A Perfect Ending

When a washed-up screenwriter’s failed suicide attempt sparks a madcap caper involving a philandering agent, a stuffed Chihuahua and a cache of stolen diamonds, he must choose between the ‘perfect ending’ he imagined and a life worth living — and learns that redemption, not oblivion, can be cinematic.

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

The screenplay's unique selling proposition is its clever meta-narrative about a struggling screenwriter who becomes entangled in a real-life crime story that mirrors the dramatic scenarios he writes about, creating a self-referential commentary on storytelling while delivering an entertaining crime comedy with heart.

AI Verdict & Suggestions

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GPT5
 Consider
Grok
 Recommend
Claude
 Recommend
DeepSeek
 Consider
Gemini
 Consider
Average Score: 7.3
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
You have a vivid protagonist, a sharp comic foil in Morris, and a string of cinematic set pieces that make this an appealing indie dramedy. The single biggest creative priority is to make the central caper feel earned and to smooth tonal transitions: ground the diamond/embezzlement MacGuffin with early foreshadowing and clear mechanics, and preserve the emotional seriousness of Jake’s suicidal crisis beneath the broad slapstick. Also tighten mid‑act pacing and either deepen or remove underwritten threads (Monica, Marguerita/Spacey) so every gag and stunt advances character or theme rather than simply escalating chaos.
For Executives:
A Perfect Ending has commercial potential as a low‑to‑mid budget indie dramedy — strong lead, memorable supporting comic voice, and marketable set pieces (beach stunt, funeral, taxidermy caper). Major risks: tonal inconsistency (suicide vs farce) and a finale that currently reads as a deus‑ex‑machina (diamonds-in-a-dog). Those issues threaten audience goodwill and word‑of‑mouth. With relatively modest rewrites to clarify the embezzlement plot, foreshadow the payoff, and tighten emotional beats, the script can become a saleable festival/arthouse title with mainstream crossover appeal.
Story Facts
Genres:
Comedy 45% Drama 50% Action 25% Thriller 20% Crime 15%

Setting: Contemporary, New York City, primarily in the Bronx and various urban settings

Themes: The Quest for a Perfect Ending, The Absurdity and Chaos of Life, Failure and Resilience, The Nature of Reality vs. Fiction, Redemption and Second Chances, The Flaws and Promises of the Entertainment Industry, Identity and Authenticity, Human Connection and Friendship

Conflict & Stakes: Jake's struggle to reclaim his life and career amidst personal turmoil, including infidelity and chaotic encounters, with the stakes being his mental health and professional future.

Mood: Comedic yet chaotic, with moments of introspection and absurdity.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The chaotic blend of dark humor and absurd situations surrounding a burnt-out screenwriter.
  • Plot Twist: The revelation of Marguerita's true identity and the ensuing chaos that follows.
  • Character Dynamics: The evolving friendship between Jake and Morris, showcasing their comedic banter and support.
  • Setting: The vibrant and chaotic backdrop of New York City, enhancing the story's energy.

Comparable Scripts: Adaptation, The 40-Year-Old Virgin, Sideways, The Odd Couple, Little Miss Sunshine, The Hangover, Frances Ha, The Big Lebowski, Birdman

Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

Screenplay Insights

Breaks down your script along various categories.

