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EXT. SPACE - PLANET MESSALINE - IN ORBIT Messaline resembles Earth from space. Vast blue oceans cover most of the planet. On the night side, lights indicate cities are down there. SUPER: MESSALINE 6042
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INT. TARDIS The 14th Doctor (David Tennant) mans the TARDIS alone. When The Doctor is alone he is known to talk and stroke his beloved TARDIS. The TARDIS is very aware of his musings, but she never responds with words. Right now, he seems annoyed
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INT. TARDIS - CONTINUOUS Stormy is a tad impressed by its dimensional anarchy but still more concerned by Origo. She must have seen things that make a Bigger-On-the-Inside-Police-Box not so shocking. She sits and looks around and finally... wait for it... in a
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EXT. SPACE - ORIGO’S SHIP OF SOULS - CONTINUOUS The dead writhe in agony, filthy, decomposing, trying to scream but are muted by the vacuum of space. NOW-- INSIDE ORIGO’s SHIP A Victorian-style room lit by a fireplace.
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EXT. BANSHEE-11 - NIGHT - CONTINUOUS The Doctor materializes on the surface. Banshee-11 is a strange and beautiful place. A purple aurora lights the night sky. Orange grass and trees end at the aquamarine ocean, extending as far as the eye can see. THEN -
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INT. UNIT - KATE STEWART’S OFFICE - DAY KATE STEWART, the stern and wise leader of Unit sits at her desk working. A knock at the door. KATE Come in.
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INT. TARDIS - CONTINUOUS Stormy answers the phone. In the background, Jack shivers uncontrollably while trying to give The Doctor chest compressions. STORMY
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INT. UNIT - KATE LETHBRIDGE'S OFFICE Kate sitting at her desk looking kick-ass as always. Would not want to play poker with her, no doubt. KATE How are you, Doctor? Recovered?
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EXT. UNIT HQ - NIGHT The TARDIS spins high above the lights of Picadilly. Unit HQ is in the distance, lit up, and ready for The TARDIS to land. 21. She touches down on the helipad, bounces, and skids. Sparks
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INT. UNIT - BIG WORKROOM - CONTINUOUS The Doctor sits down and spins his chair to face Kate. THE DOCTOR What have you got? KATE
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INT. ORIGO'S SHIP OF SOULS - SPACE Speaking to his pitiful souls. ORIGO Next stop... Earth. Wails of desperation echo out.
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EXT. LONDON NEIGHBORHOOD - NIGHT (CONTINUOUS) Origo walks into a house without a care in the world. A man and woman sit on a couch watching a movie. ORIGO Don’t mind me, I am looking for
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EXT. WEMBLY STADIUM - CONTINUOUS Origo, now decked out like Rob Halford appears on the stage. The lights go on and... People begin to run into the stadium. A lot of people. From above, a mob is running to Wembly from as far away as Brent. Metal Gods still playing in the
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INT. ORIGO'S SHIP OF SOULS - CONTINUOUS The TARDIS materializes. Donna, Jack, Stormy and The Doctor exit into... hell?? Nope. No souls wailing from the filthy walls. Even the quaint Victorian decor is gone. It’s now sterile, with nothing but cold steel, white walls, and tech,
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EXT. WEMBLEY STADIUM - CONTINUOUS Origo is in the middle of “Breaking the Law” while donning his Rob Halford gauntlets, badass hat, and shades. Something catches his attention. He makes an announcement. ORIGO
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INT. THE SHIP - CONTINUOUS Origo, still dressed like Rob Halford materializes and looks around at the little pow-wow. Donna cracks up at Origo’s ridiculous outfit. DONNA
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INT. UNIT HQ - CONTINUOUS Kate paces around. She is all business. VLINX, the Android member of UNIT, is alerted by something. VLINX Kate, I am receiving a message from
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INT. HIDDEN DIMENSION - MEMBRANE GATEWAYS Balan and the Doctor stare into to beautiful vibrating membranes. They glow in all colors and -- HUM -- Millions of paper-thin sheets; some are the height of a skyscraper, while others are mere centimeters tall. They are oriented like
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EXT. GALLIFREY - DOWNTOWN ARCADIA - NIGHT Chaos... Smoke and terror. Arcadian business district is a war zone. Daleks incinerate Time Lord soldiers -- 50 meters ahead. Stores and restaurants are in shambles. Charred and in ashes.
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INT. - ARCADIAN UNDERGROUND - CONTINUOUS A subterranean labyrinth spanning most of the city. THE DOCTOR A shelter for times of war. Gallifreans move through passages. Mostly children and the
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EXT. MEMBRANES GATEWAY - CONTINUOUS They materialize in front of the mysterious membranes, still dancing above. 51. BALAN
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INT. UNIT HQ - DAY The Doctor and co. approach Kate. Origo trails behind. Everyone pulls their headbands out of their pocket again. The guards draw their weapons. THE DOCTOR

Doctor Who - "Origo (1)" - SPEC

When a mysterious entity called Origo begins collecting souls across the universe, the Doctor must team up with a group of unlikely allies, including a young woman named Stormy, to uncover the truth behind Origo's sinister plans and the threat of the Darkverse.

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Unique Selling Point

This script stands out due to its unique blend of humor and horror, particularly through the character of Origo, who combines mischief with a sinister edge. The exploration of themes such as survival, identity, and the consequences of power resonates with the audience, while the incorporation of familiar Doctor Who elements ensures it appeals to long-time fans. The dynamic between the Doctor, Stormy, and Origo adds depth to the narrative, making it a compelling piece of storytelling.

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Story Facts

Genres: Science Fiction, Adventure, Fantasy, Action, Horror, Drama, Comedy, Dark Comedy, Thriller, Mystery

Setting: The year 6042 and various timelines including the Time War, The planet Messaline, Banshee-11, London, UNIT HQ, and Gallifrey

Themes: Identity and Transformation, The Nature of Power and Manipulation, The Importance of Hope and Resilience, The Complexity of Human Nature

Conflict & Stakes: The main conflict revolves around Origo's manipulation of souls and the impending threat of the Toymaker's army, with the stakes being the survival of multiple universes and the moral implications of their actions.

Mood: A mix of dark whimsy, tension, and humor, with moments of emotional depth.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The concept of a flamboyant villain who collects souls and manipulates reality through music and performance.
  • Major Twist: The revelation that Origo is not a murderer but a con-man with a complex backstory and connection to Earth.
  • Distinctive Setting: The vibrant and surreal landscapes of Banshee-11 and the hidden dimension filled with glowing membranes.
  • Innovative Ideas: The use of psychic blockers and the concept of 'The Moment' as a character adds depth to the narrative.
  • Genre Blends: The screenplay combines elements of horror, comedy, science fiction, and fantasy, appealing to diverse audiences.

Comparable Scripts: The Twilight Zone (TV Series), The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy (Book/Film/TV Series), Coraline (Book/Film), The Witches (Book/Film), Doctor Who (TV Series), The Cabin in the Woods (Film), The Addams Family (TV Series/Film), The Babadook (Film), A Series of Unfortunate Events (Book/TV Series/Film)

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Overall Score: 7.73
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