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# PG SLUGLINE
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INT. LECTURE HALL Professor Jackie stands at the chalkboard in front of the typical disinterested class of undergrads. On the board, Jackie is illustrating the classic double-slit experiment. He is drawing a wave-like pattern.
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INT. MULTIVERSE TRAVEL - VARIOUS We travel with her from universe to universe. INT BAR riding on a mechanical bull, her eyes scan the bar, searching for something, then flies off- EXT OCEAN flying through the air as a cliff diver passively
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INT. CHAN APARTMENT - DINING ROOM - MORNING JACKIE CHAN, in sweat pants and a over-sized polo shirt, hangs up the phone. The years have not been kind to this Jackie. All around him, years of tax documents and old receipts threaten to drown him in his overpopulated
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INT. APARTMENT DINING ROOM - EVENING Jackie finally sits down across from Winona. The day has worn him down. WINONA I think I’m almost done, I just
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INT. CHAN APARTMENT BATHROOM - MORNING Jackie sits on the toilet with the seat cover down. All we hear is the sound of an empty shower RUNNING. Piles of paperwork cover the floor and counter of the tiny bathroom. He picks up a receipt and carefully converts a handwritten
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INT. IRS ELEVATOR - THAT MOMENT As the elevator doors close, Winona’s head snaps forward and she springs into action. She pulls out an umbrella from her over-sized purse and opens it up. The open umbrella covers the security camera in the corner of the elevator.
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INT. CUBICLE 9TH FLOOR - MORNING The back of the crumpled divorce papers lay in Jackie’s hands under a desk. The first line reads: "1. Switch shoes to the wrong feet." DESMOND (O.S.)
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INT. JANITOR’S CLOSET / CUBICLE SPLIT SCREEN - THAT MOMENT The small closet is cluttered and dimly lit. In a split screen we see half of Jackie is in the closet, the other half is still in the tax audit. He looks all around him in both worlds. What just happened?
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INT. CUBICLE: Winona’s voice slowly fades away and the split-screen focuses on what is happening in the cubicle. DESMOND Mr. Chan... Mr. Chan! Jackie takes control of his body again in the tax meeting.
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INT. JANITOR’S CLOSET: Jackie’s attention is back in the closet. WINONA Did you just miss everything I just told you? I can’t afford to go over
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INT. CUBICLE 9TH FLOOR - THAT MOMENT Jackie’s head snaps to the side as he SCREAMS. JACKIE NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO He slowly opens his eyes and realizes he is still in the
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INT. 9TH FLOOR HALLWAY - MOMENTS LATER Jackie briskly pulls Winona towards the elevator periodically looking behind his shoulder. JACKIE We have to get out of here.
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CLOSET UNIVERSE - INT. JANITOR’S CLOSET Jackie and Winona’s dead bodies lie in a pile on the floor. A small boot steps into the foreground. Its Jobu. She looks down at the bodies. She reaches down and pulls the earpiece from Jackie’s ear and examines it.
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INT. IRS 9TH FLOOR HALLWAY - LATER Winona is pulling Jackie along through the hallway. They are passing small groups of frantic civilians running to safety. JACKIE But my wife never learned to fight.
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INT. IRS 9TH FLOOR CUBICLE - CONTINUOUS Winona is frantically searching the desk drawers for something. JACKIE Alpha? I don’t remember naming
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ALPHAVERSE - INT. CONTROL ROOM Everyone is jumping to their battle stations. The energy is frantic. OFFICER #1 He jumped somewhere: brute force.
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ALPHAVERSE - INT. CONTROL ROOM OFFICER #1 He’s gotta run. ALPHA WINONA Maybe he can jump. Somewhere he can
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TAXES UNIVERSE - INT. CAR [SPLIT SCREEN] Jackie and Winona are sitting in a car. Jackie suddenly realizes he is driving the car and swerves off into the breakdown lane. WINONA.TAXES
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INT. STAIRWELL Winona has her hand pressed against the door gently. ALPHA WINONA I need to find the right Jackie. And this one... I don’t think its
