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# PG SLUGLINE
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EXT STONEGATE PENITENTIARY – DAWN
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EXT STONEGATE PENITENTIARY – MORNING
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INT CORRIDOR – MORNING
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INT CELL BLOCK – LATER
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – AFTERNOON
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INT CELL BLOCK – LATER
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INT SUPERVISOR’S OFFICE – EVENING
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – LATE AFTERNOON
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INT SERVICE CORRIDOR – LATER
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – NIGHT
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INT BREAK ROOM – NIGHT
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INT PARKING LOT – NIGHT
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – MORNING
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – MIDDAY
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INT BREAK ROOM – AFTERNOON
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – EVENING
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EXT STONEGATE PENITENTIARY – DUSK
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INT STAIRWELL – NIGHT (MONITOR FEED)
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – SAME
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INT BREAK ROOM – NIGHT
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INT GUARD’S APARTMENT – DAWN
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INT SERVICE CORRIDOR – DAWN (PHONE FEED)
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INT GUARD’S APARTMENT – MORNING
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – AFTERNOON
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – EVENING
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – EARLY MORNING
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INT BREAK ROOM – MIDDAY
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INT PARKING LOT – EVENING
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INT BREAK ROOM – NIGHT
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INT GUARD’S APARTMENT – EARLY MORNING
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INT CELL BLOCK – MORNING
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INT ADMIN CORRIDOR – MIDDAY
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – NIGHT
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INT CELL BLOCK – NIGHT
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INT SERVICE CORRIDOR – NIGHT
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INT MEDICAL BAY – LATER
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – LATER
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – LATE NIGHT
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INT BREAK ROOM – NIGHT
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – NIGHT
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EXT STONEGATE PENITENTIARY – MORNING
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – LATER
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INT BREAK ROOM – AFTERNOON
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INT ADMIN CORRIDOR – EVENING
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INT GUARD’S APARTMENT – NIGHT
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INT GUARD’S APARTMENT – AFTERNOON
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INT STAIRWELL – DAY (PHONE FEED)
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INT ADMIN CORRIDOR – MORNING
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INT CELL BLOCK – DAY
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INT CELL BLOCK – MORNING
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INT CELL BLOCK – NIGHT
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INT ADMIN CORRIDOR – NIGHT
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – DAWN
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – DAY
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INT CELL BLOCK – NIGHT
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INT ADMIN CORRIDOR – NIGHT
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – NIGHT
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EXT STONEGATE PENITENTIARY – MORNING
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INT CELL BLOCK – DAY
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – DAY
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# PG SLUGLINE
1 1
EXT STONEGATE PENITENTIARY – DAWN
EXT. STONEGATE PENITENTIARY – DAWN
THE EYE NEVER SLEEPS IF SOMETHING HAPPENS, IT'S BECAUSE YOU MISSED IT. Written by Gary J. Rose [email protected]
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EXT STONEGATE PENITENTIARY – MORNING
EXT. STONEGATE PENITENTIARY – MORNING
EXT. STONEGATE PENITENTIARY – MORNING A PARKING LOT. Sparse. Isolated. Surrounded by nothing but flat land and distant tree lines. A modest sedan pulls in.
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INT CORRIDOR – MORNING
INT. CORRIDOR – MORNING
INT. CORRIDOR – MORNING The Guard walks. Concrete walls. Fluorescent lights. The sound of his boots echoes endlessly. He passes SECURITY CAMERAS.
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INT CELL BLOCK – LATER
INT. CELL BLOCK – LATER
INT. CELL BLOCK – LATER Two INMATES exchange words. Tension. Quiet but sharp. Nothing happens. Yet. INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – CONTINUOUS
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – AFTERNOON
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – AFTERNOON
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – AFTERNOON The Guard returns. The chair now warm from the previous shift. He hesitates — then sits. Monitors glow.
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INT CELL BLOCK – LATER
INT. CELL BLOCK – LATER
INT. CELL BLOCK – LATER COUNT TIME. Guards move down the corridor. Doors clang. Numbers called. The rhythm is precise.
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INT SUPERVISOR’S OFFICE – EVENING
INT. SUPERVISOR’S OFFICE – EVENING
INT. SUPERVISOR’S OFFICE – EVENING The Guard stands at attention. The Supervisor reviews the log. SUPERVISOR You flagged the rec room earlier.
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – LATE AFTERNOON
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – LATE AFTERNOON
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – LATE AFTERNOON The Guard watches the monitors. Nothing moves. The quiet is heavy now — no longer calm. Expectant. He checks the LOG. Makes an entry.
