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# PG SLUGLINE
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EXT NORTH ATLANTIC – NIGHT
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INT CARPATHIA – PASSENGER DINING SALOON – NIGHT
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INT CARPATHIA – WIRELESS ROOM – NIGHT
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INT CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT
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INT CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT
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INT CARPATHIA – ENGINE ROOM – NIGHT
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INT CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT
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EXT NORTH ATLANTIC – NIGHT
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INT CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT
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INT CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT
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INT CARPATHIA – PASSENGER CABIN – NIGHT
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INT CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT
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INT CARPATHIA – INFIRMARY – NIGHT
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INT CARPATHIA – ENGINE ROOM – NIGHT
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INT CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – PRE DAWN
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INT CARPATHIA – ENGINE ROOM – PRE DAWN
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INT CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – PRE DAWN
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EXT NORTH ATLANTIC – PRE DAWN
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EXT NORTH ATLANTIC – PRE DAWN
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INT CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – PRE DAWN
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INT CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – PRE DAWN
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INT CARPATHIA – INFIRMARY – PRE DAWN
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EXT NORTH ATLANTIC – DAWN
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INT CARPATHIA – DECK – MORNING
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INT CARPATHIA – DECK – MORNING
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INT CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – MORNING
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INT CARPATHIA – DECK – MORNING
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INT CARPATHIA – DECK – MORNING
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INT CARPATHIA – DECK – LATE MORNING
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INT CARPATHIA – WIRELESS ROOM – LATE MORNING
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INT CARPATHIA – PASSENGER CABIN – LATE MORNING
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INT CARPATHIA – DECK – AFTERNOON
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EXT NORTH ATLANTIC – AFTERNOON
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INT CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – AFTERNOON
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INT CARPATHIA – PASSENGER CABIN – AFTERNOON
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INT CARPATHIA – DECK – LATE AFTERNOON
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INT CARPATHIA – WIRELESS ROOM – LATE AFTERNOON
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EXT NORTH ATLANTIC – SUNSET
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INT CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – EVENING
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INT CARPATHIA – PASSENGER CABIN – EVENING
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INT CARPATHIA – DECK – NIGHT
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INT CARPATHIA – ENGINE ROOM – NIGHT
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INT CARPATHIA – DECK – NIGHT
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INT CARPATHIA – WIRELESS ROOM – NIGHT
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INT CARPATHIA – DECK – NIGHT
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INT CARPATHIA – WIRELESS ROOM – NIGHT
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INT CARPATHIA – INFIRMARY – NIGHT
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INT CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT
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INT CARPATHIA – ENGINE ROOM – NIGHT
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INT CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT
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EXT NORTH ATLANTIC – NIGHT
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INT CARPATHIA – INFIRMARY – NIGHT
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INT CARPATHIA – DECK – NIGHT
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INT CARPATHIA – WIRELESS ROOM – NIGHT
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INT CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT
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INT CARPATHIA – DECK – NIGHT
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INT CARPATHIA – PASSENGER CORRIDOR – NIGHT
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EXT PIER – DAWN
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INT CARPATHIA – DECK – MORNING
