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# PG SLUGLINE
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EXT HALIFAX HARBOR – DAWN – DECEMBER 6, 1917
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EXT HARBOR – CONTINUOUS
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EXT HALIFAX HARBOR – THE NARROWS – MORNING
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INT MODEST ROW HOUSE – BEDROOM – MORNING
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EXT HALIFAX HARBOR – WATERFRONT STREET – MORNING
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EXT RAIL YARD – MORNING
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EXT RAIL YARD – CONTINUOUS
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EXT RAIL YARD – CONTINUOUS
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EXT RAIL YARD – CONTINUOUS
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INT MAKESHIFT AID STATION – DAY
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EXT HALIFAX STREET – CONTINUOUS
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EXT HALIFAX STREET – CONTINUOUS
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EXT HALIFAX STREET – NIGHT
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EXT HALIFAX STREET – NIGHT
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INT MAKESHIFT MORGUE – NIGHT
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INT MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – NIGHT
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EXT HALIFAX – PRE DAWN
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INT MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – MORNING
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INT MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – MORNING
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INT MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – DAY
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INT MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – DAY
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EXT HALIFAX – DAY
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EXT HALIFAX – DUSK
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INT MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – DAY
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INT MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – DAY
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INT MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – DAY
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INT HOSPITAL ALCOVE – MOMENTS LATER
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INT HOSPITAL ALCOVE – CONTINUOUS
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EXT HOSPITAL STEPS – DAY
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INT TEMPORARY INQUIRY ROOM – DAY
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EXT CITY HALL STEPS – DAY
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INT TEMPORARY SHELTER – DAY
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INT INQUIRY ROOM – DAY
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INT INQUIRY ROOM – LATER
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INT INQUIRY ROOM – DAY
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INT MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – DAY
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EXT HALIFAX CEMETERY – DAY
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EXT HALIFAX STREET – DAY
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EXT HALIFAX – VARIOUS – DAY
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INT SMALL ROOM – NIGHT
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INT SMALL ROOM – EVENING
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INT SMALL ROOM – NIGHT
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EXT HALIFAX – MORNING
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EXT RAIL YARD – MORNING
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INT COMMUNITY OFFICE – DAY
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INT TEMPORARY HOUSING UNIT – NIGHT
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INT TEMPORARY HOUSING UNIT – DAY
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EXT HALIFAX STREET – DAY
