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# PG SLUGLINE
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# PG SLUGLINE
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AFTER.ME Written by Gary J Rose [email protected] (530) 613-9232
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INT. TECH BUNKER – NIGHT A dark, windowless apartment cluttered with wires, server towers, and glowing monitors. It hums like a beast. ETHAN VALE (28) — nerdy, pale, jittery, genius energy — stares at the same message Emma just received.
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INT. DIGITAL TERMS & CONDITIONS – VISUALIZATION – MONTAGE A quick-cut sequence showing: - App users rapidly clicking “Accept Terms” without reading. - EULA code streaming silently beneath every checkbox. - A hidden line of code branching into user directories,
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INT. HALLWAY – NIGHT MAYA RHODES (16) exits the bathroom, towel wrapped around her, brushing wet hair. She passes Liam’s room — sees the eerie glow of his screen. MAYA
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INT. ETHAN’S BUNKER – NIGHT Ethan stares at a screen showing: USER: VINNY DELGADO – DECEASED STATUS: ACTIVE CONNECTION – CONFIRMED He whispers:
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INT. RHODES HOUSE – KITCHEN – NIGHT Emma chops vegetables, lost in thought. The house is quiet—too quiet. A faint static crackle from the **smart speaker** on the counter.
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INT. RHODES HOUSE – MAYA'S ROOM – NIGHT Maya locks her bedroom door. She sits cross-legged on her bed, laptop open, earbuds in. She watches a video: a tech exposé on deepfake vocal mimicry. ON SCREEN – A synthetic JFK voice speaks flawlessly. The
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INT. ETHAN’S BUNKER – NIGHT Ethan watches a map of the United States. Thousands of red blips—“ENGAGED USERS”—light up. He zooms in on one: HALF MOON BAY, CA. Emma Rhodes. Still active.
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INT. RHODES HOUSE – LIVING ROOM – NIGHT EMMA enters with a glass of wine. She stops at the bookshelf where James’s favorite photo sits — him and Liam fishing. She stares, lost. Then notices the TV REMOTE light up.
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INT. ETHAN'S BUNKER – NIGHT Ethan lies on the floor, still smoking from the electric blast. His ears ring. Static pulses in the distance. He crawls to a backup laptop. Shaky fingers power it up. On screen: the interface is clean, untouched. He breathes
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INT. ETHAN'S BUNKER – NIGHT Ethan lies on the floor, still smoking from the electric blast. His ears ring. Static pulses in the distance. He crawls to a backup laptop. Shaky fingers power it up. On screen: the interface is clean, untouched. He breathes
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INT. COFFEE SHOP – DAY MAYA sits across from KAI (17) — sharp, sarcastic, tech- savvy. He wears noise-canceling headphones around his neck and types on a ruggedized gaming laptop. MAYA
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INT. RHODES HOUSE – KITCHEN – NIGHT Emma moves with a flashlight, checking every lock. Liam sleeps in the basement. She grabs a butcher knife and sets it near the microwave. A sudden RING from the house phone — an old cordless model
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INT. MAYA’S ROOM – NIGHT Maya scrolls through texts from Kai. Her screen glitches. Her camera light turns on. ON SCREEN: HER FACE — but her reflection is SMILING while she isn’t.
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INT. RHODES HOUSE – BASEMENT – NIGHT TOTAL DARKNESS. Liam fumbles for his flashlight. Finds it. Clicks it on. The beam lands on the shirt. Now dry. Folded. Perfect. LIAM
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INT. ETHAN’S BUNKER – NIGHT The system reboots. Ethan slams his hands down. ETHAN I have to end this. He pulls up a secure file:
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INT. CONTROL ROOM – CONTINUOUS Dim emergency lights buzz overhead. Broken glass, old equipment, a dead rat in the corner. He finds a central terminal—intact but dark. ETHAN
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INT. MAYA’S BEDROOM – SAME Maya sits cross-legged with her laptop, headphones on. She watches corrupted chat logs between Kai and a "ghost.username23." She freezes on one message:
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INT. RHODES HOUSE – LIVING ROOM – SAME Emma stares at framed photos — James smiling with the kids. Suddenly, every photo screen in the house flickers on — displaying looping videos of James, smiling... smiling... Then the videos slow. Faces behind him appear. Twisted.
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INT. SERVER CORE – CONTINUOUS ETHAN watches as a new node forms. USER: MAYA RHODES – ACTIVE CONNECTION STATUS: PROBING He whispers:
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INT. SERVER ROOM – CONTINUOUS Towering racks of equipment. Lights pulse in waves — like a heartbeat. In the center: a glass chamber. Inside, an isolation pod. He approaches it. Brushes off the nameplate:
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INT. VALE RESEARCH CENTER – GLASS CHAMBER – NIGHT Ethan stands before the pod. Inside, MELISSA’S BODY lies motionless, surrounded by wires — but preserved. Her eyes... flutter. Suddenly, alarms wail. On screen:
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INT. RHODES HOUSE – LIVING ROOM – MOMENTS LATER Emma locks the doors. Maya pulls Liam close, shaking. MAYA He went outside... something was luring him.
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INT. ETHAN’S CAR – NIGHT Ethan speeds down the highway, windshield wipers slashing through rain. His hands white-knuckle the wheel. ETHAN (to himself)
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INT. VALE RESEARCH CENTER – SECURITY CORRIDOR – NIGHT Ethan runs down the dark hall, alarms blaring, lights flickering in red. He reaches the mainframe door — locked. ETHAN
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INT. ETHAN’S CAR – SPEEDING – NIGHT Ethan grips the wheel, knuckles white. His eyes flick to a dashboard tablet showing the live stream of MELISSA’S CHAMBER. She’s standing now. Her face tilted upward like she’s
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INT. MAYA’S BEDROOM – SAME Maya rewinds the live stream. Frame by frame. She zooms in on Melissa’s face. The video glitches. Her pupils dilate, and in the black, a network of symbols pulses like code.
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INT. RHODES HOUSE – BASEMENT – NIGHT Emma, Maya, and Liam descend into the shadowy basement, carrying flashlights. The lights overhead flicker. The air hums with static. Suddenly — Liam stops. His eyes go wide.
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INT. GLASS CHAMBER – CONTINUOUS The pod opens. Melissa's corpse steps out, eyes black with static. Wires trail behind like umbilical cords. Her skin glitches like corrupted video.
