You're almost there. Go
closer. Feel the shape of it.
EVEY
What are you doing to me? I can't
breathe --
V
You were in a cell. They offered
you a choice between the death of
your principles and the death of
your body.
He cradles her as she hyperventilates, tears streaming down
her face.
EVEY
I feel -- I feel like I'm going to
burst.
V
You said you'd rather die. You faced
the fear of your own death and you
were calm. Try to feel now what you
felt then.
EVEY
Oh god -- I felt --
(CONTINUED)
104 CONTINUED: (3) 104
The mask hovers over her.
EVEY
Like an angel --
He squeezes her shuddering body.
EVEY
Oh god, V, I'm so scared. What's
happening to me?
V
The door of the cage is open, Evey.
All that you feel is the wind from
outside. Don't be afraid.
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Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
This scene is incredibly compelling because it's a powerful emotional confrontation. Evey's trauma is raw and believable, and her accusations against V create immediate tension. The revelation that V's actions stemmed from 'love' is shocking and leaves the reader desperate to understand V's motivations and the nature of his 'freedom'. The scene ends on a cliffhanger, with Evey's panic attack and V's offer to take her to the roof, leaving the reader wondering what will happen next. The emotional intensity and unresolved questions propel the reader forward.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall script maintains a high level of engagement. The mystery surrounding V's identity and motives continues to be a strong hook, and this scene adds another layer of complexity to that mystery. The emotional journey of Evey, from victim to potential participant in V's plan, is compelling. The unresolved questions about V's past, his methods, and his ultimate goals keep the reader invested. While some earlier plot threads might be fading slightly (the mystery of the other victims), this scene's intensity re-energizes the narrative.
The two figures stand in the door of the roof access, a raging
tempest oozing from a split sky.
Something draws Evey out into the storm.
Slowly, she walks beneath it, the wind and rain pounding
against her thin frame. Evey lets the coarse slipover fall
to the ground and stares straight up into the storm, naked,
the elements soaking into her very being.
V moves up behind her.
V
Do you feel it?
EVEY
Everything's so -- different.
(CONTINUED)
105 CONTINUED: 105
V
I know. Five years ago, I too stared
beneath a night like this. Naked
under a roaring sky.
A low rumble of thunder washes over London.
V
The night is yours, Evey. Seize it.
Encircle it within your arms.
His words buffet against her with the sheets of rain.
V
Bury it in your heart up to the hilt.
She raises her arms to embrace the raging torrent.
V
Become transfixed and transfigured --
A jagged bolt of lightning shatters the sky.
V
Forever.
106 EXT. NEW GOVERNMENT BUILDING 106
Finch gets out of a police car and looks up the black face
of the modern building. He sighs and taps his pipe against
the heel of his shoe.
DASCOMBE
Finch!
Finch turns to find Dascombe hurrying towards him.
DASCOMBE
Do you know what this is all about?
FINCH
No, but I can guess.
DASCOMBE
What?
FINCH
"Remember, remember, the fifth of
November."
DASCOMBE
Oh come on. He's long gone. He has
to be. He did what he came to do
and it's over.
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Compelled to keep Reading Score: 8/10
The scene ends on a powerful and evocative image of Evey embracing the storm, naked and vulnerable, a clear visual metaphor for her transformation and newfound freedom. V's words, urging her to "seize the night," create a sense of urgency and mystery. The abrupt shift to Finch and Dascombe's conversation, referencing Guy Fawkes and the Fifth of November, immediately raises questions about V's plan and its connection to this date, effectively hooking the reader into the next scene. The cliffhanger ending leaves the reader wanting to know more about what Finch 'guesses' and whether V's actions truly are 'over'.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The screenplay maintains a high level of engagement through a combination of unresolved plotlines and compelling characters. Evey's transformation is a central theme, and this scene visually depicts its culmination. The ongoing mystery surrounding V's identity and ultimate goals keeps the reader invested. Finch's intuition and his dialogue with Dascombe creates immediate suspense, linking back to the recurring theme of Guy Fawkes and suggesting the climax is approaching. The numerous unresolved threads, like the Leader's pursuit of V and the implications of the Fifth of November, continue to drive the narrative forward.
A dark November sky hangs like a shroud over the building.
LEADER (V.O.)
A year, gentlemen.
108 INT. COUNCIL CONFERENCE ROOM 108
The heads of each department are gathered around a table of
black granite.
Peter Creedy, sitting back out of the lights, is the new
head of the Finger.
LEADER
I have given you almost a year and
you have given me nothing. Nothing!
He glares at Finch.
DASCOMBE
Now Adam, there is no one better
than Finch and you know it.
LEADER
Yes, Mr. Dascombe, I do know it. It
is that very fact that keeps me awake
at night, wondering if perhaps there
is a reason that Mr. Finch has
failed.
FINCH
What are you saying?
LEADER
I'm saying that perhaps I don't know
you as well as I thought I did.
FINCH
Are you asking for my resignation?
(CONTINUED)
108 CONTINUED: 108
LEADER
No, I am asking for some goddamn
results!
DASCOMBE
It's not Finch's fault, Adam.
CONRAD
We've all been looking. The man
simply disappeared.
ETHERIDGE
Vanished.
DASCOMBE
He's gone, Adam. It's over.
The Leader trembles like a volcano set to blow.
LEADER
It's over, is it? He's gone.
Vanished, you say?
The Leader grabs a large box from the floor and hurls reams
of computer printout across the table.
LEADER
Transcripts recorded over the last
thirty days in which the terrorist
was talked about or mentioned in a
positive context. This is only thirty
days!
He punches a "play" button and a wall of monitors blink on.
It is a recording of a television variety show.
A character that is made to look like Adam Susan is giving a
speech. A woman is dressed like V except that the only thing
she is wearing under her cloak is a garter belt, stockings
and high heels.
V sneaks up behind Susan and yanks his pants down. Susan is
outraged but when he gives chase he trips over his pants.
The audience hoots and howls.
The Leader kills the tape.
LEADER
Is this what you consider,
"disappeared?"
DASCOMBE
For god's sake, Adam, it's a stupid
variety show.
(CONTINUED)
108 CONTINUED: (2) 108
LEADER
Mr. Creedy, I want the producers,
writers, and actors of that "stupid
variety show" arrested and charged
with sedition.
CREEDY
Yes, sir.
DASCOMBE
You can't be serious --
LEADER
Push me, Roger, push me and you'll
find out how serious I am.
He stares each of them to silence.
LEADER
This, this V is still out there. I
can feel him like a sickness worming
its way into the hearts and minds of
the public. Something must be done,
and done quickly, to exorcise this
demon for the very soul of this
country is at stake.
He pauses.
LEADER
That is why I am compelled to give
each and every one of you notice
that if by the fifth of November you
are still giving me nothing more
than excuses, I will have to revoke
your party status and terminate your
positions.
Everyone is stunned.
LEADER
Mr. Creedy, I will speak with you in
private. The rest of you are
dismissed. England prevails.
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Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
This scene ends on a powerful cliffhanger. The Leader's ultimatum—revoke party status and terminate positions by November 5th—creates immediate tension and leaves the reader desperate to know what happens next. The scene also raises questions about Finch's loyalty and competence, adding another layer of intrigue. The implication that V's influence is growing despite the efforts of the government further fuels the reader's desire to continue and see how the authorities will respond to this escalating crisis. The private conversation between the Leader and Creedy at the end strongly hints at further developments and potential betrayals.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall script maintains a high level of engagement. The mystery surrounding V's identity and his methods continues to be a strong hook. The interwoven plotlines—the government's hunt for V, Evey's experiences, and the growing unrest among the population—keep the reader invested. The November 5th deadline adds a ticking clock element that increases the tension. The introduction of new characters and the development of existing ones (Finch's potential disloyalty, Creedy's ambition) adds to the complexity and excitement. While some earlier plot threads might be subtly fading (e.g., details of Evey's interrogation), the overall narrative momentum is strong due to the immediate threat posed by V and the internal conflicts within the government.
LEADER
Mr. Creedy, as the new head of the
Finger, you are the most important
member of my cabinet.
(CONTINUED)
109 CONTINUED: 109
CREEDY
I, uh, appreciate your faith in me.
LEADER
Your predecessor, Mr. Almond, was a
good man, a man who understood what
strength in unity meant, a man who,
above all, loved his country. I
need to know if you are such a man.
His eyes bore into him.
LEADER
Do you love your country, Mr. Creedy?
110 EXT. ALLEYWAY 110
A police car is parked in a dark alley. It is raining and
the windows of the car are completely steamed.
CREEDY
Oh god, yes!
He is sweating, his knuckles white as he squeezes the steering
wheel, panting.
We hear a noise like a very wet kiss and then a woman's voice.
HELEN
"The most important member of my
cabinet." Yes it is, isn't it, dear?
Helen lifts her head out of his lap. Her lipstick is smeared
about her mouth.
CREEDY
Oh, don't stop.
HELEN
I stop when you stop. What did he
say next?
CREEDY
I can't --
She whispers in his ear while playing with his lap.
HELEN
Come on, Peter, what are you afraid
of? Almond used to tell me everything
and you're twice the man he was.
CREEDY
He asked me... if I loved my country.
(CONTINUED)
110 CONTINUED: 110
HELEN
Oh yes, I can tell you do love your
country, almost as much as you love
this...
She lowers her head into this lap.
CREEDY
Oh god...
HELEN
Go on.
CREEDY
Then he asked me to do something...
oh, oh...
HELEN
What?
CREEDY
Helen, I can't. I can't tell you.
Helen lifts her head.
HELEN
He told you to frame someone as the
terrorist.
CREEDY
My god?! How did you know that?
HELEN
I know Adam Susan. Now who was it?
CREEDY
No way. I can't tell you that.
HELEN
Yes you can, honey. You can and you
will. You have to trust me, love.
We're going to help each other.
CREEDY
Helen, please.
HELEN
Look at that face. You see? You're
just bursting to tell me.
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
The scene ends on a cliffhanger. The revelation that Finch is the person Creedy is to frame as the terrorist leaves the reader wanting to know immediately what happens next. The intense sexual encounter provides a stark contrast to the serious political intrigue, creating a compelling juxtaposition that heightens the tension and increases the reader's desire to see how this situation unfolds. The intimacy is used to extract information; Helen's manipulation and Creedy's eventual confession are both highly suspenseful and leave the reader eager for the consequences of this revelation.
Script Continuation Score: 8/10
The overall screenplay maintains a strong sense of suspense and intrigue. The ongoing mystery surrounding V's identity and motives is still compelling, and the introduction of new conflicts, such as the potential framing of Finch, keeps the reader engaged. While some plot threads may have been lingering, the recent scenes focusing on the interrogation and escape of Evey, combined with this scene's reveal, have refreshed the reader's interest, creating multiple new questions and driving forward momentum. The escalating tension between the government and V's followers, as well as the unexpected alliances and betrayals, continue to offer multiple compelling narrative threads.
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Harmony of Solitude and Connection - Overall Grade:
9.2
Finch sits alone in his modest apartment, reading a book.
The book is Koesterler's, "The Roots of Coincidence."
An old CD player is playing music, a Bach piano concerto.
112 INT. SHADOW GALLERY 112
V is playing the exact same concerto on his piano, his gloved
fingers gracefully flitting across the keys.
Evey enters the gallery. Her hair has grown out but is still
short. She projects a kind of strength that comes from a
deep inner peace.
V coaxes the final delicate notes and lets them softly fade.
EVEY
That was beautiful.
She walks up to him and takes the smiling face in her hands.
EVEY
I've wanted to do this for a long
time.
She bends and gently kisses the frozen lips.
EVEY
Thank you, V. Thank you for
everything you've done for me.
V
You did it all yourself, Evey. I
just provided the backdrop but the
drama was all your own.
EVEY
It was a good backdrop. I believed
it. I really did. It's still a bit
hard for me to accept that it wasn't
real. That it was just you.
Especially the letter.
She takes the letter from her pocket.
(CONTINUED)
112 CONTINUED: 112
EVEY
It is a beautiful letter, V. Every
time I read it I could feel Valerie,
almost like she was holding me. I
believed in her most of all. I
believed that she loved me and I
loved her back.
She looks down.
EVEY
I feel a bit foolish telling you
this. I know that you must have
written it and thought you should
have it back.
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“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
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The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
The scene ends with a significant reveal and a compelling invitation. V's denial of authorship for the letter that profoundly impacted Evey is a major plot twist, immediately raising questions about the letter's origin and the true nature of V's actions. The line "Come with me" is a clear call to action, leaving the reader eager to discover the mystery behind the letter and what V intends to show Evey. The scene perfectly balances emotional intimacy with narrative mystery, creating a strong desire to proceed to the next scene.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall narrative maintains a high level of engagement. The introduction of Evey's newfound strength and the emotional complexity of her relationship with V add depth. The unresolved mystery surrounding the letter and the looming threat from the government create sustained tension. Earlier plot points remain relevant, such as the overarching conflict between V and the regime and Evey's personal journey. The mystery of the letter ties into Evey's emotional arc and the larger mystery surrounding V's identity, and V's final line provides a strong hook for the next scene.
It is a shrine. The walls are covered with movie posters
and reviews and pictures of an actresses named Valerie Page.
We recognize her as the woman chosen for the medical block
just before V.
Everywhere there are flower boxes filled with blooming roses;
violet carsons.
EVEY
Valerie?
V
Yes. Valerie Page. She was the
woman in room four.
EVEY
She's beautiful.