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EXT HALIFAX HARBOR – MORNING
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INT SMALL ROOM – NIGHT
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EXT HALIFAX – DUSK
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EXT COMMUNITY HALL – DAY
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EXT HALIFAX STREET – DAY
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EXT CITY SQUARE – MORNING
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EXT CITY SQUARE – CONTINUOUS
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EXT CITY SQUARE – LATER
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INT TEMPORARY HOUSING UNIT – DAY
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EXT HALIFAX HARBOR – DAY
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EXT HALIFAX HARBOR – DAY
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EXT THE NARROWS – DAY
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# PG SLUGLINE
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EXT HALIFAX HARBOR – DAWN – DECEMBER 6, 1917
EXT. HALIFAX HARBOR – DAWN – DECEMBER 6, 1917
THE NARROWS Written by Gary J Rose Grose1pacbell.net (530) 613-9232
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EXT HARBOR – CONTINUOUS
EXT. HARBOR – CONTINUOUS
EXT. HARBOR – CONTINUOUS A signal flag goes up. Routine. Another answers. A moment of hesitation. Brief. Almost nothing. The two ships continue toward one another.
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EXT HALIFAX HARBOR – THE NARROWS – MORNING
EXT. HALIFAX HARBOR – THE NARROWS – MORNING
EXT. HALIFAX HARBOR – THE NARROWS – MORNING Traffic tightens. Ships converge from every direction, threading through the channel. Steam whistles trade short, impatient bursts. SS IMO advances faster than the others.
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INT MODEST ROW HOUSE – BEDROOM – MORNING
INT. MODEST ROW HOUSE – BEDROOM – MORNING
INT. MODEST ROW HOUSE – BEDROOM – MORNING The MAN from earlier is now awake. JAMES O’CONNELL, late 20s, harbor rail clerk. Solid. Tired in the way men get from routine. He buttons his shirt as the WOMAN, ANNA KEATING, early 20s,
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EXT HALIFAX HARBOR – WATERFRONT STREET – MORNING
EXT. HALIFAX HARBOR – WATERFRONT STREET – MORNING
EXT. HALIFAX HARBOR – WATERFRONT STREET – MORNING Anna steps out onto the street. Cold air. Brightening sky. People pause as a COLUMN OF BLACK SMOKE begins to rise in the distance. Someone points.
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EXT RAIL YARD – MORNING
EXT. RAIL YARD – MORNING
EXT. RAIL YARD – MORNING James exits a rail office and looks up. The smoke column now towers over the city. A fellow CLERK shades his eyes. ! ! ! ! ! ! ! CLERK
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EXT RAIL YARD – CONTINUOUS
EXT. RAIL YARD – CONTINUOUS
EXT. RAIL YARD – CONTINUOUS James moves toward the tracks, eyes locked on the harbor. A TELEGRAPH OPERATOR hurries past him, pale. ! ! ! ! ! ! ! TELEGRAPH OPERATOR ! ! They’re saying it’s an ammunition
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EXT RAIL YARD – CONTINUOUS
EXT. RAIL YARD – CONTINUOUS
EXT. RAIL YARD – CONTINUOUS James looks up— IMPACT. He is lifted off his feet and hurled across the yard. Railcars flip like toys.
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EXT RAIL YARD – CONTINUOUS
EXT. RAIL YARD – CONTINUOUS
EXT. RAIL YARD – CONTINUOUS James lies amid twisted steel and splintered ties. His ears ring violently. He opens his mouth to shout — nothing comes out. He touches his face. His hand comes away BLOODIED.
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INT MAKESHIFT AID STATION – DAY
INT. MAKESHIFT AID STATION – DAY
INT. MAKESHIFT AID STATION – DAY A church. Or what’s left of one. Pews shoved aside. Bodies everywhere — on floors, on doors used as stretchers.
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EXT HALIFAX STREET – CONTINUOUS
EXT. HALIFAX STREET – CONTINUOUS
EXT. HALIFAX STREET – CONTINUOUS James pushes through wreckage, shouting hoarsely. ! ! ! ! ! ! ! JAMES ! ! ANNA! ! ! ANNA KEATING!
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EXT HALIFAX STREET – CONTINUOUS
EXT. HALIFAX STREET – CONTINUOUS
