Accidental Valentine

A misfit’s Valentine’s Day goes from lonely to lethal when a blind date turns into a mob hit; with a sexy, dangerous ally and a goat as cover, he stumbles through set-piece after set-piece toward a twist: the city’s feared Red Rose is his long-lost father.

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

The screenplay for "Accidental Valentine" offers a unique blend of genres, seamlessly weaving together elements of action, comedy, and romance to create a highly entertaining and engaging story. The protagonist, Eddie Grieves, is a relatable and sympathetic character who undergoes a compelling journey of self-discovery, while the supporting cast of colorful characters and the high-stakes mob storyline add layers of complexity and excitement. The screenplay's stylistic flair, with its snappy dialogue, dynamic pacing, and creative use of visual storytelling, sets it apart from more conventional romantic comedies and makes it a compelling read for audiences seeking a fresh and thrilling take on the genre.

AI Verdict & Suggestions

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GPT5
 Recommend
Gemini
 Recommend
Grok
 Recommend
DeepSeek
 Consider
Claude
 Recommend
Average Score: 7.7
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
This is a highly cinematic, laugh-out-loud action-comedy with strong set pieces and a marketable premise. The single biggest rewrite priority is to harmonize tone and strengthen emotional through-lines so the big moments land. Decide whether the film leans darker (mob violence with black comedy) or remains a screwball/action romp, then trim or reframe scenes that create tonal whiplash. Seed the Red Rose/father connection earlier and deepen Nikki’s personal stakes (show, don’t tell why the ledger matters and what she risks). Add one or two quieter scenes that let Eddie make an active choice (not just survive by accident) so his arc resolves emotionally rather than only physically.
For Executives:
Accidental Valentine is commercially appealing: high-concept hook, memorable visual motifs (white jacket, fainting goat), and director-friendly action set pieces that can play to wide audiences. Major upside: franchise potential and clear marketing beats. Main production risks: current script has tonal inconsistency and underdeveloped emotional payoffs that could split audience reception and complicate critical positioning. Fixes are relatively low-cost (focused rewrites to deepen Nikki and father threads, tighten tone and FBI subplot); however expect music clearance and stunt/choreography budgets for the film’s many large set pieces.
Story Facts
Genres:
Action 30% Crime 25% Drama 20% Comedy 40% Romance 15% Thriller 30%

Setting: Modern day, Bronx, Queens, Brooklyn, and Manhattan, New York City

Themes: Chaos and Unpredictability, The Search for Identity and Belonging, Fate vs. Free Will, Absurdity and Dark Humor, Loyalty and Betrayal, Revenge and Justice, The American Dream and Its Disillusionment, Father-Son Relationships and Legacy

Conflict & Stakes: Eddie's struggle to escape his past and avoid the wrath of mobsters after accidentally killing Joey Two Toes, with his life and freedom at stake.

Mood: Chaotic and darkly comedic

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The protagonist's accidental involvement in a mob war due to a series of comedic misadventures.
  • Plot Twist: The revelation that the Red Rose Assassin is Eddie's long-lost father, adding emotional depth to the story.
  • Distinctive Setting: The vibrant and chaotic backdrop of New York City, particularly during Valentine's Day and St. Patrick's Day.
  • Innovative Ideas: The use of a fainting goat as a comedic element throughout the story.

Comparable Scripts: The Hangover, Superbad, Pulp Fiction, Goodfellas, Brooklyn Nine-Nine, The Nice Guys, The 40-Year-Old Virgin, The Big Lebowski, How to Be Single

Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

Screenplay Insights

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Overall Score: 7.50
Key Suggestions:
The script's wild energy and inventive set pieces are its biggest assets, but the emotional core needs to be strengthened so the comedy and action land with lasting weight. Prioritize deepening Eddie's vulnerability (and give Nikki a clearer personal stake) by creating a few quieter beats—brief flashbacks, a sincere conversation, or a moment of aftermath after the violence—so their choices feel earned. Tighten pacing by pruning or compressing scenes that linger on gag setups and instead let key emotional moments breathe. Also turn visual motifs (the white jacket, the red rose, Gary the goat) into recurring symbols that reflect theme and character growth.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
Focus the chaos around a clearer emotional throughline: make Eddie’s quest for a fresh start the engine that both propels and is tested by the mayhem. Add one or two quieter, honest beats (a reflective moment after a violent episode, and a short, revealing exchange with Nikki or his father) so the audience can feel what Eddie is risking and why luck or fate matters to him. Also tighten secondary elements — give Gary the goat and Nikki concrete narrative functions (distraction/key carrier/lever) and streamline a few outlandish coincidences so the film keeps its manic energy without losing emotional payoff.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The character work is strong on voice and comic beats but uneven in emotional weight and agency. The screenplay needs clearer, intentional emotional beats—especially for Eddie—so his accidental heroism reads as growth rather than series of coincidences. Tighten arcs: give Eddie a concrete midpoint choice tied to his father backstory (a small flashback, a keepsake moment, or the jacket discard) that forces him to act deliberately; deepen Nikki’s vulnerability with one quiet scene that explains her motivation; and give the FBI trio one defining human moment so they feel less like background punchlines. Small structural changes that convert reactive choices into deliberate ones will make the stakes land and let the humor and action breathe without undercutting emotional payoff.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
The script delivers strong set pieces and a consistently funny tonal voice, but the emotional through-line needs tightening. The biggest creative fix is to seed genuine vulnerability and small, quieter moments of connection between Eddie and Nikki earlier (and between Eddie and at least one supporting character). That will prevent audience fatigue from sustained high-intensity action, make the late father reveal land, and raise stakes for the climactic sequences—turning spectacle into meaningful payoff without changing the plot beats.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
The analysis shows a strong, propulsive plot and a likeable antihero, but the script risks under-earning Eddie’s emotional payoff. Tighten and highlight the internal arc so the external mayhem serves a clear growth trajectory: show specific moments where Eddie chooses responsibility over flight (small choices before the big ones), tie his father’s reveal thematically to that choice, and make the final ‘acceptance’ explicit and earned rather than implied. Trim or rework scenes that derail tone or dilute his arc so the audience leaves with a clear, satisfying sense of who Eddie has become.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
The script's biggest strength is its delirious energy — a comic-violent romp where chaos repeatedly derails a man trying to reinvent himself. To lift it from entertaining mayhem to a memorable movie, tighten the emotional throughline: make Eddie's inner journey (why he needs a fresh start, what he learns about identity and luck) clearer and more deliberately mirrored by the external chaos. Foreshadow the father/Red Rose reveal earlier and give Eddie more active choices (not just reactions) so his arc lands emotionally. Also pick a tonal anchor and enforce it: the dark humor works, but frequent tonal whiplash between slapstick and real blood dilutes stakes and audience sympathy.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
The script's biggest vulnerability is a believability gap at the core of the climax: Eddie being flagged as the 'Red Rose Assassin' and then being rescued by a suddenly introduced father-figure assassin feels plot-driven rather than character-driven. Fixing this requires clear foreshadowing and a plausible mechanism for the FBI mistake (or intentional framing), plus more earned emotional beats for Eddie's relationship with his father. Tighten tonal balance too—keep Eddie's humor but give him authentic reactions to trauma so the laughs don't undercut the stakes. Rework a small number of earlier scenes to plant evidence/clues and to justify the FBI timeline so the payoff in scene 52 lands without feeling like deus ex machina.

Scene Analysis

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Other Analyses

Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
You have a distinct, marketable voice—sharp, darkly funny, and full of vivid urban detail. Lean into that, but tighten the emotional through-line so the comedy amplifies rather than undercuts the stakes. Right now the script often trades emotional payoff for gag-after-gag; choose a few core moments (Eddie’s reasons for leaving, the father/Red Rose reveal, and Nikki’s motivations) and deepen them so the audience roots for Eddie beyond his quips. Also audit large action set pieces for tonal clarity and pacing: keep the wild comedy, but let a couple of quieter beats land to give the big moments weight and make the payoff earned.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
To enhance the screenplay, the writer should focus on deepening character arcs and internal conflicts, ensuring that characters' motivations are explored more thoroughly. Additionally, refining the plot structure using established frameworks like 'Save the Cat!' can provide clearer character journeys and improve pacing. Incorporating richer sensory details will also elevate the world-building and emotional resonance of the scenes.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
The world is vivid, cinematic and full of propulsive set pieces, but it teeters between broad absurdist comedy and brutal crime drama. To strengthen the script, pick a tonal home (darkly comic neo‑noir is the clearest choice) and refocus every scene — jokes, violence, surreal beats (the fainting goat, Dorito gags, recurring orange dust) — to serve Eddie’s emotional throughline: his need for luck, connection and identity (the reveal of the Red Rose father). Trim or rework any world-flourishes that distract from that arc, tighten the FBI/mob beats so stakes escalate logically, and simplify/motivate recurring motifs (white jacket, rose, lucky jacket) so they resonate emotionally rather than merely entropic comedy.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
The analysis shows your screenplay’s strongest engine is the blend of high stakes and sharp, sarcastic voice: when emotional stakes rise, scenes actively move the plot and generate meaningful character change. To tighten the script, reinforce stakes and consequence in the quieter, early- and mid-act scenes so they consistently propel the story (not just provide tone or texture). Keep the sarcastic/humorous voice—it’s a unique selling point—but avoid using it as a constant pressure-release that undermines urgency. Use reflective/melancholic beats as intentional foreshadowing and leverage them to seed the Red Rose/father reveal and Eddie’s arc so the dramatic payoffs feel earned rather than surprising tonal shifts.
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