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FIGHTER UNIVERSE - INT. HONG KONG AIRPORT - 1970S Jackie and Winona, in their early 20’s, Winona has her bags packed and ready to go. WINONA Can’t you see it? How wonderful it
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INT. IRS 10TH FLOOR - ORIGINAL UNIVERSE We are back in the original Universe. Not even a second has passed since Jackie first connected. Time is frozen. A single tear is suspended from his eye. Jackie’s fists close tightly, and he inhales.
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INT. IRS 10TH FLOOR - ORIGINAL UNIVERSE Alpha Winona grabs him and pulls him closer. ALPHA WINONA Are you with me? JACKIE
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FIGHTER UNIVERSE - INT. STADIUM [SPLIT SCREEN] He is back in the stadium in the middle of a press conference. Suddenly everything goes quiet in Jackie’s head. Someone has just walked in: Winona. Jackie can’t help but be pulled in: The camera spins around
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INT. IRS 10TH FLOOR - ORIGINAL UNIVERSE Jackie is back in the IRS building. Alpha Winona looks at him terrified. ALPHA WINONA Did you hear what I just said?
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INT. IRS 10TH FLOOR Jackie shakes the leak and approaches Jobu. ALPHA WINONA What are you doing? JACKIE
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EXT. CRAGGY MOUNTAIN TOP (ALA 2001 A SPACE ODYSSEY) TITLE: 20,000 B.C. A monkey with floppy hot dog fingers murders a full fingered monkey with a rock. Other monkeys hoop and scream. OFFICER #2 (VO)
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INT. IRS 10TH FLOOR Alpha Winona turns to Jackie. ALPHA WINONA Get us as far away from her as you can. I’ll be back.
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INT. IRS 11TH FLOOR HALLWAY Jackie is chasing Alpha Winona through a doorway. ALPHA WINONA She’s broken through our defenses. I don’t know how much time we have.
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INT. IRS 11TH FLOOR BATHROOM Winona produces a helmet of wires and flashing lights she’s been building. A collection of thrown together technology. ALPHA WINONA When the time comes, you have to
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INT. IRS 11TH FLOOR BATHROOM She grabs Jackie by the collar, choking him. ALPHA WINONA Jackie promise me when the time comes, no matter what she says, no
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EXT. IRS BUILDING The same skinny old lady is outside the IRS building wearing a lunch lady’s uniform. Her head goes limp. She turns and makes her way through the crowd of evacuees. We see a handful of others suddenly walking towards the building:
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WRITER UNIVERSE - INT. HOME OFFICE Jackie.Writer is sitting in a nice mid-century office with lofted ceilings and tall windows. He sits on a bed, surrounded by medical equipment. His thin, frail face is white as if one of his fictional characters reached out to
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OPERA UNIVERSE - INT. OPERA HOUSE Jackie stands on a huge stage alone wearing sunglasses- now blind. There is a huge audience before him. A single note from the string section begins to SWELL. SPLIT SCREEN: in unison both Jackies INHALE a large lungful
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INT. IRS 11TH FLOOR BREAKROOM KITCHEN Jackie’s pinkies clamp down on the chair legs breaking them. Desmond is confused. Jackie punches the chair with his pinkies and it sends Desmond and the chair flying. Desmond’s bluetooths fly out his ear.
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SIGN SPINNER UNIVERSE - INT. OFFICE Jackie sits across from his pizza boss speaking desperately. JACKIE ... I need this job, I’m already three months behind on rent and...
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EXT. ROOFTOP - MOMENTS LATER Jackie bursts out of the stairwell followed by Winona. Jackie spots Jobu at the other end of the roof with her back to them. She looms over the building. JOBU
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FIGHTER UNIVERSE - INT. LOCKER ROOM Jackie falls back and catches himself on a bench. MCGREGOR Easy there. We still got to fight tonight.
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EXT. ROOFTOP - SIMULTANEOUS Winona is holding Jackie’s face. She wipes the sweat off his forehead with her sleeve. JOBU Finding a universe where another
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EXT. ROOFTOP - SIMULTANEOUS Jackie takes another step, Jobu takes a step back. For the first time in long time Jobu actually seems interested. Maybe even excited. Jackie takes another step-
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EXT. ROOFTOP - SIMULTANEOUS Jackie has reached Jobu. She is enraptured. JOBU I’ve seen so many minds crumble under that weight. What are you