V
She wrote the letter just before she
died. I delivered it to you as it
was delivered to me. The words you
wept over were the same words that
transformed me.
Evey smiles and bends to smell the roses.
(CONTINUED)
113 CONTINUED: 113
EVEY
Roses. You grew them for her.
V
Yes.
EVEY
They're beautiful.
V
Evey, do you know what day it is?
EVEY
Two days before the first day we
met.
V
You remembered.
EVEY
You're planning something, aren't
you, V?
V
You know me too well now.
EVEY
What are you going to do?
V
I'm going to fulfill an old promise.
Evey cocks an eyebrow.
V
I'll show you.
114 INT. UNDERGROUND STAIRWELL 114
Carrying a lantern, V leads Evey down a dark stone staircase.
EVEY
I've never been here before.
V
Yes. It is the deepest part of my
home. Once you know it, I should
think you'll know everything.
He pushes a button and a secret passage opens in a heavy
stone wall.
There is a small narrow series of passageways that he guides
her through, leading to another door. Evey steps out into
an underground subway station.
115 INT. VICTORIA STATION 115
Parked beside the concrete platform is a beautiful antique
train car.
EVEY
Oh, V, it's lovely. Where on earth
did you find it?
V
In a way, I suppose it really found
me.
Evey steps into the train car and finds it filled with little
packages wrapped in wax paper.
EVEY
What's in these packages?
V
Gelignite.
She screams and almost drops one.
V
Careful.
EVEY
What are you going to do with all of
it?
V
I told you. I'm going to finish
what was started four hundred years
ago.
EVEY
Where does this train go?
V
This is the old Victoria line but it
is blocked, blocked somewhere between
Whitehall and St. James.
EVEY
Whitehall... V, that's the New
Government Building.
V nods.
EVEY
But the underground has been shut
down for years. How are you going
to make it run without any power?
(CONTINUED)
115 CONTINUED: 115
V
I just thought I might ask them to
turn it on for me.
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Compelled to keep Reading Score: 10/10
This scene ends on a massive cliffhanger. The revelation that the train car is filled with gelignite and that the destination is the New Government Building immediately raises the stakes significantly. The audience is left wondering how V plans to power the train, how he will overcome the security of the building, and what exactly he intends to do with all that explosive. The mystery surrounding Valerie Page's letter, and now this plan, provides strong motivation to continue reading immediately to find out what happens next. The ending line, "I just thought I might ask them to turn it on for me," is particularly effective in implying a bold and potentially devastating plan.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall script maintains a high level of suspense. The introduction of V's seemingly impossible plan to blow up the New Government Building creates a significant turning point in the narrative. While some plot threads from earlier scenes might fade slightly into the background, they are kept alive by the ever-present threat of V and the lingering mysteries around his past, such as the significance of Valerie Page. The emotional connection to Evey continues to be developed, drawing the reader deeper into the narrative. The impending attack and its potential consequences raise the stakes, promising a thrilling and potentially explosive climax.
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The Clash of Heroes and Shadows - Overall Grade:
8.5
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
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The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
This scene ends on a thrilling cliffhanger. The juxtaposition of the innocuous television program with V's sudden, brutal attack creates a shocking contrast and leaves the reader wanting to know what happens next. The speed and efficiency of V's actions, combined with the abrupt ending, generate significant suspense and a strong desire to see the immediate consequences of the attack. The unresolved tension of the scene—what V will do next, and the reaction of the authorities—makes it incredibly compelling.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall narrative remains highly engaging. The introduction of V and his actions have established him as a powerful and unpredictable force, and the multiple plotlines involving the government, Finch's investigation, and Evey's experiences create a web of interconnected suspense that keeps the reader invested. The previous scene ended with the setup for a major action sequence, setting the stage for this scene's dramatic events. While the resolution is still distant, many story threads are dynamically moving forward.
Dominic is chewing on a hamburger, engrossed in Storm Saxon.
Across the room, Finch is reading the "Roots of Coincidence."
FINCH
I don't know how you stand that tripe.
Dominic answers with a mouthful of cheeseburger.
DOMINIC
Es gooh.
Finch shakes his head, reaching for his pipe. He realizes
he is out of tobacco. He slides open the bottom desk drawer
and his eyes almost pop out of his head.
He stares into the drawer like someone staring at his own
tombstone.
DOMINIC
Finch? Finch, what's wrong?
Slowly, he lifts something from the drawer. On his desk, he
lays out several knives, a cloak, a hat, and a smiling mask.
(CONTINUED)
119 CONTINUED: 119
DOMINIC
What the hell?
Finch lifts the mask and almost has to laugh.
FINCH
Don't you see, Dominic?
He puts the mask to his face.
FINCH
I'm V.
120 INT. JORDAN TOWER 120
V emerges from an elevator and immediately attacks several
more guards. A surveillance camera watches as V steps over
their slumped, broken bodies.
121 INT. CONTROL CENTER 121
The security guard sees V on the monitor coming directly
down the hall.
GUARD
Bloody hell!
He grabs the machine gun, aiming it just as V kicks open the
door.
GUARD
Freeze!
V stops. At least five guards have trained their weapons on
him. He is surrounded.
Slowly, he lifts his arms as though surrendering. His cloak
opens, revealing enough TNT to level the entire building.
In his hand is the plunger detonator.
GUARD
Fuck all.
V nods.
122 INT. FINCH'S OFFICE 122
The door bursts open as Creedy and a group of heavily armed
Fingermen muscle in.
DOMINIC
Creedy? What the hell's going on?
(CONTINUED)
122 CONTINUED: 122
CREEDY
I'm here to arrest Mr. Finch for
acts of treason and terrorism.
DOMINIC
You can't be serious.
CREEDY
If I were you, boy, I'd shut my hole
unless you want to start explaining
why you didn't say nothing about Mr.
Finch's secret identity.
123 INT. JORDAN TOWER 123
V follows Roger Dascombe into the main control booth. The
door shuts behind them and they are alone.
All around them are the laugh tracks and gunshots of the
evening's entertainment.
V puts his hand into his cloak and pulls out a videotape.
He hands it to Dascombe.
124 INT. FINCH'S OFFICE 124
Finch glares at Creedy.
FINCH
Why don't you just shoot me, Creedy?
Wouldn't that make everything a lot
simpler?
CREEDY
Yeah, I suppose it would.
Creedy smiles, his finger tightening on the trigger when --
DOMINIC
Holy Christ! Creedy, you stupid
ape! If Finch is V then tell me who
is that?
He points at the television where V sits calmly at a desk in
front of the "VTV" logo.
V
Good evening, London.
CREEDY
Bloody fuckin' hell.
V
I thought it was time we had a little
talk.
(CONTINUED)
124 CONTINUED: 124
FINCH
He has to be at Jordan tower. Come
on!
Finch and Dominic rush out of the room. Creedy looks at his
confused men.
CREEDY
Don't just stand there! Follow them!
Genres:
Thriller, Action, Drama Tone:
Intense, Suspenseful, Dramatic
Ratings
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The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 10/10
This scene ends on a massive cliffhanger. The revelation that Finch is V, while seemingly unbelievable, is brilliantly executed through the discovery of V's hidden paraphernalia in Finch's desk. The immediate interruption by Creedy and the Fingermen throws the reader into a high-stakes chase. But more importantly, the final shot of V on television, calmly addressing London, leaves the reader desperate to know what he will do and how Finch will reconcile his double life. The scene perfectly blends action, intrigue, and mystery, leaving the reader with multiple compelling questions about the next scene.
Script Continuation Score: 10/10
The screenplay maintains a high level of suspense and intrigue. The overarching mystery of V's identity and motives has been carefully developed, and this scene provides a surprising twist that adds another layer of complexity. The unresolved conflict between V and the government, and the tension surrounding Creedy's betrayal, keeps the reader invested. The multiple plot threads—V's plan, Finch's double life, Creedy's actions—all converge in this scene, intensifying the reader's desire to see how these will play out. The pacing is excellent, and the cliffhanger ending ensures the reader is eager to jump to the next scene.
V
Are you sitting comfortably? Good.
Then I'll begin.
The Leader screams, pounding on Fate.
LEADER
Damn you! Damn you!
He hits the intercom.
LEADER
Lieutenant, ready my transport. I
want every armed man within a hundred
miles at Jordan tower. Now!
We move in at VTV.
V
Right now, I imagine there are
hundreds of soldiers rushing here to
kill me because someone does not
want us to talk.
We pull back in --
126 INT. LIVING ROOM 126
A family watching television. In the background, two children
are squabbling.
MOTHER
Hush. Turn it up.
The husband does. V's voice gets louder as we move towards
him.
V
They are afraid that I am going to
say the things that are not supposed
(MORE)
(CONTINUED)
126 CONTINUED: 126
V (CONT'D)
to be said. They are afraid that I
am going to say the truth.
127 INT. APARTMENT 127
A man sits on his couch, mesmerized by V.
V
The truth is that there is something
terribly wrong with this country,
isn't there? If you look about, you
witness cruelty, injustice and
despotism. But what do you do about
it? What can you do?
He pops his beer tab and the beer foams over the couch but
he doesn't seem to notice.
128 INT. FINCH'S POLICE CAR 128
The car races wildly towards Jordan tower as Finch and Dominic
listen to the broadcast on the radio.
V (V.O.)
You are but a single individual.
How can you possible make any
difference? Individuals have no
power in this modern world. That is
what you've been taught because that
is what they need you to believe.
But it is not true.
129 INT. LEADER'S TRANSPORT 129
The Leader seethes, staring at three television monitors in
his limo which are all filled with V.
V
This is why they are afraid and the
reason that I am here; to remind you
that it is individuals who always
hold the power. The real power.
Individuals like me. And individuals
like you.
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Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
This scene masterfully uses parallel editing to create intense suspense and anticipation. We see V's defiant message broadcast across multiple locations, intercutting with the Leader's frantic attempts to mobilize his forces. The fragmented perspectives and the escalating urgency of V's speech leave the reader desperate to know what happens next. The scene ends on a cliffhanger, with V's powerful statement about individual power hanging in the air, promising a confrontation. The immediate juxtaposition of V's message with the Leader's frantic reaction creates a powerful sense of tension and leaves the reader hooked.
Script Continuation Score: 10/10
The screenplay maintains a high level of engagement due to several factors. The overarching mystery of V's identity and motivations continues to drive the narrative. The escalating conflict between V and the totalitarian regime creates constant suspense. Each scene builds on the previous ones, introducing new characters and developments while maintaining a consistent pace. The reader is invested in multiple plot lines, including Evey's transformation, Finch's investigation, and the Leader's desperate attempts to maintain control. The introduction of V's broadcast, directly addressing the audience, further increases engagement by directly involving the reader in the unfolding events. The previous scene ended with a setup for conflict, making this scene's cliffhanger even more effective.
The bar is almost completely soundless except for the voice
of V. People stare at the television as if the moment were
somehow suspended in time.
(CONTINUED)
130 CONTINUED: 130
V
I have come to offer you a deal. If
you accept, I will give you a
different world. A world without
curfews, without soldiers and
surveillance systems. A world that
is not run by other men but that is
run by you. I am offering you a
second chance.
131 EXT. JORDAN TOWER 131
The military forces have begun to swarm.
V
Four hundred years ago, a great
citizen made a most significant
contribution to our common culture.
It was a contribution forged in
secrecy and stealth although it is
best remembered in noise and bright
light.
132 EXT. TELEVISION STORE 132
A crowd has gathered, watching through the window.
V
To commemorate that glorious night
at precisely the stroke of midnight,
the edifice of their world will erupt
with enough sound and fury to shake
the earth. All I ask is that you
join me at the gates to watch as the
past is erased, the pathway cleared
so that together we can start toward
a new day.
133 EXT. JORDAN TOWER 133
The Leader climbs out of his limo and is met by one of his
captains.
LEADER
I want this man dead! I want him
shot on sight!
CAPTAIN
Yes, sir.
134 INT. FINCH'S CAR 134
Finch can see the forces gathering outside Jordan tower.
(CONTINUED)
134 CONTINUED: 134
V (V.O.)
But, you ask, who am I to make such
promises? A fair question but hardly
necessary as you know me already.
To know me any more you need only
look to a mirror.
Finch catches a glimpse of himself in the mirror.
135 INT. CONTROL BOOTH 135
VTV fills every screen.
V
Truth be told, this wasn't even my
idea, was it? If you think back,
you'll remember that night, whispering
in your lover's arms. I became a
part of your plan just as you have
now become part of mine. Give me
the line of the queen and I'll give
you your secret dream.
136 INT. JORDAN TOWER - HALLWAY 136
A heavy battering ram is rushed down the hall, carried by
four soldiers.
V (V.O.)
On the twelfth stroke of the fifth
day of the eleventh month, I hope we
shall all meet again.
137 EXT. TELEVISION STORE 137
The crowd is much larger.
V
Until then, I bid you goodnight.
Every screen suddenly goes black. The crowd turns to each
other, unsure of what to do.
138 INT. CONTROL BOOTH 138
The door explodes open. V is standing alone, almost as if
waiting for them.