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INT SERVICE CORRIDOR – LATER
INT. SERVICE CORRIDOR – LATER
INT. SERVICE CORRIDOR – LATER The laundry cart sits abandoned. One bag has fallen open. Clothes spilled across the floor. No one around. INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – SAME
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – NIGHT
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – NIGHT
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – NIGHT The Guard alone again. He stares at the service corridor feed. Unblinking. INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – NIGHT
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INT BREAK ROOM – NIGHT
INT. BREAK ROOM – NIGHT
INT. BREAK ROOM – NIGHT A small, windowless space. Two OFF-DUTY GUARDS drink coffee. Low voices. OFF-DUTY GUARD #1 Maintenance already signed off on the glitch.
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INT PARKING LOT – NIGHT
INT. PARKING LOT – NIGHT
INT. PARKING LOT – NIGHT The Guard walks to his car. The prison looms behind him. Lit. Watching. He unlocks the car. Pauses.
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – MORNING
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – MORNING
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – MORNING Shift change. A NEW GUARD takes the chair. The Guard stands off to the side.
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – MIDDAY
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – MIDDAY
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – MIDDAY The monitors blur slightly as the sun shifts. Glare creeps in at the edges. The Guard adjusts blinds. Angles screens.
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INT BREAK ROOM – AFTERNOON
INT. BREAK ROOM – AFTERNOON
INT. BREAK ROOM – AFTERNOON The Guard sits alone. Coffee untouched. A TELEVISION murmurs with a daytime news show. He isn’t watching it.
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – EVENING
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – EVENING
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – EVENING The Supervisor appears at the doorway. SUPERVISOR You’ve been logging a lot. The Guard looks up.
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EXT STONEGATE PENITENTIARY – DUSK
EXT. STONEGATE PENITENTIARY – DUSK
EXT. STONEGATE PENITENTIARY – DUSK The prison at shift change. Lights warming. Shadows stretching. The watchtower glowing brighter than before. INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – NIGHT
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INT STAIRWELL – NIGHT (MONITOR FEED)
INT. STAIRWELL – NIGHT (MONITOR FEED)
INT. STAIRWELL – NIGHT (MONITOR FEED) Still empty. Then— A flicker. Something passes through frame. Too fast to identify.
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – SAME
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – SAME
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – SAME The Guard watches, tense. The guards look up toward the camera. One gives a slight shrug. RADIO (V.O.)
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INT BREAK ROOM – NIGHT
INT. BREAK ROOM – NIGHT
INT. BREAK ROOM – NIGHT The Guard sits alone. A vending machine hums. He rubs his temples. Another GUARD enters.
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INT GUARD’S APARTMENT – DAWN
INT. GUARD’S APARTMENT – DAWN
INT. GUARD’S APARTMENT – DAWN The Guard enters quietly. Doesn’t turn on lights. He sets his keys down. Stops.
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INT SERVICE CORRIDOR – DAWN (PHONE FEED)
INT. SERVICE CORRIDOR – DAWN (PHONE FEED)
INT. SERVICE CORRIDOR – DAWN (PHONE FEED) Empty. Still. Nothing there. INT. GUARD’S APARTMENT – CONTINUOUS
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INT GUARD’S APARTMENT – MORNING
INT. GUARD’S APARTMENT – MORNING
INT. GUARD’S APARTMENT – MORNING The Guard finally sets the phone down. Rubs his eyes. He hasn’t slept. He stands.
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – AFTERNOON
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – AFTERNOON
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – AFTERNOON The Guard watches the STAIRWELL feed again. Longer than before. He doesn’t rewind this time. Trusts his eyes.
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – EVENING
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – EVENING
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – EVENING Shift winding down. The Guard’s eyes are red now. He blinks hard.
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – EARLY MORNING
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – EARLY MORNING
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – EARLY MORNING The Guard arrives before his shift. The tower is dark. Monitors asleep. He powers them on himself.
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INT BREAK ROOM – MIDDAY
INT. BREAK ROOM – MIDDAY
INT. BREAK ROOM – MIDDAY The Guard sits with other GUARDS. They eat. Laugh quietly. GUARD #1 You look like hell.
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INT PARKING LOT – EVENING
INT. PARKING LOT – EVENING
INT. PARKING LOT – EVENING The Guard walks toward his car. The prison hums behind him. Lights already coming on again. He stops.
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INT BREAK ROOM – NIGHT
INT. BREAK ROOM – NIGHT
INT. BREAK ROOM – NIGHT Guards talk animatedly. GUARD #1 If that thing got loose— GUARD #2
30 48
INT GUARD’S APARTMENT – EARLY MORNING
INT. GUARD’S APARTMENT – EARLY MORNING
INT. GUARD’S APARTMENT – EARLY MORNING Dark. The Guard sits at the kitchen table. Uniform on. Boots unlaced. He hasn’t slept.
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INT CELL BLOCK – MORNING
INT. CELL BLOCK – MORNING
INT. CELL BLOCK – MORNING Inmates line up. One inmate scratches his arm. Repeatedly. INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – SAME The Guard zooms in.
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INT ADMIN CORRIDOR – MIDDAY
INT. ADMIN CORRIDOR – MIDDAY
INT. ADMIN CORRIDOR – MIDDAY The Guard walks past the Supervisor. SUPERVISOR You doing doubles now? GUARD
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – NIGHT
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – NIGHT
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – NIGHT The Guard watches the STAIRWELL feed again. Nothing there. He leaves it up. INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – CONTINUOUS
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INT CELL BLOCK – NIGHT
INT. CELL BLOCK – NIGHT
INT. CELL BLOCK – NIGHT A door opens. An INMATE steps out with a TRASH BAG. Trustee duty. Routine. INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – SAME