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INT CARPATHIA – ENGINE ROOM – MORNING
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# PG SLUGLINE
1 1
EXT NORTH ATLANTIC – NIGHT
EXT. NORTH ATLANTIC – NIGHT
CARPATHIA Written by Gary J Rose Based on the novel Carpathia by Gary J. Rose [email protected]
2 3
INT CARPATHIA – PASSENGER DINING SALOON – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – PASSENGER DINING SALOON – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – PASSENGER DINING SALOON – NIGHT A modest dining room compared to the great liners, but still respectable. Passengers eat late meals. Some laugh softly. Some read. Some stare through portholes at nothing.
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INT CARPATHIA – WIRELESS ROOM – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – WIRELESS ROOM – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – WIRELESS ROOM – NIGHT Cramped. Alive with sound. HAROLD COTTAM (20s), wireless operator, wears headphones. Fingers poised over the key. Static. Routine chatter. Positions. Weather.
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INT CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT Normal rhythm. Quiet. A STEWARD enters—hesitant, careful not to alarm. STEWARD Captain… the wireless room requests
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INT CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT Rostron enters with purpose. The bridge senses it immediately. ROSTRON
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INT CARPATHIA – ENGINE ROOM – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – ENGINE ROOM – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – ENGINE ROOM – NIGHT A RUNNER arrives breathless. RUNNER Chief Engineer! Captain’s orders—full power. Steam diverted.
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INT CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT Ice reports begin coming in from LOOKOUTS. LOOKOUT Ice ahead—small pieces. Rostron nods.
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EXT NORTH ATLANTIC – NIGHT
EXT. NORTH ATLANTIC – NIGHT
EXT. NORTH ATLANTIC – NIGHT Ice appears in the ship’s path—white ghosts against black water. The CARPATHIA slices through a field of it. Too fast.
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INT CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT Dean approaches Rostron again, lower voice now. DEAN Sir… if we hit ice at this speed— ROSTRON
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INT CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT Rostron receives the update without expression. ROSTRON Maintain course. Dean studies him.
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INT CARPATHIA – PASSENGER CABIN – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – PASSENGER CABIN – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – PASSENGER CABIN – NIGHT A FIRST-CLASS PASSENGER, wrapped in blankets, stares at frosted glass. Her breath fogs the window. She knocks on the wall. Hard.
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INT CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT LOOKOUT Ice ahead — close! Dean reacts instinctively.
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INT CARPATHIA – INFIRMARY – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – INFIRMARY – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – INFIRMARY – NIGHT The doctor prepares in silence. Blankets stacked. Supplies counted and re-counted. A NURSE looks up. NURSE
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INT CARPATHIA – ENGINE ROOM – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – ENGINE ROOM – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – ENGINE ROOM – NIGHT Steam pressure spikes again. ENGINEER Chief! Johnston grabs a rail as the ship SHUDDERS.
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INT CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – PRE DAWN
INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – PRE-DAWN
INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – PRE-DAWN Lookouts strain their eyes. Rostron hasn’t slept. Neither has anyone else. DEAN We’re nearing the last position.
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INT CARPATHIA – ENGINE ROOM – PRE DAWN
INT. CARPATHIA – ENGINE ROOM – PRE-DAWN
INT. CARPATHIA – ENGINE ROOM – PRE-DAWN The engines strain even at reduced speed. Johnston listens with his whole body now. ENGINEER Chief… she’s losing efficiency.
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INT CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – PRE DAWN
INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – PRE-DAWN
INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – PRE-DAWN Visibility improves by degrees. Shapes emerge farther out. Rostron leans forward. DEAN
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EXT NORTH ATLANTIC – PRE DAWN
EXT. NORTH ATLANTIC – PRE-DAWN
EXT. NORTH ATLANTIC – PRE-DAWN The gray light strengthens. Shapes sharpen. The sea gives up more of its story. INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – PRE-DAWN
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EXT NORTH ATLANTIC – PRE DAWN
EXT. NORTH ATLANTIC – PRE-DAWN
EXT. NORTH ATLANTIC – PRE-DAWN Debris appears. A wooden chair. A life belt. A crate.
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INT CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – PRE DAWN
INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – PRE-DAWN
INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – PRE-DAWN Dean speaks without meaning to. DEAN We’re too late. Rostron doesn’t answer.