Before he can even move, they shoot. Machine gun fire lights
up the room. V's body dances and jerks backward, smashing
through an observation window --
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
This scene ends on a powerful cliffhanger. V's speech, broadcast across multiple locations, is compelling and full of promises and threats. The scene cuts between different vantage points showing the impact of his message on the populace, and the impending action at Jordan Tower. The final image of V being shot and falling through the window leaves the reader wanting immediate answers. The unresolved questions regarding V's survival and the outcome of his plan create intense suspense.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall narrative remains highly engaging. The mystery surrounding V's identity and motivations has been meticulously built up throughout the screenplay, and this scene brings that to a head. The impending attack on the government building, combined with the unresolved fate of V, keeps the reader completely invested. There are several threads still active, including Finch's investigation, the Leader's desperation, and the societal unrest, all converging towards a climax. The pacing is excellent, building anticipation effectively. While some threads from earlier scenes are now partially resolved, they still leave room for interesting developments in the final parts of the screenplay.
A path is cleared for the Leader. As he heads into the
television studio, an armed soldier is heading in the opposite
direction.
It is impossible to tell because of the dark face plate but
it looks like the soldier is smiling.
The Leader shoves his way onto the main stage. A group of
soldiers is gathered around the body.
LEADER
Who was it? Who was he?
The mask is pried off, revealing the lifeless face of Roger
Dascombe. To the Leader, it is an obvious revelation.
LEADER
Roger Dascombe! Of course. Of
course! It makes such perfect sense.
CAPTAIN
Sir, I think there has been a mistake.
LEADER
No! There is no mistake!
CAPTAIN
But sir, there are people that say
they saw both the terrorist and
Dascombe together --
LEADER
Who? Who are these people? They
must be detained immediately.
Whatever they saw or whatever they
think they saw is subordinate to the
truth and that truth is that Roger
Dascombe is the terrorist and the
terrorist is dead!
FINCH
But I thought I was the terrorist.
Finch's voice stops the Leader cold.
LEADER
Finch, what are you doing here?
FINCH
Since I'm not in jail and since you
have another, even more convenient
suspect. I'm guessing the charges
have been dropped.
(CONTINUED)
139 CONTINUED: 139
LEADER
Be careful, Finch.
FINCH
I am careful, sir. Always. That is
why I suggest that a search of this
building begin immediately.
LEADER
The terrorist is dead!
FINCH
With all due respect, I disagree and
I believe that he is presently trying
to get out of this building disguised
as one of us.
LEADER
Are you challenging my authority?
FINCH
No sir, I'm trying to run an
investigation --
LEADER
I am trying to run a country! When
I tell you, Mr. Finch, the terrorist
is dead, then the terrorist is dead!
If you continue to suggest otherwise
then you will leave me no choice but
to have you arrested on charges of
sedition. Do I make myself clear?
He eyes the room. Everyone is silent.
LEADER
Now, it is imperative for the people
of London to know that they are safe,
that the terrorist is dead and
everything is under control.
The Leader storms past Finch who looks at Dascombe and bites
down on his pipe.
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The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 8/10
This scene ends on a cliffhanger. The revelation that Dascombe is dead, and yet Finch believes the terrorist is still alive and disguised, creates immediate tension and leaves the reader wanting to know what happens next. Finch's defiance of the Leader sets up a potential conflict that propels the reader forward. The Leader's threat of arrest against Finch adds another layer of suspense, further increasing the compulsion to continue reading. The scene efficiently sets up a new mystery – is V still in the building, and if so, who is he disguised as? The ambiguity and uncertainty make for a gripping conclusion to the scene.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall script maintains a high level of engagement. The mystery surrounding V's identity has been compelling from the start, and this scene adds another twist to the plot. While V's actions were central previously, the narrative is effectively shifting the focus toward Finch's investigation and his potential confrontation with the Leader. This subplot is now compelling in its own right, with the potential for high stakes. The unresolved questions about V's ultimate goals, and whether he's still alive, combined with the new tension between Finch and the Leader, keeps the reader invested in the unfolding story. The fading interest in some earlier plot points is made up for by the urgency of the new mystery.
One of the Ear's black vans has been modified with large
speakers wired to the roof. As the van rolls down the street,
the speakers drone with a looped message.
SPEAKERS
The terrorist is dead. No further
threat exists. Everything is under
control.
(CONTINUED)
140 CONTINUED: 140
Out of the back, soldiers hurl leaflets that swirl and flutter
in the van's wake.
The little girl on the bicycle that we saw earlier stops and
picks up one of the leaflets.
It has a picture with the body of Roger Dascombe beneath the
headline, "The terrorist is dead! London is safe once again!"
LITTLE GIRL
Bollocks.
She crumbles the leaflet and throws it.
LITTLE GIRL
Bollocks!
She gets off her bike and takes something out of the backpack.
LITTLE GIRL
He's not dead! It's all bollocks!
Turning to a nearby wall, she spray paints a large circle
around a "V".
141 INT. FINCH'S OFFICE 141
A recording of VTV plays on the small television.
V
... if you give me the line of the
queen, I'll give you your secret
dream.
Dominic freezes the image; V stares at them, smiling.
FINCH
Play it again.
DOMINIC
Come on, Finch. We've seen it fifty
times. I mean, after what they done
to you, I don't know why we're even
trying to stop him.
Finch stares out the window.
FINCH
I don't know. For twenty seven years,
I've been at this job. Twenty seven
years, I've done what I've been told
to do. Maybe that's all there is to
it. I'm just a dumb old dog. A
dumb old dog that only knows one
trick.
(CONTINUED)
141 CONTINUED: 141
DOMINIC
That ain't it, Finch. It's more
than that. I know you. It's
something personal with this one.
Finch smiles.
FINCH
Maybe. And maybe I'm not ready for
a revolution.
DOMINIC
Well, we got less than thirty hours
to stop it.
FINCH
We will.
DOMINIC
How?
FINCH
It's on the tape. I know it. I can
feel it. He did this for a reason.
He needs something.
DOMINIC
What?
FINCH
The line of the Queen?
DOMINIC
But what does that mean?
FINCH
Maybe it's a line from Shakespeare.
Or a book. I don't know.
He rewinds and starts the tape.
V
... This wasn't even my idea, was
it?
FINCH
But right here. He's talking to
someone. Someone specific. Someone
who knows what he wants.
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 8/10
The scene ends with a strong sense of intrigue and unresolved questions. The little girl's defiance and spray-painting of the 'V' directly contradicts the official message, creating immediate suspense. The conversation between Finch and Dominic then introduces a new mystery – the meaning of V's cryptic quote and his motivations – leaving the reader wanting to know more. The scene cleverly uses the 'V' symbol as a visual reminder of the ongoing conflict and ties in the previous scenes. The dialogue between Finch and Dominic is impactful, showcasing a deeper personal stake for Finch, and the countdown to the impending event adds a sense of urgency.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall script maintains a high level of engagement due to several unresolved plotlines. The mystery surrounding V's identity and motivations continues to be a powerful hook. The introduction of new mysteries, like the meaning of the quote and Finch's personal connection to V, keeps the story fresh and prevents it from feeling stale. While some earlier threads might be fading into the background, the constant introduction of new conflicts and the rapidly approaching deadline keeps the reader invested. The scene with the little girl adds a symbolic layer, making the 'V' a more powerful visual symbol of defiance and uncertainty.
V
Remember that night, whispering in
your lover's arms.
Helen Heyer is lying on her bed, eating chocolates, watching
V through calculating eyes.
At her feet, we hear a suckling noise that suddenly stops.
CONRAD
Helen? Helen, why did you want that
tape?
HELEN
Shut up, Conrad. I'm thinking.
She shoves her foot back into his mouth and he continues to
suck on it and each of her toes.
V
... now you've become a part of mine.
HELEN
How? How did you know that?
Conrad moves up her ankle, licking and kissing his way to
her knee.
CONRAD
Know what, my love?
V
Give me the line of the Queen and
I'll give you your secret dream.
She freezes the tape. Her eyes light up and she smiles back
at him.
HELEN
All right. You have a deal.
Conrad licks along the inside of her thigh until she slaps
him.
HELEN
Oh no! Not you. Conrad. Not yet.
Here you can have a chocolate. Open
up. Open!
She shoves the candy in his mouth.
(CONTINUED)
142 CONTINUED: 142
HELEN
Good boy. As for the rest of the
box, perhaps when you're Leader.
She smiles.
HELEN
Right now I need something else
Conrad. I need you to use that pretty
little brain for me. You know all
about the old underground, don't
you?
He nods still gagged with the candy.
HELEN
I need to know everything, understand?
Everything.
Genres:
Thriller, Drama Tone:
Intense, Calculating, Manipulative
Ratings
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 8/10
This scene ends on a cliffhanger, leaving the reader wanting to know what Helen needs from Conrad regarding the underground. The scene expertly interweaves a sexually charged power dynamic between Helen and Conrad with V's cryptic pronouncements on a television screen. The deal struck between Helen and V, and Helen's subsequent request of Conrad, creates immediate suspense, leaving the reader eager to see how this interaction will affect the plot's trajectory. The casual sadism Helen displays towards Conrad adds a disturbing layer that heightens reader intrigue.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall script maintains a high level of intrigue. The unresolved mystery surrounding V's identity and motives continues to drive the narrative. This scene adds another layer of complexity by connecting V to Helen and, by extension, to the political machinations of the regime. The unanswered questions about the 'secret dream' and the 'line of the Queen' leave the reader eager to unravel these mysteries. Even the subplots featuring Finch and Evey continue to generate interest. The overarching themes of rebellion and the struggle against oppression remain compelling.
There are cameras set in front of the large black leather
chair so that the flashing images and data of the Fate
computer system can be seen behind the Leader.
A makeup artist mattes down the Leader's lipstick.
ASSISTANT DIRECTOR
Ready in five, Leader.
The makeup artist adjusts one last hair and scurries off.
ASSISTANT DIRECTOR
In four, three...
He points and the camera's red light goes on.
144 INT. LIVING ROOM 144
The same family, the same squabbling children watching as a
"Special Bulletin" interrupts a laugh track.
LEADER
Good evening London. As Leader of
this great country, I felt it
imperative to speak with you and to
assure you once and for all that the
shadow that recently fell across our
land has indeed passed.
WOMAN
Oh, for fuck's sake.
145 EXT. TELEVISION STORE - NIGHT 145
No one is watching.
LEADER
What we have endured this long year
was no accident, no mere coincidence.
This was not a simple act of terror
conducted by a singular madman. No,
this was a test.
146 INT. KITTY KAT KELLER 146
A drunk struggles up onto his bar stool blocking the TV.
LEADER
It was not me, nor the Party, nor
the government that was threatened
this year. It was our beliefs. Our
faith. I believe that God himself
bore witness to our struggle and
like Job I believe that we have been
vindicated.
The drunk raises his glass.
DRUNK
Remember fifth of November!
The bar cheers.
147 INT. LEADER'S OFFICE 147
The Leader reaches for his Bible.
LEADER
How do I know this? Let me read to
you where I found the answer, where
I so often find the answer. In the
Scripture. Revelations.
148 EXT. STREET CORNER - NIGHT 148
The megaphones blast the Leader's voice.
LEADER (V.O.)
"If any man have an ear, let him
hear."
149 INT. FINCH'S OFFICE 149
There are stacks of printout everywhere.
(CONTINUED)
149 CONTINUED: 149
LEADER (V.O.)
"He that leadeth into captivity shall
go into captivity; he that killeth
with the sword shall be killed with
the sword. Here is the patience and
faith of the Saints."
Finch stops reading, listening to the radio.
LEADER (V.O.)
"And I beheld another beast coming
out of the Earth; and he had two
horns like a lamb and he spake as a
dragon."
Genres:
Drama, Political Thriller Tone:
Serious, Authoritative, Reflective
Ratings
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 7/10
This scene uses multiple locations and perspectives to show the Leader's address to the nation, creating a sense of broad impact and manipulation. The contrasting reactions across different settings (a family, a bar, a street corner) highlight the manipulative nature of the Leader's message, leaving the reader wondering about its effectiveness and the response of the audience. The inclusion of Finch listening intently suggests a deeper significance to the Leader's words and hints at a counterpoint to his message, creating suspense. The quote from Revelations leaves an open-ended feeling, adding to the intrigue.
Script Continuation Score: 8/10
The overall script maintains a strong hook due to the unresolved conflicts surrounding V and the Leader. The Leader's speech in this scene adds another layer to the existing tension, suggesting a deeper power struggle and manipulation at play. The audience's varied reactions to the speech, combined with Finch's perceptive listening, suggest that the narrative will explore the complexities of the regime's control and the potential for rebellion. The ongoing mystery surrounding V's identity and motives, coupled with the introduction of new potential conflicts and hints at future actions, keep the reader invested in the unfolding events. There's a clear build-up toward a potential showdown; however, many threads remain dangling (the journal, the underground network, etc.) ensuring future scenes can still capitalize on them.
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49 -
Manipulations in the Shadows - Overall Grade:
8.5
LEADER (V.O.)
"And he doeth great wonders, so that
he maketh fire come down from Heaven
on the Earth in the sight of men."
V nods, almost laughing as Evey enters the gallery.
LEADER (V.O.)
"And he deceiveth them that dwell on
the Earth by the means of those
miracles which he had the power to
do --"
EVEY
Oh, V, turn it off, please.
V
Of course, my dear.
He reaches over and changes the frequency. We hear voices,
hushed and secret but we recognize them.
CREEDY (V.O.)
But how does he know?
HELEN (V.O.)
I don't know. All I know is he
does... And I know what he wants.
The voices are labored, punctuated by gasps and moans.
EVEY
What is that, V?
(CONTINUED)
150 CONTINUED: 150
V
That, Evey, is what I have been
waiting for.
CREEDY (V.O.)