EXT. HALIFAX STREET – CONTINUOUS James reaches the edge of the waterfront. What was once familiar is unrecognizable. He drops to his knees. For the first time, he allows himself to believe she might be
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EXT HALIFAX STREET – NIGHT
EXT. HALIFAX STREET – NIGHT
EXT. HALIFAX STREET – NIGHT James works alongside soldiers and civilians. He lifts debris with bare hands. Bleeding ignored. Someone shouts for help — he runs.
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EXT HALIFAX STREET – NIGHT
EXT. HALIFAX STREET – NIGHT
EXT. HALIFAX STREET – NIGHT James helps carry a wounded BOY toward the hospital. The boy’s eyes flutter. ! ! ! ! ! ! ! BOY
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INT MAKESHIFT MORGUE – NIGHT
INT. MAKESHIFT MORGUE – NIGHT
INT. MAKESHIFT MORGUE – NIGHT A school basement. Desks pushed aside. Bodies laid out in rows, tagged. Men move slowly, deliberately. No one rushes here.
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INT MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – NIGHT
INT. MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – NIGHT
INT. MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – NIGHT Anna overhears two NURSES whispering. ! ! ! ! ! ! ! NURSE #1 ! ! They say thousands— ! ! ! ! ! ! ! NURSE #2
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EXT HALIFAX – PRE DAWN
EXT. HALIFAX – PRE-DAWN
EXT. HALIFAX – PRE-DAWN The storm eases. The silence changes. Less shock now. More grief. EXT. RAIL YARD – PRE-DAWN
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INT MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – MORNING
INT. MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – MORNING
INT. MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – MORNING Anna stands beside a table covered in papers. Names. Locations. Notes scribbled fast. She listens as a DOCTOR gives instructions. ! ! ! ! ! ! ! DOCTOR
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INT MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – MORNING
INT. MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – MORNING
INT. MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – MORNING Anna sits with a CLERK, listening as survivors give names. ! ! ! ! ! ! ! SURVIVOR ! ! My wife. Mary Doyle. ! ! She was at the window.
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INT MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – DAY
INT. MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – DAY
INT. MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – DAY Anna works beside a DOCTOR now, calm, precise. She listens to a MAN describe his missing brother. ! ! ! ! ! ! ! MAN ! ! He went back inside for his coat.
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INT MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – DAY
INT. MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – DAY
INT. MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – DAY Anna sits alone for a moment. Processing. She reaches out, finds the edge of the table. Steadies herself.
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EXT HALIFAX – DAY
EXT. HALIFAX – DAY
EXT. HALIFAX – DAY Smoke still rises, but thinner. Snow melts into ash. The city transitions from shock to reckoning. INT. RAIL YARD OFFICE – DAY
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EXT HALIFAX – DUSK
EXT. HALIFAX – DUSK
EXT. HALIFAX – DUSK The city settles into an uneasy quiet. Questions hang heavier than smoke. EXT. CITY HALL – DAY A crowd gathers.
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INT MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – DAY
INT. MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – DAY
INT. MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – DAY Anna navigates the corridor with practiced steps now. Counted. Careful. She stops as raised voices filter in from outside. ! ! ! ! ! ! ! NURSE (O.S.)
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INT MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – DAY
INT. MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – DAY
INT. MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – DAY Anna sits with a WOMAN whose hands shake uncontrollably. ! ! ! ! ! ! ! WOMAN ! ! They said it was an accident. Anna considers that word.
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INT MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – DAY