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INT SERVICE CORRIDOR – NIGHT
INT. SERVICE CORRIDOR – NIGHT
INT. SERVICE CORRIDOR – NIGHT The inmate slips. The trash bag tears. Something metal CLATTERS across the floor. INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – CONTINUOUS
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INT MEDICAL BAY – LATER
INT. MEDICAL BAY – LATER
INT. MEDICAL BAY – LATER The injured guard winces as a medic works. The Guard stands just outside the door. Watching. Not involved.
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – LATER
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – LATER
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – LATER Back in the chair. The Guard stares at the service corridor feed. Now perfectly still. He doesn’t log anything.
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – LATE NIGHT
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – LATE NIGHT
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – LATE NIGHT The Guard stands. Walks the perimeter of the tower. Counts his steps unconsciously. Stops at the glass.
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INT BREAK ROOM – NIGHT
INT. BREAK ROOM – NIGHT
INT. BREAK ROOM – NIGHT The Guard pours coffee. Doesn’t drink it. Stares at the surface. The reflection wavers.
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – NIGHT
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – NIGHT
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – NIGHT Back in the chair. The Guard watches the stairwell feed. His eyes flick to the clock. 02:41.
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EXT STONEGATE PENITENTIARY – MORNING
EXT. STONEGATE PENITENTIARY – MORNING
EXT. STONEGATE PENITENTIARY – MORNING Morning light washes over the prison. The watchtower dims. But not completely. INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – MORNING
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – LATER
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – LATER
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – LATER The Supervisor stands behind the Guard. Watching the monitors. SUPERVISOR You’ve had a lot of alerts this week. The Guard nods.
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INT BREAK ROOM – AFTERNOON
INT. BREAK ROOM – AFTERNOON
INT. BREAK ROOM – AFTERNOON Two GUARDS talk quietly. GUARD #1 They’re gonna reset the system. GUARD #2
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INT ADMIN CORRIDOR – EVENING
INT. ADMIN CORRIDOR – EVENING
INT. ADMIN CORRIDOR – EVENING The Guard walks out. The Supervisor catches up. SUPERVISOR Take tomorrow.
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INT GUARD’S APARTMENT – NIGHT
INT. GUARD’S APARTMENT – NIGHT
INT. GUARD’S APARTMENT – NIGHT The Guard sits on the couch. Lights off. He stares at the blank television.
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INT GUARD’S APARTMENT – AFTERNOON
INT. GUARD’S APARTMENT – AFTERNOON
INT. GUARD’S APARTMENT – AFTERNOON The apartment is quiet. Too quiet. The Guard turns on the television. A nature documentary plays. Wide open landscapes.
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INT STAIRWELL – DAY (PHONE FEED)
INT. STAIRWELL – DAY (PHONE FEED)
INT. STAIRWELL – DAY (PHONE FEED) Empty. Still. INT. GUARD’S APARTMENT – CONTINUOUS The Guard watches.
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INT ADMIN CORRIDOR – MORNING
INT. ADMIN CORRIDOR – MORNING
INT. ADMIN CORRIDOR – MORNING The Guard walks the length of the corridor. Slower now. Guards pass him. Some nod. Some don’t. The rhythm feels different.
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INT CELL BLOCK – DAY
INT. CELL BLOCK – DAY
INT. CELL BLOCK – DAY The Guard walks the tier. For the first time, inside the ring. The space feels compressed. Loud. Chaotic. Inmates tower over him now. Close. Too close.
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INT CELL BLOCK – MORNING
INT. CELL BLOCK – MORNING
INT. CELL BLOCK – MORNING The Guard stands post. Inmates move past him. Close. Ordinary. No chaos. No incident. The noise is constant but manageable.
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INT CELL BLOCK – NIGHT
INT. CELL BLOCK – NIGHT
INT. CELL BLOCK – NIGHT The Guard stands his final post of the shift. An inmate laughs. Another complains. Life goes on. INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – NIGHT
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INT ADMIN CORRIDOR – NIGHT
INT. ADMIN CORRIDOR – NIGHT
INT. ADMIN CORRIDOR – NIGHT The Guard walks toward the exit. The Supervisor steps out of an office. SUPERVISOR You heading out?
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – DAWN
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – DAWN
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – DAWN Shift change. The chair empty for a moment. A new GUARD enters. Sits.
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – DAY
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – DAY
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – DAY The tower watches. But no longer defines. INT. LOCKER ROOM – DAY The Guard removes his gear.
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INT CELL BLOCK – NIGHT
INT. CELL BLOCK – NIGHT
INT. CELL BLOCK – NIGHT The Guard walks the tier. Measured. Present. An inmate mutters something under his breath. The Guard stops.
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INT ADMIN CORRIDOR – NIGHT
INT. ADMIN CORRIDOR – NIGHT
INT. ADMIN CORRIDOR – NIGHT The Guard finishes his shift. Signs out. Simple.
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – NIGHT
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – NIGHT
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – NIGHT The chair occupied. The GUARD inside watches calmly. No urgency. No fixation.
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EXT STONEGATE PENITENTIARY – MORNING
EXT. STONEGATE PENITENTIARY – MORNING
EXT. STONEGATE PENITENTIARY – MORNING The system holds. Not because it sees everything— —but because it doesn’t have to. INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – MORNING
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INT CELL BLOCK – DAY
INT. CELL BLOCK – DAY
INT. CELL BLOCK – DAY The Guard handles a minor issue. Two inmates arguing over a phone. He separates them. Speaks quietly. It resolves.
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INT CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – DAY
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – DAY
INT. CENTRAL WATCHTOWER – DAY The tower hums. Monitors blink. Logs fill. The system continues. INT. CELL BLOCK – DAY
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The Eye Never Sleeps