Do you know what I want? I want you
just like this... Bent over that
black leather chair...
We are pulled by the radio into --
151 INT. CREEDY'S BEDROOM 151
Where we see a tiny microphone hidden in the ceiling light
above the bed.
Helen moans as we drift down, glimpsing Helen, her arms
reaching for the edges of the bed, her back arching up towards
Creedy, behind her, smiling.
CREEDY
What about Conrad?
HELEN
I told you, I'll handle Conrad and V
will take care of Susan. The mob
will take care of the guard and
then... You can use the Finger to
take over.
CREEDY
Use the Finger? You mean like this?
He inserts a finger into her.
HELEN
Oh... oh... that is vulgar...
CREEDY
But you like it?
HELEN
Yes, oh yes, oh you're a pig, Peter...
CREEDY
That I am, misses. But I'm the pig
that's gonna be running this country.
That sends a shiver through Helen's body.
HELEN
Yes and I'm... I'm going to be Eva...
Oh Eva...
Her eyes close and her fists knot the sheets.
(CONTINUED)
151 CONTINUED: 151
HELEN
"Don't cry for me Argen... oh Argen...
Argen... tina!
The word is almost lost in her orgasm.
152 EXT. LONDON 152
The sun rises over London. It is the morning of the fourth.
153 INT. FINCH'S OFFICE 153
Finch looks through the blinds at the morning sun. He has
been up all night. He checks his watch: 6:00am.
FINCH
Eighteen hours.
Rubbing the knot in his neck, he turns back to his office
which is now buried beneath mounds of paper.
Dominic is passed out, sprawled on the couch, and clutching
a printout from Spencer's "Fairy Queen."
FINCH
Dominic!
Dominic jumps, immediately searching the printout.
FINCH
Dominic, go home.
DOMINIC
But I've still got over three hundred
lines from The Fairy Queen.
FINCH
Forget it. There's no more time.
You go home and get some rest. You're
going to need it tonight.
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
This scene ends on a powerful cliffhanger. The eavesdropping on Creedy and Helen's intimate conversation reveals their treacherous plot, leaving the reader desperate to know how V will use this information and what actions will follow. The scene cuts abruptly to Creedy and Helen's sexual encounter, adding a layer of intrigue and tension, making the reader want to see the immediate consequences of their actions. The final shot of Finch's exhausted office and Dominic's realization that 'he's got us' further intensifies the suspense and leaves the reader wanting more.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall narrative maintains a high level of suspense. The overarching mystery of V's identity and plans continues to drive the story forward. This scene provides a significant plot development, revealing Creedy and Helen's conspiracy, which directly connects to the larger conflict with the Leader and the ongoing threat to Finch. Unresolved plotlines from previous scenes, such as Finch's investigation and V's ultimate goals, continue to build anticipation and keep the reader engaged. The fading of older mysteries (like the Larkhill plot) has been successfully compensated by introducing new, immediate stakes.
Helen holds Conrad's chin the way a mother holds a child
when she is telling them something important.
HELEN
Now listen to me, Conrad. This is
the most important moment of our
lives. Everything I've worked and
hoped for comes to this. Susan is a
very dangerous man, especially now,
that's why I need you, Conrad. I
need you to be stronger than him. I
need you to be the better man.
Understand?
Conrad nods.
HELEN
If you do this Conrad, and you do it
right, I'm going to turn you from
the little man I married into the
man of my dreams.
CONRAD
Oh, Helen.
He embraces her to kiss but she turns her perfectly painted
lips.
HELEN
Not on the lips.
Ardently, he kisses her cheek.
156 INT. FINCH'S OFFICE 156
Finch sits alone, palms pressed to his bleary eyes.
FINCH
Give it up, old man. You're not
even sure you want to stop him.
With a red pen, he begins absently drawing red circles around
any V he sees on any piece of paper.
Victims. Vectors. Values. Victory. Words from quotes and
lists.
Suddenly, he stops. Carefully, as if reaching to touch a
butterfly, he slips a single sheet out from the sheaves
covering his desk.
The paper has a long list: the names of all the Queens of
England. He has circled in red the V in Victoria.
(CONTINUED)
156 CONTINUED: 156
When it hits him, it hits him like a falling safe.
FINCH
Christ! That's it! It's got to be
it!
157 INT. LEADER'S OFFICE 157
The intercom clicks on.
LIEUTENANT (V.O.)
Sir, Mr. Heyer is here to see you.
Says it's urgent. And he's here
with his wife, sir.
LEADER
His wife?
LIEUTENANT (V.O.)
Sir, yes, sir -- Wait, you can't go --
The door slaps open.
HELEN
Leader, I'm terribly sorry but I
absolutely must speak with you.
The Leader waves the Lieutenant off.
HELEN
I have something to tell you,
something important but --
She glances at Conrad.
HELEN
I can tell you and only you. In
private.
The Leader studies her.
HELEN
It is a matter of national security.
158 EXT. CITY STREET 158
In his car, Finch races to a corner and slams on the brakes.
He gets out, staring at a shadow on the ground: a "V" in a
circle.
The shadow is cast by a sign for Victoria Station, part of
the abandoned subway.
(CONTINUED)
158 CONTINUED: 158
The gates are chained shut. He fires his pistol into the
lock, kicks open the rusting gates, and descends into the
underground.
159 INT. LEADER'S PRIVATE QUARTERS 159
The Leader closes the door behind them.
LEADER
Now what's this all about, Mrs.
Heyer?
HELEN
Please, forgive me. I've been so
afraid, afraid to come here to talk
to you. I thought he must know. I
was terrified he knew but I had to
come because I knew you were the
only one that can protect me.
LEADER
Protect you from what?
She is unable to go on, seemingly about to burst into tears.
LEADER
Come now, Mrs. Heyer.
He touches her and it is all she needs. She buries her face
into his chest.
HELEN
You won't let him hurt me, will you?
LEADER
Let who hurt you?
HELEN
The terrorist.
LEADER
The terrorist is dead.
HELEN
Oh, how I wanted to believe it,
Leader, but I know it's not true.
LEADER
How?
HELEN
Because I know who the terrorist is.
160 INT. LEADER'S OFFICE 160
Conrad is alone with Fate. He glances about nervously, moving
closer and closer. His fingers reach out and graze the main
keyboard. Taking a deep breath, he turns and begins to type.
161 INT. PRIVATE QUARTERS 161
The Leader takes hold of Helen by her shoulders.
LEADER
Who? Who is it, woman?
HELEN
It's Conrad, Leader. Conrad. My
husband is the terrorist.
LEADER
What?!
Genres:
Thriller, Drama Tone:
Tense, Suspenseful, Emotional, Manipulative
Ratings
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
This scene ends on a massive cliffhanger. Helen's bombshell revelation that her husband, Conrad, is the terrorist throws everything into disarray. The reader is left desperately wanting to know how this will impact the ongoing narrative, especially considering Conrad's access to the Fate computer system. The immediate juxtaposition of Finch discovering the significance of 'Victoria' and Helen's confession creates a powerful sense of urgency and anticipation for the next scene. The scene successfully builds tension and leaves the reader completely hooked.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall script maintains a high level of suspense. Multiple threads are converging: Finch's investigation, V's overarching plan, and now the unexpected twist of Conrad's identity as a potential terrorist. The revelation about Conrad adds a new layer of complexity, connecting seemingly disparate plotlines. The unresolved questions surrounding V's motives and ultimate fate, combined with the new tension introduced by Conrad's secret, ensures the reader remains deeply invested in the narrative's resolution. The pacing is excellent, skillfully interweaving various subplots to create a satisfyingly complex and compelling story.
Conrad accesses the department of water and power. He finds
the correct file and begins rerouting power to a once dead
system.
163 INT. V'S TRAIN STATION 163
A hanging light suddenly sizzles to life. V looks up,
smiling.
164 INT. LEADER'S PRIVATE QUARTERS 164
The Leader stares hard at Helen.
LEADER
How do you know?
HELEN
I saw him, Leader. In the middle of
the night. I heard something. I
went to the landing and that's when
I saw it.
She clutches him.
HELEN
That mask. That hideous smiling
mask.
LEADER
But how did you know it was Heyer?
(CONTINUED)
164 CONTINUED: 164
HELEN
I know, Leader. I know the way a
woman knows.
LEADER
But you have no proof?
HELEN
Proof?
LEADER
Yes, proof? This is an extremely
delicate situation, Mrs. Heyer. It
has been reported that the terrorist
is dead. It would be a catastrophe
to arrest a man now without concrete,
conclusive proof.
Do you have any evidence at all?
Tears well up in Helen's eyes as she shakes her head.
LEADER
But if you're right, if Heyer is
indeed the terrorist...
His eyes fly wide and he spins away from her, throwing open
the door.
HELEN
Leader! Wait!
165 INT. LEADER'S OFFICE 165
Conrad sits calmly across the room.
CONRAD
Is everything all right? Helen?
LEADER
Yes, Mr. Heyer, your wife has done
her duty to her country.
He turns to Helen.
LEADER
Don't worry, Mrs. Heyer. You will
be taken care of. I will launch an
immediate investigation and I promise,
you will be the first to know when
an arrest will be made.
CONRAD
Investigation of what?
(CONTINUED)
165 CONTINUED: 165
LEADER
Subversion, Mr. Heyer. Your wife
was privy to the dialogue of
subversives. That's all you need to
know at this time. Lieutenant!
The Lieutenant appears almost instantly.
LEADER
The Heyers are leaving. I need to
see Mr. Creedy at once.
Helen looks up at the Leader, a smile hidden near the corners
of her perfect red lips.
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 8/10
This scene ends on a cliffhanger, leaving the reader with several unanswered questions. Conrad's seemingly innocent inquiry about what's happening creates immediate tension. The Leader's cryptic response about 'subversion' and his summoning of Creedy hint at further intrigue and potential danger for the Heyers. The scene effectively uses parallel action—Conrad unknowingly rerouting power, and Helen's desperate plea—to heighten suspense and leave the reader wanting to know what happens next. The unresolved accusations against Conrad, coupled with the Leader's sudden shift in behavior, create a compelling hook for the subsequent scene.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall script maintains a high level of intrigue. The mystery surrounding V's identity and motives remains compelling. The introduction of multiple suspects (Conrad, Creedy, etc.) keeps the reader guessing and invested in the unfolding plot. The parallel storylines—V's actions, Finch's investigation, and the political machinations of the Leader—effectively intertwine to create a complex and engaging narrative. This scene successfully advances the suspense building throughout the previous scenes by raising questions about the potential betrayal of Helen and the accuracy of her suspicions. The escalating tension surrounding the potential arrests and the seemingly unrelated action of Conrad activating the power in the train station create a potent mix of anticipation and mystery, making the reader eager to see how everything resolves.
Helen and Conrad get out of the elevator, standing beneath
the rows of new party flags that line the lobby.
HELEN
I want you to go straight to your
office and wait for me to call.
When I do, I want you to come
immediately home. Understood?
CONRAD
Yes, Helen.
She embraces him, pressing her body against his.
HELEN
Oh, Conrad, I'm so proud of you.
CONRAD
I did it, Helen. I did it, didn't
I?
HELEN
Tonight, Conrad.
CONRAD
Tonight.
HELEN
I promise you will never forget
tonight.
She almost kisses him.
(CONTINUED)
166 CONTINUED: 166
HELEN
Goodbye, Conrad.
Smiling, she pivots on her heel and heads for the door. He
reaches for her when --
GUARD
Mr. Heyer! Mr. Heyer!
The front desk guard rushes towards him.
CONRAD
Yes?
GUARD
Sir, this package arrived for you,
sir.
He hands him a small, brown wrapped box.
CONRAD
Thank you.
He looks back for Helen but she is already gone.
167 INT. SUBWAY 167
A single flashlight beam creeps toward us as Finch searches
the detritus of the dead train line.
168 INT. CONRAD'S CAR 168
Sitting at a stoplight, Conrad decides to open the package.
Inside is a cassette tape. The light changes and a car behind
him honks. He starts forward and inserts the tape.
169 INT. SUBWAY 169
Finch crawls up onto the platform of V's hidden station,
staring at the beautiful old train car.
170 INT. CONRAD'S CAR 170
Strangling the steering wheel, Conrad listens to the tape.
The speedometer climbs as everything seems to accelerate.
TAPE (V.O.)
Do you know what I want? I want you
just like this... bent over that
black leather chair.
Helen moans.
171 INT. TRAIN CAR 171
Finch steps inside the car, his flashlight sweeping over the
stacks of gelignite.
FINCH
Oh my god.
172 INT. CONRAD'S CAR 172
A scream builds in Conrad. With tears in his eyes, he stares
out the windshield but sees only the images created by the
tape.
TAPE (V.O.)
Use the Finger?... You mean like
this?... Oh... That's vulgar... But
you like it?... Yes... oh yes.
Conrad loses control and the car careens up onto the sidewalk
and smashes into a brick wall.
Lifting his bloodied forehead, Conrad looks out and sees the
ubiquitous poster partially destroyed by the crash: "Strength
through purity, purity through faith."
173 INT. TRAIN CAR 173
Finch hears something and jerks back, almost falling out of
the car. Aiming his gun, he finds no one. He turns and
bolts.
As the sound of his footsteps fade, V steps out of the
shadows.
174 INT. NEW GOVERNMENT BUILDING 174
The Leader's Lieutenant looks up from his desk and sees Finch
rushing towards him.
FINCH
Is the Leader in?