INT. MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – DAY
INT. MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – DAY Anna finishes her shift. A CLERK approaches with a folded paper. ! ! ! ! ! ! ! CLERK ! ! Someone’s been asking for you.
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INT HOSPITAL ALCOVE – MOMENTS LATER
INT. HOSPITAL ALCOVE – MOMENTS LATER
INT. HOSPITAL ALCOVE – MOMENTS LATER They sit on opposite sides of a narrow bench. Close. Not touching. James studies her bandaged eyes. ! ! ! ! ! ! ! JAMES
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INT HOSPITAL ALCOVE – CONTINUOUS
INT. HOSPITAL ALCOVE – CONTINUOUS
INT. HOSPITAL ALCOVE – CONTINUOUS James leans forward now. ! ! ! ! ! ! ! JAMES ! ! They’re starting an inquiry. Anna stiffens slightly.
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EXT HOSPITAL STEPS – DAY
EXT. HOSPITAL STEPS – DAY
EXT. HOSPITAL STEPS – DAY They step outside together. Cold air. The city stretched out before them. Ruined — but working.
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INT TEMPORARY INQUIRY ROOM – DAY
INT. TEMPORARY INQUIRY ROOM – DAY
INT. TEMPORARY INQUIRY ROOM – DAY A repurposed courtroom. Bare walls. Folding chairs. A long table at the front. Officials gather — military, harbor authority, civilian administrators.
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EXT CITY HALL STEPS – DAY
EXT. CITY HALL STEPS – DAY
EXT. CITY HALL STEPS – DAY Anger boils over. A MAN shouts. ! ! ! ! ! ! ! MAN ! ! They let us watch it burn!
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INT TEMPORARY SHELTER – DAY
INT. TEMPORARY SHELTER – DAY
INT. TEMPORARY SHELTER – DAY Anna pauses mid-sentence. A woman in the group is crying quietly. Anna reaches out. Finds her hand.
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INT INQUIRY ROOM – DAY
INT. INQUIRY ROOM – DAY
INT. INQUIRY ROOM – DAY CAPTAIN AIMÉ LE MÉDEC sits at the witness table. Alive. Composed. Exhausted. The room is packed. James watches from the back.
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INT INQUIRY ROOM – LATER
INT. INQUIRY ROOM – LATER
INT. INQUIRY ROOM – LATER CAPTAIN HAAKON FROM now sits at the table. His hands tremble slightly. ! ! ! ! ! ! ! LAWYER ! ! You were above the harbor speed
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INT INQUIRY ROOM – DAY
INT. INQUIRY ROOM – DAY
INT. INQUIRY ROOM – DAY The room has thinned. Some spectators gone. Only the committed remain. James sits forward now. Listening harder.
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INT MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – DAY
INT. MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – DAY
INT. MAKESHIFT HOSPITAL – DAY Anna sits with a MAN whose eyes are bandaged like hers. ! ! ! ! ! ! ! MAN ! ! They told me it was no one’s fault.
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EXT HALIFAX CEMETERY – DAY
EXT. HALIFAX CEMETERY – DAY
EXT. HALIFAX CEMETERY – DAY Rows of fresh graves. Simple markers. Many without names. A service is underway — quiet, restrained. James and Anna stand together, bundled against the cold.
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EXT HALIFAX STREET – DAY
EXT. HALIFAX STREET – DAY
EXT. HALIFAX STREET – DAY Anna walks alone now, cane steady. She stops as two WOMEN whisper nearby. ! ! ! ! ! ! ! WOMAN #1 ! ! They say it was an accident.
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EXT HALIFAX – VARIOUS – DAY
EXT. HALIFAX – VARIOUS – DAY
EXT. HALIFAX – VARIOUS – DAY Montage: – Temporary homes being raised – Children returning to schoolrooms with no walls – Workers clearing rail lines – A ship passing carefully through the Narrows
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INT SMALL ROOM – NIGHT
INT. SMALL ROOM – NIGHT
INT. SMALL ROOM – NIGHT James sits at a table, writing. Notes. Names. Dates. Anna listens to the scratch of pencil. ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ANNA
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INT SMALL ROOM – EVENING
INT. SMALL ROOM – EVENING
INT. SMALL ROOM – EVENING James slams his notebook shut. Frustration finally boiling over. ! ! ! ! ! ! ! JAMES
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INT SMALL ROOM – NIGHT
INT. SMALL ROOM – NIGHT