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INT CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – PRE DAWN
INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – PRE-DAWN
INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – PRE-DAWN Rostron watches from the bridge wing. He does not go down to the deck. Not yet. Dean joins him.
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INT CARPATHIA – INFIRMARY – PRE DAWN
INT. CARPATHIA – INFIRMARY – PRE-DAWN
INT. CARPATHIA – INFIRMARY – PRE-DAWN The first SURVIVORS are brought in. The doctor takes over immediately. DOCTOR Wet clothes off. Blankets. Hot
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EXT NORTH ATLANTIC – DAWN
EXT. NORTH ATLANTIC – DAWN
EXT. NORTH ATLANTIC – DAWN The sun breaks the horizon. Cold, pale light reveals the full field. Dozens of lifeboats. Debris everywhere.
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INT CARPATHIA – DECK – MORNING
INT. CARPATHIA – DECK – MORNING
INT. CARPATHIA – DECK – MORNING Survivors huddle together now. Blankets. Steam from breath. A WOMAN suddenly looks up, frantic. WOMAN
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INT CARPATHIA – DECK – MORNING
INT. CARPATHIA – DECK – MORNING
INT. CARPATHIA – DECK – MORNING The deck is crowded now. Survivors sit shoulder to shoulder, wrapped in blankets, eyes hollow. Steam rises from wet clothing.
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INT CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – MORNING
INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – MORNING
INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – MORNING Rostron stands at the chart table again. But the chart looks different now. No longer a race. A responsibility.
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INT CARPATHIA – DECK – MORNING
INT. CARPATHIA – DECK – MORNING
INT. CARPATHIA – DECK – MORNING A GROUP OF SURVIVORS huddle together. A WOMAN suddenly stands. WOMAN
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INT CARPATHIA – DECK – MORNING
INT. CARPATHIA – DECK – MORNING
INT. CARPATHIA – DECK – MORNING Rostron steps onto the deck again. Survivors look up. Some recognize him now. A MAN tries to stand — fails.
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INT CARPATHIA – DECK – LATE MORNING
INT. CARPATHIA – DECK – LATE MORNING
INT. CARPATHIA – DECK – LATE MORNING The survivors are more awake now. That’s not an improvement. Some talk quietly. Others stare outward, refusing to look at one another.
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INT CARPATHIA – WIRELESS ROOM – LATE MORNING
INT. CARPATHIA – WIRELESS ROOM – LATE MORNING
INT. CARPATHIA – WIRELESS ROOM – LATE MORNING Messages come in faster now. Cottam reads, grim. COTTAM Press inquiries. Shipping offices.
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INT CARPATHIA – PASSENGER CABIN – LATE MORNING
INT. CARPATHIA – PASSENGER CABIN – LATE MORNING
INT. CARPATHIA – PASSENGER CABIN – LATE MORNING J. BRUCE ISMAY (50s), pale, wrapped in a blanket, sits alone on the edge of a bunk. He hasn’t spoken. He hasn’t moved.
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INT CARPATHIA – DECK – AFTERNOON
INT. CARPATHIA – DECK – AFTERNOON
INT. CARPATHIA – DECK – AFTERNOON Survivors begin to recognize one another. A MAN suddenly shouts — MAN Emily!
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EXT NORTH ATLANTIC – AFTERNOON
EXT. NORTH ATLANTIC – AFTERNOON
EXT. NORTH ATLANTIC – AFTERNOON The CARPATHIA cuts steadily through open water. Behind her, the site of the disaster disappears. Ahead, the world waits. INT. CARPATHIA – DECK – AFTERNOON
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INT CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – AFTERNOON
INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – AFTERNOON
INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – AFTERNOON Rostron studies the chart again. The line back to New York is clean now. Dean enters with a stack of messages. DEAN
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INT CARPATHIA – PASSENGER CABIN – AFTERNOON
INT. CARPATHIA – PASSENGER CABIN – AFTERNOON
INT. CARPATHIA – PASSENGER CABIN – AFTERNOON Ismay sits alone again. A knock. He doesn’t answer. The door opens anyway.
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INT CARPATHIA – DECK – LATE AFTERNOON
INT. CARPATHIA – DECK – LATE AFTERNOON
INT. CARPATHIA – DECK – LATE AFTERNOON A MAN stands at the rail. Stares out at the empty sea. Rostron approaches quietly. ROSTRON
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INT CARPATHIA – WIRELESS ROOM – LATE AFTERNOON
INT. CARPATHIA – WIRELESS ROOM – LATE AFTERNOON
INT. CARPATHIA – WIRELESS ROOM – LATE AFTERNOON Cottam receives a new message. He reads it twice. BRIDE What is it?
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EXT NORTH ATLANTIC – SUNSET
EXT. NORTH ATLANTIC – SUNSET
EXT. NORTH ATLANTIC – SUNSET The CARPATHIA sails on. The sea glows briefly with color. Then fades. INT. CARPATHIA – DECK – EVENING
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INT CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – EVENING
INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – EVENING
INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – EVENING Night has fallen again. The bridge is dim, quieter now. Rostron studies the horizon. Dean enters with another message.
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INT CARPATHIA – PASSENGER CABIN – EVENING
INT. CARPATHIA – PASSENGER CABIN – EVENING
INT. CARPATHIA – PASSENGER CABIN – EVENING Ismay sits rigidly on the edge of the bunk. A knock. He doesn’t answer. The door opens slightly.