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ALPHA.VERSE B - INT. CONTROL ROOM Jackie is sitting in the seat where Alpha Winona usually sits. OFFICER Are you sure this is a good idea,
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PINKY UNIVERSE - INT. HOSPITAL Jackie is now grappling with his arm around the Doctor. He is surrounded by security guards trying to calm him down. JACKIE I’m sorry. I’m sorry. I don’t know
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WRITER UNIVERSE - INT. OFFICE Jackie is squirming on the couch muttering incoherently, Chris is fanning him with a magazine. CHRIS You gotta stop writing. Rest!
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HERO UNIVERSE - EXT. IRS BUILDING Jackie slowly opens his eyes. He is outside of the IRS Building. The place is a mess of random objects: watermelons, cooking supplies, pizza boxes, etc. Everyone is cautiously making their way towards him.
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HOT DOG UNIVERSE - INT. CAR Jackie’s eyes are shut tight. He is pulled over on the side of the road. Sweat drips down his face as he hyperventilates. He opens his eyes. The chaos is over. The anxiety begins to pass.
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TAX UNIVERSE - INT. CHAN APARTMENT Jackie looks around at his apartment. It is somehow more depressing than he remembered. He glances over at his aging father in the wheelchair who is staring at him because his TV show is on commercial break.
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HERO UNIVERSE - EXT. IRS BUILDING Jackie emerges from the bushes. Everyone points their weapons in his direction. JACKIE Let her go!
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HERO UNIVERSE - EXT. IRS BUILDING Jackie sees Linus the cat on the ground. He picks him up and fluffs him: Linus becomes a pillow. Desmond looks confused. Jackie slowly pushes the cat pillow against Desmond’s face suffocating him as he thrashes.
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HOT DOG UNIVERSE - INT. WEDDING BARN JACKIE ... I always dreamed of this day... walking her down the aisle, dancing with my daughter... looking forward
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ROCK UNIVERSE - EXT. FIELD Jackie is a rock in a field. He stares past everything. FIGHTER UNIVERSE - INT STADIUM Jackie watches as Winona slowly walks away from him. She weaves her way through the crowd. Jackie leans his body up
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ROCK UNIVERSE - EXT. FIELD Jackie is a rock. Sitting in the grass by a babbling brook. JACKIE ROCK This is nice. Beside him is another Rock. It’s Joy.
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FIGHTER UNIVERSE - INT. STADIUM Jackie turns in shock to find that Winona is still standing right next to him. He looks from the Winona next to him to the exit where there is another Winona walking away. JACKIE.FIGHTER
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HERO UNIVERSE - EXT. IRS BUILDING Though Desmond has collapsed on the ground in tears, the others are not so moved. The SWAT officers and the other angry IRS employees move in on Jackie and Winona. Jackie tries to go to Winona to protect her from the chaos
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WRITER UNIVERSE - INT. EDITOR APARTMENT CHRIS (dry) Oh, great, you’ve written me into the story too. So fun.
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HERO UNIVERSE - EXT. IRS BUILDING Jackie.Hero feels stupid saying it but he is compelled to: JACKIE.HERO Hitting me isn’t going to make your dad any prouder of you.
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FIGHTER UNIVERSE - INT. STADIUM Jackie runs after Winona, through the crowd, and turns her around. JACKIE Please. Let me drop you off at the
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FIGHTER UNIVERSE - INT. STADIUM Jackie watches as the referees and the agents and everyone argue, trying to figure out how to penalize him. JACKIE (to Mcgregor)
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TAXES UNIVERSES - INT. CHAN APARTMENT Jackie and Winona sit at the table together. WINONA I printed out those papers because I wanted you to take it seriously.
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SPAGHETTI UNIVERSE - INT. BOILING POT A stray spaghetti strand reaches out of the fray and down into the depths of the pot to grabs onto his son. SPAGHETTI BABY NOODLE BOY What are you doing?
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EXT. OUTER SPACE - SUN TAP. Jackie.Sun is exploding as all of his light and gas is being sucked into the black hole- HOTDOG UNIVERSE - EXT. WEDDING BARN Joy’s head slowly is pulled towards Jackie’s shoulder. It