LIEUTENANT
Yes, but he's meeting with the Captain
of the Guard.
FINCH
Perfect.
LIEUTENANT
Mr. Finch, you can't go in --
Finch charges through the doors.
Genres:
Thriller, Drama Tone:
Tense, Suspenseful, Emotional
Ratings
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
This scene ends on a powerful cliffhanger. The intimate moment between Helen and Conrad is abruptly interrupted, leaving the audience wondering about the contents of the mysterious package. The immediate transition to Finch discovering the explosives in the train car heightens the tension and creates a strong sense of urgency. The subsequent car crash and Finch's frantic escape further propel the narrative forward, leaving the reader eager to uncover the contents of the tape and understand the connection between these seemingly disparate events. The final image of V stepping out of the shadows adds a layer of suspense, hinting at a larger, more sinister plan unfolding.
Script Continuation Score: 10/10
The overall script maintains a high level of suspense and intrigue. The interwoven plotlines involving V, the Leader, and Finch create a compelling narrative that keeps the reader engaged. Unresolved questions about V's identity and motives, the Leader's vulnerabilities, and Finch's role in the unfolding events remain compelling hooks. The introduction of the cassette tape and its contents adds another layer of mystery, promising a significant development in the near future. The pacing is well-maintained, preventing any significant storylines from feeling stagnant.
FINCH
Leader, I need as many men the Captain
can spare and I need them right now.
CAPTAIN
What for?
FINCH
To capture codename V.
176 EXT. CONRAD'S HOUSE 176
Creedy opens the trunk of his car. In the phosphorescent
glow of the streetlight, the set of knives gleam. He bundles
the costume that he tried to planet on Finch into his arms,
then slams the trunk.
Above, a window blind that was cracked open snaps shut.
177 INT. LEADER'S OFFICE 177
The Leader moves towards Finch.
FINCH
He's underground. The old subway.
I know exactly what he's going to
do. If we move quickly, we can be
there, waiting for him.
178 INT. CONRAD'S HOUSE 178
Conrad waits, hidden inside a bedroom closet. He hears the
front door close and his grip tightens around the handle of
a long, steel-necked hammer.
179 INT. LEADER'S OFFICE 179
The Leader is steadily convincing himself of something.
FINCH
Leader, every second we delay...
The Leader lifts his hand, silencing Finch.
LEADER
I'm coming with you.
(CONTINUED)
179 CONTINUED: 179
GUARD
Sir --
LEADER
There will be no discussion --
GUARD
But if Mr. Finch is right --
LEADER
I am sick to death of this terrorist
being everywhere and nowhere! I
will judge whether Mr. Finch is
right and I will judge it with my
own eyes! Do I make myself clear,
Captain?
CAPTAIN
Sir, yes, sir!
Finch is suddenly overwhelmed by a feeling that is common to
chess players. It is the disturbing sense that you have
just done exactly what your opponent wanted.
LEADER
Is there a problem, Mr. Finch?
FINCH
No... no sir.
LEADER
Good. Captain, mobilize your men.
CAPTAIN
Sir, yes, sir.
LEADER
We'll find this bloody bastard and
we will finish him.
Genres:
Thriller, Drama Tone:
Tense, Determined, Authoritative
Ratings
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
This scene ends on a high note of suspense and action. The immediate urgency of Finch's request, the Leader's surprising decision to join the pursuit, and the parallel scene showing Creedy preparing for an ambush all create a strong sense of impending confrontation. The scene concludes with the Leader's powerful declaration of intent, leaving the reader eager to see the confrontation unfold. The last-minute doubt planted in Finch's mind adds an extra layer of intrigue, suggesting a possible twist or unexpected development.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall narrative maintains a strong grip on the reader's attention. The multiple intertwined plotlines – V's activities, the investigation by Finch, the internal conflicts within the regime – are all moving forward, creating a sense of anticipation. The revelation that Conrad might be involved, combined with Finch's sudden unease and Creedy's sinister preparation, adds significant weight to the existing mysteries. While some threads, like Evey's situation, have been momentarily sidelined, the rapid pace and the numerous unresolved conflicts ensure that the reader remains highly engaged.
Evey sits in the gallery, reading Pynchon's "V" just as V
had done. She suddenly feels V watching her.
EVEY
V?
V
Yes.
Evey smiles as V steps out of the shadows.
EVEY
V, what's going to happen?
(CONTINUED)
180 CONTINUED: 180
V
Change, Evey. That's all. Just
change.
EVEY
Is it going to be violent?
V
Yes, I suppose it will.
181 INT. CONRAD'S HOUSE 181
Creedy empties a bottom drawer, making room to hide the
costume. As he does, the closet door behind him slowly creeps
open.
182 INT. SHADOW GALLERY 182
V stands at the jukebox.
EVEY
But why? Why must is be violent?
V
Because, Evey, that is the nature of
change. She is a temperamental
creature that appears in earnest
rarely but, when she does, she will
wear one of two faces. The first
face is the destroyer. It is
lamentable but all true change begins
with death.
183 INT. CONRAD'S HOUSE 183
A dark figure stands over Creedy. The hammer raises, a slash
of silver against the velvety darkness.
184 INT. SHADOW GALLERY 184
V punches a button on the jukebox just as --
185 INT. CONRAD'S HOUSE 185
The hammer falls with a sickening soft crunch.
186 INT. SHADOW GALLERY 186
The song begins to play; a melancholy song that says goodbye
to love.
187 INT. CONRAD'S HOUSE 187
Blood pours down Creedy's snarling face, he snatches one of
V's knives as another hammer blow cracks through his collar
bone.
He screams, lunging at Conrad.
188 INT. SHADOW GALLERY 188
V listens to the song, the smiling eyes somehow knowing.
189 INT. CONRAD'S HOUSE 189
The hammer falls again and again until the metal head is
slick with blood and meat.
Conrad stumbles back, dropping the hammer. He looks down at
the hilt of the knife protruding from his stomach. He yanks
it out and holds V's knife which is bright red with his own
blood.
He collapses to the floor.
190 INT. SHADOW GALLERY 190
The song continues.
EVEY
What is the other face, V?
V
The other face? She is the true
face of change. The face of the
creator. She is the one that remakes
the world. Evey?
EVEY
Yes, V?
V
May I ask you for a favor?
EVEY
Of course.
V
It is a small thing but it would
mean a great deal to me.
EVEY
Tell me.
(CONTINUED)
190 CONTINUED: 190
V
I've never danced before. I've
thought about it many times, here in
this room, listening to the music.
But I've always been alone.
Evey smiles and crosses to him.
EVEY
It would be my pleasure.
He opens his arms and she steps into them. They dance,
standing very close, his gloved hand holding tightly to hers,
her smile against his.
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
This scene expertly intercuts between two parallel storylines: V's philosophical discussion with Evey about the nature of change and the brutal murder of Creedy. The juxtaposition of these two sequences creates a powerful tension. The scene ends with V's unexpected request to dance with Evey, a surprisingly intimate and tender moment following the graphic violence, leaving the reader craving the next scene to see how this unusual pairing will unfold and what role it plays in the larger narrative. The violence against Creedy, left unresolved, acts as a cliffhanger, further propelling the reader forward.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall narrative maintains a strong hook due to the ongoing mystery surrounding V's identity and motives. The unresolved plotlines involving the Leader, Finch, and the various conspirators continue to drive the story forward. This scene successfully adds another layer of complexity by introducing the duality of V’s actions—philosophical contemplation juxtaposed with brutal violence—which maintains reader intrigue and anticipation. The unresolved death of Creedy and the sudden shift to an intimate dance between V and Evey leave the reader eager to discover the next steps in the narrative.
Dozens of military vehicles swarm around the entrance to
Victoria Station while heavily armed men pour through the
gates of the underground.
192 INT. SHADOW GALLERY 192
The song ends.
V
Thank you, Evey. You are an excellent
dancer.
EVEY
All it takes is a little practice.
V
Alas, I have run out of time.
He bows, pressing his frozen lips to her hand. Evey is
suddenly nervous.
EVEY
V? What are you going to do?
V
Don't you remember? I have a date
tonight, Evey.
EVEY
You're coming back though, aren't
you?
She seizes hold of his hand.
EVEY
V, I won't let you leave unless you
promise me that you will come back.
(CONTINUED)
192 CONTINUED: 192
V
Of course, I'll be back. You don't
think you can be rid of me now, do
you?
EVEY
Just promise.
V
I promise.
She lets him go.
193 INT. TRAIN STATION 193
Soldiers swarm through the station. Susan stares in shock,
outraged by the mere presence of the train.
LEADER
Mark my words, Mr. Finch, this man
is going to become an example so
that every man, woman, and child in
this country will remember what
happens to those who would ever think
to stand against the state.
He turns to the Captain.
LEADER
Captain, I need a gas unit down here
with enough nerve gas to fill every
rat-hole in these tunnels.
Suddenly the lights go out.
FINCH
I don't think that will be necessary.
The Leader smiles.
LEADER
There are over one hundred of the
best trained soldiers in this country
down here. Let him come.
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
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Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
This scene ends on a powerful cliffhanger. The tender moment between Evey and V is abruptly cut short by the urgent and violent preparations at Victoria Station, creating immediate tension. V's departure, coupled with Evey's desperate plea for his return and his cryptic promise, leaves the reader desperate to know what happens next. The sudden power outage at the station further heightens the suspense, leaving the reader wondering about the immediate consequences of V's actions and the impending confrontation. The scene perfectly balances emotional intimacy with escalating external threat, creating a strong pull towards the next scene.
Script Continuation Score: 10/10
The overall narrative momentum remains incredibly strong. The story has built a compelling mystery around V's identity and motives, and this scene further intensifies the suspense. Unresolved plot lines, such as the Leader's ruthless determination to capture V and the nature of V's 'date,' keep the reader engaged. The various characters' arcs – Evey's growing attachment to V, the Leader's increasing desperation, and Finch's subtle defiance – all contribute to a potent narrative drive. The introduction of nerve gas into the situation adds a significant layer of tension and threat, ensuring that the stakes remain incredibly high. There is a perfect blend of personal stakes and broad societal implications. No threads are left hanging too long, each one reinforced and intensified as the script progresses.
Five soldiers creep forward in a tight formation, their
flashlights probing every nook and cranny.
Behind them, a secret passage opens and V steps out.
He is among them with frightful speed, a grinning dervish
with blades like metal fangs ripping and rending flesh,
slashing bright in the flashlight.
(CONTINUED)
194 CONTINUED: 194
Other soldiers rush towards the screams and gunfire but they
find only five bodies and warm blood running down the walls.
LEADER
Captain, what's happening?
RADIO (V.O.)
No sign sir. Repeat, no sign of
him.
CAPTAIN
They lost him.
From the opposite end, there is another series of screams
and machine gun fire that lights up the dark tunnel for a
moment. Then, nothing.
FINCH
This... this is a mistake.
LEADER
Don't tell me you're a coward, Mr.
Finch.
Back in the tunnels, V drops from above, his cloak a swirling
cloud of squid ink that hides him in the darkness.
Again, quicksilver knives lash out, drawing fonts of blood.
195 INT. TRAIN STATION 195
Finch can feel the panic that is spreading through the tunnel.
FINCH
Leader, we have to get out of here!
LEADER
This was your idea.
FINCH
It was a mistake. This is what he
wants. He knows us, Leader. He
knows us too well. We have to get
out of here before it's too late --
A voice rings out from hidden speakers, echoing through the
tunnels.
V (V.O.)
Good evening citizens of London.
This is the voice of Fate. Your
fate...
LEADER
What trick is this?
(CONTINUED)
195 CONTINUED: 195
V (V.O.)
Tonight, the face of London is going
to change and I am going to offer
you the chance to change with her.
Your Leader is finished. He will
not leave these tunnels alive.
The Leader screams to be heard over the resonant voice of V.
LEADER
This is an outrage! I order you not
to listen to this!
V (V.O.)
At midnight tonight, the Head will
be destroyed and a new era will begin.
You must now decide if you are going
to be a part of that era.
Everywhere, terrified soldiers listen to the voice.
V (V.O.)
You can choose to stay here and die
with your Leader or you can choose
to be free. The decision is yours
and yours alone.
LEADER
Captain, order all your men to fall
back and secure this position!
V (V.O.)
Some of you have wives. Some of you
have families. All of you have lives.
Consider each of them as you ask
yourself, are they a part of the
past, or are they a part of the
future?
CAPTAIN
Fall back. Fall back and secure the
central platform.
Deep in the tunnel, two soldiers look at each other.
Simultaneously, they drop their guns and run.
LEADER
Any man that disobeys this order
will be court marshaled!
Groups of solders drop their weapons and disappear into the
shadows.
(CONTINUED)
195 CONTINUED: (2) 195
LEADER
Captain! Captain, where are your
men?
The station fills with the sound of boots running wildly
away.
LEADER
Goddammit, I will not tolerate this
insubordination! I want those
deserters shot, Captain.
Finch slowly draws back away from the Leader.
LEADER
Shot on sight!
The few men on the platform are soon the only men left.
CAPTAIN
You! You! Point position. We're
getting out of here! Now!
A knife sings through the air and buries itself in the
Captain's chest. With a tiny rasp, he falls to the ground.
The remaining men bolt.
LEADER
Traitors! You cowards!
He grabs for the Captain's machine gun.
LEADER
I know who you are! I'll see you
hang! Every last one of you!
"You" echoes down the dark empty throat of the tunnel.