INT. SMALL ROOM – NIGHT James sits beside Anna. Quieter now. ! ! ! ! ! ! ! JAMES ! ! I don’t know what to do with all
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EXT HALIFAX – MORNING
EXT. HALIFAX – MORNING
EXT. HALIFAX – MORNING Not the morning after. Weeks later. Snow is gone. Debris mostly cleared. What remains is harder to see.
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EXT RAIL YARD – MORNING
EXT. RAIL YARD – MORNING
EXT. RAIL YARD – MORNING Trains move again. Slowly. Carefully. James watches from the platform.
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INT COMMUNITY OFFICE – DAY
INT. COMMUNITY OFFICE – DAY
INT. COMMUNITY OFFICE – DAY A small meeting. Local officials speak earnestly. ! ! ! ! ! ! ! OFFICIAL ! ! This plan allows us to modernize.
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INT TEMPORARY HOUSING UNIT – NIGHT
INT. TEMPORARY HOUSING UNIT – NIGHT
INT. TEMPORARY HOUSING UNIT – NIGHT Anna sits at the table. James spreads out his notes. Pages worn. Corners folded. ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ANNA
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INT TEMPORARY HOUSING UNIT – DAY
INT. TEMPORARY HOUSING UNIT – DAY
INT. TEMPORARY HOUSING UNIT – DAY Anna folds laundry with practiced care. Each item placed deliberately. James watches her from the doorway. ! ! ! ! ! ! ! JAMES
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EXT HALIFAX STREET – DAY
EXT. HALIFAX STREET – DAY
EXT. HALIFAX STREET – DAY James and Anna walk slowly. Anna’s cane taps rhythmically. They pass a BOARD where notices are posted.
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EXT HALIFAX HARBOR – MORNING
EXT. HALIFAX HARBOR – MORNING
EXT. HALIFAX HARBOR – MORNING The water moves as it always has. Unconcerned. Unchanged. Ships continue to pass.
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INT SMALL ROOM – NIGHT
INT. SMALL ROOM – NIGHT
INT. SMALL ROOM – NIGHT James and Anna eat quietly. A newspaper lies folded between them. The headline visible: CITY LOOKS AHEAD
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EXT HALIFAX – DUSK
EXT. HALIFAX – DUSK
EXT. HALIFAX – DUSK The city settles. Rebuilt. Still carrying ghosts beneath the pavement. EXT. HALIFAX – MORNING
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EXT COMMUNITY HALL – DAY
EXT. COMMUNITY HALL – DAY
EXT. COMMUNITY HALL – DAY A smaller meeting now. Attendance thinner. Some empty chairs. James stands again.
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EXT HALIFAX STREET – DAY
EXT. HALIFAX STREET – DAY
EXT. HALIFAX STREET – DAY James helps Anna navigate a busy crossing. Traffic flows smoothly. No memory of rubble. Anna stops halfway across.
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EXT CITY SQUARE – MORNING
EXT. CITY SQUARE – MORNING
EXT. CITY SQUARE – MORNING The platform is finished now. Simple. Respectable. A SMALL CROWD gathers — fewer than expected. Officials. Survivors. Curious onlookers.
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EXT CITY SQUARE – CONTINUOUS
EXT. CITY SQUARE – CONTINUOUS
EXT. CITY SQUARE – CONTINUOUS ! ! ! ! ! ! ! JAMES ! ! I worked the rail yard. ! ! I watched the harbor every day. He holds up his notebook.
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EXT CITY SQUARE – LATER
EXT. CITY SQUARE – LATER
EXT. CITY SQUARE – LATER The platform is empty again. A wreath remains. Unattended. EXT. CITY SQUARE – LATER
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INT TEMPORARY HOUSING UNIT – DAY
INT. TEMPORARY HOUSING UNIT – DAY
INT. TEMPORARY HOUSING UNIT – DAY Anna packs a small bag. Careful. Methodical. James watches. ! ! ! ! ! ! ! JAMES
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EXT HALIFAX HARBOR – DAY
EXT. HALIFAX HARBOR – DAY
EXT. HALIFAX HARBOR – DAY A new ship approaches THE NARROWS. Larger. Faster. A HARBOR OFFICER watches from his post. Checks his watch.
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EXT HALIFAX HARBOR – DAY
EXT. HALIFAX HARBOR – DAY
EXT. HALIFAX HARBOR – DAY The ship’s horn sounds. Measured. Professional. The harbor OFFICER checks the manifest.
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EXT THE NARROWS – DAY
EXT. THE NARROWS – DAY
EXT. THE NARROWS – DAY The water moves. Indifferent. Patient. CUT TO BLACK.
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The Narrows