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INT CARPATHIA – DECK – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – DECK – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – DECK – NIGHT A SURVIVOR wakes suddenly, shouting. SURVIVOR The water—! A SAILOR rushes to him.
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INT CARPATHIA – ENGINE ROOM – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – ENGINE ROOM – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – ENGINE ROOM – NIGHT The engines hum at a steady, manageable pace now. Johnston leans against a bulkhead. ENGINEER Never thought we’d make it.
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INT CARPATHIA – DECK – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – DECK – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – DECK – NIGHT Most survivors are asleep now. Or pretending to be. Lantern light flickers across exhausted faces. A STEWARD pauses beside a YOUNG WOMAN, staring out at the
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INT CARPATHIA – WIRELESS ROOM – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – WIRELESS ROOM – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – WIRELESS ROOM – NIGHT Cottam listens. Static. Distant traffic. Bride reads a fresh message. BRIDE
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INT CARPATHIA – DECK – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – DECK – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – DECK – NIGHT Molly Brown sits with a group of WOMEN. She hands one of them a blanket. MOLLY Here. You’ll need it later.
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INT CARPATHIA – WIRELESS ROOM – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – WIRELESS ROOM – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – WIRELESS ROOM – NIGHT Bride removes his headphones. BRIDE They’re asking for interviews.
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INT CARPATHIA – INFIRMARY – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – INFIRMARY – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – INFIRMARY – NIGHT The doctor writes final notes. He stops. Looks at the list again. Counts once more.
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INT CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT Dean stands with Rostron. DEAN Sir… they’re already framing it.
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INT CARPATHIA – ENGINE ROOM – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – ENGINE ROOM – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – ENGINE ROOM – NIGHT Johnston signs off the final engine log. Hands it to an engineer. JOHNSTON That’s the night.
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INT CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT Rostron checks the time. Dean watches him. DEAN Sir… landfall by morning.
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EXT NORTH ATLANTIC – NIGHT
EXT. NORTH ATLANTIC – NIGHT
EXT. NORTH ATLANTIC – NIGHT The CARPATHIA sails toward the waiting lights. Behind her, the ocean closes. INT. CARPATHIA – DECK – NIGHT
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INT CARPATHIA – INFIRMARY – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – INFIRMARY – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – INFIRMARY – NIGHT The doctor gives final instructions. DOCTOR Those who can walk, walk. Those who can’t—stay put.
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INT CARPATHIA – DECK – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – DECK – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – DECK – NIGHT Survivors shield their eyes from the lights. Some wave weakly. Others turn away. A REPORTER’S VOICE carries faintly across the water.
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INT CARPATHIA – WIRELESS ROOM – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – WIRELESS ROOM – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – WIRELESS ROOM – NIGHT Cottam removes his headphones. For the first time since the distress call, the room is quiet. Bride looks at him.
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INT CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – BRIDGE – NIGHT Dean approaches Rostron. DEAN Sir… they’re asking for you. Rostron knows who “they” are.
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INT CARPATHIA – DECK – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – DECK – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – DECK – NIGHT Survivors continue to disembark. Some pause at the gangway. Touch the rail. The deck.
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INT CARPATHIA – PASSENGER CORRIDOR – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – PASSENGER CORRIDOR – NIGHT
INT. CARPATHIA – PASSENGER CORRIDOR – NIGHT Ismay walks toward the gangway, flanked by officials. Voices rise behind him. Someone calls his name. He does not turn.
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EXT PIER – DAWN
EXT. PIER – DAWN
EXT. PIER – DAWN The CARPATHIA prepares to depart. Lines loosen. The ship eases away from the dock. No crowd now.
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INT CARPATHIA – DECK – MORNING
INT. CARPATHIA – DECK – MORNING
INT. CARPATHIA – DECK – MORNING Crew resume routine. A SAILOR chips ice from a rail. Another coils rope, humming softly. Life reasserts itself.
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INT CARPATHIA – ENGINE ROOM – MORNING
INT. CARPATHIA – ENGINE ROOM – MORNING
INT. CARPATHIA – ENGINE ROOM – MORNING The engines run smooth now. Steady. Reliable. Johnston listens — satisfied.
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Carpathia