The Leader looks around, his flashlight sweeping in big arcs
as he realizes that he is alone.
The Leader screams, whipping around towards the voice.
V
Alone.
(CONTINUED)
195 CONTINUED: (3) 195
The smile is as cold and as sharp as the knife that flicks
from his hand.
The Leader raises his gun just when the knife sinks into his
shoulder.
Howling in pain, he drops the gun.
LEADER
Damn you! Damn you!
V smiles into the spot of his flashlight.
LEADER
Conrad? Is that you? You're working
with Finch, aren't you? And Creedy!
You're all in this together!
V closes in.
LEADER
Who are you?
V
You, most of all, should know, Leader.
You created me. Without you, I would
never be. More than life, Leader,
you gave me purpose.
V draws his final blade.
V
"He that killeth with the sword,
shall be killed with the sword."
V raises the knife.
LEADER
Noooo!
FINCH
Don't move!
V and the Leader turn to find Finch aiming a machine gun at
V.
LEADER
Mr. Finch! Oh god, Mr. Finch!
FINCH
Drop the knife.
V does and Susan begins an almost hysterical laugh.
(CONTINUED)
195 CONTINUED: (4) 195
LEADER
Oh, I knew it, Mr. Finch. I knew
you wouldn't desert me. You're a
good man, Finch. A damn good man.
FINCH
No, Mr. Susan. No, I'm not. I'm a
man who does his job and does what
he's told. For twenty seven years,
that's all I've been.
He steps toward V, staring into his smiling black eyes.
LEADER
Careful, Mr. Finch. He's quick as
the devil.
Finch ignores the Leader.
FINCH
I've read Delia's diary over and
over all year. It sickens me but I
am unable to judge her. I am as
guilty as she.
LEADER
Mr. Finch, what are you doing? Shoot
him. Kill the bastard, Finch.
FINCH
I have no excuse. I did what I was
told to do.
LEADER
Finch, I order you to shoot him!
Finch!
FINCH
My job was to find you and catch
you. I've done my job. I've done
it for the last time. I'm tired of
it. I'm tired of it all.
He tosses the gun to the Leader.
FINCH
Kill him yourself if you can.
The Leader seethes, his eyes boring into Finch.
FINCH
Thank you, V. And goodbye.
V
Goodbye, Mr. Finch.
(CONTINUED)
195 CONTINUED: (5) 195
The machine gun burst shatters the quiet concrete silence.
Finch falls dead at V's feet.
LEADER
I warned you, Finch, the penalty for
treason is death.
He aims the gun at V.
LEADER
Are you ready to die?
V
The real question is, are you?
The Leader laughs.
LEADER
Do you really believe you can pick
up that knife before I pull this
trigger?
V
No. But I don't have to.
Almost casually, V bends down to pick up the knife --
The Leader screams and fires.
Bullets knock V back a bit but he continues, grabbing the
knife and standing.
Eyes widening with disbelief, the Leader fires another blast
as V begins walking towards him.
The machine gun roars, bullets shredding out through the
back of V's cloak as he continues with short deliberate steps
until --
The hammer clicks against the pin. The gun is empty.
V stands before him.
V
You see? You cannot kill me. There
is no flesh and blood within this
cloak to kill. There is only an
idea.
V smiles.
V
And ideas are bulletproof.
The Leader screams.
(CONTINUED)
195 CONTINUED: (6) 195
V drives the knife into his heart, killing him instantly.
V stands alone amidst the carnage and seeping pools of red.
His body wavers. He takes his hands out from beneath his
cloak and reveals his gloves, wet with blood.
Genres:
Action, Thriller, Drama Tone:
Intense, Suspenseful, Dramatic, Tense, Emotional
Ratings
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 10/10
This scene is a masterclass in suspense and action, leaving the reader breathlessly anticipating what happens next. The relentless pace, the graphic violence, and the dramatic showdown between V and the Leader create an intense climax. The scene ends with a powerful statement about the immortality of ideas, leaving the reader wanting to know the immediate aftermath and the consequences of V's actions. The cliffhanger of Finch's death and the Leader's demise adds further tension, prompting the immediate need to understand the future of the revolution.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The screenplay has maintained a high level of engagement throughout, expertly weaving together action, suspense, and political intrigue. The ongoing conflict between V and the government has been a central driving force, and this scene brings that conflict to a head. While the Leader's death is a major event, it also raises questions about the future of the rebellion and the stability of the state. The unresolved question of V's survival and the fate of Evey, Finch's sacrifice, and the broader implications of V's actions all serve to propel the reader forward. The script’s overall momentum remains strong and the cliffhangers throughout the scenes have kept the reader engaged.
HELEN
Creedy? Creedy, you dumb bastard,
you left your car parked in front.
She walks up the stairs to the bedroom.
HELEN
What did I tell you? Creedy.
197 INT. BEDROOM 197
She steps into the room, her sole and heel sinking into the
plush carpet soaked with blood.
HELEN
Oh my god.
When she sees Creedy's head mashed open, she covers her mouth.
CONRAD
Helen...
Conrad has propped himself against the bed.
HELEN
Conrad! What have you done?
CONRAD
I won, Helen. I did it. I won.
I'm the better man.
He crawls toward her, slipping on the wet carpet.
CONRAD
We've been through a bad patch, Helen.
But now, he's gone... There's nothing
to come between us...
He reaches for her foot, his hand gloved with wet red.
HELEN
Don't touch me! You stupid piece of
shit! You've ruined it! I had it
(MORE)
(CONTINUED)
197 CONTINUED: 197
HELEN (CONT'D)
all planned perfectly and you've
ruined it!
She checks her watch; two hours to midnight.
HELEN
I have to get out of here! I have
to get away!
Conrad seizes hold of her ankle.
CONRAD
Helen --
HELEN
No! Let go! Now!
The look in his eyes frightens her. She tries to kick free
of him but he won't let go. Twisting, she reaches for the
door but slips on the carpet.
HELEN
Conrad, damn you! Let me go!
CONRAD
No, Helen, you're not leaving me...
not this time... not ever.
He crawls up her body still clutching the bloody knife.
HELEN
No, please! Oh god, no! Oh god,
please help me!
Conrad raises the knife.
CONRAD
No one can help us, Helen. God is
dead.
The knife falls.
Genres:
Thriller, Drama Tone:
Tense, Dark, Intense, Emotional
Ratings
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
This scene ends on a powerful cliffhanger. The brutal murder of Creedy is shocking, but the scene's true power lies in the immediate shift to the disturbing interaction between Helen and Conrad. Conrad's descent into madness, fueled by his victory and bloodlust, is terrifying. The scene leaves the reader desperate to know what happens next – will Helen escape? Will Conrad kill her? The unresolved tension and graphic imagery guarantee the reader will rush to the next scene.
Script Continuation Score: 8/10
The overall script maintains a high level of tension and suspense. The interwoven plotlines involving V, Finch, and the government's inner circle keep the reader engaged. The previous scene's cliffhanger, with the Leader heading to confront V, and Finch's realization that he might be played, created momentum. This scene adds another layer of complexity with Conrad's unexpected actions and Helen's desperate situation. While some threads, such as Valerie's story, may be slightly fading into the background, the immediate tension created by Conrad's actions outweighs it, ensuring the reader remains hooked.
Scarlet footprints trail behind V as he struggles down the
stairs.
EVEY
You came back.
(CONTINUED)
198 CONTINUED: 198
He nods and then collapses, rolling down the rest of the
stairs.
EVEY
V! V!
Running to him, she falls to his side. His clothes are slick
with blood.
EVEY
Oh god, what happened?
V
Evey...
EVEY
You need a doctor.
V
It's too late for that...
EVEY
No, don't say that!
V
Evey, listen to me. I've not long
and there are things that must be
said.
His voice strains beneath the mask.
V
I have done that which I came to do.
Now, it is time for me to rest and
with me the past will, at last, find
peace.
Trembling, Evey holds him.
V
But the world, the world is not
saved... Do not think that, when the
fires die and the smoke clears, there
is no miracle... there is only a
path... upon which they must learn
to rule themselves.
EVEY
Yes, they need you, V.
V
Not me, Evey, not me. I told you I
am the villain. The destroyer...
But yes, they will need help...
He reaches up and wipes a tear from her cheek.
(CONTINUED)
198 CONTINUED: (2) 198
V
I kept my promise to you, Evey...
Now you must promise me.
EVEY
What?
V
Promise me... you will discover the
face under this mask... but you will
never look beneath it.
EVEY
I don't understand.
V
Promise me. Please...
EVEY
I promise.
V
Sweet Eve. Wherever I shall go, I
shall always love you.
EVEY
V, you are not going anywhere!
V
Midnight... Midnight. Eve... Make
them remember...
EVEY
You're not going to die, V!
V
Let me be there, Evey, when it
begins... Please, let me hear the
music, one last time... my music...
EVEY
I won't let you die!
V
I know you won't... I know...
EVEY
V!
V
My love... Ave Atque vale...
Holding him as tight as she can, she feels his life drain
away, slipping through her arms in the way the last grains
of sand pour through the neck of the hourglass.
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 9/10
This scene is incredibly compelling because it delivers a powerful emotional climax. V's death is not abrupt; instead, it's a slow, poignant farewell filled with meaningful dialogue and emotional weight. The scene ends with a profound sense of loss, leaving the reader with a powerful sense of closure for V's character arc while simultaneously setting up Evey's continued journey and the consequences of his actions. The lingering questions about V's true identity and the fate of his grand plan create a strong desire to immediately know what happens next, especially considering his final words regarding the 'path' the people must take and the importance of remembering 'midnight'. The emotional turmoil of Evey's grief and V's final words regarding his legacy create a powerful drive to learn what Evey does next to honor his memory.
Script Continuation Score: 10/10
The overall script remains incredibly compelling at this point. The narrative has built to a powerful emotional crescendo with V's death, leaving the reader invested in Evey's future actions and the lasting impact of V's actions on the world. Many plot threads remain unresolved, such as the broader societal implications of V's rebellion, Evey's role in carrying on his legacy, and the aftermath of the Leader's demise. The finality of V's death creates a profound sense of loss, but also opens the door to numerous narrative possibilities, ensuring the reader wants to see how the story concludes and what kind of future Evey will create in his name. The ongoing mystery of V's true identity adds a further element of intrigue, even after his death.
An enormous crowd has begun to gather in the streets
surrounding the New Government Building. With the crowd, a
restlessness swells against each barricade erected by the
military.
A sergeant stands on an armored car, speaking through a
megaphone.
SERGEANT
Return to your homes! There is
nothing to see! The terrorist is
dead!
RABBLE ROUSER 1
He ain't dead!
RABBLE ROUSER 2
He'll be here, just like he said!
200 INT. SHADOW GALLERY 200
Evey huddles against the stair railing, her face tear stained,
staring at the lifeless body of V.
EVEY (V.O.)
I remember... I remember staring at
the mask, at that smile.
She touches the mask, her fingers finding its edge.
EVEY (V.O.)
Part of me couldn't believe he was
dead and maybe that was why. The
smile was still the same. It made
me want to tear it off so I could
see the face, so I could see that he
was dead.
Her fingers stop.
EVEY (V.O.)
But I had promised.
V (V.O.)
You will discover the face under
this mask but you will never look
beneath it.
(CONTINUED)
200 CONTINUED: 200
EVEY (V.O.)
I began to try to imagine his face.
Of course, I had long pictured my
father behind that smile but I knew
in my heart that V was not my father.
Evey stares into the eyes, the dark, empty eyes.
EVEY (V.O.)
Yet every time I pictured another
face, any face, something was lost,
something important was somehow
diminished. V was more than a face.
V was V.
Her expression changes.
EVEY (V.O.)
And then, quite suddenly, quite
naturally, I realized whose face
must be beneath that mask. It was
the only face that mattered.
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 7/10
This scene, while emotionally resonant and providing closure to V's character arc, leaves the reader wanting more. Evey's internal monologue about V's identity and her refusal to let him 'die' creates a powerful sense of lingering purpose. The final line, V's reassurance, feels like a subtle cliffhanger, implying a continuation of his ideology or influence, even in death. The external scene of the restless crowd further fuels the desire to see how Evey's defiance will impact the unfolding revolution. The emotional weight of V's death and Evey's resolve to carry on his legacy is compelling enough to push the reader forward.
Script Continuation Score: 9/10
The overall screenplay maintains a high level of engagement due to its expertly crafted mystery, compelling characters, and escalating stakes. While V's death is a significant event, it doesn't feel like a conclusion, but rather a catalyst. Evey's transformation into a symbol of rebellion, coupled with the unresolved tension from the unresting crowd outside, promises a powerful and potentially explosive finale. The unanswered questions about V's true identity and the future of the revolution provide significant forward momentum. The interwoven personal and political narratives maintain a captivating balance.
Midnight approaches and the crowd feels it. Spilling
everywhere, they fill the streets like a flood.
202 INT. TRAIN CAR 202
Evey sets a final violet carson on the chest of V. He is
lying on a bed made of gelignite, covered in roses.
Touching his mask, she bends over him.
EVEY
Goodbye, my love.
Tenderly, she presses her lips to the smile, her eyes closing,
her final tears blinking free.
She backs away and V smiles, his lips wet with her kiss, his
cheek wet with her tears.
EVEY (V.O.)
"Ave Atque vale."
(CONTINUED)
202 CONTINUED: 202
On the train platform, Evey reaches through the window and
starts the train.
EVEY (V.O.)