As complacency turns deadly in WWI-era Halifax, rail clerk James searches for his blinded fiancée Anna amid the rubble, their reunion igniting a quiet crusade against the erasure of institutional failures that doomed nearly 2,000 lives.

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

The Narrows stands out for its nuanced exploration of collective memory, accountability, and the long-term impact of a tragic event. By focusing on the personal journeys of James and Anna, the script offers a unique and compelling perspective on how a community grapples with the aftermath of disaster, challenging the traditional narrative of resilience and progress. The script's exploration of the small, seemingly innocuous decisions that can lead to catastrophic consequences is both timely and thought-provoking, making it a compelling piece of storytelling that would resonate with audiences seeking a more complex and layered drama.

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Average Score: 8.1
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
From the analyses, the script's core strength lies in its thematic depth and emotional authenticity, but to elevate it, focus on resolving key investigative threads like the Patrick Coleman arc by adding dramatized scenes of his actions and consequences. Tighten pacing in repetitive aftermath sequences by varying beats and ensuring each scene advances the narrative or character development, while deepening secondary characters and Anna's sensory experiences to add layers of empathy and avoid schematic portrayals. This will enhance dramatic closure, thematic clarity, and overall craft, making the story more compelling and polished.
For Executives:
The script has solid value as a character-driven historical drama with strong thematic resonance, appealing to audiences who enjoy introspective films like 'Manchester by the Sea' or 'Dunkirk', and could attract festival attention for its restrained style and moral inquiry. However, risks include uneven pacing in the middle sections and unresolved plot threads that might frustrate viewers or critics, potentially limiting commercial appeal; it could benefit from refinements to boost marketability and ensure broad engagement without alienating audiences seeking clearer resolutions.
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Story Facts
Genres:
Drama 60% War 20% Thriller 15% Romance 10%

Setting: December 6, 1917, and the subsequent months following the Halifax Explosion, Halifax, Nova Scotia, Canada

Themes: Systemic Failure and Lack of Accountability, Loss, Grief, and Trauma, The Persistence of Memory and the Importance of Bearing Witness, The Search for Truth vs. The Need for Blame, Routine and Unsuspecting Normalcy, The Inevitability of Change and the Illusion of Progress, The Power of Assumption and the Danger of Complacency, Resilience and Adaptation, The Nature of Truth and Memory

Conflict & Stakes: The struggle to confront the systemic failures that led to the Halifax Explosion, with personal stakes for James and Anna as they seek justice and remembrance amidst societal denial.

Mood: Somber and reflective, with moments of tension and resilience.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The intertwining of personal stories with a significant historical event, providing a fresh perspective on the Halifax Explosion.
  • Plot Twist: The revelation of systemic failures and negligence that led to the disaster, challenging the characters' and audience's understanding of accountability.
  • Innovative Ideas: The use of archival photographs and historical context to enhance the narrative and provide a poignant reflection on memory.
  • Distinctive Setting: The portrayal of Halifax before, during, and after the explosion, showcasing the city's transformation and resilience.

Comparable Scripts: The Titanic (1997), Atonement (2007), The Road (2006), The Book Thief (2005), The Chernobyl Miniseries (2019), The Great Fire (2009), The Nightingale (2018), The Grapes of Wrath (1939), The Road to Perdition (2002)

Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

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Overall Score: 8.01
Key Suggestions:
To elevate the script's creative impact, focus on deepening secondary characters by giving them distinct arcs and motivations that intersect with the main narrative, as this will enhance emotional resonance and audience immersion. Additionally, incorporate more reflective moments and nuanced emotional interactions to amplify the themes of loss and resilience, ensuring that the story's emotional depth is fully realized without overshadowing the plot.
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Story Critique

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Key Suggestions:
The script excels in building emotional connections and tension around the Halifax Explosion, but to refine it creatively, focus on minimizing heavy exposition by integrating historical context and systemic failures more seamlessly through visual storytelling and character interactions. This will enhance thematic depth, improve pacing, and make the narrative more immersive and engaging, ensuring that personal stories and broader implications reinforce each other without overwhelming the audience.
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Characters