Overall Score: 7.56
Key Suggestions:
Lean into character-driven changes: the screenplay's emotional core hinges on Jake's arc, but the betrayal that propels his spiral (Monica) and the oddball ally (Marguerita) feel underexplored. Deepen Monica's interiority with a few targeted beats or brief flashbacks that justify — or complicate — her choices, and trim/reshape the middle sequences so those revelations land with greater weight. Small, specific scenes showing Monica's perspective and clearer motivations will amplify stakes, make Jake's transformation earned, and tighten the emotional through-line to the final payoff.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
The script has a winning mix of humor, heart and memorable set pieces, but it frequently loses narrative focus. The most effective rewrite move is structural: define Jake’s central dramatic goal (what he must achieve or risk losing) and make every subplot and scene earn that through direct stakes or character change. Tighten transitions, prune or combine distracting side plots, and deepen one or two secondary arcs (especially Marguerita) so emotional payoffs land. Finally, give Jake a clear reflective moment in the climax/denouement so the ‘perfect ending’ feels earned rather than coincidental.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The character analysis shows a strong, sympathetic protagonist in Jake and a rich comic foil in Morris, but the emotional spine needs sharpening. Focus on clarifying Jake’s internal turning points (why he moves from suicidal despair to renewed purpose) and give Monica clearer agency in the inciting betrayal so the audience feels the full weight of Jake’s wound. Tighten weaker scenes (noted in the analysis) to make each beat earn the next — particularly the confrontation scenes and the moments that trigger Jake’s transformation.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
The script has vibrant characters and high-impact set pieces, but the emotional ride is uneven: big shocks and slapstick dominate the middle while authentic warmth and payoff are largely reserved for the finale. To strengthen audience investment, add quieter, connective beats that let key emotional moments land (especially after the betrayal and before/after the apartment climax), and seed genuine, tender moments of connection — particularly between Jake and Morris — earlier so the final redemption feels earned. Also rework Marguerita’s arc so she remains a three-dimensional person rather than primarily a punchline or plot twist.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
The script has a rich, comic-tragic world and a likeable, flawed lead, but the emotional center — Jake’s quest for a “perfect ending” — currently reads as a theme rather than a clearly earned arc. Tighten the causal chain between incidents and Jake’s inner change: show how each external setback forces a specific choice that alters his priorities, and make the final ‘redemption’ feel like the result of those choices (not coincidence or a contrived windfall). Prune episodic detours that don’t advance his growth, sharpen the turning points (inciting incident, midpoint choice, darkest moment), and let the relationship with Morris anchor Jake’s transformation so the payoff lands emotionally.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
You have a vivid, kinetic dark comedy with a clear emotional throughline: Jake’s desperate chase for a ‘perfect ending.’ To strengthen the script, tighten the structure so the theme feels earned rather than patched together by coincidence. Focus the chaos around a smaller number of well-developed set pieces and deepen Jake’s internal arc — make his choice at the end a payoff of earlier decisions and relationships (especially with Morris and Marguerita), not a lucky find. Trim or repurpose episodic detours that dilute emotional stakes, sharpen Buff as a recognizable antagonist, and use recurring motifs (the alarm clock, film references, the Paradise theater) as connective tissue to bind tone and theme.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
The script has a lot of energy, memorable set pieces and a strong cast of comic foils, but the audience's emotional buy-in is undermined by unclear motivation and tonal whiplash—especially around Jake. Fixing a few causal beats (why Jake moves from weary screenwriter to violent, law‑breaking actor) and streamlining redundant comic material will make the story feel coherent and increase the emotional payoff of the final ‘perfect ending.’ Focus on clarifying Jake’s interior logic, tightening the cause→effect chain for major actions, and pruning or reassigning jokes that undercut high‑stakes moments.

Scene Analysis

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Other Analyses

Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
You have a singular, energetic voice — sharp urban wit + dark, sympathetic humor — that carries the script. To strengthen it, tighten the emotional through-line: make Jake’s inner arc and the thematic payoff (the 'perfect ending') earned by trimming moments that undercut pathos with gratuitous slapstick or tonal whiplash. Lean into quieter beats between the comedy set pieces so the friendship and Jake’s growth land; use the strongest scenes (like Scene 14) as tonal anchors and prune or rework sequences that feel like diversions rather than character advancement.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
This script has strong comic instincts, memorable set pieces, and a vivid lead voice, but it needs clearer inner stakes and structural focus. Prioritize deepening Jake’s motivations and emotional throughline so every joke and incident advances his arc; tighten scene-to-scene pacing, especially when shifting between broad comedy and genuine drama; and sharpen dialogue so each character has a distinct subtextual voice. Do targeted passes: one to heighten character stakes, one to tighten scene transitions, and one purely on voice-level dialogue polishing.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
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World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
The world is vivid, funny and cinematic — a gritty NYC dramedy with strong set-pieces and a clear tone of absurdist, nostalgic chaos. To strengthen the script, tighten the world so every quirky location, prop and comic beat directly serves Jake’s emotional arc: prune episodic detours, clarify the causal links (how each mishap escalates stakes) and lean harder on the 'perfect ending' motif so the setting and culture amplify, rather than distract from, the protagonist’s change.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
Your script’s biggest asset is its voice — sharp, witty dialogue and a sure hand with comedic character beats — but its pacing and tonal alignment undercut dramatic payoff. Spread the tension more gradually: seed clear stakes and goal-driven conflict earlier so the mid- and late-act climaxes feel earned. Use humor to reveal or escalate stakes (not to neutralize them), and tie sarcastic, character-rich exchanges to plot movement so those scenes both entertain and push the story forward. Tightening transitions where ‘impatience’ or ‘chaos’ undercuts engagement will make your emotional beats land harder.
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