I looked it up the next morning.
The wheels churn as the train lurches forward.
EVEY (V.O.)
"Hail and farewell."
V (V.O.)
"Make them remember..."
She watches the train disappear into the tunnel.
EVEY
They will, my love. They will.
203 EXT. CITY STREET 203
The crowd surges against a barricade when a voice cries out
across the city echoing through the megaphone on every corner.
EVEY (V.O.)
"Remember, remember, the fifth of
November!"
High above the gathered mass, a masked figure steps out onto
a roof parapet.
The crowd explodes.
204 INT. SUBWAY 204
The train barrels along, screaming against its rusted rails.
205 EXT. ROOFTOP 205
Dressed as V, Evey stands on the roof's edge, speaking into
a microphone.
EVEY
I have come here tonight to keep a
promise. A promise that is over
four hundred years old. Tonight I
am here to give you your freedom!
Again, the crowd bursts into a frenzy.
EVEY
Since mankind's dawn a handful of
oppressors have accepted the
responsibility over our lives,
(MORE)
(CONTINUED)
205 CONTINUED: 205
EVEY (CONT'D)
responsibility that we should have
accepted ourselves. By doing so,
they took our power. By doing
nothing, we gave it away.
The voice booms over the mesmerized crowd.
EVEY
Tonight, our world will change. Our
leaders will be gone and we must
choose what comes next. A return to
the chains of others or lives of our
own. A world of the past or one of
the future.
She feels the sea of humanity beneath her, almost channeling
their energy.
EVEY
Let us choose carefully, London, and
when we do, let us mark well and
remember, remember this fifth of
November!
The crowd screams as one and their scream becomes --
206 INT. SUBWAY 206
The train hurling like a bullet through a gun barrel. Ahead
the tracks end, buried beneath the rubble of the collapsed
tunnel.
207 INT. TRAIN CAR 207
Inside the rattling train, V lays in perfect repose.
V (V.O.)
Let me be there, Evey, when it
begins...
208 EXT. ROOFTOPS 208
Hidden and alone, Evey pulls the mask from her face.
V (V.O.)
Please let me hear the music... one
last time... my music.
Almost unconsciously, Evey raises her hand and coaxes the
first soft notes as he had once done.
V (V.O.)
At first, you have to listen
carefully.
The violins of the 1812 overture steadily rise.
(CONTINUED)
208 CONTINUED: 208
V (V.O.)
Ah, yes. There it is. Beautiful,
is it not?
Evey smiles, her hand still gently conducting.
EVEY
Yes, my love. Yes it is.
209 INT. SUBWAY 209
With the clash of cymbals, the train crashes into the wall
of rubble.
210 EXT. NEW GOVERNMENT BUILDING 210
The entire building opens like a time-lapsed rose blooming
with brilliant orange petals of flame.
211 EXT. CITY STREET 211
The crowd is awash in the baptismal glow of erupting flame.
212 EXT. ROOFTOP 212
Evey watches the explosion, a star-burst of flaming debris
searing against the night sky like fireworks.
213 EXT. CITY STREET 213
The masses burst through the barricades with a euphoric
frenzy.
214 EXT. ROOFTOP 214
The explosion begins to slowly die.
EVEY (V.O.)
I know that there is only one way to
repay him for what he did.
She looks down at the mask.
EVEY (V.O.)
And I know that that way is going to
take a lot of hard work.
She smiles.
EVEY (V.O.)
I know this like I know the sun will
rise tomorrow and beneath that new
sun, our work will begin.
The fire fades and Evey turns, cradling the mask, and walks
away.
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Compelled to keep Reading Score: 10/10
This final scene is incredibly compelling due to its powerful imagery and emotional resonance. The act of Evey placing the final violet carson on V's chest, kissing him, and starting the train is deeply moving and creates a sense of closure while simultaneously propelling the narrative forward. The explosion of the government building is visually striking and symbolically significant, representing the overthrow of the oppressive regime. Evey's final speech to the crowd is inspiring and leaves the reader with a sense of hope and triumph. The scene ends on a note of determination and sets up the future of the rebellion, leaving the reader wanting to know more about Evey's plans and the new world that will emerge.
Script Continuation Score: 10/10
The entire screenplay maintains a high level of engagement throughout, effectively weaving together multiple plot lines and character arcs. The mysteries surrounding V's identity and motivations are gradually revealed, keeping the reader hooked. The climax, with V's death and the subsequent explosion, is incredibly satisfying and leaves a lasting impact. While the script concludes with Evey's determination to continue V's legacy, it leaves room for further exploration of the post-revolution world and Evey's role in shaping it, encouraging continued engagement with the story even after the final scene.
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Themes
Central Themes in Your Screenplay
When you submit your screenplay to ScriptReader.ai, the Themes section provides an in-depth look at the key ideas that shape your story. These may range from grand concepts like greed, corruption, and power to more personal threads such as family dynamics, redemption, and loyalty. ScriptReader.ai identifies these core ideas and shows you how they interact to form the emotional and moral backbone of your script.
Example of Theme Analysis.
For example, a screenplay inspired by Wall Street might spotlight themes of greed and corruption, the allure of the American Dream, or redemption in a cutthroat financial world. The analysis could highlight how these themes interconnect—perhaps portraying how a young broker’s moral dilemma collides with the corrupt actions of a powerful tycoon.
Another Example of Theme Analysis.
Similarly, a story about systemic corruption might focus on power abuses, journalistic ethics, or personal loss driving a quest for justice. ScriptReader.ai pinpoints where each theme appears, suggests ways to strengthen it in dialogue or plot structure, and demonstrates how multiple themes can work together without overshadowing one another. By clarifying these thematic elements, ScriptReader.ai helps you craft a cohesive, resonant narrative that deeply engages your audience.
Writer's Craft
Writer's Craft Analysis
ScriptReader.ai’s Writer’s Craft section evaluates your screenplay’s strengths in language, style, pacing, and narrative structure. Whether your work conveys dark humor, philosophical undertones, or the high stakes of a financial drama, our analysis spotlights your unique voice and storytelling finesse, highlighting areas where you excel and where you can further refine your craft.
Analyzing Writing Craft.
For instance, a Fight Club inspired script might excel at blending dark humor with introspective and philosophical elements, while still leaving room to expand character backstories or experiment with narrative structure. Similarly, a Wall Street-themed screenplay might feature sharp dialogue and tension, yet benefit from deeper thematic exploration and more robust character arcs.
Refining Narrative Style.
Loglines
Crafting Compelling Loglines
ScriptReader.ai’s Loglines feature offers concise, one-sentence summaries that capture the heart of your story—its protagonist, central conflict, and stakes. From a writer’s perspective, having a range of logline options is invaluable for refining pitches, clarifying your narrative focus, and quickly conveying the essence of your screenplay to potential collaborators, producers, or agents.
AI Suggested Loglines for Anora.
By experimenting with different angles and emphases in multiple logline variations, you’ll discover new insights into your characters, theme, and plot structure. Each logline can highlight a unique facet of the story, helping you to identify what resonates most with your audience. Whether you’re honing your script for professional submission or simply seeking clarity on the core premise, well-crafted loglines serve as powerful storytelling tools.
Video Narration
Bringing Your Screenplay to Life Through Video
ScriptReader.ai’s Video Narration feature allows you to transform your screenplay into a vivid, shareable video. Using curated images and narration derived from the script, this tool immerses viewers in the story’s aesthetic, tone, world—perfect for conveying your unique vision to collaborators, producers, or fans.
Our easy-to-use interface lets you replace images and voice overs, add frames, etc. This way, you can highlight crucial moments, set the mood, and maintain creative control over how your story is presented.
Editing your script's video.
Example of an auto-Generated Preview
By customizing every element—from images and text overlays to audio narration—you can craft a compelling preview that perfectly captures your screenplay’s essence. Whether it’s to share with a focus group, pitch to industry professionals, or simply showcase your creative flair, ScriptReader.ai’s Video Narration feature is designed to bring your story to life in a dynamic and engaging way.
Scene Improvements
Enhancing Your Scenes with AI
ScriptReader.ai’s Scene Improvements feature empowers writers to refine their work, one scene at a time. By setting custom parameters—such as desired tone, pacing, or character focus—you can guide the AI to suggest meaningful enhancements that align with your creative vision. Whether you want tighter dialogue, increased conflict, or a sharper plot twist, this interactive tool helps you identify the tweaks that can make a scene truly stand out.
After generating the revised scene, you’ll see a side-by-side comparison of how it scores across multiple criteria—plot coherence, conflict, originality, dialogue authenticity, unpredictability, and more—compared to your original draft. This transparent scoring gives you immediate insight into what’s working and where further improvements may be needed.
By experimenting with different parameters and reviewing the before-and-after scores, you can hone each scene’s impact without losing your unique voice. This iterative, data-driven approach streamlines the revision process, letting you focus on the creative aspects that matter most while leveraging AI to polish your writing for maximum effect.
Similar Stories
Discover Comparable Works to Inspire Your Script
ScriptReader.ai’s Similar Stories feature suggests existing films, books, or TV shows that share significant themes, tones, or narrative elements with your screenplay.
Analyzing Similar Stories.
By familiarizing yourself with these comparable works, you can:
Identify Trends and Tropes: Spot common storytelling techniques.
Clarify Your Market Position: Pinpoint where your script might sit in the entertainment landscape.
Find Creative Inspiration: Spark ideas for plot twists and character developments.
Finding Your Story's Unique Selling Point.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict
Exploring Internal & External Goals
ScriptReader.ai’s Goals and Philosophical Conflict feature focuses on the driving forces behind your protagonist’s journey—both the personal ambitions (internal goals) and the outward objectives (external goals).
Understanding Character Goals and Conflict.
Beyond their goals, ScriptReader.ai also identifies the core philosophical tension that shapes your protagonist’s moral or existential dilemma.
By clarifying the interplay of internal goals (like self-discovery, redemption, or acceptance) and external goals (career achievement, family reunification, or saving a loved one), you can more effectively structure your script’s tension, plot progression, and character evolution.
Character Development: Watching the protagonist grow through moral and emotional dilemmas.
Narrative Structure: Driving the story forward with rising tension and resolution.
Thematic Depth: Enriching the script’s core themes.
Brainstorm Feature
Explore Your Script with Dynamic Brainstorms
ScriptReader.ai’s Brainstorm feature offers a variety of pre-created prompts and questions to jumpstart your creativity. Each brainstorm tackles your script from a unique angle—helping you delve deeper into character motivations, refine your central themes, or even reimagine entire scenes.
By selecting a brainstorm, you’ll be guided through an interactive process that prompts fresh ideas and strategies for improvement, ranging from tightening your story’s inciting incident to subverting overused tropes. Want to enhance a theme or discover new title suggestions? Our brainstorm modules help you explore these areas and more.
Brainstorming Story Elements.
Sample Brainstorms
Strengthen A Theme: Focus on your primary theme and get targeted suggestions on weaving it more tightly into your script.
Heart of Darkness: Uncover your characters’ deepest fears and hidden desires, enriching their emotional arcs.
Subvert Trope: Flip clichés on their head and discover fresh ways to keep your audience engaged.
Title Suggestions: Generate title concepts that capture your story’s essence, then refine them to perfection.
Need/Want Analysis: Pinpoint the protagonist’s core needs and wants to amplify the story’s drive.
Inciting Incident Analysis: Dissect your script’s catalyst for deeper impact and thematic alignment.
Improve Dialogue: Polish lines, add subtext, and ensure every exchange serves character and plot.
Redesign Scene: Restructure scene beats for better pacing, conflict, and narrative flow.
With each brainstorm, you can review suggestions, modify them, and see how they might align with your script. As you develop your story, these guided exercises ensure you’re continuously challenging your narrative choices and growing as a writer. More brainstorms are on the way—if you have ideas for new prompts, feel free to reach out or submit a feature request!
Screenplay Poster
Visualizing Your Story with a Custom Poster
ScriptReader.ai’s Screenplay Poster feature offers a quick and creative way to encapsulate your screenplay’s essence in a single, eye-catching image. By blending thematic colors, fonts, and symbolic graphics, our tool produces a first-draft poster that captures the overall mood and style of your story—from a dystopian thriller to a feel-good comedy.
While it may not be production-ready, this initial design provides a jumping-off point for exploring your screenplay’s visual identity. It spotlights key elements such as setting, central characters, and tonal cues. Writers can then refine the look and make it truly their own.
Example of a Generated Screenplay Poster.
Poster Edit tool.
Whether you’re showcasing your script at a pitch meeting, sharing it on social media, or simply honing your creative vision, this flexible tool makes it easy to create a visually cohesive representation of your screenplay. By experimenting with design elements, you’ll also gain deeper insight into what aspects of your story resonate most—helping you sharpen your pitch, elevate your marketing materials, and spark conversations about your work.
World Building
Constructing the World of Your Screenplay
ScriptReader.ai’s World Building feature examines the physical environment, culture, and social structures that form the backdrop of your story.
Examining Your Story's Setting.
For example, a screenplay reminiscent of Fight Club may present a grim, urban landscape peppered with abandoned houses, dimly lit dive bars, and industrial backdrops.
How Setting Shapes Character Decisions.
By illustrating how environments, cultural norms, and social dynamics influence your characters’ decisions and motivations, ScriptReader.ai helps you ensure every scene resonates with authenticity.
Unique Voice
Your Screenplay’s Unique Voice
At ScriptReader.ai, we examine how your personal style, tone, and narrative techniques combine to create a one-of-a-kind voice.