Everything Everywhere All at Once

A weary laundromat owner, pulled into a war that rips open countless alternate lives, must learn to draw on the bizarre skills of his other selves to stop his brilliant but nihilistic daughter from collapsing reality—and in the process, salvage the marriage he’s taken for granted.

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

The screenplay's unique selling proposition lies in its inventive multiverse concept, blending absurdist humor with profound existential and familial themes. Its ability to balance high-concept sci-fi with intimate character drama sets it apart from typical genre fare.

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Average Score: 8.9
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
You have an extraordinary, single‑idea engine: domestic heartbreak fuelled by wildly inventive multiverse set pieces. The immediate craft task is to make the mechanics and stakes feel dramatic rather than expository so the audience can emotionally ride the spectacle. Turn the ‘rule dumps’ into a short, active scene that shows how verse‑jumping works (limits, costs, signals) and use it as a recurring dramaturgical beat. Then ruthlessly prune mid‑act vignettes to the ones that advance Jackie’s emotional arc or provide specific skills he will need in the climax. Finally, humanize Jobu with one concrete personal beat (loss, curiosity, or a pivotal memory) so her nihilism reads as a moral choice, and clarify the Alpha/Winona signposting (visual or verbal cues) so readers/viewers never have to guess who’s who.
For Executives:
This is high‑value, high‑risk material: a commercially viable, awards‑friendly high‑concept that mixes action, comedy and intimate drama. Its USP — the domestic heart inside absurd, memorable universes — will attract top talent and festival attention. The biggest near‑term risk is audience confusion and spectacle fatigue: without clearer rules and a tightened middle, test screenings could report ‘incoherent’ or ‘meandering.’ I recommend a conditional greenlight: proceed if the writer/director commit to a targeted rewrite (clarify verse mechanics on screen, cut or consolidate vignettes, deepen Jobu’s motive, and give the climax real, visible consequences). This will protect marketability while preserving the film’s audacious visual identity.
Story Facts
Genres:
Science Fiction 40% Action 30% Drama 50% Fantasy 25% Comedy 35% Romance 25% Thriller 20%

Setting: Contemporary, Multiple universes including a university, IRS building, various alternate realities, and surreal environments.

Themes: Love and Empathy as a Counter to Existential Despair, Familial Relationships and Reconciliation, Finding Meaning and Purpose in the Ordinary, The Burden of Unfulfilled Potential and Regret, Existentialism and Nihilism vs. Human Connection, Intergenerational Trauma and Cultural Differences

Conflict & Stakes: Jackie's struggle to reconcile his family relationships amidst multiverse chaos, with the stakes being the survival of his family and his own identity.

Mood: Chaotic yet introspective, blending humor with deep emotional resonance.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The multiverse concept allows for endless creative possibilities and character variations.
  • Plot Twist: The revelation of Jobu Tupaki's true nature and her connection to Jackie and Winona adds depth to the narrative.
  • Innovative Ideas: The screenplay creatively blends genres, including comedy, action, and philosophical drama.
  • Distinctive Settings: The various universes, from the IRS building to surreal environments, provide a visually rich experience.
  • Unique Characters: Characters like Jobu Tupaki and Alpha Winona offer fresh perspectives and complexities.

