What the World Needs Now

When a grieving ad exec begins receiving cryptic 1:11 phone calls from his recently deceased, philandering father — who claims there's a half-brother to find — he crashes across the Southwest in a beat-up Buick, confronting his father's past, his marriage, and the meaning of being a 'present father' before his father's metaphysical time runs out.

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

This screenplay uniquely blends supernatural elements with grounded family drama, using the afterlife as a mechanism for exploring grief, redemption, and the importance of being present. The concept of a deceased father making limited phone calls from purgatory to guide his son on a quest creates a fresh take on the 'road trip to find yourself' genre, combining emotional depth with moments of genuine humor and magical realism.

AI Verdict & Suggestions

Ratings are subjective. So you get different engines' ratings to compare.

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GPT5
 Recommend
Gemini
 Recommend
Grok
 Recommend
DeepSeek
 Consider
Average Score: 7.8
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
You have a warm, commercially viable dramedy with a clear emotional through-line and a high-concept engine (the three 1:11 calls). The rewrite priority is structural: tighten the mid-act so the quest keeps forward momentum and emotional stakes escalate, and deepen two key supporting arcs (Bruce and Jenna) so their choices feel earned. Cut or compress episodic detours that don’t advance character or stakes (notably parts of the Vegas/George sequence and the brothel robbery), fold necessary worldbuilding about the afterlife into action (show, don’t lecture), and give Jenna and Bruce clearer internal beats so the reconciliation lands. Small surgical changes here will preserve the script’s voice while vastly improving pace, tonal consistency, and emotional payoff.
For Executives:
This is a high-potential, holiday-adjacent dramedy with festival and adult-audience appeal: funny, poignant, and marketable (think LITTLE MISS SUNSHINE/LATE NIGHT dramedy cross). The main risks are mid-film drag and some tonal and cultural missteps that could dampen critical reception and audience word-of-mouth. The fix is largely a modest, targeted page-one-to-act-three pass — tighten act 2, clarify the supernatural rules visually, and shore up supporting arcs — not a massive rewrite. With those fixes, this is producible on a moderate budget, offers strong trailer moments, and has both commercial and awards-adjacent upside; without them, pacing complaints and perceived contrivance could limit festival traction and audience recommendation.
Story Facts
Genres:
Drama 60% Comedy 25% Fantasy 15% Romance 20% Crime 5%

Setting: Contemporary, set in the present day, Primarily in San Francisco, California, with significant scenes in Las Vegas and a fictional Navajo Indian Reservation

Themes: The Redemptive Power of Family and Connection, Acceptance of Imperfection and Flaws, The Search for Meaning and Identity, Avoidance vs. Confrontation, The Complexities of Masculinity and Fatherhood, The Supernatural as a Catalyst for Real-World Change, Grief and Loss, The Nature of Truth and Belief, Cultural Insensitivity and Understanding

Conflict & Stakes: Rob's internal struggle with grief and family secrets, compounded by his relationship issues with Jenna and the quest to find his half-brother, with the stakes being the potential loss of his family and the need for personal redemption.

Mood: Bittersweet and introspective, with moments of humor and emotional depth.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The supernatural element of Rob receiving phone calls from his deceased father adds a unique twist to the family drama.
  • Major Twist: The revelation that Bruce is Rob's half-brother, which shifts the narrative and deepens the exploration of family secrets.
  • Innovative Ideas: The use of humor to address heavy themes like grief and family dysfunction creates a balance that is both engaging and thought-provoking.
  • Distinctive Setting: The contrast between urban San Francisco and the rural Navajo Reservation highlights the characters' diverse backgrounds and experiences.

Comparable Scripts: The Last Goodbye, Big Fish, The Family Stone, A Ghost Story, About Time, The Farewell, This Is Where I Leave You, The Skeleton Twins, Little Miss Sunshine

Data Says…
Feature in Alpha - Could have inaccuracies

Our stats model looked at how your scores work together and ranked the changes most likely to move your overall rating next draft. Ordered by the most reliable gains first.