A slow-burn psychological thriller in which the line between technical malfunction and subjective paranoia blurs, forcing a veteran guard to choose between the sanctuary of the watchtower and the hard, human work of walking the tiers.

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

This script offers a unique, minimalist psychological exploration of surveillance culture through the intimate lens of a prison guard's mental unraveling. Unlike typical prison dramas focused on inmates or action, it delves into the psychological cost of being the watcher, making it a timely commentary on modern surveillance society. Its atmospheric, visual storytelling creates a haunting meditation on control, perception, and human fragility that would appeal to audiences seeking thoughtful, character-driven thrillers.

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Average Score: 7.5
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
To improve the script creatively, focus on tightening repetitive sequences that build atmosphere but risk pacing drags, such as the frequent monitoring and rewinding scenes, to maintain momentum and audience engagement. Additionally, develop supporting characters like the Supervisor and Veteran Guard with more personal stakes and interactions to add emotional depth and contrast to the protagonist's journey. Clarifying the logic behind surveillance anomalies, whether psychological or technical, will strengthen thematic coherence and provide clearer narrative payoffs, ensuring the story's psychological thriller elements land with impact.
For Executives:
The script offers solid value as a low-budget psychological thriller with festival appeal, leveraging a unique surveillance theme and strong atmospheric tension to resonate in arthouse markets, but it carries risks from repetitive pacing that could bore audiences and unresolved ambiguities that might confuse viewers or dilute tension. Market perception could be mixed, with potential for critical acclaim in niche circles but limited commercial viability without revisions to sharpen stakes and pacing, as the current structure may struggle to hold mainstream attention despite its timely themes.
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Story Facts
Genres:
Drama 65% Thriller 35%

Setting: Contemporary, Stonegate Penitentiary, a modern prison facility

Themes: Surveillance and its Psychological Impact, Dehumanization and Loss of Identity, The Nature of Control and Order, Isolation and Loneliness, Paranoia and Suspicion, The Mundanity of Routine and the Search for Meaning, The Blurring of Lines Between Duty and Personal Life

Conflict & Stakes: The Guard's internal struggle with paranoia, responsibility, and the psychological effects of surveillance, with the stakes being his mental health and job performance.

Mood: Tense and introspective

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The psychological exploration of a guard's mental state in a high-stakes prison environment.
  • Innovative Idea: The use of surveillance as a central theme, reflecting modern societal concerns.
  • Character Depth: The Guard's internal conflict and development throughout the screenplay.