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Key Suggestions:
The character analysis highlights that Anna and James are compelling protagonists with strong emotional arcs, but to elevate the script's craft, focus on deepening their backstories and internal conflicts. Incorporating more internal monologues, flashbacks, and nuanced interactions can enhance emotional depth and resonance, making their journeys more impactful and ensuring the audience connects deeply with the themes of resilience and justice in this historical drama.
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Emotional Analysis

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Key Suggestions:
The script's emotional landscape is strong in its initial intensity but suffers from repetition and lack of variety, particularly in the aftermath, which can lead to audience fatigue. To improve, focus on adding emotional depth through layered character experiences, incorporating moments of relief, humor, and small triumphs amidst grief, and ensuring better pacing with valleys for recovery. This will make the story more engaging, nuanced, and impactful, enhancing character empathy and thematic resonance without altering the core narrative.
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Goals and Philosophical Conflict

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Key Suggestions:
The analysis highlights how the script's goals and philosophical conflicts drive strong character development and thematic depth, particularly in the evolution from personal survival to collective remembrance. To improve craft, focus on tightening the pacing around key conflict resolutions (around 85-90% mark) by adding more subtle, character-driven moments that externalize internal struggles, such as through symbolic actions or interactions, to enhance emotional resonance and avoid overly expository dialogues, making the story more immersive and impactful.
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Themes

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Key Suggestions:
From a creative perspective, the script's strength lies in its thematic depth, particularly in exploring systemic failure and human resilience, but it could benefit from tightening emotional arcs to ensure characters like James and Anna evolve more dynamically in response to the themes. Focus on enhancing sensory details and dialogue to make the themes feel more organic and less expository, avoiding potential preachiness in inquiry scenes, and consider adding subtle foreshadowing in the opening routines to heighten dramatic irony without telegraphing the disaster.
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Logic & Inconsistencies

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Key Suggestions:
The script's inconsistencies highlight areas where character development and plot logic can be strengthened to create a more immersive and believable story. For example, characters like Anna and James adapt too rapidly to trauma without sufficient emotional depth, and key events lack smooth transitions, which can feel contrived. By adding nuanced internal struggles, filling plot gaps, and streamlining redundant elements, the writer can enhance authenticity, improve pacing, and deliver a more compelling narrative that resonates on a human level.
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Scene Analysis

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Unique Voice

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Key Suggestions:
The script's voice is a strong asset, with its understated tension and realistic portrayal drawing readers into the emotional core of the story. To enhance this, focus on refining the balance between minimalism and character depth, ensuring that silences and implied meanings are consistently supported by subtle visual cues or internal monologues, which could amplify the human resilience theme without overwhelming the script's quiet power.
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Writer's Craft

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Key Suggestions:
The screenplay showcases strong emotional depth and thematic exploration, but to enhance its craft, focus on incorporating more subtext in dialogue, deepening character motivations and internal conflicts, tightening pacing in key scenes, and amplifying visual elements to create a more immersive and engaging narrative. By addressing these areas, the writer can elevate the story's impact and ensure that the historical drama resonates more profoundly with audiences.
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Memorable Lines
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Tropes
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World Building

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Key Suggestions:
The script's world-building effectively captures the historical and emotional layers of the Halifax Explosion, but to enhance creative depth, focus on integrating the physical environment more dynamically with character development, such as using the harbor's routines to symbolize complacency and the post-disaster ruins to mirror internal conflicts. This will strengthen thematic resonance and craft, making the story more immersive and emotionally compelling, while ensuring that cultural and societal elements drive character motivations to avoid overly expository dialogue.
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Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
The script's strength lies in its tense and emotional tones that effectively build conflict and stakes, but it could benefit from greater variety in how tension is created, such as incorporating subtler conflicts in calmer scenes. Additionally, reflective and tragic sections often slow story progression and character development, suggesting a need to weave in more plot advancements and tangible character decisions within these moments to maintain pace and ensure emotional beats feel earned, ultimately enhancing the narrative's depth and engagement.
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Loglines
Presents logline variations based on theme, genre, and hook.
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