1. Character Development (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Character Development (Script Level) score: 7.9
Typical rewrite gain: +0.4 in Character Development (Script Level)
Gets you ~3% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Confidence: High (based on ~2,672 similar revisions)
  • This is currently your highest-impact lever. Improving Character Development (Script Level) is most likely to move the overall rating next.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Character Development (Script Level) by about +0.4 in one rewrite.
  • Why it matters: At your level, improving this one area alone can cover a meaningful slice of the climb toward an "all Highly Recommends" script.
2. Concept
Big Impact Scene Level
Your current Concept score: 8.4
Typical rewrite gain: +0.25 in Concept
Gets you ~2% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Confidence: High (based on ~3,112 similar revisions)
  • This is another meaningful lever. After you work on the higher-impact areas, this can still create a noticeable lift.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Concept by about +0.25 in one rewrite.
  • Why it matters: After you address the top item, gains here are still one of the levers that move you toward that "all Highly Recommends" zone.
3. Plot
Moderate Impact Scene Level
Your current Plot score: 8.3
Typical rewrite gain: +0.25 in Plot
Gets you ~2% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Confidence: High (based on ~2,924 similar revisions)
  • This is another meaningful lever. After you work on the higher-impact areas, this can still create a noticeable lift.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Plot by about +0.25 in one rewrite.
  • Why it matters: After you address the top item, gains here are still one of the levers that move you toward that "all Highly Recommends" zone.

Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

Screenplay Insights

Breaks down your script along various categories.

Overall Score: 8.30
Key Suggestions:
The single biggest craft fix is to make the supernatural beats feel emotionally earned and psychologically grounded. Right now the afterlife phone calls and Black Santa often read as plot devices that propel action but undercut intimacy. Rework those scenes so the ‘calls’ emerge naturally from Rob’s grief—use subtle foreshadowing, private memory or dream sequences, and quieter, character-driven reactions. Simultaneously tighten mid-act pacing (condense repetitive road-trip episodes) and deepen one secondary arc (George) so his choices feel motivated rather than contrived. These changes will preserve the film’s originality while making the emotional journey feel authentic and resonant.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
The screenplay has a strong, character-driven heart and an original hook (posthumous calls that propel a road-quest to family reconciliation). The priority now is to tighten emotional logic: make the supernatural rules explicit and consistent across scenes so the mystery feels earned rather than convenient, and deepen Jenna’s point of view so Rob’s absence and return carry clearer stakes. Trim episodic detours in the middle and make each encounter actively push Rob toward his emotional choice — this will sharpen pacing and heighten the emotional payoff at the end.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The character work is strong—especially Rob's sympathetic everyman core and the emotional payoff of the family reunion—but the script needs clearer, earned emotional beats that make Rob's transformation feel inevitable rather than convenient. Tighten Rob's throughline by: (1) adding one or two concrete childhood moments that explain his avoidance, (2) inserting a mid-point reversal (a meaningful failure or consequence after the George con) that forces a deeper choice, and (3) scattering small, concrete acts of presence early on so the final reconciliation reads as growth, not luck. Also trim or better motivate big coincidences (Black Santa/Angel motifs, repeated intersecting vehicles) so the supernatural/dramedy tone stays grounded and credible.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
The script has a powerful emotional core—grief, dark humor, and a supernatural throughline—that can carry a wide audience, but its middle act loses momentum through repeated domestic frustration and tonal whiplash. Tighten emotional pacing by adding clear low points (quiet, reflective beats) after the big peaks, deepen Jenna and the kids with at least one scene that shows their interior stakes, and make the supernatural payoff feel earned by tying it more explicitly to Rob's real, demonstrable changes. Small, specific warmth beats (a successful parenting moment, a Jenna vignette, a vulnerable moment from George) will diversify emotion and make the climactic reconciliation land with more weight.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
The analysis shows the screenplay’s emotional engine is Rob’s movement from avoidance to presence, but that arc needs sharper, more concrete beats. Focus revisions on making Rob’s internal stakes visible through choices (not just revelations): show the cost of his avoidance early, escalate consequences mid‑act, and stage a clear turning point where he actively chooses family over escape. Clarify the supernatural rules so they bolster — rather than distract from — the emotional journey, and tighten tonal shifts so comedic set‑pieces support, not undercut, the heartfelt climax.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
The screenplay’s emotional core — a messy, redemptive family reunion — is strong and resonant. To elevate it, tighten the through-line so every scene clearly advances Rob’s internal arc: from avoidance to accountability. Make the supernatural beats (the calls, Black Santa, the waiting room) explicitly function as catalysts for emotional decisions rather than curiosities that distract. Trim or combine episodic detours that don’t deepen character or theme, and steel the tone so comedy and grief coexist without undercutting one another. Finally, address a few culturally sensitive beats with care so they read as character growth rather than blind humor.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
The script has a strong emotional core and winning tonal blend of grief-comedy and magical-realism, but key narrative mechanics undermine audience buy-in. Tighten the supernatural logic (the rules for the afterlife calls and Black Santa’s role), make character choices earn emotional truth (especially Jenna’s turnaround and Rob’s sudden impulses), and consolidate repeated motifs (song, flickering lights, grief beats) so the story’s heart — Rob reconciling with family and finding a half‑brother — feels earned rather than plot‑manufactured. Clarify motivations and seed the mystical elements earlier so revelations land with emotional weight instead of feeling like deus‑ex‑machina.