Comparable Scripts: The Shawshank Redemption, Prison Break, The Green Mile, The Night Of, The Silence of the Lambs, The Prisoner, The Count of Monte Cristo, The Wire, The Experiment

Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

Screenplay Insights

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Overall Score: 7.53
Key Suggestions:
To improve the script from a creative and craft perspective, focus on deepening the development of supporting characters like the Veteran Guard and Inmate by adding backstories and motivations, which will enhance emotional depth and balance the narrative. Additionally, refine pacing in slower middle sections by tightening scenes and building tension more dynamically, drawing from techniques in similar films to maintain audience engagement and strengthen the overall psychological thriller elements.
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Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
The script excels in building a tense, atmospheric portrayal of surveillance and psychological strain, but to elevate it, focus on refining pacing by incorporating more varied scene dynamics and external conflicts to avoid monotony. Adding subplots involving inmates and deeper character interactions will enrich the narrative, making it more engaging and multifaceted from a craft perspective, while maintaining the core theme of isolation and vigilance.
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Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The character analysis reveals a strong foundation in the Guard's development, but to elevate the script, focus on deepening emotional layers and interpersonal dynamics. Explore backstories and internal monologues for the Guard and supporting characters like the Supervisor and Inmate to add nuance and avoid one-dimensional portrayals. Enhancing dialogue with more subtext and vulnerability will make interactions more engaging, while emphasizing the Guard's arc through key transformation triggers can heighten emotional resonance and thematic depth, ultimately creating a more immersive and human story.
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Emotional Analysis

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Key Suggestions:
The script's emotional arc is compelling but could be refined by introducing more emotional variety and relief to avoid audience fatigue, such as adding moments of subtle joy or human connection. Enhancing character empathy, particularly for supporting roles like inmates and the supervisor, would deepen interactions and provide richer emotional layers, making the narrative more engaging and balanced from a craft perspective.
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Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
From a creative and craft perspective, the script effectively builds tension through the protagonist's evolving goals and philosophical conflicts, but could benefit from earlier integration of the Surveillance vs. Autonomy theme to deepen character development and maintain audience engagement throughout. Tightening the pacing of internal stakes resolution, which occurs late at 85%, would allow for a more balanced character arc and avoid potential lulls in the narrative, enhancing the overall emotional impact and thematic resonance.
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Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
From a creative perspective, the script masterfully captures the psychological weight of surveillance, but to enhance its craft, consider varying the pacing and scene structure to avoid monotony in the routine elements. Introduce more subtle character development moments, such as deeper internal monologues or symbolic visuals, to amplify the emotional resonance and prevent the narrative from feeling repetitive, ultimately making the guard's arc more compelling and the overall story more dynamic.
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Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
To enhance the script's creative integrity, focus on resolving key character and plot inconsistencies, such as the Guard's fluctuating obsessive and fatigued behaviors, and the unexplained Trustee's fall incident. Streamlining redundancies, like repetitive depictions of the prison's atmosphere and the Guard's logging habits, will tighten the narrative, build stronger emotional arcs, and maintain audience engagement without diluting tension or thematic depth.
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Unique Voice

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Key Suggestions:
The script's minimalist and evocative voice effectively builds tension and atmosphere, but to elevate it creatively, consider introducing subtle variations in pacing and character introspection to avoid monotony and deepen emotional resonance. This would enhance the psychological depth without diluting the core themes of surveillance and isolation, making the narrative more engaging and impactful for audiences.
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Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
The screenplay effectively builds tension and atmosphere in a prison setting but can be elevated by focusing on deeper character motivations and backstories, more dynamic dialogue to reveal subtext, and varied pacing to sustain engagement. Incorporating suggested exercises and resources will help refine these elements, making the narrative more emotionally compelling and immersive.
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Memorable Lines
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Tropes
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World Building

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Key Suggestions:
The script's world building effectively creates a suffocating atmosphere of surveillance and isolation, enhancing the psychological thriller elements, but to improve from a craft perspective, focus on deepening character backstories and interactions to make the inmates and guards more relatable and less archetypal. This would add emotional layers, preventing the narrative from relying too heavily on environmental descriptions and allowing for more dynamic pacing and tension buildup through personal conflicts.
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Correlations

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Key Suggestions:
The script's atmospheric tension and plot are strong assets, but analysis reveals opportunities for improvement by enhancing dialogue in high-tension scenes to add emotional depth and reveal character more effectively, while maintaining consistent conflict throughout to prevent pacing dips in the reflective later acts. Integrating character evolution earlier could hook audiences sooner, creating a more balanced and engaging narrative that avoids over-reliance on descriptive elements.
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