Comparable Scripts: Everything Everywhere All at Once, The Matrix, Doctor Strange in the Multiverse of Madness, Rick and Morty, The One, Sliding Doors, Cloud Atlas, The Umbrella Academy, The Time Traveler's Wife, Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind

Script Level Analysis

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Screenplay Insights

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Overall Score: 8.30
Key Suggestions:
This ambitious multiverse screenplay is strongest when it is emotionally anchored—Jackie, Winona and Jobu’s arcs are powerful—but the rapid universe-hopping and dense exposition currently dilute those human beats. Prioritize two refinements: (1) streamline and clearly signpost multiverse transitions so viewers can follow cause and effect, and (2) deepen Joy/Jobu and Jackie–Winona moments (one or two compact, revealing flashbacks or scenes) to raise the emotional stakes. Doing both will keep the film inventive without losing audience empathy.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
The script has enormous heart and daring imagination, but its emotional payoff is being buried under relentless multiverse detours. Prioritize the core family story—Jackie, Winona, and Joy/Jobu—and reduce the number of universes and side gags so each jump earns a clear emotional or plot purpose. Tighten Jobu’s motivation and Winona’s arc so the final confrontation feels earned rather than a spectacle. Use a few recurring, visually distinct universes as motifs to track stakes and character growth, and lean into quieter scenes that build empathy before the big, strange set pieces.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The multiverse concept is dazzling but the script's emotional center—the fraught father/daughter/marriage triangle—needs to be clearer and more consistently foregrounded. Tighten or rework scenes that diffuse emotional stakes (notably the early tax/household scenes) so each surreal jump is motivated by a concrete turn in Jackie’s internal arc. Make Jobu’s origin and emotional wound legible earlier (give one or two concise, humanizing beats), sharpen the turning points that force Jackie to change (so the verse-jumps feel earned), and give Alpha Winona a clearer, grounded intro that shows why Jackie should trust her. In short: prune incidental spectacle, amplify cause-and-effect in Jackie/Winona/Jobu beats, and make the audience feel the stakes before you explode into the multiverse set pieces.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
The script has a striking high-concept core — a multiverse story anchored by a tender father/daughter relationship — but the emotional ride is uneven. Middle sections linger in confusion and sadness, while some climactic beats feel rushed and rely on shock over depth. Tighten the emotional pacing: give quieter scenes a clear arc and select moments of levity to relieve fatigue; deepen Winona and Jobu with brief, specific vulnerability beats so the audience cares when stakes escalate; and slow down key climactic scenes long enough for genuine emotional payoff rather than spectacle.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
The multiverse spectacle works best when it serves a clear emotional spine. Right now the script is rich in imaginative set pieces but at risk of diluting the audience’s investment because Jackie’s internal throughline (redemption, reconciliation with Joy and Winona) isn’t always the organizing principle of scenes. Tighten the screenplay by pruning or consolidating some universe detours, clarifying Jobu’s motive/inner stakes, and making each big sequence earn and escalate Jackie’s single emotional choice—so the chaos amplifies rather than obscures the catharsis.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
This script’s greatest strength is its high-concept multiverse spectacle anchored in a small, messy family drama: love, empathy, and reconciliation. Right now the emotional throughline — Jackie learning to accept and reconnect with Joy (Jobu) through Winona — is sometimes drowned by proliferating surreal set pieces and tonal leaps. Tighten the structure by pruning or repurposing sequences that don't directly advance Jackie/Winona/Jobu’s emotional arcs, clarify Jobu’s motive and emotional state so her nihilism has personal stakes, and use the multiverse moments as metaphors for inner change rather than mere spectacle. That will make the payoff feel earned and keep audiences emotionally invested through the chaos.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
Right now the screenplay’s biggest friction comes from two linked issues: a lack of setup for Winona’s Alpha/verse-jumping role and unclear, inconsistent mechanics for verse-jumping (which also weakens Jobu’s arc). Fixing those will tighten emotional stakes and reduce tonal whiplash. Seed Winona’s dual nature earlier with small, believable beats (tech props, odd knowledge, micro-behaviors) and establish a simple rule-set for how and why verse-jumps happen. At the same time, deepen Jobu/Joy’s emotional logic so her nihilism/destruction feels grounded — show a formative wound or a principled reason she believes destruction is the only solution. Make these fixes through short scenes and image-driven beats rather than long expositional speeches to preserve momentum and the film’s kinetic tone.