Scene Analysis

All of your scenes analyzed individually and compared, so you can zero in on what to improve.

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Other Analyses

Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
You have a strong, distinctive voice: sharp, wry, and able to find tenderness inside messy characters and surreal moments. To lift the script further, tighten the emotional throughline and anchor the audience’s suspension of disbelief. Clarify the rules and stakes of the supernatural element early and keep Jenna’s emotional arc active (so the personal cost of Rob’s journey feels earned). Trim or reshape scenes that produce tonal whiplash — keep the bittersweet balance but make sure every comedic beat serves the emotional stakes.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
You have a strong voice: witty dialogue, memorable set pieces, and a compelling emotional spine about grief, family and responsibility. To elevate the script from good to great, choose a single core thematic through-line (for example: presence vs. absence / being present for family) and make every scene, beat and image serve that through-line. Tighten scenes that feel episodic by ensuring each moment either advances Rob’s internal arc or raises the emotional stakes; deepen subtext in key exchanges so characters reveal truth indirectly, not just by telling. Small surgical cuts and a few added moments of interiority will give the story greater cohesion and lasting emotional resonance.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
The world is rich — a grounded suburban grief story layered with surreal, symbolic detours (Las Vegas neon, a celebrity waiting room, a guardian angel motif). To strengthen the screenplay, codify the rules of the supernatural and tether every strange beat to Rob’s emotional throughline. Trim or consolidate episodic detours that don't directly accelerate Rob’s transformation or clarify his relationships (especially with Jenna and Bruce). Make the tonal shifts deliberate — use humor to reveal character, and the surreal moments to deepen stakes and clarity, not to mystify the plot.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
The analysis shows a clear, repeatable leverage point: emotionally resonant scenes — especially those anchored by strong dialogue — drive your highest overall scores and audience connection. Use dialogue as the primary tool to deepen emotional beats, and when a scene must advance plot, layer explicit stakes and conflict onto that emotion rather than relying solely on reflection or sarcasm. Trim or rework quieter reflective moments that don’t change a character’s trajectory or increase consequence; if you want them to remain, give them a stronger emotional payoff or a tether to the plot (a revealed secret, decision, or consequence). Finally, keep the tonal blends (humor + melancholy + mystery) that work well, but be deliberate when using sarcasm — pair it with emotional honesty when you need real impact.
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