As wireless static crackles with desperation, Captain Arthur Rostron steers his ship into an icy nightmare, transforming a routine voyage into a desperate bid to save the unsinkable's survivors.

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

This script offers a fresh perspective on the Titanic disaster by focusing not on the sinking ship but on the rescue vessel—exploring themes of duty, quiet heroism, and the aftermath of trauma. It distinguishes itself through its minimalist approach, emphasizing procedural realism over melodrama, and its focus on the psychological weight of rescue rather than spectacle.

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Average Score: 8.3
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
To elevate your script, focus on deepening character interiority and arcs, particularly for Captain Rostron and supporting characters like Cottam and Ismay, by adding subtle backstories and emotional vulnerabilities. Incorporate more varied emotional responses among survivors to avoid uniformity, and expand key moments in the aftermath to provide cathartic resolution, ensuring the story resonates on a personal level without losing its restrained tone. These enhancements will strengthen audience connection and thematic impact.
For Executives:
The script has strong value as a prestige historical drama with commercial potential in awards circuits, offering a fresh angle on the Titanic story through quiet heroism and procedural realism. However, risks include emotional flatness from underdeveloped character arcs and repetitive scenes, which could limit broad appeal and necessitate rewrites; market perception may view it as niche, potentially underperforming if not made more engaging, though its restraint could attract discerning audiences.
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Story Facts
Genres:
Drama 60% Thriller 40%

Setting: April 1912, North Atlantic Ocean aboard the RMS Carpathia

Themes: Duty and Sacrifice, Humanity and Compassion, Quiet Resilience and Understated Heroism, Responsibility and Accountability, The Contrast Between Hubris and Humility, The Weight of Memory and Trauma, The Nature of Truth and Narrative

Conflict & Stakes: The primary conflict revolves around the urgent rescue of Titanic survivors amidst navigational hazards, with the stakes being the lives of those in peril and the moral responsibility of the Carpathia's crew.

Mood: Somber and reflective, with moments of tension and urgency.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The story is based on the true events of the Titanic disaster and the subsequent rescue efforts by the Carpathia, providing a compelling historical narrative.
  • Character Development: The film explores the emotional and moral complexities faced by the crew and survivors, particularly through characters like Captain Rostron and J. Bruce Ismay.
  • Historical Accuracy: The screenplay emphasizes real historical events and figures, appealing to audiences interested in authentic storytelling.
  • Tension and Urgency: The constant threat of ice and the urgency of the rescue create a gripping atmosphere throughout the film.

Comparable Scripts: Titanic (1997), The Perfect Storm (2000), A Night to Remember (1958), Master and Commander: The Far Side of the World (2003), The Finest Hours (2016), The Abyss (1989), The Hunt for Red October (1990), The Poseidon Adventure (1972), The Sea (2013)

Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

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Screenplay Insights

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Overall Score: 7.74
Key Suggestions:
To elevate the script's creative potential, focus on deepening character arcs and emotional layers, particularly by expanding backstories and internal conflicts for characters like Ismay and secondary figures. This will enhance relatability and thematic resonance, making the narrative more immersive and impactful from a craft perspective, while leveraging the strong foundation in historical accuracy and tension-building.
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Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
The script 'Carpathia' has strong tension and historical atmosphere, but to enhance its craft, focus on making dialogue less expository by allowing emotions to emerge naturally through subtle actions and subtext. Additionally, deepen the portrayal of passengers' experiences with more personal backstories and vignettes to heighten emotional stakes and create a more immersive narrative, ensuring the audience connects deeply with the human cost of the disaster.
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Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The character analysis highlights that while core characters like Rostron and Cottam are well-developed with strong arcs, supporting characters such as Dean, Bride, and the Steward could benefit from deeper backstories and emotional layers to enhance audience engagement. Focusing on refining dialogue to reveal internal conflicts and vulnerabilities, as suggested across multiple analyses, will strengthen the script's emotional resonance and thematic depth, making the narrative more compelling and human-centric in this historical drama.
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Emotional Analysis