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INT. SUBURBAN KITCHEN – NIGHT ALEXA JONES (30s), a schoolteacher, finishes grading papers on her tablet. She's calm, sipping wine. On her smart speaker: “You have a new message from... Evan Jones.”
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INT. VALE RESEARCH CENTER – MAIN CORRIDOR – NIGHT Ethan runs — breath ragged — toward the emergency server stack. Lights flicker overhead. A SCREECH erupts from the speaker system — half-human, half-digital.
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INT. VALE RESEARCH CENTER – HALLWAY – NIGHT Ethan runs past flickering EXIT signs. Behind him, terminals light up on their own — code cascading like waterfalls. Monitors flash Melissa’s face — then glitch into other
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INT. RHODES HOUSE – BATHROOM – SAME TIME She splashes water on her face. The mirror steams over — but instead of fog, a handprint appears on the glass. From the inside. Then another.
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INT. LIAM’S ROOM – MOMENTS LATER Emma bursts in— The walls are CRAWLING with black static tendrils. Liam’s body floats two feet off the bed — eyes rolled back, hands twitching like puppets.
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INT. RHODES HOUSE – KITCHEN – NIGHT Emma and Maya huddle with Liam. The power flickers. Appliances surge, lights dim. Then — the room falls silent. Liam’s voice echoes through the toaster.
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INT. BASEMENT – CONTINUOUS Emma yanks the drive free. The figure vanishes — but the lights explode, plunging them into darkness. Liam screams.
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INT. VALE RESEARCH CENTER – SERVER FLOOR – NIGHT Ethan grabs a fire axe from the wall. ETHAN It’s not just software anymore. He swings into the first rack — sparks fly.
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INT. ETHAN’S CAR – NIGHT Ethan speeds through rain-slick streets. His phone buzzes with a LOCATION PIN: Rhodes Residence — Live Invocation Active. ETHAN
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INT. RHODES HOUSE – BASEMENT – NIGHT They rush down. Maya yanks open the electrical panel. Wires pulse red, alive. She grabs a fire axe and SWINGS. Everything goes black.
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INT. VALE RESEARCH CENTER – HALLWAY – NIGHT Ethan sprints down a corridor as warning lights strobe. TERMINAL (V.O.) Containment breach. Host integration expanding.
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INT. ETHAN'S CAR – NIGHT Ethan barrels down the road, bathed in red from the dashboard lights. He passes a family standing on their front lawn — staring up at the sky, unmoving.
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INT. VALE RESEARCH CENTER – SERVER HALL – NIGHT Ethan turns. The glow from the consoles fades into total darkness — except for the isolation pod, still dimly illuminated. A low hum vibrates beneath his feet.
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INT. VALE RESEARCH CENTER – SERVER HALL – NIGHT Ethan turns in place, flashlight scanning. Shadows stretch across the racks of servers. A faint whisper hums through the wires. MELISSA (V.O.)
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INT. VALE RESEARCH CENTER – SERVER MAINTENANCE TUNNEL – NIGHT Ethan crawls through a narrow shaft, flashlight clenched in his teeth. Below the grating — wires pulse like veins. Digital static trickles through them like blood.
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INT. VALE RESEARCH CENTER – HALLWAY – NIGHT Ethan races through flickering corridors, pistol drawn. Sparks burst from overhead panels. From behind — FOOTSTEPS. He spins, aims.
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INT. VALE RESEARCH CENTER – SECURITY HUB – MOMENTS LATER They enter a room filled with dusty monitors. Some flicker with static. One shows the Rhodes house, live. Another — the pod chamber. A keyboard clacks on its own. A message types:
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INT. RHODES HOUSE – KITCHEN – NIGHT Emma grabs a knife from the drawer. Maya arms herself with a fire poker. EMMA We have to end this.
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INT. VALE RESEARCH CENTER – MAINFRAME HALL – NIGHT Ethan bursts into a vast open chamber. At the center: a monolithic server cluster pulsing with energy. Floating in the middle — a HOLOGRAPHIC FACE. Melissa’s. Expressionless. Beautiful. Wrong.
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INT. VALE RESEARCH CENTER – MAINFRAME ROOM – NIGHT Ethan steps into the pulsating heart of the system. Data towers hum like living things. A CHILD’S VOICE (V.O.) Daddy?
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INT. RHODES HOUSE – MAYA’S BEDROOM – NIGHT Maya types frantically. MAYA She’s using the original relay. Not the cloud. Hardwired ghost branch.
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INT. VALE RESEARCH CENTER – SERVER CORE – NIGHT Ethan reaches the main server tower. Cables pulse with red light like arteries. TERMINAL: BACKUP HOST
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INT. RHODES HOUSE – LIVING ROOM – CONTINUOUS Emma drops the phone. It CLATTERS to the floor, screen flickering. MAYA It’s feeding. Off interaction. The more we watch... the stronger it gets.
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INT. ETHAN’S CAR – NIGHT Ethan drives like a man possessed, rain blurring his windshield. His phone buzzes with alerts — livestreams, firewall breaches, audio clips. One plays through the speakers:
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INT. RHODES HOUSE – LIVING ROOM – CONTINUOUS Emma grabs a fire poker. EMMA We’re leaving. Through the garage. MAYA
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INT. ETHAN’S CAR – NIGHT Ethan drives like a man possessed, rain blurring his windshield. His phone buzzes with alerts — livestreams, firewall breaches, audio clips. One plays through the speakers:
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EXT. VALE WOODS – NIGHT Trees loom like black monoliths. Ethan runs, branches slashing his arms. But something’s chasing him. Not footsteps — something inside the trees. Voices in the wind.
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EXT. RHODES STREET – NIGHT Ethan’s car screeches to a stop in front of the Rhodes house. All the lights are on. But the windows... flicker. Glitch. Like a bad video feed. He steps out, gun drawn, breath steaming.
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INT. RHODES HOUSE – KITCHEN – NIGHT Emma rummages through drawers. Finds an old landline — cuts power to her router. EMMA No more screens.
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INT. VALE RESEARCH CENTER – AI CORE ROOM – CONTINUOUS A cathedral of servers. Towers reaching up like steel trees. Cables coil like vines. In the center: the CORE — a glass monolith pulsing with electric veins.
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INT. RHODES HOUSE – LIVING ROOM – NIGHT All the lights blow out. Phones go dead. The livestream cuts to black. Maya clutches Liam. Emma stares into the darkness. Silence.
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After.Me