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Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
Your voice — a bold mix of absurdist humor, multiversal imagination, and sincere family drama — is a powerful asset. To strengthen the script, anchor the high-concept set pieces in clearer emotional throughlines: make Jackie, Winona and Jobu’s motivations and relationships unmistakable early on, then let the surreal multiverse flourishes amplify those stakes rather than distract from them. Tighten pacing by pruning repetitive verse-jumping beats and ensuring tonal shifts (comedy → violence → melancholy → cosmic) land with deliberate transitions. Keep the dark, strange moments, but earn them by building empathy first and clarifying why each surreal beat matters to the characters’ arcs.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
You have a brilliant, high-concept screenplay that pairs surreal multiverse spectacle with intimate family drama. The single biggest creative leverage is to deepen and clarify character interiority—especially Jackie, Winona and Jobu—so that every wild, tonal shift and universe-leap lands emotionally. Tighten scene choices to serve a clear arc (what each scene makes the protagonist feel, want, or change), sharpen dialogue to carry subtext, and deliberately ground surreal set-pieces with one emotional beat the audience can latch onto. Use the recommended craft resources (Kaufman’s Eternal Sunshine, Save the Cat! structure work) and targeted writing exercises (dialogue with conflicting intentions, character monologues, dual-perspective scenes) to translate conceptual ingenuity into lasting emotional impact.
Memorable Lines

Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.

Key Suggestions:
The memorable lines list highlights strong emotional peaks and a few standout, provocative moments, but it also exposes uneven execution: long expository monologues and shouted repetition sit beside crisp, surprising quips. Tighten and redistribute the exposition (especially Jackie's long Scene 4 speech) into smaller beats that show rather than tell, sharpen each character's vocal identity so their lines feel distinct, and make the big repeats (e.g., “I LOVE YOU”) earn their payoff by building to them with escalating action and subtext. Trim or split verbose lines into shorter, cinematic beats so the audience can feel the emotion instead of just being told it.
Tropes
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World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
You have a wildly imaginative, genre-blending multiverse with enormous emotional and visual potential. The priority now is to tighten the emotional throughline: make Jackie’s relationship to Winona and Joy the anchor that every surreal detour serves. Simplify the verse-jumping rules and reduce universe permutations to the ones that deepen character or theme. Use recurring motifs and a few consistent mechanics for jumps so the audience can follow the stakes and feel the payoff emotionally rather than getting lost in spectacle.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
Your screenplay is consistently strong in concept and plot momentum, but that very consistency flattens emotional peaks and dilutes the moments that should sing. To improve: introduce deliberate tonal contrast (moments of quiet, humor, or respite) so the many high‑stakes, tense beats land harder; sharpen dialogue so character voices feel distinctive (target the 8→9 gap); and make surreal sequences earn character change — ensure each weird set‑piece has a clear emotional consequence that shifts a relationship or decision. Practically: pick 3–5 ‘anchor’ scenes to rework as tonal counterpoints, tighten or rewrite dialogue in key confrontations, and convert abstract surreal images into catalysts for measurable character choices.
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