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Key Suggestions:
To enhance the script's emotional depth and engagement, focus on diversifying the emotional spectrum by incorporating more positive emotions like joy and hope, particularly in the second half, to avoid a monotonous plateau of sadness. Develop deeper character arcs and personal stakes for secondary characters, such as Cottam and Johnston, to foster stronger audience empathy and create dynamic emotional transitions. This will prevent fatigue, build a more resonant narrative, and ensure the story's emotional journey mirrors the complexity of human experience in crisis and aftermath.
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Goals and Philosophical Conflict

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Key Suggestions:
The analysis reveals that Captain Rostron's internal and external goals drive the narrative, but to elevate the script's craft, focus on deepening the emotional layers of his philosophical conflict between duty and trauma. By adding more nuanced, introspective moments—such as subtle flashbacks or internal monologues during key scenes—you can enhance character development and thematic resonance, making the story more engaging and human-centered while ensuring the resolution feels earned and impactful.
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Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
From a creative perspective, the script effectively captures the essence of quiet heroism through its themes, but to enhance emotional resonance and audience engagement, consider deepening character backstories and internal conflicts—such as Rostron's personal reflections or the wireless operators' stress—to make the duty and sacrifice more visceral and relatable. This would amplify the primary theme without altering the understated tone, ensuring that the human elements shine through in key scenes like the engine room strains or survivor interactions, potentially making the narrative more compelling and craftily polished for broader appeal.
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Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
The script's analysis reveals opportunities to enhance character depth and narrative flow, particularly by making Captain Rostron's responses more emotionally nuanced to reflect human vulnerability, and by refining the timeline and ice-related plot elements for greater clarity and tension. These adjustments would strengthen the story's authenticity, improve audience engagement, and ensure a more cohesive portrayal of the historical event, ultimately elevating the screenplay's craft and emotional impact.
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Scene Analysis

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Writer Exec

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Unique Voice

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Key Suggestions:
The script's voice excels in building tension through concise dialogue and vivid descriptions, effectively capturing the weight of responsibility and human resilience. To improve, focus on varying the pacing to allow for moments of quieter introspection, which could deepen character development and prevent the terse style from becoming repetitive, ensuring a more nuanced emotional journey that resonates with audiences.
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Writer's Craft

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Key Suggestions:
To enhance this screenplay's creative craft, focus on deepening character motivations and internal conflicts to build stronger emotional connections, refine dialogue to incorporate more subtext for nuanced interactions, and improve pacing in high-stakes scenes to sustain tension and engagement. By addressing these areas, the writer can transform a solid narrative into a more immersive and resonant story that captivates audiences through heightened emotional depth and dynamic character arcs.
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Memorable Lines
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Tropes
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World Building

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Key Suggestions:
The world building in this script effectively creates a tense, immersive atmosphere of isolation and urgency in the North Atlantic, enhancing the narrative's emotional depth and character arcs. To improve from a craft perspective, consider amplifying sensory details and interpersonal dynamics to further humanize the crew and survivors, making the themes of unsung heroism and resilience more relatable and impactful, while ensuring the hierarchical society doesn't overshadow individual emotional journeys for a more balanced character-driven story.
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Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
The script's strength lies in its emotional depth and historical accuracy, but it could benefit from increased conflict and stakes in reflective scenes to maintain pacing and engagement. By distributing character development more evenly and enhancing dialogue in quieter moments, the writer can create a more dynamic narrative that balances introspection with tension, ensuring the story remains compelling throughout and avoids feeling stagnant in later acts.
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Loglines
Presents logline variations based on theme, genre, and hook.
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