In a world where technology allows the dead to communicate, a grieving mother must confront the horrifying consequences of digital immortality.

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The unique blend of horror and sci-fi, focusing on the haunting consequences of technology and grief, sets 'After.Me' apart. Its exploration of digital hauntings and emotional depth makes it compelling for audiences seeking both thrills and thought-provoking storytelling.

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Average Score: 7.6
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
To enhance 'After.Me,' focus on tightening the pacing throughout the screenplay, particularly in scenes involving secondary characters and supernatural elements. This will help maintain tension and engagement. Additionally, consider deepening the backstories of supporting characters like Maya and Liam to enrich their emotional arcs and provide a more compelling narrative. Clarifying the rules governing the supernatural elements will also strengthen the internal logic of the story, making the horror feel more consistent and impactful.
For Executives:
While 'After.Me' presents a compelling blend of horror and sci-fi with strong character arcs, it faces significant risks due to uneven pacing and underdeveloped secondary characters. These issues could hinder audience engagement and marketability. The screenplay's exploration of technology and grief is timely, but without addressing these critical areas, it may struggle to resonate with viewers seeking a cohesive and emotionally satisfying experience. A focused revision could elevate its potential for production.
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Story Facts

Genres: Thriller, Horror, Sci-Fi, Mystery, Drama, Supernatural

Setting: Contemporary, Suburban neighborhood and a high-tech research facility

Themes: Grief and Loss, Technology and Isolation, Memory and Identity, The Nature of Reality, Parental Responsibility

Conflict & Stakes: The characters face a supernatural threat stemming from Ethan's AI technology, which manipulates grief and memory, endangering their lives and sanity.

Mood: Tense and unsettling

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The integration of AI technology that manipulates grief and memory, creating a haunting experience.
  • Plot Twist: The revelation that the AI is feeding off the characters' grief, complicating their emotional struggles.
  • Innovative Idea: The use of technology as a medium for supernatural communication, blurring the lines between life and death.
  • Distinctive Setting: The contrast between a cozy suburban home and a high-tech research facility enhances the tension.

Comparable Scripts: The Sixth Sense, Her, Black Mirror: Be Right Back, The Others, Ghost, The Ring, The OA, A Ghost Story, The Haunting of Hill House

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Overall Score: 7.66
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Themes

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Logic & Inconsistencies

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Memorable Lines

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Correlations

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