Analyzing Your Writing Style.
For instance, a script with a voice defined by “sharp, witty dialogue often laced with sarcasm and irony, introspective narration, and vivid descriptions that create a sense of unease and absurdity” could introduce its distinct perspective from the very first scene.
Spotlighting Your Script’s Distinctive Tone.
By pinpointing which scenes best capture your distinct style—whether through dark humor, satirical dialogue, or vivid tension—ScriptReader.ai helps you refine and amplify your unique voice.
Correlations and Patterns
Correlations in Your Screenplay
ScriptReader.ai’s Correlations feature identifies recurring patterns and connections within your screenplay’s scenes.
Identifying Patterns in Your Screenplay.
By understanding how elements like tension, stakes, dialogue, and character changes intersect, you can strategically craft scenes that amplify each other’s strengths.
Emotions Elicited Analysis
Explore the Emotional Landscape of Your Script
ScriptReader.ai’s Emotions Elicited Analysis dives into how each scene in your screenplay resonates on an emotional level.
Tracking Emotional Impact in Your Script.
Scene-Level Insights
Intensity & Explanation: See whether your scene is brimming with tension or warmth—and why.
Sub-Emotions: Pinpoint specific layers that enrich the emotional texture.
Targeted Suggestions: Receive actionable tips to deepen the emotional impact.
Analyzing Scene-Specific Emotional Patterns.
Script-Wide Patterns & Recommendations
Beyond individual scenes, ScriptReader.ai aggregates the data to reveal overarching trends in your screenplay’s emotional journey.
Overall Emotional Flow in the Script.
Emotion Analysis.
With these insights, you can strategically adjust your script to ensure each scene resonates with the audience exactly as intended.
Story Critique
Comprehensive Story Feedback
ScriptReader.ai’s Story Critique offers a holistic perspective on your screenplay.
Story structure and narrative insights.
By dissecting your script into key sections—Beginning, Middle, and Ending—we pinpoint strengths and areas for refinement.
Evaluating character arcs and pacing.
Overall Critique Highlights
Narrative Strengths: Where your premise excels.
Potential Weaknesses: Subplots that feel underdeveloped.
Actionable Suggestions: Concrete ways to improve your story.
Note: This section covers the broader narrative critique. For a more detailed, scene-by-scene breakdown, check your dashboard.
With Story Critique, you’ll gain a top-level understanding of your script’s strengths and opportunities.
Market Analysis
High-Level Industry Snapshot
ScriptReader.ai’s Market Analysis provides an overview of your screenplay’s potential position in the entertainment industry.
Think of it as a cursory look at whether your story aligns with current audience interests.
Example Breakdown
Budget Estimate: Based on scope, setting, and genre norms.
Target Audience Demographics: Identifies potential age brackets and interest areas.
Marketability: Evaluates script appeal against competition.
Profit Potential: Estimates resonance with audiences and critics.
Note: This feature offers broad-strokes speculation rather than definitive forecasts.
Evaluating screenplay viability in the industry.
Identifying target demographics and trends.
Scene Analysis & Critique
Dive Deep into Individual Scenes
ScriptReader.ai’s Scene Analysis provides a detailed breakdown of each moment in your screenplay—highlighting strengths, weaknesses, expert critiques, and targeted suggestions for improvement. By reviewing these insights, you can refine pacing, strengthen character interactions, and ensure every scene contributes effectively to the overall story arc.
General Scene Summary
Get an at-a-glance look at what happens in the scene: major actions, setting, and how it fits into your screenplay’s broader narrative. We also pinpoint the scene’s principal strengths—like rich character introspection or sharp dialogue—and potential weaknesses that may slow the plot or feel disconnected.
Strengths & Weaknesses
Strengths: Insightful commentary on what’s working, from vivid world-building to emotional depth.
Weaknesses: Identifies issues like inconsistent tone, unnecessary exposition, or slow pacing.
Expert Critiques
ScriptReader.ai presents critiques “from” industry veterans (like Syd Field, Linda Seger, or Robert McKee) tailored to the scene’s storytelling, structure, and character dynamics. These critiques illustrate:
Structural Guidance: Whether the scene serves as an effective inciting incident or transitions smoothly into the next segment.
Character Motivation: Suggestions for reinforcing a protagonist’s goals or clarifying an antagonist’s influence.
Emotional Resonance: How to deepen the audience’s connection with pivotal moments or highlight character arcs.
Follow-up Questions for AI
Each critique includes pointed questions to spark further exploration with the AI—like how to add conflict or foreshadow future events. Answering these prompts helps you refine your scene until it hits the emotional and narrative notes you aim for.
Scene Ratings & Technical Breakdown
In addition to qualitative feedback, ScriptReader.ai offers numerical scores for aspects such as:
Story Content: Concept, Plot, Originality
Character Development: Growth, Motivations, Internal/External Goals
Scene Elements: Conflict Level, Opposition, Stakes, Pacing
These ratings let you track improvements across multiple revisions and see how changes affect the scene’s effectiveness.
Breakdown of key scene elements and critique.
Highlighting strengths, weaknesses, and refinements.
Actionable Suggestions
Finally, each scene’s analysis wraps up with practical tips—ranging from dialogue refinements and tighter exposition to strategic scene openings/endings that amplify tension or emotion. This ensures you have a clear, step-by-step path to elevating your screenplay, scene by scene.
Whether your scene is an intense confrontation, a comedic interlude, or a turning point packed with subtext, ScriptReader.ai’s Scene Analysis breaks it down in detail—helping you polish every moment and keep audiences on the edge of their seats.
Memorable Lines
Highlighting Unforgettable Dialogue
ScriptReader.ai’s Memorable Lines feature showcases the standout moments of dialogue that capture your story’s essence—whether they’re witty comebacks, philosophical observations, or iconic catchphrases. These lines often resonate deeply with audiences, becoming cultural touchstones or references that linger long after the film ends.
We list each memorable line alongside its scene number, so you can easily find the context in your screenplay. Additionally, ScriptReader.ai offers brief commentary on why certain lines work so well—be it their emotional weight, clever construction, or perfect timing in the scene. These insights help you:
Identify Key Moments: Recognize where dialogue heightens tension or underscores a theme.
Refine Character Voices: Ensure each character speaks with a distinct, memorable style.
Strengthen Your Script’s Impact: Amplify crucial lines by revisiting set-up, delivery, or surrounding dialogue.
Examples of standout dialogue in Coco.
By understanding why a particular line resonates—perhaps it’s a succinct expression of your protagonist’s core philosophy or a pivotal moment in a power struggle—you can apply those lessons throughout your script. Make each line work harder to reveal character, drive conflict, or provoke thought, and transform your screenplay into a quotable, lasting piece of cinema.
Tropes
Explore the Core Tropes in Your Screenplay
ScriptReader.ai’s Tropes feature highlights the recognizable storytelling devices and archetypes present in your script—such as “The Anti-Hero,” “Fish Out of Water,” or “The Corrupt Corporate Executive.” These shared patterns can help you quickly understand how readers and viewers might perceive certain characters, conflicts, or plot structures.
Each trope is broken down into its defining traits, its role in your narrative, and how it contributes to the themes or character arcs. By comparing your screenplay’s tropes to well-known examples, you can identify ways to subvert expectations, deepen complexity, or steer clear of cliché. Whether it’s refining a mentor figure or injecting fresh conflict into a rags-to-riches journey, these insights help you fine-tune your script.
Analysis of recurring tropes and their impact on storytelling.
Understanding Your Story’s Building Blocks
Trope Details: Summaries of how each trope appears in your script and what it conveys.
Trope Explanation: A broader description of the trope itself, plus familiar film/book examples for context.
Contextual Insights: Why this trope matters—whether it brings comedic relief, moral complexity, or thematic depth.
Exploring how tropes shape narrative structure and character arcs.
With a clear overview of your screenplay’s tropes, you can decide how to amplify or subvert each one. Perhaps you’ll lean harder into a Fallen Hero theme to increase emotional stakes, or tweak the Moral Dilemma to create more internal tension for your protagonist. By recognizing these structural elements, ScriptReader.ai helps you strategically shape your story’s appeal and originality.
Character Analysis
Delve Deeper into Your Characters
ScriptReader.ai’s Character Analysis feature breaks down each significant character in your screenplay, evaluating aspects like background, personality, goals, arcs, and emotional resonance. Whether you have a protagonist struggling with identity or an anti-hero juggling moral dilemmas, this tool provides a clear, data-driven snapshot of how effectively they function in your story.
You’ll see scores across key categories—like complexity, dialogue, arc progression, and thematic integration—along with suggestions and follow-up questions tailored to strengthen each aspect of the character. By referencing personality frameworks such as MBTI or the Enneagram, the analysis can also inspire fresh ideas for character depth and consistency.
Fight Club Character Analysis.
Each character’s strongest and weakest scenes are highlighted to show where they shine and where there’s room for improvement. Additionally, an overview of how they contribute to the overall narrative—through pivotal choices, relationships, or thematic conflicts—ensures you have a complete picture of their role.
Foundational Definition: Who is your character at their core?
Complexity & Depth: What are their emotional wounds, backstories, or flaws?
Arc Progression: How do they change (or not) throughout the story?
Dialogue & Voice: Does their speech reveal their unique personality and struggles?
Relationships & Impact: How do they affect others, and how are they influenced in return?
Thematic Integration: Do they embody or challenge the script’s core themes?
Character Analysis Fight Club.
Armed with this insight, you’ll be able to refine character motivations, clarify arcs, and highlight the emotional beats that resonate most. From the slight nuances of everyday dialogue to the grand gestures that define a finale, ScriptReader.ai’s Character Analysis ensures your characters feel organic, compelling, and memorable.
Inconsistencies
Inconsistencies in Your Screenplay
When you submit your screenplay to ScriptReader.ai, our Inconsistencies feature highlights any discrepancies in character behavior, plot development, and overall story logic. This helps you pinpoint areas where motivations, actions, or events may not align with the established narrative or character arcs.
Example of Inconsistency Analysis: Wall Street
For instance, a character like Heidi may seem to shift personality traits or motivations unpredictably. The Inconsistencies section would call out specific scenes where this happens, noting how these sudden changes can confuse the audience and weaken the narrative. Similarly, characters such as Clive or Linden might exhibit unpredictable behaviors—oscillating between benevolent guidance and manipulative actions—without sufficient justification or a clear development arc.
Another example of Inconsistency Analysis - Wall Street.
ScriptReader.ai also flags story inconsistencies—such as unclear transitions between realities, unexplained plot devices (like sudden pixelation or virtual reality sequences), and unreliable psychic visions. In addition, if your script features abrupt shifts in tone or unexplained leaps in a character’s knowledge, the Inconsistencies section will guide you to these issues so you can refine and tighten your story for a more cohesive and engaging narrative.
Unique Selling Proposition
Unique Selling Proposition in Your Screenplay
When you submit your screenplay to ScriptReader.ai, the Unique Selling Proposition (USP) section highlights the elements that set your story apart from the rest. This includes the genre mix, setting, character motivations, themes, and any standout narrative twists that shape your screenplay’s overall appeal.
Unique Selling Proposition Analysis For Fight Club.
For instance, in a screenplay like Scores, the USP might highlight its unique blend of crime, drama, and dark humor set in 1990s New York. The analysis would call out how the story delves into the moral challenges faced by the protagonist, Michael Blutrich, as he confronts both the seedy elements of organized crime and the looming pressure from the FBI investigation.
Another Example of USP Analysis - Wall Street.
The USP section might also note the screenplay’s rich character development, the well-paced plot, and the immersive setting that portrays the underbelly of the city’s entertainment industry. By spotlighting these unique attributes, ScriptReader.ai helps you understand and emphasize what makes your work truly stand out.
P/C/R/HR Analysis
P/C/R/HR Section: A Deep Dive Into Your Screenplay
When you submit your script to ScriptReader.ai, the P/C/R/HR (Pass/Consider/Recommend/Highly Recommend) section offers a comprehensive breakdown of your screenplay’s strengths, areas for improvement, and key takeaways.
This detailed analysis focuses on highlighting the elements that are working well in your script, such as strong character development, engaging plotlines, or impactful dialogue, while also identifying potential weaknesses like pacing issues, inconsistent character motivations, or underdeveloped themes.
P/C/R/HR Script Analysis Breakdown.
For each area of feedback, you'll receive specific scene references to help you understand where these strengths or concerns appear in the script. The recommendations provide actionable steps for improvement, ensuring that your script reaches its full potential.
Additionally, the Highlight Reel gives a snapshot of your standout moments—scenes that leave a lasting impression, which you can build on to elevate the overall narrative.
By offering a balanced mix of strengths, areas of concern, and recommendations, the P/C/R/HR section equips you with targeted feedback to refine your story, enhance your screenplay’s marketability, and improve your screenwriting skills.
ScriptReader.ai providing actionable feedback.
Detailed insights into character development.
Using MBTI & Enneagram for Screenwriting
Myers-Briggs Type Indicator (MBTI): The MBTI is a framework that describes how people perceive the world and make decisions. Understanding your MBTI type can help you identify how you naturally approach your work, collaborate, and create characters in your writing.
Enneagram: The Enneagram describes nine core personality types, often with variations known as "wings." It provides insight into motivations, fears, and growth paths—valuable for exploring character arcs or your own creative process.
Using both MBTI and the Enneagram can deepen your self-awareness and support more authentic and engaging character development in screenwriting.
